Date: 12/08/14 05:29 pm Title: Chapter Ten
so. First things first. Yeah, you're totally right, that the whole mess was a bit Tom's fault too, but I still think that Ria's father is unfair and a complete jerk. And it's sad to think that that kind of people actually exist in this world of ours. But yeah. Tom shouldn't have played with Ria's heart, not because of her dad but because nobody deserves to be played with, but people make mistakes.
Yaaaay, I understand something for once XD I'm glad, that you're glad 'cause of my understanding XD
Yeah, now that I think about it, it's completely understandable, why Bill was mad for such a long time. It's always hard when your friend betrays you, and it must be even worse when you're in love with said friend. So yeah. But I don't know, maybe it's just me and my personality, but I possibly couldn't not forgive someone if they were truly sorry and promised never to do something like that again. but I guess Bill was just protecting himself from pain caused by Tom. So yeah.
I'm glad my rants amuse you, so you're welcome :D And cool, London for you too! Great :D
Oh and now this chapter. Hmm.. I think Tom's mom is a very wise woman. She was absolutely right about the whole thing that if Tom loves Bill, he should set him free, so that Bill can come back on his own terms. Such a lovely woman. But argh, I so hate it when Tom's teammates are being assholes. If I was tom, i'd probably already broken down crying 'cause of people's unfairness. But anyhow. Something is definitely off with Bill. He didn't seem totally sincere. Hmm.. I wanna know mooooore, I'm so looking forward to the next chapter!! :D
Author's Response: Hiii again! I don't necessarily blame Tom 100% in this, I think they've all got to take some of the blame, but I agree with you, Ria's father was the person who held most cards in this and had the power to change the dynamics of Tom's life. I think so too, there's a lot of bitter people in this world and I'm sure if someone was to step all over your daughters heart like Tom did, I can understand WHY Ria's father reacted in the way he did. I did feel sorry for Ria, my readers were supposed to feel sorry for her too, but her father literally ruined any chance of that since she was the one who ran back and told him what Tom had done? I guess it depends on what type of person you are. Bill's timid and soft hearted, he would never in a million years hurt Tom and he had never expected Tom to lie to him and use him (Bill originally thought Tom was using him for sex since that's all their friendship seemed to be based on in the end!) like he did. Everything he once thought about Tom was ruined within seconds. I'm glad you understand why Bill's being as stubborn as he is in this, it mustn't be easy for him. I'm happy you like Simone, she is kinda key in this since Tom did everything he did with Ria just to protect her? And his teammates are arseholes, they're not all like that, but some are, I guess. I'm glad you're able to pick up on that, Bill was too guarded for any of us to know what he was REALLY thinking and feeling throughout this last section, but you'll find out soon enough what's going on in that pretty little head of his! Thank you so much for sticking with me, for reading and of course for reviewing, I'm really grateful < 3
Date: 12/08/14 04:28 pm Title: Chapter Ten
Beautiful chapter! I loved the talk between Tom and Simone, and I totally changed my mind about her, she is a super mum and so supportive!
Bill is a mystery...he seems strong and confident now, but something isn't quite right...has he really forgiven Tom? Anddddd I' m so curious right now, but I have a bad feeling about this. I really hope that they will kiss and fuck, but....it can't be that easy no???
Author's Response: Hiii again! Thank you so much, I'm really glad to read that you enjoyed this Chapter. I literally felt as though I had to through Simone back into the story at this point since a lot of people have been questioning why Tom is so protective of her, and I can only hope that the first section of this Chapter was enough to explain why, (he loves her, he's grateful of having her, he just doesn't want to let her down since she's always there for him, no matter what.) I agree. Since we're no longer in Bill's head like we were in STAY THE NIGHT, he IS a mystery now to all of us. He doesn't give anything away anymore, unless he WANTS to and that's difficult for Tom because he has NO IDEA what Bill's thinking or feeling, which leads to Tom being confused, uncertain and slightly dubious of Bill. But Bill does appear confident and strong now, whether that's because the heartbreak has overall toughened him up or if it's simply a facade to guard himself better, but he is and Tom's struggling to come to terms with Bill's newer personality shining through, overtaking the one Tom once fell in love with. Do YOU think he's forgiven Tom that easily? I think it's good that you're dubious of Bill yourself right now, because it means I've succeeded in my job to make you feel that way for this certain Chapter. Your questions will be answered in the next Chapter though. < 3 Thank you so much for sticking with me, for reading and of course for reviewing, I'm really grateful < 3
Date: 12/08/14 01:52 pm Title: Chapter Ten
amazing
Author's Response: Hiii! I'm really glad you think so, I hope you find the upcoming Chapter's amazing too! Thank you so much for sticking with me, for reading and of course for reviewing, I'm very grateful < 3
Date: 12/08/14 10:06 am Title: Chapter Ten
Say something Tom!!
