Date: 02/02/15 09:44 pm Title: Eight
Hey! Congrats with the exam. :)
The chapter was amazing! I loved it very much, and the ending is really dramatic. The part with the pieces of puzzle... I liked this metaphor. And the memories part is very cute. But the ending, yeah, it was dramatic.I wonder what happened... So, I'm waiting for the next chapter. Love you. :33
Author's Response: Thank you so much, love! I'm happy you enjoyed the chapter, and that you liked the puzzle piece and memories. I loved writing those parts. The ending definitely was dramatic! But things aren't ruined or hopeless, I promise. :) Love you! :*
Date: 02/02/15 08:58 pm Title: Eight
okay, this was probably one of my favorite mohan chapters. like ever. the whole puzzle piece analogy was just perfect. and then the smut...i shouldn't even call it smut, though. it was like...making love without actually having sex, if that makes the slightest bit of sense. there was so much emotion there! i loved it! scared uncertain bill and tom there to comfort him. truly, it was amazing.
and now bill's gone, and i hope like hell it's not for good.
you wouldn't do that to your big sister, would you? hm? WOULD YOU???
Author's Response: You know that's a serious compliment, because you have read many, many mohan chapters over the years (and I'm so grateful for that). Thank you so much for that. I'm really happy that you enjoyed it and that it gave you the feelings! I promise you that Bill is not gone for good, because I most definitely wouldn't do that to my big sister. Thank you! :)
Date: 02/02/15 05:14 pm Title: Eight
Now that my tiny attack is over, I can properly write.
Holy shit.
Like I said: best - favourite - over the top - brilliant author here.
Love you!!!
Author's Response: I seriously love you! Thank you so so much, darling. :)
Date: 02/02/15 05:06 pm Title: Eight
Noooooooooo :(
Author's Response: Don't worry! They're gonna figure things out. :)
Date: 02/02/15 04:54 pm Title: Eight
Oh, wow. I think I'm really starting to understand now. It's almost like... hmm, obsessive-compulsive disorder. Where you just toss away what's going on around you, toss away the consequences, and just do it.
And @ending: dagnabbit, Bill! XD Again!
PS: That was sweet that Bill actually came over when Tom had his nightmare. I wasn't expecting that, just some calming talk on the phone :)
Author's Response: That's exactly what it's like! You've got it, girl. And yeah, Bill needs to figure things out really fast and stop leaving Tom behind. He definitely does care about him though, which is why he came over in the middle of the night. :) Thanks so much for reading and leaving your thoughts, love!
Date: 02/02/15 12:46 pm Title: Seven
Hiii! I'm finally gonna give this review thing another chance. I'm really crappy and slow at it, I know *sigh* but better late than never, right?
I really love the small flashbacks you give us, even though I can't really handle them in a pretty way lol. I don't know why, but someone you manage to wake every single emotion in me with your stories, and after the flashback ended I was sitting here sobbing "stop it, stop it, stop it!" Not because it wasn't good or sweet but because it was too damn sad reading “We'll be fine as long as we stick together” knowing that Bill will leave and awe. Dammit, I'm almost starting to cry again just thinking of it.
Moving on!
I had already forgotten that it was time to talk to Miles (I have the memory of a goldfish) and I let out this happy squeal when Tom saw him. I've been looking at pictures of him quite a lot lately (totally blame you) and I could perfectly imagine him sitting there in the tree house, all handsome and pretty and awe. I love him. I hope you don't mind me going on about him because I will kind of keep on loving him, he's the perfect best friend character I always love so much in stories and no matter what I will never get enough of him. Just saying.
Now where the hell was I... uhm..
"“First of all.” Bill held up a finger and dug into his bag, tossing several things of candy onto the middle of the floor. “Party favors.”
Miles grinned and reached to pick up a full bottle of whisky, waving it in the air. “Party favors for grown ups.”"
Loved this part so much! They're just... aaahh, I don't even know how to explain it, Bill is so cute and Miles is so awesome... I don't know man, I just loved that part, it made me laugh a bit too loud when it was a bit too late. My poor neighbours.
I like how Bill and Miles became friends, but man, poor Miles for having to hear it all like that haha! It must've been so much for him, but I'm glad he didn't freak out and leave Bill on his own, Bill really need him, so yeah, good thing he stuck around.
It seems like the part with Bill actually being diagnosed as a sex addict was important to Tom, or at least something that made it easier for him to accept. I understand him, and I think it will make it easier for him to understand the whole thing. It'll probably be a lot of ups and downs of course, it's gonna be interesting for sure, but hopefully Tom can handle it all, at least eventually.
