Date: 10/28/17 07:25 pm Title: Chapter 6
Poor Tom, no wonder he was crying :(
but it lead to such a sweet moment with his little brother. Its such a shame,it sounded like they had such a special bond and he barely remembers now. It was so sad to actually see the little brother say he wasn't him anymore.
I was just thinking how nice it would be if they still had something of a special bond now he's back home, although it'll be different of course, Tom would be more likely to wanna play with him than anything else, but I still think it could be nice. I bet the brother will end up helping take care of him, if he's not to young... I don't remember if you said how old he was on not.
Bill doesn't sound like he's coming to the rescue any time soon, in fact he doesn't sound like he would help if he came back. He sounds pretty mean LOL
... I'll reserve my judgement.
Looking forward to reading some more.
Author's Response: Thank you! Jake is 15 so he's kind of at that weird phase where showing emotion is "uncool", but we will see little moments like this last chapter where little bits of his feeling show. He loves his brother - though he'd never admit it. Like everyone in the family, grief hits him differently and we get to see the hurt that Tom's choice left from all perspectives.
Date: 10/22/17 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 5
But... It was going w... it was going better! :(
OMG That was just... my heart! I got so emotional reading that, it hits you really hard and on top of it all he was crying.
What I love about the way you write is how easily I can get drawn in, to the point where it doesn't feel like i'm reading but watching, Its awesome, but on parts like this everything feels more intense.
However, I did always want to know what exactly happened to Tom that lead him to his current situation and of all things I had considered, I never thought of that. Now if I'm honest I'm wondering how the heck he managed to survive? Clearly something went wrong but the thing is, I didn't think there was a way to survive once you'd gotten as far as Tom did... unless you forgot to load that is. Poor guy, to be desperate enough to do that his life can't have been much better before. I'll probably have a theory on why he did it by the next update LOL
Wow, I can't even begin to imagine how terrifying and annoying knowing that you remember things but not being able to put them into words must be, no wonder he cries all the time, he must be so frustrated.
Poor Tom, I hope he has a better day tomorrow and his mum doesn't shut him out for too long, it wasn't really his fault and he probably would have preferred his hug to come from her
Author's Response: Aw, I hope I didn't upset you too much. Some of it can be hard to read, but with time, like all things, people start to heal. You'll just have to stick around and see!
Date: 10/22/17 10:59 am Title: Chapter 4
OMG, you're back! I know I've said it before but you're my fave author here and every one of your stories have stuck with me from the first read, so I always get really excited whenever you update because I know it's gonna be good.
I read this the day you wrote it but once I remembered it was part of the previous chapter I wanted to leave reviewing until I had time to go back and read both. I just got done and now I'm here.
Oh this is just so sad, I'd almost forgotten how adorable Tom was and all the things he and his family are going though, I think this is gonna be such a deep story and it's gonna get me a few times along the way, it's just so. Right in the feels.
I'm loving how kind Anna and Dad are being, I know I've said it before but I love how understanding of Tom they are even if they are as scared as everyone else, it's quite nice to read, especially since he's dealing with so much. Uh! that neighbour lady gives me the creeps, I literally feel uncomfortable reading her, does she not see how bad it is to say those things to Tom, he did somethings she doesn't agree with but he's in no place to hear that stuff, he just got out of hospital, if you've got something to say take it up with the family.
Other than that I think I'm having a change of heart on the mum. She was my least favourite character because I didn't like how cold and uncaring she seemed, I almost found her cruel, but now, looking back a few years later I don't think that's the case. I think she's being so detached because she cares too much. I think she thinks he's gone, I think she blames herself. A mum's "job" is to take care of the kids and stop things happening to them. She couldn't be there to protect Tom and he's paid the price, he's never going to be the same... If only she'd been there. I absolutely felt that when I pictured her there in the chair, staring out of the window as I was reading. And now there's that he ran off and she wasn't there again. I really feel for her, she's wondering how they're gonna cope, if they'll ever find a way to adjust and move forward.
This is such a powerful story, thanks for posting, I really like it and I'm looking forward to reading some more.
Author's Response: Awwww I'm so happy to hear from you! Thank you once again for such a lovely, encouraging comment. You always manage to make my day!
Date: 10/21/17 09:17 am Title: Chapter 4
This is such an amazing story. It’s so heartbreaking and I can’t imagine what Tom is going through. I can’t imagine what his family is going through. Will we get to find out exactly what happened to Tom at some point?
Either way, this is very beautifully written and I can’t wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely comment. As of now things are a bit hazy for Tom, but eventually things start to unravel. I'm so happy you like it. Thanks again.