Author's Response: Hiii! I'm sure Tom has loads to say in the coming Chapter's, so be patient and stick with me. Thank you so much for following, for reading and of course for reviewing, I'm so grateful < 3
Date: 12/08/14 05:37 am Title: Chapter Ten
I don't know what to write... So I'll wait for next chapter and after I'll see :D
Author's Response: Hiii! I doesn't matter if you don't know what to write, but seeing this review means that you're still sticking with me and this story, so I'm grateful to see you're still here with me at this stage. Thank you so much for following, for reading and of course for reviewing, I really appreciate it < 3
Date: 12/08/14 05:36 am Title: Chapter Ten
I can't tell if Bill is genuine or not.
Author's Response: Hiii! There's a reason to why I've done this and you'll find out really soon why too, but I'm so happy you're unsure about Bill at this stage, it literally means I've done my job right for this specific Chapter. Thank you so much for sticking with me, for reading and of course for reviewing, I'm really grateful < 3
Date: 12/08/14 05:32 am Title: Chapter Ten
I can't tell if Bill is genuine or not.
Date: 12/03/14 04:07 pm Title: Chapter Nine
Another great chapter!*sigh!* you really know how to build a story and keep an audience[well me at least!] captivated.it feel so good to read more of the how and why's of tom's story while being able to understand bill side as well.I am wondering about why tom is protective of his mother, feels like there is more to tell.Will bill and tom get back together or is there a plotwist coming ?and i also feel there is more to gustav then we know.[or it is just all in my head,wich is not a bad thing cause that means you are able to keep my mind buzzing!]
Anyways..loving it and looking forward to read more!
Author's Response: Hiii! I'm really glad you liked this Chapter, Gab's and I'm also glad that I've managed to capture and keep your attention throughout this. It hasn't been easy since I've been struggling to make Tom connect with you guys (he's been holding back on secrets for the most part of this story and it's been extremely difficult to maintain a connection since there's like a pane of glass between you and Tom), but I'm relived that you're still here enjoying this story. I'm happy to hear you're understanding both Tom and Bill's sides of the story, it's been fun and challenging to write. There's no inner plot to why Tom is protective of his mother, he just is, (as most son's are of there mother's, I think!) he's literally just a mama's boy. But I will try to elaborate further on that in future Chapter's for you all. About the ending, I don't necessarily like sad endings, (however, sad endings are sometimes the most realistic and I tend to stick with realism these days.) but honestly, I'm not entirely sure yet. I have two endings in mind and depending on what happens in future chapters will determine the end, I guess? GUSTAV, I love him and I find his character fascinating to write about, in all honesty. He's different, less predictable than the likes of Bill and Tom? So I'm enjoying his scenes throughout this. Thank you so much for reading and writing, it's always a pleasure to read and reply to your comments, they're so insightful and I'm so glad you're understanding the bigger picture. I love you < 3 xxxxx
Date: 12/02/14 06:23 pm Title: Chapter Nine
ooo. I have so many thoughts about this and I'm trying to sort some of them out. So. first of all, I think Tom's dad is really unfair. It's not Tom's fault in no way that he lost his job. It is purely Ria's father's fault. He was the one ho sacked Tom's dad, Tom didn't decide it. Plus it's completely stupid to fire someone just because of you children's relationship didn't work out. Any relationship can fall apart, people get hurt, but that's just life and you can't blackmail someone to stay in a relationship that isn't healthy or isn't what the one in that relationship wants. And second of all, okay I get it that Bill is mad and Tom made a mistake and hurt him, but he didn't do it on purpose and it was just a mistake. And some things aren't just easy to discuss so I totally understand why Tom didn't tell Bill sooner. Tom was pushed in a shitty situation where he didn't wanna be, without any way out, so although he did make mistakes the