"A tiny smirk played on Miles' lips before he let out a laugh. Tom wanted to hit him and apparently it showed on his face because Miles quickly continued on. “Tom, Bill and I have never had sex.”"
This had me laughing again, I can picture it all and I could totally see Tom's face darken when Miles laughed at him, and then the surprise after Miles' words. I don't blame him for thinking they had been together and all, I would probably have thought the same if I was him. Not sure what I did think about it, I don't think I ever imagined them as a couple, but I probably didn't give myself time to worry over it because I was too dazzled by Miles to even get that far in my thinking and processing things. I'm far slower than Tom, that's for sure.
I agree with Miles (okay seriously, how many times can I talk about him in one review? I think I'm having a crush on your character) when he said Bill can't hide all the time. A big step in getting better is to face the problem, even if it's scary, and he was also right that Bill should talk to Tom about it. So gold star to Miles for being smart. Man Bill should be happy he managed to befriend him.
"“Definitely see why Bill chose you as the one to help him out. You're unbelievably hot,” Tom drawled out, the alcohol having taken full effect.
Miles caught the tip of his tongue between his teeth and ducked his head down, shaking it. “And I can see why Bill has wanted you all these years.”
“Should I leave you two alone?” Bill looked between them with an amused smirk, his tone dry."
hehehe, I'm giggling again. I was squealing like an idiot reading this, and if I remember correctly this was one of the parts where I hid in my pillow squealing "stop, stop, stop" again. Stop rarely means it's bad though, it's just too amazing for me to handle. I'm the kind of reader who either sit completely still, so focused I don't hear or notice anything around me, or I stop after every other line just to make weird noises, laugh and cry and all that. It all depends on the story, and while reading this one I'm the latter.
Sooo... Truth or dare, huh? I always hated that game so much haha, but I guess with three hot guys it's not so bad. When Miles and Bill kissed I was close to kicking Tom out of the tree, imagining those two together was so damn hot and I didn't need Tom anymore haha! I'm so mean.. poor Tom.
Then the kiss between Tom and Bill. Okay, I'm not sure how to write this to make any sense at all (like I ever make sense..) but that part was just damn brilliant. First let's mention how Miles let Tom handle it on his own, BUT he was clearly prepared to get inbetween IF it would be needed. I know he would. Then the thing with how you so amazingly described how Bill kind of.. couldn't stop, how he actually... uhm.. like, he doesn't just WANT it, he NEEDS it. Do you get me? I mean you wrote it, you clearly know your characters, but I'm just trying to tell you what I think when I read it.. And when Tom pushed him away there was this obvious shock and.. well, fear, almost? Because even though he would normally not really care because his craving is too strong he doesn't want to fuck things with Tom up, so he really tries to behave? Blah. You can't believe I'm a writer, I'm too sucky with words sometimes.
“Please. Stay over there for a minute. I just. I need to cool off.”
I liked this, he's trying to take control over himself, and like Miles said, he snapped out of it quickly. So really, he did a good job, but I still feel so sorry for him. It must be so hard :( poor thing.
“I agree. Really, as sexy as you two are together, I would have felt pretty fucking awkward just sitting over here watching you guys get it on in a tree house,” Miles drawled with a wide grin and all three of them laughed.
Hahaha, way to make everyone feel better x) good job, dude!
Aaaand before I stop bothering you with my once again useless rambling;
“I think you're what he's been needing.”
THIS! THIS HAD ME SQUEALING AGAIN! Dammit, I can't stop smiling now when reading it again. I'm just a step away from hugging my laptop because awwwww, that was just, awww!
Okay, I'm so sorry for my rambling, you must be so tired of me by now, but I love this so much and when I get started I can't stop. It's such a great story and I can't wait for next chapter. Thank you so much for writing this, I love it!
Author's Response: Okay, girl, you know I think this review is incredible. I'm just so flattered that you sat down and took the time to write me so many words! You're awesome, is what I'm trying to say. :)
Date: 02/02/15 03:01 am Title: Seven
I'm sorry, I read it too fast to pause to leave a review on every chappie. I could go back if you'd prefer that, though.
Lol, I'm trying REALLY hard to like this. Threesomes are outside of my comfort zone. And for my entire life I've always thought "sex addiction" wasn't a real thing, that it's just an excuse cheating partners make. So this might change my mind, but it'll be digging in its heels all the way =P
I do, however, like Miles as a character ^^
Author's Response: You don't have to go back and leave reviews on every chapter, sweetie! I so appreciate the reviews you did leave. I'm glad you were able to read it fast. And hey, don't worry, I really don't forsee a threesome happening between them. Miles is just Bill's friend and sort of his safety net. There will be future chapters with Miles in them though, and I'm really glad you like him as a character! As far as the sex addiction goes, i've never had any personal experience with it, but I know that people who have it tend to just not be in relationships because they can't hold one down. I'm definitely taking some creative license here in Bill's specific case, so I'm sure it won't be totally true to form.
