Date: 05/21/13 05:45 pm Title: The End
This was pretty confusing, and kinda sad. Not too sure what I think about it.
Am I right in assuming that Bill killed Mishka too? And why? Why would he try and shoot Clear, and kill her dog. I suppose I understand why he killed Tom's dad,and wouldn't it be interesting to hear about that story? Did Bill end up killing himself?
I have always heard the adage as 'the one you feed' but I kind of like the version you picked better, because everyone has good days, and bad days, and sometimes you have to work to make sure the good days out number the bad. Is that making sense?
Author's Response: Actually, I never really thought about the fact that I left a possibility like that. It kind of happened when I was composing the story and I had to cut the less important things out. Sorry about that. To put it simply, I intended to have Clear shot by accident in the original set-up of the story, not long before Bill shoots Tom's father. Mitscha's story is a bit more complicated than that, so I'm not going to explain it in great detail, sorry, but she wasn't shot by Bill.rnrnI suppose that Bill's side of the story would indeed be the most interesting thing to tell after this story. I should give some thought adding a chapter in the future, although I can't make any promises. rnAnd, although he hasn't shown himself, Bill hasn't killed himself.rnrnYeah, when I went to do some background checks, all I could find were ones that said 'the one you feed,' although the book I read really put the emphasis on 'who you feed the most.' I like that one better too. rnWhat you're saying perfect sense. I personally thought it is important to think about what goes on in your head and the people and things you are exposed to. If you'd grow up in a home full of bad things, you're more likely to do bad things yourself, right? That's only my opinion on the matter though.
Date: 05/10/13 12:01 pm Title: The End
With old story you mean, this about
wolves? It's Native American story, Cherokee exactly.
Your story was so sad. Was Bill in jail, or in hiding? I'm sorry if my questions seem stupid, english isn't my first language, so maybe I missed it in the story.
Author's Response: Ah, yes, I meant the story about the wolves. It was mentioned in the book I got it from that it was Cherokee, but when I went to do some background research, I never really found out if that was true or not. Thank you anyway.rnrnI meant for Bill to be in hiding. You didn't miss it, since it was never really mentioned in the story, I'm sorry if it bothered you, but I tend to write this way.
Date: 05/07/13 05:23 pm Title: The End
I absolutely loved your story. I truly, truly liked the way you used the old story here. IMHO it's a bit worn and overused, so I was not sure what to expect, but your version anhd especially the way you used words here was amazing. You didn't even write a story asmuch as you painted a portrait. Very tragic and melancholic. I liked the sadmess. I liked how most happened when very few words were said. The idea of things changing and how there's no turning back. How we are haunted by our past and maybe most of all, the bittersweetness of Tom's longing to Bill. Very beautifully written, tragic version of the old story. I need to rec this to others, cos this neeeds way more attention! :)