Date: 02/22/15 01:39 pm Title: Chapter 13
I loved this chapter, it explained a little about bill and how he acts sometimes. I was actually checking for an update all of tester and managed to write two stories and update when waiting for THE update xD it's official, Conner runs my life a little bit.
I liked how his mom finally said something, and helped put some kind of boundary for Bill because he was just figuring it out for himself. I don't understand how he could party every night, it would be so awful. My friend Julia did it and nearly died.
I am happy to see Conner taking initiative even if he was crying when he did. He kept Bill with him, which I think will mean good things for both he and Bill. I think if Bill left he would be a raging alcoholic with a new bed mate every time he saw his bed. Maybe I don't give him enough credit, but he's not exactly the most capable person.
I don't know how I feel about Georg...he's gotten a little under my skin lately. He is really in predictable beyond the fact that he will try to get with Bill over and over again. It's weird. I hope he means what he says this time.
Xoxoxox
J
Date: 02/20/15 12:44 am Title: Chapter 12
Wow didn't expect that to happen. Way to go Conner.
Date: 02/19/15 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 12
What did I just read? This was both transfixing and disgusting...at least he wasn't eating Bill but by bit, which may I say is a great relief! It's freaky to think he was 47...it makes think of Bushido, actually.
I am glad Conner took initiative and looked the guy up. I never would have done that because what if he wasn't? It would be terrible to do to my brother and disrespectful.
I love Georg now...he does seem like he's getting better at acting mature. I feel like maybe the no relationship talk has happened before between them.
I loved that T was in the moment and C just sat there naked like it was the norm. Also, your rampages on meat are quite endearing:)
Tell me how it goes today, aright?
Also, yeah, I was very asleep when you answered that. I am glad Bill has so many shades, it makes him really believable. I shall call him the 50 Shades of Bill fr now on. I get the feeling Tom won't be happy that C shared a house with a rapist. I can't believe their tapes are on the internet! I don't really understand filming your sex to begin with, but people who put it up are just sick.
Xoxox
Love both my dread heads!
-Isa
Author's Response: Sorry it was disturbing. I was considering your cannibal idea but then I figured that'd be too disturbing so I used this event from this episode of Law and Order that I saw. It was less disturbing. I wanted to show that Connor isn't all naïve awkward bumbling idiot that he's got a mature side to him. Connor being naked the whole time was this tiny bit of comedic relief. Tom's scene was the same. Calum is in the military so he's used to naked dudes all over. That conversation between Bill and Georg has happened multiple times. At this point I think Georg could recite the entire speech. Bill is like an onion, there will always be more layers to him as it continues. I'm really proud of this story, truth be told. Bill does have sex tapes and I don't understand the concept of taping sex either. My little tirade about meat was purely my own opinion. I'm glad you're enjoying this.
Date: 02/19/15 04:28 am Title: Chapter 12
Whah a 47 year old man
Author's Response: Some of it cut off for some reason around when Georg was talking to Connor at the table. It's mostly narration from Connor and feel free to look at that. Yes he's 47 and he's a rapist. I thought that be a nice little twist. Something that would shock the readers.
Date: 02/18/15 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
No, no, it's not a story about a Japanese cannibal. It is a Japanese man who was/is a cannibal. He ate the Dutch girl when he was in france, and somehow he is still free. I don't think anyone will think you stole his story...even if they did, just too freaky.
I can't wait for you to spill all the bts secrets:)
Date: 02/18/15 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 11
Again, it was and is perfect. I like the dreads, though there is no way that dude got his done by anyone other than himself, and his girlfriend. Can't you see the love sprinkled all over them?
Aman is freaking me out...like, the dude's a creep. Conner, stay away from him! I get the feeling he is a cannibal. Like, maybe that's what he's hiding. He is a psychopath, seriously. Have you read the story of the Japanese cannibal? The similarities are striking...
I hope he and Tom, and all the girls (hyaenas) figure out their differences, and then leave each other alone. Are there any nice girls in the school?
Also, are Aman and Bill a thing...or what? Where is Geo?
