Date: 07/15/14 02:45 pm Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
I miss next chapters... :(
Date: 04/15/14 05:28 pm Title: 1. Of First Days
I really hope you didn't abandon this story, it's a way too good to be left unfinished >.
Date: 11/11/13 12:25 am Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
no chance of a new chapter any time soon (or ever), right?
Author's Response: I'll probably post soon lovie, don't worry you're pretty little mind! c:
Date: 10/20/13 04:29 am Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
Oh fuck, Bill what you´ve done?
Date: 10/15/13 08:36 pm Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
My internet went off and it wouldn't let me review this Chapter:-( Fucker.
ANYWHO, it works now and THIS LONG CHAPTER WAS VERY LONG AND I LOVE THAT SHIT.
Firstly, Tom's Mother seems to be REALLY laid-back in comparison to the rest of his family. She knows that Tom is spending a lot of time with Bill, yet she doesn't seem THAT bothered by it, whereas his Grandad is a complete douche about it. He asked Tom to change Bill and his ways, although; he doesn't like Tom being around Bill. So really he's contradicting himself. Obviously Tom's Grandad thinks he's spending too much time around Bill, but he should know that Bill isn't going to change over night. Fucking wanker.
IT GOT REALLY SEXY AND YOU TOOK THAT AWAY FROM ME... WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU?!
You wrote the build up really well. You're an amazing smut writer (would it be considered as smut, although they didn't fuck? Who knows, anyway;) and you've described the scene so well. I could envision what was going on, what tone of voice they used when they spoke to each other and the pace they were going at. You've literally put me in the scene with them and I thank you for that, not many writers can give that specific effect and this is shit I need when I read.
Oh my, it was heart breaking. I feel so sorry for Tom. His Grandad has obviously gotten into his head and made him consider most things. I know it's Bill's ultimate goal to have Tom fuck him, but at the same time; the feelings between them are both very much evident, no matter how much they fight and deny them, they're still there lingering on. But Tom seemed to freak out at the peak of the moment, right as things were going to change the whole dynamic, knowing at that point there was no going back once they'd done it.
SO FUCKING TENSE, MUFFINS.
Bill seems so genuinely upset, it's as if he's been learning to accept his feelings, just to have Tom shove it back in his face. It's really intense. I thought it would have been the other way around, to be honest. That Bill would freak out, knowing that he's getting himself TOO involved with Tom. But nope, you shocked me. Well done.
Who the hell walked in on him and Danny? OMG, I don't know why I think this, but is it Tom's Grandad or Dad? It would seem too easy for Tom to catch them together... HMMM.
I love this and I love you, I really cannot wait for another update, so don't keep me waiting ;-) WELL DONE, LOTS OF LOVE, xxxxx
Date: 10/15/13 06:58 pm Title: 10. Of Dirty Fucks and Sweet Nothings
HI MUFFINS!
I love this Chapter. I laughed at Bill's reaction to waking up so early and the way Tom responded to him - was fucking hilarious. Bill reminds me of myself, I'd react like that too. One thing I love about this is the foundations their relationship is built upon. It seems like such a dysfunctional relationship, yet their dynamic when they're together is so fulfilling. I adore that so much, so well done.
When they opened up to each other though. I shed a tear. It's literally the most powerful, heartfelt scene I've read in a long while. They both seem confused, yet so certain about how they feel, no matter how much they try to deny it.
“Don’t say anything; just listen, know that you mean something to me; that my words are true.”
CAN I JUST.. YOU'RE SUCH A BITCH.. WHY DO THIS TO ME.. I DON'T KNOW HOW TO GO ON FROM THIS *weeps*
This was REALLY beautiful, particularly the very last part ;-) I love filthy Bill. *Blowing you kisses* ~ LOTS OF LOVES xxxxx
Date: 10/15/13 05:52 pm Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
Uh oh!!
Date: 10/15/13 01:56 pm Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
Tom's grandpa had really huge impact with his talk but still i don't get it why he said all those things to Bill....but the ending...omg, i can't wait for more
Date: 10/15/13 12:38 pm Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
OMG i cant wait for the next chapter! Sorry to hear about your laptop. My kid spilled coffee on mine
Date: 10/15/13 12:43 am Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
Dun dun dun! Bills such a mess I really feel bad for him at this point. And Tom...he needs to think for himself and stop letting biggots get in his head!
Date: 10/14/13 08:57 pm Title: 11. Of Bad Intentions
It's fine. I know EXACLTLY how younger siblings are. I'm willing to guess ther person at the door is either Tom or his grandfather. And I'm not posting as much as I should be either. But hey, life gets in the way sometimes!
Love the new chapter!
Date: 09/10/13 01:05 am Title: 10. Of Dirty Fucks and Sweet Nothings
super :) good that they serious and honest talk but still the end...why did u end it like that? ;p
Author's Response: Honestly, I was just lazy and had no motivation because it would've taken me so long to write what I wanted if I didn't end it there. I hope you enjoy what I wrote for you lovey! *Huggles*
Date: 09/09/13 07:20 pm Title: 10. Of Dirty Fucks and Sweet Nothings
They are totally in love withe each other. This is true even if Bill is in denial. I hope you will not mess up things with Tom. Great chapter!
Author's Response: HAHAHHAA. You jinxed me. Please don't kill me I'm sorry. *Huggles*
Date: 09/09/13 06:34 pm Title: 10. Of Dirty Fucks and Sweet Nothings
NO! I will NOt throw rocks at you! Moving sucks, been there done that. It's still amazing! And you're forgiven (not that there was anything to apoligize about) I love you too!