Date: 02/02/15 01:40 am Title: One
I love how everyone is still writing Bill with black hair. Yeah, that's not gonna change, real!Bill XD
I also love how Tom gets that feeling who the stranger in the diner is ^^
Yikes! I really wonder why the heck Bill didn't keep in touch!
PS: What Bill admitted. Omg *covers face* I'd be far, FAR too embarrassed to say that to someone, especially a friend. He was embarrassed too, but I'd have to be reeling drunk, most likely.
Author's Response: Well, I figured since I'm writing him as an 18 year old and he still had black hair back then, I can get away with it, hehe. I also loved Tom with dreads. I miss those days! And girl, I'm super blunt so I usually admit things to that level even when I'm totally sober. ;)
Date: 02/01/15 10:34 pm Title: One
Lol, I looooooove your writing. Welcome back!
I have no time to read anything right now, but I will read this whole thing in a few hours! :D
Author's Response: I'm so, so happy that you're reading this! I've missed you around. :)
Date: 01/26/15 07:42 pm Title: Seven
Hii, it's my first time reviewing this story and I want to apologize for that. I'm not usually a lurker and I actually enjoy leaving my thoughts behind because I know how much they’re appreciated by writers. However, I kinda felt too intimidated to review in the past. Anyway, I’ve eventually and belatedly gathered my courage, so here I am.
I absolutely adore how you’ve portrayed Bill in this; nobody is perfect and I love how you’ve made this consistently obvious throughout this. Bill is no saint, yet you’ve made us all fall in love with him, despite all of his glaring imperfections. I find the depth of his disorder somewhat fascinating too, because it’s not at all as simple as people might find. It’s not that he WANTS to have sex/sexual contact constantly, it’s that he NEEDS it and I love how you’ve clearly brought that across for us to understand. What I love more is that he’s trying really hard to control himself. I think if it had been some randomer, someone he’d just met at a party, he wouldn’t have held off and instead; let himself loose, but I think since it’s Tom and they have history, have feelings for each other and want to reconnect, he’s doing it for him and that’s all types of cute.
I love how understanding Tom is trying to be with the situation. He may not understand in full what Bill feels and what Bill needs right now, but he’s still going all out to TRY to understand just for Bill, and that makes me love him all the more. He strikes me as a very curious type though, always wanting to question Bill to find out more about him and his disorder, but above that; I think he wants to be able to connect with Bill more, just like Bill connects with Miles on this level? He wants to be Bill’s rock and I just want to swoon - Tom, the rock, is adorable.
I’m kinda nervous though. Bill’s already shown that his restraints around Tom aren’t exactly strong and I’m a little worried that if Bill tries something, Tom will let his guard down for a few seconds and it will spiral out of control? I kinda want Tom to help fix Bill back up because that’s adorable shit, but in a way, I also kinda want him to be the reason of Bill’s self destruction, (I’m twisted in the head, I’m really sorry!)
I’m really excited about this anyway and I’m sure the upcoming Chapters will be nothing short of amazing. Again, I’m sorry for not reviewing earlier, I hope you’re not too mad! < 3
Author's Response: First of all, hello to you, sweet, sweet girl! I want you to know that this review put such a big smile on my face. I'm not sure why you were intimidated, but I'm so glad you were able to pluck up the courage because you are lovely. So, thank you for the smile you induced and for your words. :*
Date: 01/23/15 11:24 pm Title: Seven
Well idk about anyone else but I was sucked in until the end! Great tension here as I said before. Obviously with Bill's issues coming to light that's even stronger than before! I'm kinda commending Tom here though...It took a lot of strength to resist Bill - I mean most guys who think they're gonna get fucked by the person they want probably would have a really hard time stopping it... But I like the idea of Miles' and Bill's relationship - there's a lot of trust and a strong bond there. Even so Miles is right- Bill needs someone to love him, beyond this and beyond everything. Because that's what love is all about. Excepting someone's flaws and loving them through it and even loving them *for* it - unconditionally. Thanks for another awesome chapter! I do enjoy this story a lot :)
Author's Response: That just really makes me happy that you were sucked in till the end! The tension is still my favorite thing to write, and that's something I'm sure will be kept up in some variation for the rest of the story. Man, thanks for commending Tom. It definitely took a lot of willpower on his part, because obviously he wants Bill. But, he wants him in the right way. Miles cares about Bill but he doesn't love him the way that Tom does and will, and I think both Bill and Miles know that. All in all it seems like you have a great grasp on the characters, and I think that's awesome! Thank you so much for reading and for this lovely review. :)
Date: 01/23/15 10:05 pm Title: Seven
I love it. ;]
Author's Response: Thank you, cute ass. :*
Date: 01/23/15 11:51 am Title: Seven
Awesome! Cant wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'll have an update for you as soon as possible. :)
Date: 01/23/15 12:45 am Title: One
I just read all 7 chapters again... Will you be publishing another soon?... :)
Author's Response: Ah, you are awesome! I will hopefully have an update ready by next week. I feel inspired already. Thank you! :)
Date: 01/22/15 10:40 pm Title: Seven
Okay, so you have officially became my favorite fanfic author EVER! I love this story so much and I make a little dance everytime I see an update.
