Date: 11/20/12 01:47 am Title: Chapter Three.
Oh god i love this story! Tom is something else haha cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you like it!
Date: 11/18/12 07:39 pm Title: Chapter Two.
Intriguing story so far. I can't wait to find out how the project goes, and if she gets to know the mystery of Tom.
Author's Response: Awh thank you! :D Don't worry, because of the length of the chapters you won't have to wait long.
Date: 11/18/12 07:17 pm Title: Chapter One.
Awesome so far, it sucked me in straight away and I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Awh I'm SO glad you liked it!
Date: 11/18/12 06:56 pm Title: Chapter Two.
wow!!!!!
wonder what she will do :)
update sooooon :)
Author's Response: Haha thank you!! I will update tomorrow or Tuesday.
Date: 11/18/12 06:56 pm Title: Chapter Two.
wow!!!!!
wonder what she will do :)
update sooooon :)
Author's Response: Haha thank you!! I will update tomorrow or Tuesday.
Date: 11/18/12 03:30 pm Title: Chapter Two.
I cant wait to see how the relationship between her and Tom progress, I really like the story and hope u will update soon!?
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I will update again either tomorrow or Tuesday.
Date: 11/17/12 01:33 pm Title: Chapter One.
This seems pretty interesting so far, definitely promising =] I'm really interested to see where you take this.
I am pretty picky when reading any stories on here, and I'm a stickler for grammar and spelling. With that being said, I am going to be honest and give you some constructive criticism. You never know what should be worked on, unless someone tells you, right? (That's how I feel when I'm writing/posting a fic on here). Anyways, there are quite a few run-on sentences throughout this chapter and I found it hard to absorb some of the information when the sentence kept going on and on. Does that make sense? Other than the grammar, I would say it's really good. The paragraphs are quite long, but sometimes that can't be avoided.
I hope you take this as constructive, because that is my intention. When I first started posting stories on here, I was happy when someone told me what needed to be worked on.
I am really looking forward to reading more of this. =D
Author's Response: rnHiya! Thank you, I'm really pleased you like it! Yes, I like receiving constructive criticism. Yeah, I know what you mean snot long sentences, that's always been an issue I've had. I normally never know when to finish a sentence. I'll try my best though! As for the chapters, I'm trying not to make them too long - they get shorter in next chapters as there is more dialogue, this first chapter was more about setting the scene. rn
rnThank you again for reading and reviewing. It means a lot.rn