Date: 02/22/14 01:15 pm Title: Chapter 16
Bill can't go on lying to him. He'll soon notice the distance between them. I'm actually kind of happy that Bill was going let him die. They should've let that bastard die. That maid is in my list of hated people, don't call 911 ever for that monster of a man. Just let that idiot die next time. Damn!
But I can see why she did that. Because Bill did hurt Tom by leaving so if David died. He'd have no place. Not only that but he would be all over the papers and tabloids if David died and I don't think Bill could handle that alone.
Author's Response: wow, i don't think he could either. thanks for reading!
Date: 02/22/14 01:07 pm Title: Chapter 16
I had a feeling this would happen, but poor Tom! It's very obvious that Bill is still in love with Tom; I hope that love never goes away.
Author's Response: of course he's still in love with tom!
Date: 02/22/14 12:49 pm Title: Chapter 16
Hi deary....
Frankly.... I don't understand this chapter.
It's not bad or anything, but I can't understand it.
- I knew David wouldn't die, but this affected memory....
would it last?
How could Bill lie like this for David's sake, when all he wanted was to see him die?
And this kiss for the puppy... even if the intention behind this gift is nice, it's not like Bill to be kind to David after all he suffered.
- A "nice" David doesn't really please me. I don't know why he thinks what he thinks and how he could forget what he pulled Bill through.
How could he not see Bill cringing whenever David touch him?
- The promess of a big wedding, Bill's dream wedding, a puppy.... everything Bill could have wanted before in their relationship, but he doesn't want it anymore and it's all the more sad that David is ready to give to Bill now, when he made a living hell of his life.
He sees something is off with Bill, but doesn't understand the problems since he doesn't remember. ANd it doesn't fell right for me, not at all. I don't like this awkward situation.
- And I fear what could happen if David suddenly remember their last years together, Bill's run away, Tom... Or what could happen if he doesn't remeber.
Would Bill stay with him, in a faker relation than before?
Would he tell him what really happens to their relation, how David become a persecutor?
Would the truth be accepted? Or would he once more become a torturer just to keep Bill?
- How does Tom fit into all this? We didn't see him in this chapter and I don't like it. He seems to be farther and farther from Bill, they're difting apart and I can't picture how the next chapter would go... with only two more to come, plus an epilogue.
Even if you promised an happy end.... how would you do that and wouldn't do it in a half-assed attempt to make it right, simply to please us?
Your plot is ready, I know it, and you always have wonderful twists in your stories and I want to believe you would make another surprising one to end it!!! I don't know how but won't doubt you!!!
No red hair... could you settle for blue????
Don't let the begining - or the end - of my review upset you, I'd be there for the next chapters until the end!!!
Love, Kiki
Author's Response: well at this point, they are sort of drifting apart. they both think bill is stuck with david and they can't be together. and i actually added a chapter, so 3 more plus the epi. and blue hair? i don't think i could pull that off.
Date: 02/22/14 12:41 pm Title: Chapter 16
that's really a turn in this story. i'm speechless
Author's Response: woo hoo for speechless!
Date: 02/22/14 11:44 am Title: Chapter 16
Interesting twist!
Author's Response: thanks very much!
Date: 02/20/14 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 14
fuck this ruined my life shdyfldkdjskfjkf WHYYY
Date: 02/19/14 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 15
IS HE FINALLY DEAD?!?!? HALLELUJAH HE'S REALLY DEAD!!! IF NOT HE NEEDS TO DIE AND NOW!!!!
Date: 02/19/14 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 15
Wow, can't wait for more :) This story is very good :)
Author's Response: thanks so much!
Date: 02/19/14 05:23 pm Title: Chapter 15
I hope somebody slipped something into that asshole's drink. I don't even feel the slightest bit of remorse when I say I hope Jost dies. Beside form him, I love this universe you've created. The story is truly amazing and perfectly written.
Author's Response: *blushes* you're too kind!
Date: 02/19/14 12:13 pm Title: Chapter 15
Hi deary.
Still there, despite the mean you.
And you're meaner and meaner to them!!
- I'm a bit surprised about Tom's reaction, and in the same time I'm not. Wanting to get Bill back, okay, I can understand. Being angry, okay too.... But letting go like that.... Nope, I can't understand.
Sure, he can't do anything, like Gus clearly stated... but listening to Geo and stop hoping for a better day... It's not the Tom you painted before in this story Tom is a fighter, not a quitter.... So I'm a bit disapoointed... But I'll get over it... hardly! :p
- Bill's torture goes on. How did Tom say about David " Wring his fucking neck"? yeah that's exactly what I'd like to do!!
David won, didn't he?? By black mail and blows? The guy has sure a god complex and no morals!
- Tom is getting back to acting.... But even if he makes it big, he's not trully at it. Bill's always on his mind, and despite his resolutions, he doesn't really move on!
- Like Bill who can't stop thinking about Tom and his lost love.
