Date: 12/16/13 10:41 pm Title: Twins
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Author's Response: Glad to make you laugh!
Date: 12/16/13 07:21 pm Title: Twins
Hmm. I see more Andrej-jealousy-angst in the near future. Poor boy.
So, it's been really strange and interesting getting to see this new, more vulnerable side of Tom. He's not the type to be paralyzed by fear... I suppose it's kind of another (backwards) example of how mature he really is: terrified is a much more appropriate response to teenaged fatherhood than Andrej's fantasy-land.
Also, Bill as a mom..still pricelessly funny.
Author's Response: I feel so bad for Andrej! Imagine if the love of your life was having an incestuous affair with his brother and was never planning on stopping...that would be a little bit on the UNFUN side. Thanks for pointing out how freaked out Tom is - he finally realizes what a huge mistake he made! It'll be interesting to see how well he copes with it all! (with a little help from MomBill!)
Date: 12/16/13 06:17 pm Title: Twins
Wow. It sure isn't going to be easy for any of them. This left me feeling kind of..sad. Also Brook. I kinda hoped she'd stay to help them raise the twins, even though I knew she wouldn't. I'm glad Mamma made sure she'll always have the chance to see them. Looking forward to more. Merry Christmas if a bit early
Author's Response: It shouldn't be easy! These two (well, especially Tom, anyway) are not old enough to be parents! Thank goodness Mamma will be there to help. And Merry Xmas to you, too!
Date: 12/16/13 05:59 pm Title: Twins
Extraordinary!
Author's Response: Wow thanks!
Date: 12/04/13 10:54 am Title: Poppi's Boys
Hey, this is Nikki-Strippy. I made my first review a month or so ago (maybe more). But this is my second. I'm so happy! :3 meow! Anyways, first question. How many more chapters you gonna go? Bc I think I remember reading as an end note that you were rounding down on this story, yet the way this is going it looks like there's going to be quite a bit more to go. And now to the review. I read in another review you answered that Bu's past will probably stay a mystery. Aww! But I would like to know at least a little! And during this entire story I have been having a craving fantasy of seeing Bu bottom. Mmmmm......just once at least. It would be so sexyyyyy......I know he's a topper but still. And despite my disappointment with Tom making such a rash decision in having kids this early (he could have waited at least when they graduated) I do hope they can balance school and kids. I do worry about Bill though. I remember on that birthday chapter where on the tape baby bill recalled him and tom having babies and one drowned. So when Bill saw Brook bring the babies in I immediately thought back to that chapter. It was as if his baby was resurrected. So now, knowing that one of them is Andrej's, I know he's going to have a hard time coping. Poor Bill. I wonder if this is going to create problems between he and Tom. Anyways, that's all I have to say for now. Thank you! Keep up the good work! I love it!
Author's Response: I was hoping to wind this up in about 3 to 4 more chapters (if they're long ones - more if my arms keep me writing shorties). But we'll see....It might keep going and end up not just being epic (since at this length, it already is), but super duper epic. My original plan had been to make this a series - I probably should have stuck with that! So all I can say is, I'm not planning on taking this that far into the future - I won't be showing the boys becoming adults and taking over the Trumpero empire. However, there may be a sequel down the road for more of that type of stuff.......Yes, Bu's life is going to remain a mystery (it's coming across that way, I think, because he just doesn't talk about his past. Maybe there's nothing more to it, really!). However! That might change. Honestly, aside from a very loose outline, I've really been winging this one. As for Bu taking it? I'm planning a Powerbottom! Billshido story for shitpisscatfuck. Don't know if Bill topping Bu is going to happen. However! .....well...you get the idea... You're right that Bill is thinking of Tom's baby as theirs. I'm sure that's going to cause a few problems in an already stressful environment. Especially with Andrej being very unhappy with the twincest thing going on. Anyways, thanks for taking the time and effort to review, it's much appreciated!
Date: 11/29/13 08:44 am Title: Sleep, and Lack Thereof
As you may or may not know, I've spent the better part of the last 5 years helping my parents name babies. I'm kind of an expert, really. My mom just had a baby last month and his name is Link! They were gonna name him Lilly if he had been a girl. I like that name. Or, you know, you could always name one of the twins Luke.... >_> Just saying. I doubt it'd be appropriate to name a child "shitpisscatfuck" I'm still trying to convince my mom that her next kid's middle name should be Unicorn.
I hope the arms are doing ok.
Author's Response: I did not know that your parents were the Duggars! Wow! Link Duggar - I like it! I also like Lilly, but had a bunny rabbit named that, and she's dead, so it's kind of sad. Plus, I have a friend whose little girl is named that, so she's "dead bunny name baby." I did Luke in Fog, remember? Even though I didn't know your name then, we'll pretend that was for you! Thanks for asking about my arms - they're....meh.
