Date: 07/21/13 12:50 am Title: 6. Of Parties - Part 2
Darn it, got carried away and thought there was another chapter...LMAO!
Date: 07/21/13 12:49 am Title: 6. Of Parties - Part 2
Um...Wow! There's a lot going on in their minds in this chapter. About to read next chapter to see the results of their escapades and that kiss!
Author's Response: Aha, sorry for not having the chapter up yet, but now it is! And there's always a lot going through those boys' heads! *Huggles*
Date: 07/20/13 09:32 pm Title: 6. Of Parties - Part 2
Bill was unexpectedly sweet to Tom at the party. Poor Tom though. This cannot be easy.
Author's Response: Bill is a tricky guy, I suppose. A little weird in the head, maybe. I love Tomi! I'm sure he'll pull through with minimal wounds! *Huggles*
Date: 07/20/13 09:25 pm Title: 6. Of Parties - Part 2
Fantastic chapter! Congrats on being featured. U deserve it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad to have you as a reader. *Huggles*
Date: 07/20/13 08:48 pm Title: 6. Of Parties - Part 2
i like it :) Tom really had a great night and it seams like he kinda enjoyed it :)
Author's Response: I'm hoping that he enjoyed it, because there's lots more to come! Thank you love *huggles*
Date: 07/16/13 07:29 am Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
BABY, If my long-arsed reviews are your inspiration for writing this, then you'll be receiving many more.
For starters, I loved reading it in Tom's perspective, because we really got inside his mind on how he felt about his life, just as we did with Bill in previous Chapters. I kinda always felt when I was reading this story that there was another side to Tom, like a side that nobody has ever seen, because maybe they wouldn't accept that side, y'know? And he feels a little relieved that he can actually bring that side out, even just a little bit when he's with Bill. When he's with Bill, he can be the real him, he doesn't have to hide as much, like he would if he was with his usual friend's, the religious ones and it's kind of sweet to read how two different worlds clash in this story (Well done on emphasizing this main point of the story.) *Thumbs up*
I actually feel sorry for Tom though. For the simple reason that is, he's being treated like a child by his family, mainly his father. They're practically forcing Tom into this religious life-style when in reality, he just wants to escape and be his own person. It's like he hasn't got a say in what he wants and how he wants to live his life and honestly, even though he doesn't want to Sin, he feels as if he's missing out on being an average teenager, which is so sad. :-(
I've babbled enough on Tom's Character now so MOVING ON. The party is genius. That's plain and simple. I love how at ease Tom seems. At first I could sense he felt kind of uncomfortable and awkward being there and receiving weird looks from anyone he passed, because he's not used to that type of party and he's never attended one before with those types of people that are there (Sinners), but he seemed to fit in really quickly. What I felt was that he's trying to live the life he might have fantasized about in his deepest, darkest dreams. The OATH was an EXCELLENT excuse for whatevers going to happen in the next Chapter, that if Tom fucks around with somebody at the party (hoping it's Bill because BABY), nobody outside of those walls will ever find out; not his dad or girlfriend, so he might feel a sense of FREEDOM which is good.
IN THE NEXT CHAPTER: I would love to say I want hot drunken smut from Tom and Bill, but I think it would be best if the realism is kept, keep their development at a slower pace. So, what I'd like to see is it kept in TOM'S perspective like this Chapter right here, and then I'd like to see a shared kiss between Tom and Bill during SPIN THE BOTTLE and then you can do what you do best, delve deep into how the kiss made Tom feel. Maybe at a push, if the realism could be kept as it is now, maybe Bill could kiss him when they're on their own, on their way home, leaving Tom a mess with his inner conflict and feelings about what had just happened?
Honestly, whatever you write is gonna be ace. Keep going Muffins baby. I'm your own personal cheerleader and right now, I'm shaking my pompoms so fucking hard for you! I LOVE YOU, WELL DONE ON YET ANOTHER PERFECT CHAPTER! xxxxx
Author's Response: Oh my fucking goodnessss! *Sees long review and pukes glitter* Baby!!! You are my dyke in shing armour. Okay, not dyke, YOU'RE BEAUTIFUL!
