Date: 02/14/15 08:39 am Title: Discontent
This was really cute! Really nicely written and developed at such a nice pace. I loved it :) Well done.
Date: 01/28/15 05:28 am Title: Discontent
This was great, really good. I think I love best how you wove together the inner-workings of Tom's mind. And how the twins communicate between each other. It felt natural. I have to say that even though the ending felt rushed, it also felt right and I liked that u stopped there. Really, I liked this fic very much, it's classic twincest, which IMO is the best kind, and you wrote it well. My one complaint is the few run-on sentences you had. There's one in particular, second paragraph at the beginning, that was a huge... Lmao, what happened there? Forgot how to insert a period or semi-colon or em-dash? Lol. Jk.
Well done. :) I hope to read much more from you if this is the kind of stuff you write.
Date: 01/27/15 10:37 pm Title: Discontent
i really liked this. it wasn't the usual twinly twins who suddenly wake up one day and suddenly they're in love. i loved tom's uncertainty and how he stressed himself out, all while patient bill waited in the wings, and then his "lightbulb moment," when the one who had literally been right there in front of him the whole time suddenly became obvious. well done!
Date: 01/26/15 08:04 am Title: Discontent
Seriously amazing! I was tracking this before it was featured and I decided I really had to read it. I'm so glad I did!
Author's Response: Heh, glad you liked it :)rnAnd thx for pointing out it's been featured, I had no idea before you said that xD
Date: 01/23/15 08:29 pm Title: Discontent
Hiii there!
Tom-realising-the-obvious is my favourite type of twincest, I'm not gonna lie and I'm always curious to see how writers portray this certain situation, (how Tom comes to the realisation, how Tom reacts to the realisation and what Tom does with the realisation!)
Oneshots of this genre and plot type don't always work out, I don't think. I believe oneshots of this category tend to be overly rushed and that makes it really unrealistic, which isn't a nice read for anyone. There's usually always something missing; whether that's because it's lacking emotion and feeling or simply because it's too short to be able to add anything remotely heartfelt in there, and that's generally due to the shorter length of story. But with your story in particular, I'm not unsatisfied with the outcome, I actually believe you've nailed it.
I love the mini-journey you took me on. From start to finish, you took me through Tom's thoughts, feelings and emotions, and that's key to these types of stories. You showed that he was aware that he was missing something, you made us feel his confusion and how he was longing for something more. Then I felt his desperation as he tried to search for answers to his many questions, how he bottled it up in hopes that he'd find them on his own and then how he had to let Bill in when he was coming out blanks. And you allowed us to get inside of his head so we could watch the transition of his feelings changing toward Bill and how he reacted to that realisation, and honestly, this was a beautiful piece to read.
The realism, emotion and feeling was all here and this was such a pleasant read! (I babble too much, I' sorry!) < 3
Date: 01/23/15 08:03 pm Title: Discontent
Aww, beautiful! :) I loved that twin connectinon at the beginning! And Bill was great that he was patient and wait for Tom until he learned what he was missing :)
Great story, thanks! :)
Author's Response: thx for reviewing, I'm happy you liked it :)