Date: 02/15/14 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 14
I love all of the drama this chapter had in it. Poor down and out Bill, it's so wrong that I love his character like this...at least for a little while.
Author's Response: so you like suffering bill, eh?
Date: 02/15/14 05:51 pm Title: Chapter 14
Awh poor Bill :( I love your writing style
Author's Response: thanks very much!
Date: 02/15/14 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 14
Poor Bill. Well I understand he went back to David so Tom won't get hurt anymore but still, he got hurt when he left him. Damn, David was so terrible to Bill. I wonder what Tom would do now
Author's Response: wait and see, my friend!
Date: 02/15/14 04:35 pm Title: Chapter 14
when will the suffering end for my beautiful Billa ........ no why the hell did you do that Billa wwhhhhaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!! crys for bill
Author's Response: *hands you tissues* if it makes you feel any better, i cried when i wrote it
Date: 02/15/14 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
David doesn't die???? Too bad, even if he deserves a long and painful death.
So.... it's the meeting between Tom and Bill? Can't say I'm too surprise... You have to let a little light of hope in there...
Date: 02/15/14 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 14
Aw poor Bill. I know he wants to protect Tom because he loves him so badly, and he just sacrificed his own happiness for the ones he truly loves. Tom will probably be so upset, and it will be interesting to see his perspective on these new events. He must know how much Bill loves him. This was so deliciously sad! David is really cruel, and Bill deserves so much better. But yet I understand why he went back. Hopefully Tom can save him...great job!!!!!!
Author's Response: thanks very much! nice to see one person doesn't want to see me tarred and feathered. lol
Date: 02/15/14 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
DAVID MUST DIE!!!!!!! HOW DARE HE HURT MY BABY?!?!?!?!
Date: 02/15/14 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 14
Okay now that my stomach is calming down I have only one thing to say...BITCH! I can't believe you did this to Bill. Of all the outcomes that you could come up with this had to be the worst. I don't know how you can possibly redeem yourself but you'd better damn well try. I want to see Bill happy with Tom and no more of David. I am so disappointed and am just going to go back to bed and cry. I hope you feel very guilty. lol :)
Author's Response: *hands you tissues as well* maybe i'll manage to redeem myself later?
Date: 02/15/14 02:05 pm Title: Chapter 14
I hope this is just a bad dream! Bill's nightmare!
Author's Response: sadly, no. bill is wide awake.
Date: 02/15/14 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 14
mmmh I was expecting that........sadly, but I hoped (cause Bill still being there after Toms and Gustavs talk)you would show that there are people who are not reacting like that. I would have liked to read a fic where this does not happen and the protagonists fight against it together from the start. This can also be dramatic and well done and it would be a little more interesting. Bills conversations with Tom and the feeling of guilt by ignoring his family gave me a little hope so far, but yeah ..... I'm a little torn, because I know this "turn of events" (from movie, books and TV-Shows) all to well, expected and feared it. Maybe I will stick around, but I fear it's easy to loose interest, now, on my part.
I say this to let you know, that there is nothing wrong with your writing skills/style for me, it's quite the opposite; I love it actually. It's just that this story becomes to ordinary for me, due to the drama piont in so many fics seems to be about rapists,Bill as the weak one (yes, I consider his action as weak)and Tom as his savior in the end. I will have a look into the following chapters, but we'll see. Please don't take this review as insult or as trolling (someone else already did so). I really don't mean it personal, but I think it's important to be honest.
Author's Response: oh, i totally appreciate the honesty! absolutely! i do hope you'll keep reading though, cuz...well, all i can say is the story's not over yet.
Date: 02/15/14 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 14
Bill should not have made his decision to leave Tom alone. Silly boy.
Author's Response: he didn't feel like he had a choice
Date: 02/15/14 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 14
ooooh sad sad sad
Author's Response: very
Date: 02/15/14 01:09 pm Title: Chapter 14
.... Hi, I guess.
Could I really tell I knew it????
Maybe not, because you killed me with this chapter. It's worst than what I feared.
- Bill is now dead inside. To protect Tom, to protect his love, he will endure everything... but it tears me to see him like that. I didn't cry read what David made to him but almost.