Date: 02/23/15 01:32 am Title: Chapter 3
This is an amazing story and I hope you're planning on finishing it.
Author's Response: Thank you for the nice review. I do plan on on finishing it eventually, I just go through these weird spurts of writer's block sometimes, but even when real life gets in the way, this story is always on the back of my mind.
Date: 06/09/14 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 3
please update soon
Author's Response: I'm so sorry for the holdup, but don't fret -- I promise I'll be back to writing and adding more soon!
Date: 04/26/14 03:58 am Title: Chapter 3
You are a remarkable writer.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've been gone for awhile now, but I promise I'll be updating again fairly soon.
Date: 02/24/14 02:40 pm Title: Chapter 3
Horrible, horrible woman. I'm absolutely intrigued by this story; can't wait for the next part of this chapter.
Author's Response: Oh, I'm so happy to hear that! Don't worry, there's plenty more drama to come.
Date: 02/22/14 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
That is just brilliant
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm working on Part 2 of Chapter 3 as we speak. It should be up soon.
Date: 02/22/14 05:59 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh my God, THank you so much for updating THis today, I needed THat, today is my birTHday and being honest, it wasn't too great so, reading a new chapter of my favourite story wiTH such a sweet characterisation of Tom in it was definately THe highlight and boost i needed, THanks for cheering me up.
At first i was surprised to find you'd broken THis up, in my opinion it was just getting going lol and I don't really THink people would have minded THe lengTH, THis story is so easy to get involved in THat you kinda don't want it to end, but hey I'm not complaining really, THis way I get more to enjoy so WOOOO!
Anyway now for THe chapter...
I really felt for Tom here, his feeling of being lost in his own home because THe surroundings are somewhat unfamiliar after spending all THose monTHs in hospital, has to be unnerving. I would have said, can't somebody give him someTHing like THe routine he's used to? But i suppose THat wiTH his homecoming being recent THe family are still adjusting, THey probably weren't expecting him to wander off so hadn't planned for it... expecting he'd sleep for as long as he used to and forgetting THat he isn't quite THe same Tom anymore so changes have to be made. I get THat.
Weren't we all just so glad his sister was THere, honestly when he was walking downstairs i was really THinking "Oh God, don't go outside, don't get lost, please, please please!"
Yeah, I'm definately glad she could come to THe rescue because whoa THat woman was too much, yes she might have THose views and she might even have THem about his family but to start telling THem to poor Tom who has just come out of hospital wasn'r right, he was confused and scared, what she should have done was take him home, not fill his head wiTH THings he can't yet understand and perhaps never will. On THe plus side i'm taking from THat speech THat whatever Tom did took place at home. Now I'm wondering, is Bill being distant wiTH THe family because he was THe only oTHer person home when Tom did what he did and is struggling to deal wiTH THe change in him, or is he really wiTH his band? I'm still looking forward to his entry into THis story.
since last time when you said THat THe relationship between Bill and Tom won't be THe one i'm expecting, i'm now wondering whether or not THe one Tom depends on will be his sister, she's so kind and caring towards him wiTH THe way she just sits and hugs him when she knows he needs it.
One last THing and THis really bugged me, why did THey take his lava lamp back out again after he was asleep, where was THe harm? he liked it...i'm looking at THe mum here!
As always, great job, i really enjoyed it and am looking forward to more, I love THis story so much...THanks :)
Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I'm glad I could make your day at least a better -- Happy belated B-Day! The reason why I'm broke chapter 3 into two bits was because it just seemed too busy more than anything. I didn't want important parts to overshadow other important. And about the lava lamp, Simone just unplugged it to spite then dad. But don't worry it'll get plugged in every night for Tom!
Date: 02/22/14 10:52 am Title: Chapter 3
Poor Tom and I hate that women for that. But his innocence is kind of adorable. At least he has Anna to be there for him. I can't wait for Bill to arrive though.
Author's Response: Yeah, Ms. Dilsey definitely isn't someone I'd call an ideal neighbor! And don't worry, Bill will come into the picture soon... though when he comes I can't promise you'll want him to stay for long.
Date: 02/16/14 04:26 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm wondering if Simone was to blame for what happend to Tom (or what he did to himself) and that's why she's so unhappy to have him home. Maybe she's scared he'll remember. Or maybe she's been happy not to have him around, not having to deal with his issues, and she's upset he's back and might disrupt the family. I'm so glad at least his siter is genuinely pleased to see him, and Gordon is doing his best even though he's having to force it a bit and mediate between Tom and his mum. His brother was okay too, giving over his headphones so Tom could block out the arguement. You have me intrigued with this story; I'm aching to know what happened to Tom, the background that triggered it, and where Bill fits into the picture. It's so freaking good.