XOXOX
J:)
Author's Response: Lol, love sprinkled all over them I love that phrase rnrnGeorg will be making an appearance don't worry. rnrnI've never heard of the Japanese cannibal before if there are similarities that's terrifying. Being completely honest I've never heard that story before. Now you've got me scared that someone will read this and think I stole that story. Le sigh. Aman might be psycho or he might be overly sexual who knows (I do, teehee). I'm a demon and a good one too. Now I shall go forth and write the next one. rn rnrn
Date: 02/18/15 03:02 pm Title: Chapter 11
Conner ='s niiiiice ;D
Date: 02/18/15 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 11
Amans creepy
Date: 02/17/15 05:19 pm Title: Chapter 10
I love that Conner is figuring himself out, but now it kinda seems like he is emulating Tom, haha.
Bill's arrogance is just perfect, and the fact that his mom is sending him to a hairdresser to get dreads is hilarious!
Great chapter, and I can't wait to see what happens next. There is a lot of behind the scenes I feel like, like something not so great is looming. I can't wait to find out!
XOXO
Author's Response: I was really scared to write it like this. I thought my readers would find it strange or something but now I see that it's okay. Thanks so much for that shot of confidence. I wanted to include another color of Bill's personality rainbow. This week's color is arrogance. I figured that people would think he's emulating Tom but I wanted to clear it up a little. He wants to show his freedom to be whoever he wants and by getting dreadlocks that shows he's in a transition. It's like, um, he doesn't know if he wants to be a long haired punk or a short haired jock. He's just choosing a style that's maintainable but at the same time carefree. When you wake up because I'm sure you're sleeping now but when you do check out chapter 12 it's posted and we see another side of Bill's personality rainbow, Georg and some major drama.
Date: 02/17/15 01:32 am Title: Chapter 10
So now he's gonna be like Tom, with the dreads I mean...I'm glad he's decided to figure himself out.
Date: 02/14/15 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 9
Aww Georg. Thats kinda rude
Date: 02/13/15 11:06 pm Title: Chapter 9
It wasn't too sad at all, though it was melancholy. It feels like skating on water, just like the sadness is just below the surface.
I am getting confused though...If Gerog is gay, and Tom is Georg's brother, why would he mess around with Conner and Bill's relationship? It's not like he can argue that they're faggots (which isn't valid to begin with) when he is messing with Bill behind the scenes... I feel like both older brothers have personality disorders because they change so much.
Tom and Bill protecting Conner was great, and I like seeing the new side of Bill. It seemed like a side he would have, and the part about the nurses in the hospital was the perfect comic relief. I can imagine his tiny agree face, haha. It's really a pity kids look so cute when they're mad.
I can't wait to see how it all turns out, and I look forward to more fluffy bunny chapters:)
XOXOX
Date: 02/12/15 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 8
This is so sweet and funny and brilliant and...I'm sure you get the picture :)
Date: 02/12/15 02:16 am Title: Chapter 8
Again, you got one up on me!
I loved this, and it was one of the best written chapters yet. I loved the pudding comment, and the mean girls like feel (if mean girls were about gay dudes...). Tom was a perfect little wench, as usual, saying all the right things and everything.
I kinda caught onto the Georg/Bill thing when he first came in, but I wasn't expecting this...it was amazing. Somehow , though you didn't say much about it, Bill drinking seemed really sad and their mom seemed so stressed and sweet.
I still ship Conner/Tom, and who took the pic? It's gonna bother me until I find out.
xoxox
Isa
Date: 02/12/15 01:49 am Title: Chapter 8
o_O wasnt expecting that
Date: 02/10/15 01:38 am Title: Chapter 7
Awwww Connor. Make you mind up about Tomi
Date: 02/09/15 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 7
Tom is a facebook stalker and he admitted to it? This cracks me up so much, I can just imagine it! Really...it's great!
I can totally see where Conner is coming from with the whole 'this is moving to fast' thing, because it really is. I also love how veggie everyone is, haha. There is no other explanation for tofu pasta, I sweat to god.
I love his mother's reaction, it was perfect, if a little awkward. I felt the same way when I told my best friend, and when I started telling people as soon as we met like it was my name. It saves so much stress!
Love it, xoxox
PS: You have a few typos, if you want to fix them.
Author's Response: Just fixed them, thanks. Did you see my little Easter egg for the fans? It took a while to find a way to get that gag in there. I'm glad its relatable one of my main fears is something being completely dense and so far from reality people find it hard to understand. Yet I enjoy writing sci fi.
Date: 02/09/15 01:47 am Title: Chapter 6
Aw Connor. You need to be your own person. Your not Bill, as much as you may want to