So being horny teenagers is not gonna help Bill's case at all, good luck with that guys. No seriously, I hope they can find a way to be together that way, cause sex is such an importante aspect of love. Anyway, I can't wait to see where this story is going and yay for quick updates!! Love you!
PS: Miles is awesome and lucky as hell! he got to kiss both Bill and Tom ;)
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, this made me smile SO much! I'm totally honored to be your favorite fanfic author. :) Man, being horny teenagers really isn't going to help. Tom is going to have to have enough control for the both of them for a bit, but I'm sure they will figure out how to make it work. ;) Thank you so much for reading! I would love to change places with Miles, haha. Lots of love! xo
Date: 01/22/15 09:24 am Title: Seven
I just realized I never commented on the last chapter, so I'll maybe put it all into this one lol
I honestly wasn't expecting Bill being a sex addict to be his big secret! I thought it was going to be something else, not sure what that something else is, but yeah lol This is really interesting, though. I am intrigued and interested to see what is going to happen next!
I really like Miles. I didn't think I would when he first made an appearance but to just see that he's been taking care of Bill over the past few years, makes me like him. And he's pretty awesome as well!
I am glad Bill has opened up to Tom and told him what has been going on and I'm so happy he is trusting himself and Tom enough to have him as his person to call or go to in need. It's sweet!
I am really looking forward to seeing what happens!
I had a whole bunch more to say but I lost my train of thought :/ It must be too early in the morning lol
I loved this and I can't wait for more!! :D
Author's Response: Hi there, sweetheart!! Your reviews always make me smile and you know it. I'm glad I was able to surprise you with Bill's big secret, and that you're intrigued! Girl, I'm pleased that you like Miles. I really wanted Bill to have a good, supportive friend who helped him out, no matter how he needed help. Now that he sees how Tom is around Bill, he trusts that he can take his place, at least in that respect. Miles will still be a friend.
Date: 01/21/15 06:51 pm Title: Seven
you know, for some reason i've always imagined tom to be a fucking amazing kisser. in my stories, he's an amazing kisser.
so hell yeah, bill loses control just kissing him!
Author's Response: You and I must be similarly dirty-minded, because I always envision him to be a fucking amazing kisser, too. ;) So, HELL YEAH!
Date: 01/21/15 04:35 pm Title: Seven
Loved it!!!
Author's Response: Thank you, darling!!
Date: 01/21/15 03:17 pm Title: Seven
Hi sweetheart!!!! %%%
So happy to see you updated faster than usual, I was delighted to see the new chappy out today *.*
I loved a lot of things in this one, all the hot kisses for sure and the sexyhexy action in general....Miles is fucking fantastic, he really is a great friend and wants the best for Bill. I loved how he passed the baton to Tom without jealousy. What a big heart!
Bill was so brave to answer Tom questions openheartly and Tom was brave to accept Bill with all his issues.
I really like how you described Bill in his moment of weakness, it's like he falls in a trance and finds difficult to snap out of it.
But the most intense moment in this chapter is the flashback in the treehouse ( I always wanted one and once I convinced my cousins to try and build one on my grandpa ancient walnut tree, then he found out and a hell broke loose, so no treehouse for me....). That was sweet and moving, how they were convinced that they could have hidden there and nobody would have found them, it is a childish thought, but the kind that makes you smile because you had it too and you remember you really believed in it. I cried a little on that part, I admit it!
Sooo basically I loved every single line of this,as you can see. Even if you had difficulties in writing it, I assure you it came out perfect.
I really love you girl for writing this, thanks %. It brings me a lot of childhood memories!
I send you lots of love %
Author's Response: Hello, sweetie!! That makes me smile that you were delighted to see a quick update, and it makes me want to do another quick update. ;)
Date: 01/21/15 02:43 pm Title: Seven
awesome chapter! :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)