Author's Response: Oh, Helen, you always were such a good guesser! BUT I think this time around you'll be in for quite the shock. You're close as far as Simone goes, but not quite there. Ooooohhh, I'm just as excited as all of you!!!!
Date: 02/16/14 12:51 am Title: Chapter 2
please update soon
looking forward to more
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much. I'm typing up Chapter 3 as we speak. But it's also Winter Break where are I am so I've also got some school assignments to get done (though I'd much rather be writing). Hahaha, I'll admit I'm procrastinating!
Date: 02/15/14 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 2
: damn....simone needs to stop being so pissy about tom being home...
Author's Response: For now I'll admit she's a bit of a pisser but later we'll really explore her character. It may seem like it now but she's really not my "villain" of the story -- there really is no villain in this. In a way she's more of a tragic character -- but that won't be revealed until much, much later.
Date: 02/15/14 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 2
Poor Tom, I love this so far. I cannot wait to read about what happened that made him this way.
Author's Response: Glad you like it so far :)
Date: 02/15/14 09:07 am Title: Chapter 2
Yay, more!
Well wasn't That awkward?
let me start at THe beginning
THe little broTHer redeemed himself by distracting Tom wiTH headphones when he got distressed at THeir parents fighting, THat was good, someone has to look out for him, because i swear THe parents were too busy having a talk-fight to even boTHer praising him THat much when he remembered someTHing. Yes The amount of happiness THey'd have needed to show in order for Tom to understand THey were proud of his small achievement would have made THem look a little silly but God people, he just got out of hospital and he's already remembered his broTHer and his guitar, why aren't you proud of him?
i get it, mum and dad are stressed, struggling to adjust to THe change of needs THat come wiTH Tom's new situation, particularly THe moTHer, she probably finds it hard to accept THat THe son in THe back of THe car will never be THe slightly rebelious rocker THat he was and she feels she's lost him in spite of him being right THere. i accept THat it will take her a while but he's still THere, he's still hers and THeres a chance in time he could recover at least a little... COME ON WOMAN ITS ONLY DAY ONE!
THe sister on THe oTHer hand was much nicer, i love how she was wiTH him, sure she could have acted like Mum but she didn't she hugged him, gently took him inside and listened to him when he talked, even if it wasn't THe first time, THats THe sort of THing he needs right now... i love her.
What was going on wiTH THe mum sending poor Tom straight to bed after dinner. i understand he has a lot more problems now and in effect needs someone to put him to bed at night, but it sounded like his Dad was more THan happy to help when he was ready, (i really like dad right now), is she sure she's not just shoving him up to his room as if he was six because she can't accept him as he is and if he's in bed she doesn't have to look at him or see him struggle wiTH simple THings anymore. As much as she's my least fave person in THis story right now i also see her side and THat she needs adjustment time because she's hurting but wow, if it boTHer's you THat much you go to bed and let dad take care of him, he was up for the job.
i THink everyone just needs to realise Tom has been away for a long time, his home is gonna seem strange and new because he probably doesn't remember it THat well, it'll take him some time to settle and she's not making his re-adjustment any easier by making him feel like he doesn't belong THere and treating him like a child.
i loved THe whole lava lamp scene, it was so sweet, Tom was loving it and dad was talking to him respectfully, it was great. THo i almost cried when he started apologising because he knew his mum had reacted because of him, I bet he doesn't sleep now, GREAT JOB MUM! :(
i really can't wait to see what's next and im so curious in regard to your comment about Bill's character being surprising, i've taken THat to mean noTHing like your previous stories... BUT i remember THat took him a while and he came around so im still gonna hold out some hope for him. OMG what if its been so long THat Tom doesn't even know him anymore, especially if he looks differnt from last time THey saw each oTHer... :o ooh, THe drama im gonna love THis, awesome job.
Author's Response: I swear you are, like, the best review-giver ever!! I was doing a little victory dance in my seat just reading this. Like you said, Mom is in a rough place trying to adjust (but don't worry, we'll really get to explore her character so hopefully she won't always seem so unlikeable). As far as the Bill thing goes, you're definitely in for something. I'm still rounding out his character but I can say for certain he's literally the polar opposite of my 'Smashed' Bill.