- So short this meeting... and Tom is so cold to Bill. Doesn't he understand Bill's pain? His reasons for doing it? Well, I know he understands, he's as miserably as Bill, but I'm still angry he doesn't fight more!
I hoped you'll find a different approach of this situation... But I know there wasn't a lot of possibilities. So all things considered, you handled it well.
- And of course David saw them. That doesn't surprise me since I "predicted" it and his fury. Even the fact he almost "set" this meeting wasn't a surprise. Like he wanted Bill to speak with Tom, just to beat him more beacause of it. A twiseted bastard!
- But this final twist at the end.... Nope I didn't see it coming and I'm speechless.
So suddenly like being struck by lighting and not in the romantic way, for all he did to Bill. Karma's a bitch, isn't it?
But I wonder what cause this. A stroke? A ruptured aneurysm??? Has it even a natural origine?
My favorite hypothesis is that David has been poisoned. By who? I'm torn. It would be funny if it was Bu... But my money is more on Adelia. To free Bill from his painful ordeal.
But now, how will this affect both Bill, and Tom when he will know? What sequelas will David have? How could it free Bill? I don't think David would change overnight and transform into a nice person, too improbable.
But since he won't die, could he be mentally diminished? In a coma? with Bill managing his assets as a "loving" husband... while cheating on his husband?
Not Bill couldn't do it... He has to be divorced before he could be with Tom again.
If Tom wanted to take him back? His reactions to this new development is a mystery to me. After this chapter and how he lets Bill go without fighting - a lost battle, I know but still!!!!- I don't know how he could react!
Once more, you'll just have to surprise me.
SAturday can't come soon enough. I'll wait holding my breath until then.
Love, Kiki
Author's Response: tom would love to fight for bill, but he doesn't want to risk bill being hurt again in the process if it didn't work out. so i don't think he's totally given up. no david wasn't poisoned, and he doesn't die. despite everyone wishing for his demise. lol didn't mean to make tom seem cold to bill when they ran into each other. but he couldn't really stand there and have a long conversation, either.
Date: 02/19/14 11:08 am Title: Chapter 15
Dieeeeeeeeeeee bastard!!!!!!! I'm just so happy right now!
Author's Response: nope, doesn't die. sorry. lol
Date: 02/19/14 09:51 am Title: Chapter 15
Oh my god i hope David dies!! He deserves to rot in hell for the rest of the eternity!! Aww i felt so sad while reading this and the previous chapter :'( i hope there will be a happy ending and david will rot in hell.
Author's Response: well, david doesn't rot in hell. but maybe there's a happy ending anyway.
Date: 02/19/14 08:32 am Title: Chapter 15
I'm literally salivating waiting for the next chapter....
Author's Response: *wipes up puddle*
Date: 02/19/14 03:07 am Title: Chapter 15
Very interesting. Is David going to have a stroke??? Oh, yeah.
Author's Response: we shall see!
Date: 02/19/14 01:06 am Title: Chapter 15
HEART ATTACK!!!!!! Please let that motherfucker Die... Poor Bill living in hell ... I just cant wait to know what was going through toms mind after talking to Bill it was just heart breaking ... I want them to go back together ... I dont want Tom to just Forget avec Bill :( cant wait for another amazing chapter :)
Author's Response: trust me, tom will never forget about bill
Date: 02/19/14 12:34 am Title: Chapter 15
Oh what a prick David is...setting them up like that. I am happy they got to see each other and Bill knows Tom understands his situation.
Hallelujah-David's down!
Was he drugged, have a heart attack....some will think Bill pushed him! Whatever it is I hope the evil bastard dies!
Thanks for the update.
Author's Response: makes me laugh everytime someone hopes for david to die an ugly death.
Date: 02/19/14 12:03 am Title: Chapter 15
poor Bill, poor Tom and what he did to end up in the hospital. i hope one day they will talk about everything what happened. and what's gong on with David? is he gonna die?
Author's Response: nope, not gonna die
Date: 02/18/14 11:31 pm Title: Chapter 15
se murió? yehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Author's Response: um...what?
Date: 02/18/14 11:14 pm Title: Chapter 15
Afthgbcouthcjdobhsavhadmqu.......!!
so... Next chapter?.. xD
Hahahaha im sorry its just This Chapter WAS.SOO.GOOD!
Author's Response: thanks soo much!
Date: 02/18/14 10:40 pm Title: Chapter 15
The idea of Tom moping around at home because he's all heartbroken is strangely... adorable.
Yes! God, this ending! I have happy tears in my eyes! I don't know what the hell's going to happen, but I'm having wet dreams about David choking on his own spit, boiling in his own fat or just being tortured the worst way possible! I normally say that I wish people would step on legos, but I really hope David steps into a pile of legos!
And if he dies now, I wish he was real so that I could visit his grave and spend the rest of my life happily PEEING on it!
Author's Response: um...wow...hostile much? lol