situation itself wasn't his fault. If he it was a different situation, where Tom didn't have to be scared of his dad losing his job, things would've been a lot different. So I'm 100% behind Tom on this. It wasn't his fault and Bill should forgive him, because people rarely make the right decisions when it comes to relationship. More often than not, someone makes a mistake. We're not gods, we're just humans and Tom made a mistake, but he is extremely sorry and regrets it, so I think he should be forgiven. I know it's always hard to forgive, but if you really care for someone, and in this case Bill and Tom have known each other for such a long time, you will forgive the one who made a mistake, unless it's like a murder or something like that. Oh dear, did I rant enough? Probably. XD Oo, yeah, btw, I'm going to see TH in London just bought a VIP ticket yesterday, how about you? :D This chapter was very eyeopening and so good! Hopefully you'll give us some more to read in the near future :D
Author's Response: Hiiii! I legit smiled when I saw the length of this review, so thank you so much for taking your time to think about this story as much as you have and then leave me these amazing comments, I appreciate your time, patience and attention. < 3 I’ll section this off so it’s easier for me to reply since you had so much to say about this Chapter. In some terms, I agree with you. It isn’t (entirely!) Tom’s fault that Jorg lost his job. It was Jorg that told Tom not to fuck around with Ria, it was Bill that WILLINGLY messed around with Tom when he knew he was dating Ria, it was Ria that called up her daddy and told him Tom did the dirty on her, and it was her daddy that had Jorg get the sack as consequence of all of those events unfolding. So really, everybody is to blame in some terms? I said something similar in a reply to a previous reviewer, but I’ll say it again, (and throw it into the story later on, so everybody understands where I’ve been coming from!) Ria’s father is a powerful man, he has his own business and is almost always in the drivers seat. He’s a control freak and when things span out of HIS control, he retaliates by putting people back in their places and with the circumstances, he knew he could make Tom pay for hurting his daughter and hurting his ego by hurting Tom’s family in return for those wrongdoings against him and his daughter. I’M SO FUCKING HAPPY YOU UNDERSTAND WHY TOM DIDN’T TELL BILL SOONER, I REALLY AM. I was literally struggling to make this Chapter work because it was hard to explain WHY Tom didn’t tell Bill in the beginning and WHY he continued to fuck around with him. Tom was pushed into a shitty situation, if he’d known earlier that Ria was his father’s boss’s daughter, he wouldn’t have gone near her, but nobody knew until Ria blurted it out before the family dinner when Tom was threatened/warned by her father, not even Jorg knew until then and it was totally out of anyone’s control at that point. All he could do was tell Tom to not fuck it up and hope for the best. I’m really glad you understand though, wow, because you’re so right. Bill loves him and he had his heartbroken by somebody he’s in love with. But more importantly, Tom was supposed to be his best friend over that and Tom continued to lie to his face, Tom continued to come to him for sexual favours despite what was going on, Tom even devirgined him and then left him with nothing but a broken promise - that cuts him deep, because he didn’t know what was going on, Tom kept him in the dark for the most part. So as much as Bill pisses me off, I totally understand why he’s so unforgiving. His best friend betrayed him and his trust, that’s really hard to come back from. HOWEVER, now that he knows what happened and why it happened, it’s gonna be a lot easier for him to see passed all of this. It’s gonna be easier for him now that he knows that Tom hadn’t intended to hurt him, hadn’t done anything out of spite or malice. So expect some progression on their relationship/friendship soon enough. I LOVE YOUR RANTS, OMG. I’m still so speechless right now, I just hope I’ve been able to answer and reply to your many comments on this Chapter. Thank you so so so so fucking much for reading and reviewing as always, I’m so grateful for this! ((AND YOU’RE GOING TO LONDON?! I AM TOO!!))