I think I have a harder time writing in Tom's perspective because I usually don't know where to start and what to do or say, but I try, girly! I'LL DO IT FOR YOOOOU. And there is another side to Tom, really. n.n Trust me, barely anyone has seen that side. I think Bill is good at bringing that side out of him. I really love two two worlds coliding theme, as well as authority smut fics. I like a good teacher/student action if I must say c;c;c;
I feel for my Tomi too, dearie. This is the part where I only halfway agree with you though. I think you'll do a little unwinding in the future, things will start to piece together and make sense. You're right about forcing him into the religious life style though. It would be better for everyone if he was just normal :c
It's genious, really?! :DD I think it's more of Tom's enviroment than he thinks. He just falls into place there. And yes, he is fulfilling his bucket list fantasies, spot on, Love! I LOVE the oath too, mainly because it's something me and my friends do while we party xD You'll see fucking around soon, -Hopefully, because... BABY!- xD
Don't wanna burst your bubble, but I'm good with realism, my OCD would kill me if I just changed it so drastically. -damn me- I'm gonna try to keep a steadily developing relationship between the two, so yeah, it'll progress with time. c:
Thank you so much for this, Lovie. I'm always so moved by what you leave me and it always brings spastic flailing of my limbs whenever I see that you've reviewed and left me your love and beautiful words. It's what keep me goingggg. KEEP SHAKING THEM POMPOMS GIRL! I LOVE YOOOU SOOOSOSO MUCH! *Huggles you til you turn purple* xxxxx
Date: 07/16/13 12:31 am Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
Great party. I felt like I was there, lolz :p Keep going, I'm keeping with this story as one of my mains. But sooner, rather than later, I wanna see a lil' Tomi/Billy action, ya know ya know? ;D Thanks! Cool FUGKING story, bro!
Author's Response: I wish I was there! I'm going, I'm goinggg. I'm happy you're keeping this as one of your mains! I'll try to keep it sooner too. I don't wanna burst your bubble though, but I'm trying to be as realistic as possible with their relationship development, but maybe little thigns here and there will be enough for some peoples insatiable needs? xD I'll tryyy. And thank you so much for dropping me this. These all mean the world to me! *Huggles*
Date: 07/15/13 09:48 pm Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
I'm enjoying this tremendously and can't wait to see where this goes. Don't be to hard on urself, there are lots of interesting and amazing stories on here that don't get enough recognition.
Author's Response: Really?! *Loves* n.n I can't wait to see where I take this! At the time, I thought I was being realistic, not hard on myself, but thank you, Love. I really hope I get recognition now! Thank you for your review, I appreciate every one I get! *Huggles*
Date: 07/15/13 07:31 pm Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
I really feel for Tom. I hope he will stay true to himself.
Author's Response: I hope he does too. *Double meaning alert* Thank you for reviewing, it means the world c: *Huggles*
Date: 07/15/13 06:31 pm Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
can you fix the story it keeps showing Iā and it keeps confusing me
Author's Response: I fixed it, thanks for saying so or I totally wouldn't have known until like a week from now! ;D I have no clue what happened xD *huggles*
Date: 07/15/13 06:09 pm Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
I can't wait to see what happens next!!! I'm glad Tom is loosening up and I hope he's shitfaced by the end of the night!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this!! I like Tomi loosening up too, I think he can be a real party animal. *Snorts* You'll see love, c: *Huggles*
Date: 07/15/13 05:43 pm Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
Sounds like an awesome party!
Author's Response: Thank you! I tried, I trieddd. Now you can read part two! *Huggles*
Date: 07/15/13 05:12 pm Title: 5. Of Parties - Part 1
Whats with all the ć's?
Author's Response: I have absolutely no idea and it's confusing me, Sorry! It should be fixed now c:
Date: 07/14/13 09:39 am Title: 4. Of New Awakenings
YUP, DEDICATED TO ME, BECAUSE IM YOUR MUSE!
I loved this so fucking much. We've got an insight on Bill's home life now and in a way, that's connecting some of the dots, maybe for why he became the person he is today with the drugs, sex and crazy life style he's leading. His dad seems like a fucking knob and we haven't even heard from him properly yet, just from what Bill was telling Andi. I kinda have respect for his mother though for throwing him out, but in a way I don't because she said "Come back when you've got your head on straight." She should have kicked that dick to the curb long term! I liked seeing the vulnerable-Bill because we've only seen the strong-Bill and that kinda shows he's not this tough-assed-bitch he makes himself out to be.
I think Andi is an amazing friend. Literally, he seems protective and as far as now, he's seems like he'd do anything for Bill, which is really sweet. In a way, I think Andi is the only one keeping Bill sane in this world, it also sounds as if Andi and his mother are the only ones who know his home life? So they must be closer than I had originally imagined, because at first I thought he was his minion that followed him around and fucked Bill, but now; I can see the whole dynamic of their relationship, which I do find fascinating. Andi's mother is quite the character, I liked reading about her and how she acts. She seems so cool and laid back, in a way just like Andi, I'd like to read more about her.
AND TOM. I nearly died laughing. The lunch thing with Danny got me super curious though?! HMM, I wanna know what's going on/gone on between the two of them. AND bible studies, prayer time, youth group were literally the icing on the cake for this Chapter, because Tom seems so dominant even though Bill's character comes across as stronger because he forced him into each one of these sessions, whether that was man-handling him or bribing him and that's sexy, I think. I cannot imagine Bill sitting in on these sessions with all the religious people like Tom and his group and I'd love to see more of that too, because that shit would be funny.