Date: 02/15/14 05:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey there,
I really like this new chapter. You describe Toms thoughts very good and the family reactions to it. I feel sorry for him, but also for his father and sister. It's easy to see that the hole family is shaken up and hurt. To write something like that is not easy when telling the story from Toms view, good work ! I'm also curios what comes with the next chapters and the problem of Bill there. So please keep up with your amazing story ;)
Author's Response: Thank you for such a nice review. It's definitely a balance trying to write from the point of view of someone with a mindset like Tom. Thoughts are constantly reeling in his head so there's a lot of repetition -- it can easily become annoying, so it's good to know I'm doing a decent job :)
Date: 02/14/14 08:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well i'm sold already.
I don't know what i was expecting but i just know THat was better. THe suicide/accident im gonna go wiTH accident was only mentioned and THis has just THe right ammount of elements from my last fave story by you (SERIOUSLY YOUR SMASHED SERIES... LOVED IT) to have me knowing im gonna love it just as much.
Where do i begin? You seem to have a real knack for writing This kind of story in a way THat really draws you in as a reader, its so well put togeTHer its almost like watching a film... actually no, do you know what i felt like reading THis, i felt like i was in THe passenger seat of THeir car looking over the back at THe atmosphere in THe car. I honestly could feel THe tension.
OK i have to say it, I love Tom already, I know i should be feeling sad because he's had an accident and everyTHing but as i read THat i couldn't help but smile, THe brain injury it seems he's suffered has left him wiTH such a sweet innocence to his character and, its just so adorable.
I love THe change to how you wrote him here as to how you wrote him previously, he knows THings are different just not quite what THey are, and i love his questions all THe time alTHough i can see why THe oTHers in THe car reacted THe way THey did.
I feel for his mum, even THough she snapped at him a bit THere, she's probably under THe most stress as its usually THe mums who are up at THe hospital all hours. You can tell she loves him but at THe same time you can tell she's wishing he'd go back to how he was before.
I was surprised by THe dad character, in most stories THe dad is portrayed as THe bad guy because everyone bases it off of THeir actual feelings towards him as a person, but THis was interesting and i actually found myself liking him THe most (after Tom,) I love THat he's The one whos being kind and gentle towards him, in smite of THe fact he's probably just as agravated as THe oTHers, THen again i don't suppose anyone would want THeir kid to know THat, especially since THe THing getting on your nerves can't be helped...so yeah, i get THat too.
Now The oTher kid i don't like at all, maybe he's only young and bored but THe comment he made was inexcusable, im not surprised Dad went nuts. maybe we should cut him a little slack THo? maybe THe accident is still fairly raw in his mind and wiTH him being so young he's now jealous THat all THe attention will be on Tom for his medical problems.
Man I hope Bill comes back, I see everyone else in THe family having no patience for Tom's new needs and THe one he bonds wiTH as a care-giver being Bill, even THo perhaps Bill won't be too sure on THis at first and will have to come round to THe idea.
I'm really looking forward to seeing how THis turns out, i feel i'm really gonna like it, great start, awesome return to writing... expect more reviews.
Author's Response: Aww, such a lovely review. I will say though, if you're expecting a sweet caretaker Bill type thing like my last stories had going -- you'll be surprised. Also, along the way little hints have been/will be dropped although some already have a hunch as to what exactly Tom's "accident" was.
Date: 02/14/14 07:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
THis isn't quite a conventional "Review" but it is someTHing i need to say...
OMG i'm glad youre back, you're seriously my fave auTHor here and i can't wait to start reading your stuff again, i'm such a fan lol
as a fan of your subjects and writing style i have to ask I loved LOVED your series wiTH smashed, traumatised and scarred in it ( i can't actually remember THe series title but i remember THose clear as anyTHing as some of THe best stories ive ever read here, THey were just so touching and if im honest i quite miss THem. I was wondering, is THis a re-work of THe series. If not do you plan to re-post THem in future?
Hope you don't mind me asking... now to read THis :)
I'm not usually into deaTH or suicide but seen as you said nobody dies, i'll give it a try :) i don't mind dark just deaTH and if its anyTHing like THe same as your last awesome stories THere'll be loads for me to review and comment on :)
Welcome back!
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, you've literally made me squeal with happiness. I can't believe you remembered them all by name! Anyway, to answer your question it's not a re-work of the Smashed series. It's a whole different premise in a whole different universe -- though you'll probably see some similarities. I just like seeing a broken Tom for some reason (sick, I know, but whatevs). I just have thing for tragedy and dysfunctional families...
Date: 02/09/14 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love this, I absolutely do. I love how well you describe Tom's sickness... It's sad yet fascinating at the same time. I'd love to read more on this. Update ASAP
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! And don't worry, I'm already halfway done with chapter 2 as we speak! I'm sure I'll be updating within the next couple of days so just hang in there :)