Date: 12/02/14 05:25 pm Title: Chapter Three
Hi!!! Today I read this and stay the night all in a row, it' s a very intriguing story! But all this uncertainty is killing me! I really like the relationship between Tom and Gus, they are sweet... I can't really understand Tom's attachment for his mum, she knew that Tom was threatened and she did nothing to help him, worse she expected him to date Ria for her and Jorg's sake. She is not as bad as Jorg, but not a saint either.... Anyway, I' m a romantic soul so I want Bill to forgive Tom immediately but I know that the wait makes everything better in the end, so I' ll patiently wait!!!
Author's Response: Hiii! Wow, you read both today? I'm really glad you liked the first story enough to give this second one a chance < 3 I'm really happy that you're intrigued by these though, and I have to apologize about the constant angst and the uncertainty that's overtaking this. I honestly love balance in stories, but it's so hard to keep everything balanced when this entire story is in Tom's perspective and he's a whiny little bitch. I'm happy to read that you're one of the people that are liking Tom and Gustav's friendship though, some people don't like it and I don't get that because Gustav's the exact type of friend I'd want - straight forward, honest and loyal? Tom's mother knew he was being threatened, she didn't do anything about it because that's more in Jorg's power than hers since it's Jorg's job that was being threatened, but she never expected him to date Ria for their sake - I'll elaborate further on that when she next makes an appearance though, but I agree, Simone has her flaws in this, she's clearly no saint, but in TOM'S mind; she is a saint, if that makes sense? < 3 Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I really hope I don't let you down with this!
Date: 12/02/14 02:53 pm Title: Chapter Nine
This story is going so well, and I love it so much! ^_^ I'm going to the one in London! My first concert - I'm so excited!
Author's Response: Hiii! I'm really glad to read that you're enjoying this as much as you are, I'm grateful. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing for me, it means a lot < 3 and I'm going to the London date too ^.^
Date: 12/02/14 04:28 am Title: Chapter Nine
Please, I want them to be happy together!
Author's Response: Hiii! There's roughly another ten Chapter's left of this, all building up to the finale of this story, so I hope you stick around for that to see if they get their happy-ever-after! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing < 3
Date: 12/02/14 03:22 am Title: Chapter Nine
I need more...soon please!
Author's Response: Hii! I'll be updating this again at the weekend as I'm trying for much quicker updates now. I really want this story finished so I can move onto other projects I have planned, however; I hope be rushing the plot and storyline into completion. I literally just want quicker updates, lesser delays. There's still a fair few chapter's left to go, so I hope you stick around long enough for those. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing < 3
Date: 12/02/14 01:14 am Title: Chapter Nine
Yeah, update!!!
I loved the chapter. I think Tom should have grovelled in from of the Bill and begged for forgiveness. But I am glad Tom revealed everything to Bill now.
I need to go to bed now. I'll write a more detailed review later.
Author's Response: Hiii! < 3 I just want to say that the next update will be at the weekend at the latest! I'm already roughly 1000 words into the next Chapter, I just really want this story finished so I can move onto my other projects that I have planned, (although I won't be rushing the plot into completion or anything. Nothing will be halfassed, it's literally just quicker updates, lesser delays, etc!) And I'm really glad you enjoyed this Chapter as much as you say you have. Tom should've grovelled and begged for forgiveness, it seems inevitable actually, but he really wanted to give Bill some space to think and process everything. Tom had just offloaded everything he's been holding back on and the last thing he wanted to do is bombard Bill with his apologies, etc. So for now, he'll be keeping his distance until Bill comes to him. I'm also really happy about Tom revealing everything. It was so hard to write the sequence of flashbacks leading up to the final revelation, it was torture to write, especially since I had to twist everything into Tom's perspective and turn everything on it's head to fit with Tom's reasoning for doing what he did in the first place, y'know? But I'm glad to see somebody is pleased with this so far! < 3 Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, and as always, I'm looking forward to read more of your thoughts. < 3 xxxxx
Date: 11/12/14 09:43 pm Title: Prologue
after first reading Stay the night and now it's sequel King of wishful thinking i can say : this was so awesome to read.a well written storie, going in on social dogma's pointing out how everyone tends to judge without knowing the whole story.I mean evryone has his own side to the story, their own truth, nobody is perfect and there is a bigger picture.people have been on either side once in their life!!you brought in some nice twist and turns.like gustav as unlikely a friend as he is, defending tom like he did! and some other things...the flashbacks. brilliantly done!
i am really looking forward to read more of this story..i feel a craving for more..
would love to read something from bills perspective again as well.