Taking breaks fro writing is a good thing occasionally. But I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm sorry for taking so long, and I love you for not throwing rocks at me! I can't wait to see what you think of the new one, Lovie! *Huggles*
Date: 08/21/13 12:23 pm Title: 9. Of Mystery Men and Fruity Drinks
I love this story !!! Its so freaking amazing and I really hope that you post another chapter soon :D !!!
Author's Response: Ohp. You jinxed me. I'm kidding! I was on a good streak but then I crashed like I promised myself not to. I'm going -to try- to post more often now but it's really hard to D': But thank you so much! I LOVEEEE YOOOOOOU! ;3 *Huggles*
Date: 08/10/13 12:43 am Title: 9. Of Mystery Men and Fruity Drinks
yeeeey, finally Tom came to sense and did what feel right for him, not about what he was teach by ;p
Author's Response: Yes! And more of that will be soon to come. Hopefully nothing gets fucked up. I hate torturing my characters. *crosses fingers* But we'll cross those bridges when we get to them! *Huggles you*
Date: 08/09/13 11:48 pm Title: 9. Of Mystery Men and Fruity Drinks
yeah, kissing!
Author's Response: Fuck yeah! Maybe you'll like this chappie too then! Haha, maybeeeee. cl *Huggles*
Date: 08/09/13 08:45 pm Title: 9. Of Mystery Men and Fruity Drinks
Wasn't it the guy who Tom tried to change/convert?
And also what's up with Tom's dad? Oh I hope the mystery guy wasn't Tom's dad XD I hate second guessing myself lol
Author's Response: Hmmmm, maybe? And Tom's dad is justt... Gordon ahahah. Maybe it WAS Tom's dad?!? I dunno, you'll find out next chapter, Lovie! I hope it's not Tom's dad tho, ahaha. You made me giggle. *Huggles*
Date: 08/09/13 04:55 pm Title: 9. Of Mystery Men and Fruity Drinks
'ELLO BABY!!
First of all, this Chapter was all kinds of amazing's. I kept scrolling down to read more because I was desperate to know what was going on, but at the same time, I was dreading nearing the end of this Chapter, because I wanted it to go on and on and on and on and never stop, like never. *juts out lower lip*
ANYWHO; The first part I was really happy to see Bill opening up to another person about how he feels on the inside, because we've only seen the overly confident Bill that JUST wants sex, but to actually hear his thoughts and turmoil said out loud, makes me think he's falling in luuuuurv. *wiggles eyebrows and squeaks*
Danny is perfect, just perfect, I love his characteristics so much. He reminds me of a peacekeeper somehow? I want one of him please? Give me him righT NOW. He's such a good friend to Tom. Literally the best, in fact. I love the way he and Tom were brought together, in a similar way Bill and Tom are, because it's refreshing to see Tom being so closer to a said-sinner. I love the way he thinks and says certain things, because his dialogue just rolls off the tongue and I could totally imagine the whole conversation and how he said things, with what emotion. What I loved most of this part was, how he read part of the bible to prove a point to Tom, and then he said he would be a friend and tell him exactly what he thinks. I love how he can talk to Tom in such a serious way just like he did, yet make it sound so witty and funny too, from best-friend to best-friend. Yeah, so Danny is my new fave babe. *shakes pompoms for Danny*
The last section made my toes curl and my penis erect. I actually feel for Tom. The amount of courage he would have had to build up to actually come to an inner agreement, to call Bill up and to go to his house and spend the night. I think he was really brave in that sense. I adored how he needed alcohol to be able to loosen up and admit/show everything he's feeling, because that's such a realistic thing. I need alcohol to be able to express things, just like Tom did and I can totally relate. The kiss was beautifully written, I could actually visualize it. I was quite amazed at Tom's apparent confidence when he spoke to Bill throughout the kiss, one thing that stuck in my head was, "Ohhhhh I want you so bad, Tom" and Tom said in reply, (and I read it in such a cocky, overly confident voice in my mind) "Mmm, who doesn't." I think it stuck with me because it's such unfamiliar behaviour on Tom's behalf and I kinda liked it more than I should, because IN CONTROL DOM!TOM is hottt. I loved how you could totally tell the difference from sober to drunk, without tampering with their speech like some people do when they write, y'know? *flails and thrusts hips*
AGAIN SO MUCH REALISM and I ADORE THAT, AS YOU KNOW.
I've got to give you mass praise on the way you express inner feelings/turmoil and the specific way you write dialogue. Yepp.
I wanna see Tom showering unbeknownst to Bill peeping on him, still. So make it happen babes. I love this, I love you, I love life and ducks. I cannot wait for more *flicks cigarette ash* Fabulous darling! xxxxx
Author's Response: Ello back babbyyyy! c;
Bill is a confusing character. It's even hard me to write about sometimes because I just end up confusing myself and shiiet. I'm glad that your-
SHIT. I JUST WROTE THE FUCKING LONGEST RESPONSE EVER AND THEN ALL OF A SUDDEN AS I'M TYPING MY FINGER HITS THE TOUCHPAD AS I'M ERASING SOMETHING MISSPELLED AND EVERYTHING IS GONE. I'M SO FRUSTRATED. NOW I'M GONNA HALF ASS IT CAUSE I HAVE TO FLU AND MY ARMS HURT FUCK. IT WAS SO HEARTFELT TO.
OKAY I LOVE YOU SORRY. *HUGGLES YOU AGGRESSIVELY*
Date: 08/09/13 04:39 pm Title: 9. Of Mystery Men and Fruity Drinks
Was it Danny??? Am I right?? Do I get a cookie :333
Author's Response: Hmm, maybe it was, maybe it wasn't. Good guess though! *Hands you cookie* n.n Go ahead and nom, it's chocolate chips! And thankies for your review, it made me feel all happy that someone paid attention to my little notes at the bottom c: *Huggles*