OMG. TOM AT A BILL-TYPE-PARTY. CAN WE GO PLS?! The next Chapter is going to be so intriguing to see how Tom reacts to Bill's life style, now that we've read about Bill in Tom's. It's gonna be good and I cannot wait, GOOD JOB ON THIS CHAPPIE BABY, AMAZING AS ALWAYS! I need more, I love you xxxxx
Author's Response: It's only because I love you so much! <333 rn
His dad is a fuckin knob! I wanna cunt punch him so hardddd. And I don't think you'll be hearing from him properly. I don't plan on showing him in the story any time soon. And yes, Simone might be dumb in the department of telling him to come back, but it's her husband and blahblahblah, she doesn't know that Bill's abused. And in sweet reality of this fic, Bill is actually a sweetheart underneath it all. He is a very fragile person...rn
I love Andi to pieces, and I actually based his character off myself, in a way! He loves Bill dearly, and because they were friends since birth, hinthint, he would do anything for the boy. c; And they are actually very close, he's not just a mindless sex slave for Bill.rn
Don't die love, but laugh away! I hope the lunch thing got you curious. It'll be explained in a couple chapters' time, but soon it'll all make sense. Trust meeeee. And in a way, I almost feel bad for Bill because he has to go through that shit *sheds tears* and Tom isn't all that dominant, but trust me, he knows how to man handle someone c;c;c;c;rn
AND YESSSSS, WE CAN DEFINITELY GO! LOT'S OF BEER AND POT, A PINATA FULL OF BLUNTS HELL YES. And I hope you enjoy this next chappie, you are my inspiration for it, anyways. I LOVE YOU BABBEEEE xxxxxxxxx *Huggles*
Date: 07/12/13 05:01 pm Title: 4. Of New Awakenings
I love Andi n his mom. I'm glad Bill has support n his life coz it looks like he needs it. Tom's new tactic is going to b great lol.
Author's Response: Andi's mom might be shown a little bit more in this fic, I'm contemplating it. And Bill is a mess, Andi is the glue of his life. And Tom's tactic is going to be the death of him xD Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it <3333
Date: 07/12/13 01:43 pm Title: 4. Of New Awakenings
Hexy Said: nice :) i like it :)
Date: 07/02/13 09:04 pm Title: 3. Of Blunts
Aww, huggles to you too :)
Tom certainly has a way to strech the Christianity to a whole new level, but with Bill... I guess it's only necessary :). Not impressed of how they spend their time, but teens are like that. Now the war plan? Hmm, should be interesting...
Author's Response: Tom is an interesting boy, and you'll come to see that throughout the story c: For shame on the druggggssssss!!!! And yes, teens are like that. Now the war plan won't really be discussed in the next chappie, but there will be bits and pieces of it scattered through the next couple of them. But I'll let the readers put the puzzle pieces together themselves. :)rn*Huggles*
Date: 06/29/13 10:58 am Title: 3. Of Blunts
Hi baby! This Chapter was amazing.
I loved how concerned Tom seemed when Bill was high on Coke, that was just adorable to read, because what I've read in previous Chapter's, Tom seems to be against drugs and the way he handled Bill, aww. I was actually kinked with laughter when Tom pulled out a Blunt, I just didn't expect it, this story is so unpredictable. I really loved the Tom and Bill interaction in this Chapter, they seem so different from each other because of their morals and religion, yet when they came together, they're so alike? AMAZING.
When Tom's at school, I think he abides by what his father's rules and tries to come off like a little saint, just because that's what his father expects? But when he's out of school, where his father can't see him, he's a normal guy. So that's got me curious now. I love the transformation from school time, to home time, when it came to Tom's character, y'know? It's got me so hooked and I cannot wait to read more! Just incredible, update soon again! xxxxx
Author's Response: BABBEEEE Oh my goodness! I just read this review today and this... this right here. This is what gave me the motivation the right my next chapter. And now it's posted! rnrnFirst, Tom actually is against drugs, but he know how to compose himself about them. And yes, he is all too adorable. And you really laughed about the blunt? I'm sooo happy that I could do that! c: I guess the next chappie will be pretty unpredictable too... And maybe they ARE actually a lot alike. We we seeeee. And no, YOU'RE AMAZING.rnrnThere's gonna be a little plot twist near the middle or end about Tom's dad. You'll see. love. And Tomi kinda is just a normal guy when he's comfy cozy c: rnrnI can't wwait to see what you have to say about the next chappie. I really hope you enjoy it, lovie. YOU WERE MY MUSE. MY MOTIVATION TO WRITE IT. SO I'M DEDICATING IT TOWARDS YOU. rnrn*Huggles*
Date: 06/29/13 03:33 am Title: 3. Of Blunts
Fantastic
Author's Response: Thank you lovely! -Huggles-
Date: 06/29/13 01:18 am Title: 3. Of Blunts
your story is not dook so far... I dig it.. keep posting and I will keep readimg
Author's Response: Thank you! It's nice to know it's not dook. I posted, and hopefully you'll read it, ha? And I can't wait to see what everyone has to say about it. -Huggles-