Author's Response: Hii! I'm really glad you've enjoyed both stories as much as you have. I'm also really happy that you've picked up on that point, that everybody judges without knowing all of the facts because that's really important in this story. Everybody seemed to side with Bill, (some even with Ria!) without knowing the whole story, AND since Bill was shit all over on by Tom, they thought Tom was immediately the bad guy in this, when really, Bill was fucking around with Tom, KNOWING he had a girlfriend, (so doesn't that make him a cunt, despite how he feels?) I'm glad you've mentioned Gustav, because he really is intriguing to write about in this, like he's so unlike any character I've ever written about? Wow, I'm happy to read that you liked the flashbacks, it was so complicated to follow the timeline of events and twist them into Tom's perspective, especially when I had to turn everything on it's head to fit with Tom's reasoning for doing what he did? Yaah, so thank you so much < 3 and I hope one day I can write some more side-stories to this in Bill's perspective for you!
Date: 10/12/14 11:32 pm Title: Chapter Eight
Forgot to say one more thing. I really like how this chapter tied up all the hints and loose ends from all the previous chapters and the prequel together. Great job!
Author's Response: Wow, you have no idea how much this praise means to me right now. I was so fucking worried that I'd forget about some of things I've hinted at throughout the first few chapters, the strain was most definitely on with this. The only way I could give reasons for each hint was to backpedal to the very beginning of these stories and rewrite them in flashbacks of each specific time, just so you could all understand the situation in Tom's perspective rather than Bill's? So thank you, I'm so pleased to read that you think I've been able to tie up all loose ends, that was my main worry and you're the only person that mentioned this to me, so it's a relief! Thank you so much xxxxx
Date: 10/12/14 01:55 pm Title: Chapter Four
And I just remembered I'm very behind, so I hope the surgery went well and that your mother will ne alright. You have my prayers.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, your prayers are really appreciated and right now, she's recovering nice and smoothly. < 3
Date: 10/12/14 01:51 pm Title: Chapter Four
I want to explain hiw I feel about this right now, but unfortunately it's not going to be terribly positive and I apologize for that. I'll try to be constructive. The problem I'm having is that the whole interest of the story is in what happened between Tom and Bill. What happened happened, and we were given no real insight into the why. I am reading this sequel because I want there to be some good reason justifying what Tom did, because if there isn't, I would honestly be done. The problem I see is that we are left as much in the dark as the rest if the characters, so I can't enjoy any of the conversations with not Bill, the sports stuff, or connect emotionally with Tom, who we are unfortunately stuck inside of, because I know nothing about him apart from what he did. It doesnt even seem to be cutting him up, apart from the childish realization that he lost all his toys. I'm sorry if this is harsh, but usually there is something to hold on to, but I don't really have that with this. If Tom's side is a secret, I'd rather be in Bill's head dealing with the pain and confusion, rather than being stuck followig Tom around without him letting me in, you see? Anyway, I'm sorry to be a downer, I am still waiting to for a reason from Tom, and at this point, it had better be worth it. I hope your mother's surgery goes well and her recovery is quick.