Date: 11/29/13 03:28 am Title: Sleep, and Lack Thereof
Before I get in to how much I loved this chapter can I point out one tiny discrepancy? Bu takes off Bill's shoes when they're on the couch and before he has Bill's feet in his lap, and then you have Bill demanding Bu remove his shoes when they get to the bedroom and Bu taking them off before mouthing at Bill's erection. Hope you don't mind me mentioning it but I know you're like me about details. Anyway, this was a great chapter. I love how you managed to inject humour into the whole situation when Poppi tells all to Tom and Andrej. He drags out the telling and sees it as the only punishment he can inflict on them, but in the end Mamma interjects and stops the torture. Tom getting drunk and the giggling and the ‘drunk DAD’ comment like its all a joke. And then when they get to bed, and reality hits...wow. I’m glad Tom’s as upset over what it will mean for his and Bill’s relationship as Bill is. It would be even sadder if he was so excited by the changes that he forgot about the impact on his twin. I feel sorry for Andrej, though, he's all ready to be grown up and married with a family; he’ll make a much better dad than Tom will at the moment. Tom's going to have some real adjusting to do, after all he was the one who arranged the whole impregnating thing to prove his love and commitment to Andrej, but obviously he didn't really think the matter through to its conclusion; he just wanted to win his Angel back after all the shit of him finding out about the twins relationship. Sorry, Tom, its way too late for a change of mind now. I can't wait for the first meeting between dads and babies, and equally I want to see how things go down between Bill and Tom. Will Bill tell Tom about the babies' past life thing...will Tom get that vibe when he meets his daughter anyway? Diverting from the twins slightly, what is it with Bu's past? Is there something else you're going to spring on us? Some dark secret that will impinge on the present? Is it that whole drowning thing he keeps getting images of, and that's why talking with Bill about fishing made him uncomfortable? Past life memories poking at him? Or something from this life he doesn't want to recall? Anyway, as I said, great chapter that - as you can see - has me pondering all the possibilities. As for names...nothing immediately springs to mind but maybe to placate Bill slightly they could name the girl Billie or something. Not sure Andrej would go for that. Have a great holiday, and rest up when you're not out exploring. Hugs, Helen x
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out the mistake! I fixed it as soon as I read this, but didn't have time to respond til after work. I'm so glad you're loving the story - some readers are taking issue with the whole baby plot. I can understand that, it's pretty extreme, but wheee! It's fun anyway! Teenagers, even those in mafia families, do stupid shit! I'm pretty sure Tom is going to have a LOT of problems with his choices, at least for a while. Which will put a huge burden on Andrej and the rest of the family. We'll have to just see how it unfolds! Maybe Tom will just have to stay drunk for a few years, lol. Working on the meeting this week, don't know when it'll get posted, though. As for Bu and his mysterious past...that's one thing I think will just kind of remain a mystery. Nothing huge, maybe an asshole father, or something, but mainly I think he just doesn't like talking about himself. He's a pretty stoic kind of guy. I'm glad you noticed that, though - it was just a tiny part of his personality peeking through, or so I'd imagined! You did give me an idea for names, I'll have you know. Anyway, hope you're working on your next one, it would be wonderful to read during the vacation! Hugs and stuff, M.
Date: 11/28/13 04:56 pm Title: Poppi's Boys
Hey there, I realy like your story and I adore your way of handling the hole mafia related plot. Everything is thought through as I like it in this genre. Otherwise it would look aweful. BUT I have kind of a problem with the hole lover sidestory, since Brook came into picture. I sadly don't have any good thoughts about it. It's just to much with the hole Bill/Tom/Andrej/Twins story that's going on. I would love to see how B&T start their mafia rulership and not how the twins get problems because of the (kind of sick) action Tom and Andrej did. These baby-sidestory doesn't really fit. Of course it can't be happy or fluid all time .....but.....oh gosh I hope I don't look like a hater or something like that. I really have the feeling the story is getting out of hand and I loose the feeling that you think things through..........Thats quite sad, cause I really love your style, also the mafia plot promised so much.
Hopefully you aren't angry or hurt by me, that's not my intention! Futhermore it's an impression I got.