- I can't imagine how Tom feels, waking up without Bill, then finding this note. Heart-broken can't seem to begin describing how he must feel. And I can't cait to see how he will cope - if he copes, that's it.
- And how could he have Bill back now??? Being married isn't necessarily a fatality but it sure makes things harder!!
You told me someone would get married, I thought it'll be Sam, getting married with his brother as best man.
But.... this parody of happy wedding made me cringe!
And nobody seems to find it strange, Bill marrying David like that after being with Tom....
I hope a meeting in the next chapter, maybe by accident between Tom and Bill... A short moment where they could talk... even if it means they get caught and Bill gets puniqhed... They need to be able to talk... and maybe find a way to stop this.
But the only solution I see.... is David's death. SO.... how could he die - Bill inheriting his fortune by the way now that they're married- without Tom and Bill being convicted for it???
You said 18 chapters.... Then you have a few more with drama before settling this situation... Poor Bill... And poor Tom lost without his love, I'd like to see him planning rescue with Gus and Geo...
But I don't think I would ask you to surprise me again ... This chapter was the death of me and I can't think I could stand more of it... even if I know I have to before the happy end!!!
Loved this chapter nonetheless! But Be nice to my weak heart, please!!!!
Kiki
Author's Response: your review made me smile, cuz it seems you can always guess what little bits and pieces i've include in the story. so yes, something you mentioned here does happen. but david does not die.
Date: 02/15/14 12:21 pm Title: Chapter 14
I can't
Author's Response: i understand
Date: 02/13/14 03:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
geo a bottom? iv never read a story where he was a bottom haha
Date: 02/12/14 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
aw ok
hard to find botTom (well with the twins anyway... i dont read Tom/Bushido and i will sometimes read Tom with someone else but not much)
Author's Response: i wrote a tom/geo story that was botTom, but geo's really the only one i can see tom bottoming for. and that was a teenager tom. my other torg is when they're older and geo is the bottom.
Date: 02/12/14 12:08 pm Title: Chapter 13
Hi sweetie!!!
This review will be short for a good reason....
Do you have a mind-reading power???? 'Cause you sure as hell write this first time together the way I pictured it!!!! not to the letter, but almost. So I don't have much to say but I loved this chapter!!!!!
- The position they made it in, Bill's reluctance because Tom is hurt, Tom's awe while Bill prepares himself, Bill taking control much to Tom's pleasure, the gentleness despite their ardor..... there's so much love in this, it's almost painfully beautiful... when you know more drama will come their way.
-What I didn't "expect" was the reiterate ILY, and Tom remebering the previous one, to Bill's great pleasure and surprise.
- Nonetheless, I almost feared at the beginning that Tom would wake up to an empty house, Bill being gone before they could have their sexy moment.
But now, I still fear he would wake up without Bill in the next chapter.... That would be cruel, even for your sense of drama, but I don't rule it out yet... since I don't know how you could bring back David in the plot without Bill going back to him... I even imagine him making David confess Tom's assault and recording it....
So.... suprise me my dear!!!
Really, really, really loved this chapter! And STOP reading my mind :p
Kiki
Author's Response: that's why i loved reading your last review so much. knowing the sex scene was already written, and that it basically happened just the way you guessed it would, i was all hee hee hee! as for the next chapter...we shall see!
Date: 02/12/14 05:33 am Title: Chapter 13
wow that was hot! loved it :D
Author's Response: me toooo!
Date: 02/11/14 11:44 pm Title: Chapter 13
Love love love! Tender, touching, loving, sexy...well done!
Author's Response: some of my favorite adjectives! thanks very much!
Date: 02/11/14 09:49 pm Title: Chapter 13
Almost as awesome. Nothing quite beats Bill/Tom sex though...and what you wrote was FJSL38R3WSLJ38#&(@KLSFJLJE. Sooooo good. Bill really took care of Tom (*wiggles eyebrows*)
I'm in love with this story. And I'm glad those two are still together right now. I'm still nervous for the future, but the drama will of course be delicious...
Author's Response: *wiggles eyebrows* yeah, this is definitely one of the awesomest sex scenes i've ever written!