Author's Response: Hiii there, this is gonna be one long reply so I'll section it off! Firstly, I honestly don't expect nor want all positive reviews on anything I write and upload on here, I prefer something constructive that gives me a little insight on my writing so I can work on my flaws and better myself for future work, etc? Having a lot of people praising me constantly is all nice and encouraging, but it's not helping me improve as a writer? It's just motivating me to work at the standard I'm currently at and I really just want to improve, so I appreciate your honesty, I really do. I'm grateful that you've given me something to work on, so thank you. Onto your comments now. I totally understand what you mean, I really do because it had already plagued my mind when I dug deeper into this sequel. I knew it would be a challenge to write this in Tom's perspective, simply because I knew I had to conceal his secret for the first part of this story, afterall that was one of the main points of writing this. I didn't want to drag it out though, because I knew shit would get boring too fast and people would lose interest quickly. I also knew that I wouldn't be able to keep his secret for too long either, especially since I've been dropping hints here and there throughout the few chapter's you've read. But in my own argument, I could say that I'm not the only one who has written a story from a character's perspective when they're holding back vital information from the reader (and other characters within the story) - some people write around that and make it work out well, and I literally just wanted to try that out too, challenge myself and see the overall outcome. I guess I fucked up when I wasn't able to make Tom connect with the audience since he was holding back on so much? But I'll try my best to improve on that for my future work. As you can probably see from the word count and amount of chapter's already out, there's not a whole lot I can do about it now; more so since my readers who have made it to the latest chapter already know Tom's secret and the reasoning's behind it. So I apologize that I can't do much about it at this stage. Honestly, you're not a downer. Really, you're just helping me improve by giving me something to work on, so thank you so much. Whether you continue with this or not, I just hope you know I'm really grateful for your feedback. < 3
Date: 10/11/14 10:20 pm Title: Chapter Eight
I am back to add the following. I used to feel very sorry for Ria, but not so much anymore. It looks like she was systematic about trapping Tom. Her father is a scumbag. Although it looks that Tom's father is not much better. I like Bill's father, though. Gordon is a great guy.
I really want Bill to forgive Tom. I think Tom has a chance to learn how to be brave (it seems that he is already doing it) and Bill can help him. It's time to heal and Tom and Bill can heal only together.
Cannot wait to know what will happen next! I hope you'll update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for coming back to me, I always look forward to reading your thoughts! Yeah, quite a few people have mentioned this about Ria. I never intended to make Ria look as bad as I have done, it was totally unintentional, however; making Ria look bad is the only way this would pan out without as many questioning reviewers coming at me with questions I may not have had the answers to? I wanted to show her as a victim too, but her father's part was crucial and of course that's gonna tamper with how my readers view her, but I'm glad it's all came together in the end! Aaah, her father! Some people may say that her father was simply protecting her, going to extremes that some father's would go to for their daughters, it's just a matter of having an understanding of the situation and viewing things from all angles. BUT her father didn't come across well at all. From the first moment we saw him, it's so blatantly obvious how much of a control/power-freak he actually is and throughout this Chapter I tried to force that into Ria's character too, (I'm not sure that's worked well, but I wanted them to appear pretty similar to one another?) Bill may or may not forgive Tom, but no matter how things turn out, I don't think he'll ever forget the emotional and mental pain Tom has put him through. He destroyed him as a person and it's gonna take some force to bring him back into his own self again. But I agree, Tom has been brave, a lot braver than he's ever been throughout both stories, but it's well over due too. It is time to heal, hopefully Bill will be willing to let Tom help him heal him < 3 Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate it xxxxx
Date: 10/10/14 01:26 pm Title: Chapter Eight
Aaaaahhh, I see now! Well doesn't that just make Tom seem like less of an asshole. Glad that's finally out of the way, and Bill actually sat through it! I see how Ria was pretty much not the victim I suppose. Now I just wanna see how things pan out. Tom and Bill definitely deserve to be happy after that great excuse! Thank you Bill's dad for making this go down ;D
Author's Response: Aaaah, you see now? :D I'm really glad everybody is in on the secret now, it's such a relief to get it out after all this time of trying to hide it, dropping hints here and there - it's nice to be able to breathe knowing this section of the story is out of the way now. I'm particularly glad you don't think Tom is a TOTAL asshole anymore, that's quite refreshing, it does make my job a shit ton more easier in fact. I originally wanted Ria to be as much of a victim as Bill was, but her father fucked that image up for her, he didn't exactly do her any favours. In the next Chapter it'll be mostly Tom and Bill trying to find a way to meet in the middle, afterall, we haven't seen much of Bill's reaction so I hope you're looking forward to that. BIG LOVE FOR GORDON < 3 Thank you so much for taking your time to read this and leave me a review, I really apprciate it xxxxx