Date: 02/08/15 11:49 pm Title: Chapter 6
I loved it love, and the pacing was perfect. I loved how awkward Conner was and how he ran, it was perfect. Also, I love his middle name, haha. It's a really cute one.
I liked the way you executed the taking away of his "Bill" things, and you are not a loser! We just trade ideas sometimes:) Some of my best works have been inspired by you, after all.
I adore the Tom/Conner ship (have I said this already...a few thousand times?!) and it's going on just so well. I can't wait to read more.
The fluffy side of you is great, by the way. You should show it more often:)
Date: 02/08/15 03:10 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh my god, you were right (as usual, it seems). I loved this chapter! It was so sweet and fluffy and I wanted to cuddle Conner and also thank my stars and garters that I wasn't /that/ clumsy.
This moved pretty quickly, but I'm not complaining...the more Conner/Tom the better in my eyes, haha. I am glad that Tom remembered him and that he is trying to sort which part of him is him now, if that makes any sense. I think a lot of teenagers (myself included) have a weird faze when they don't know who they are and layer it on all too thick.
How can Tom have such a good handle on life when he is only 17? He seems like he has it all figured out and it actually makes me jelly, haha. I wish I was that ready.
Bill didn't say anything when he walked in on them pashing on the bathroom floor...is that a good or a bad thing? I don't know, but it worked.
I love and please keep it coming!
XOXOX
Jamie:)
Author's Response: There is a reason my friend for why Bill didn't say anything. It shall all be inside the next installment. Real life Tomi is so put together so fictional Tomi is put together. It's meant to be a balance since Connor is such a numb nuts. It's a cute balance between the two.
Date: 02/08/15 01:44 pm Title: Chapter 5
Aw Tomi. Your so freaking cute! Mm Connor Cat? Im useless! I cant think of anything
Author's Response: You're not useless and that sounds nice I like it honestly.
Date: 02/07/15 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 4
Okay, I definitely know Bill from somewhere...He actually reminds me a lot of my good friend Lelo (just a nickname, thank goodness), and that makes this so weird to read sometimes! I really like how good an older brother he is, and how he seems to have all the answers. It's really great:)
I love Conner, really he needs some cuddles. He isn't a damaged soul or anything, but his brand of weird is so cudlable. I can't wait to see the date, and all that. It's looking like it will be great!
Sorry it's so short, I have to go write.
xoxox
Jamie:)
Date: 02/07/15 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 4
I can see a disatee heading our way. Connor remindsme of myself (Im a VERY VERY VERay clumsy person)
Date: 02/06/15 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 3
Uh, this just got weird, haha. I like it:) What person just randomly used theri closet as an excuse to get out of something? It could be that my floor is my closet, so it's on display anyway, but I've never heard anyone say that before. I should tell my sister to try it out, haha.
I like how cute and light hearted it is, and it's also just so adorkable! It's the kind of thing that I find cute in girls and then they blow it by trying to be like someone else;; It's a sad world we have, no?
I hope Conner learns to be himself and to let it all rock on. Everything is better when you let it run it's course, and clumsy is not only cute but natural.
Also, last but not least, have you ever met a guy who talks about his penis as a person? I have close friends who happen to have those, and that has never come up...we just cuss around, look at comics, and uh...girls, and such, and none of them have ever, ever done that...is this something I should be prepared for in the real world out side of my friends!?!
Can you understand a word I am typing? Sorry, I don't know how to make it make sense right now...ugh!
Author's Response: Omg I have never thought of that. A closet as an excuse hmm, I wonder. I was trying to model Connor after that one sibling that just wants to fit in yet they don't. But they still try really hard. Connor is like my story a work in progress. So we get watch him grow. Oh all of my guy friends do. Like today me and my friends were at the skate park and saw this really hot girl pass by and my friend Luke was like "The force is very strong in my son, Luke." And we all knew he meant there and it was very funny. They refer to their penises as people like Connor does in this story. Sorry that got creepy. And yeah I would because you'd be amazed at how many dude will do that. Guys have flirted with me using a name for their junk and this is getting weird for me so I'll stop there. I totally understand you and that is why I can respond to you.
Date: 02/04/15 10:25 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh my gosh, I loved this. I want to apologize in advance if my reviews aren't as good as yours, but I'll try and tell you what I think; This is just so perfect.
The awkwardness feels so real, and I know a lot of what's going on and you did a really great job. I guess it helps if you, as the writer, are also an awkward lump.
I ship this. I ship it, ship it, ship it. Also, I love the part about the annual boyfriend. Is Bill based of Joey? Either way, he is a great older brother. I am pretty sure that Conner would be bald with a weakly hair cut, or at least his hair would be getting very notably shorter. I have never used a flat iron ?my hair being flatter than most side walks) but it seems like a dangerous occupation.
Tom is really cute in this, and so is Conner. I haven't seen any Tom/Male Oc o here really, and yours is great. I think I might just ship it (if you haven't guessed from the above rant). You should keep them, and ship them always.
XOXOX
Isa
Author's Response: I totally should have mentioned it's like a two centimeters off the ends. It's not really noticeable unless you like really analyze the hair. That's why his hair is medium length. It grows a little and once he has it cut it stops like right at the base of his neck. rnrnThis review is good and don't worry I ship it too. I thought it'd be a cool little twist to see Tom with an OMC and to have the twins not be brothers or lovers in this. So yeah it's going to take a while to hook them up but there will be tons of flirting. rnrnJoey is the template yes and yes he's a great older brother. Your rant pretty much summed up what I think everyone is thinking right now.
Date: 02/03/15 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love it, and thank you for 'le' shout out. I am really liking the whole mixed sibling thing, and the awkwardness is perfect. I have a question though, Why would you cut your hair weekly? That's nutsxD
So far so good, and I adore it. I really like the glitter, by the way. I have put it on my clothes before when I wanted to shine, haha.
Author's Response: Thank you so much I've been really excited to honestly write this now. It's happy and that's not normally what I write (as I've told you) so I wanted to include something that's really quirky. The weekly haircuts will be explained in the next chapter. Don't worry it'll stay happy because frankly I've always wanted to write happy. I used to hate glitter myself but then I liked how it made me sparkle like Lady Gaga and I'm a little addicted to putting it in my makeup.
Date: 02/03/15 05:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
About to read this-I love you too, btw.