Author's Response: Sorry you're not having fun with the babies aspect of the story. I actually planned it out a while ago. Yes, this is a tale about the twins being in a mafia family, but it's not JUST about being in the mafia, at least at this point. They're only 17, and they have parents who are planning for them to go to college, so it's not like they'd be taking over the family any time soon. In fact, they won't be ready to take over for a good fifteen years or more. There have been several big mafia related story lines, and now it's time to focus on their regular lives for a while. Teenage boys do stupid things like getting girls knocked up. Tom just did it in a really, really stupid way. So, it's what's happening. There will be more mafia stuff in the future, but Tom and Bill won't be mafia bosses in this one! Maybe if there's a sequel.... ;)
Date: 11/24/13 12:12 pm Title: Interesting Information
Congrats on Chapter 50, that's some going. Sorry for the late review but I've been a poorly girl. All last week I felt a bit off, thinking I was getting a cold, and this week it finally hit and I've not been well for a few days. A bit better today.
Enough about me...and on to the good stuff.
Bombshell or what? With Bill’s reaction to Brook’s twins in the last chapter I was certain they were both Tom’s. It’s funny Bill being upset that one of them isn’t since he’s not really been enamoured of kids before, but recognising them from a past life and his jealousy over one being Andrej’s is so cute. It must’ve been hell for a chatterbox like him to not be able to talk to anyone – especially Tom and Bu - about something so monumental. No wonder he was going insane. So funny the confusion with Andi. Poor Andi, all scared now either that he’ll be cut out of the family or even killed for what he knows. Another worry for Bill that someone else knows about him and Tom. What the hell would he say if he knew Tom had told Raf too?
I can’t believe Simona managed to keep quiet too. That must’ve taken some doing when she probably wanted to fire all kinds of questions at the boys and rant at them for being so stupid. I guess when you’ve almost been killed in an earthquake, Andrej’s dad would be cool about the news because, really, it’s not the worst thing in the world that could happen and there was no use worrying over something that might not even be true.
I’m glad that Brook doesn’t appear too attached to the babies. I was worried she might decide she wanted to keep them, but she hasn’t even named them.
Oh, I can’t wait to read what goes down when Tom and Andrej get home. I hope Tom’s not too angry that Bill didn’t warn him. Andrej is going to adore those babies and I can see trouble ahead with him and Bill vying to hold them. But, of course, they are Tom and Andrej’s, not Bill’s. Hope Bill doesn’t decide he wants one of his own now. Not sure Bu would agree to that.
Anyway, as usual an amazing chapter full of surprises.
You might be pleased to hear that enforced rest yesterday had me writing for several hours. I am getting there, honestly, but the current attempt is the 7th incarnation of this chapter; it just would not cooperate. I’ve written the same idea from so many angles, thought of abandoning it completely but it kept nagging at me, and finally yesterday when I tapped away it all started coming together. I still have a bit to add to it, but I’m hoping to post later this week…no promises, though.
Haven’t heard from you lately so I hope all is okay at your end and you’re not making your strain injury any worse…so don’t write me if its going to do more harm.
Oh, and I still have to review Futago No Yurie. I’ll do that later or tomorrow since I have Jo’s a birthday tea to prepare. Take care. Love and hugs, Helen x
Author's Response: Hello, Helen! I do hope you're feeling better (*hands you a cup of PG Tips tea and a plate of biscuits*). I always start to worry a bit when I don't hear from you for a while! But if your little bedrest ends with chapter 20, I will be quite ecstatic. I know you must have felt a huge relief when finally, finally! it started melding. I'm loving the review, as always. Poor Bill, being all disappointed that only one of the babies is Tom's - but at least that means ONE of them are sort of HIS and Tom's. Cuz they're twins, and all, so to Bill, he's pretty close to being the daddy, too. Not sure how Andrej will react to that, but we'll see! I've been working on the next chapter a little here and there, haven't even gotten to the part where Mamma and Poppi talk, and then have a nice long discussion with those two boys. How are they going to react??? I can hardly wait to find out! At least they're a wealthy family, and Mamma doesn't work, so having two babies around wouldn't be a huge burden on that level. Brook shouldn't be a problem, but you never know! She showed up, which means she probably made up her mind, but anything can happen. Imagine if she disappeared with the babies! Mafia Hunt! I worry as the story drags out that it's kind of starting to fray at the ends, but I'm trying to keep it together. We're on the home stretch now (although there's a possibility for a part two, but I'm kind of in the mood to write another style first). Anyway - arms are crappy, but apparently they'll be that way for a while. I'm being as easy on them as possible, that's why my chapters are so short and I can only get one out per story per week, which really sucks balls! Oh well....can't complain too much. Hope you feel lots better and are getting excited for the holidays! (my next vacation is around the corner. God, I'm so fricken spoiled). Hope to see your next chapt up soon! Take care!
Date: 11/23/13 10:07 pm Title: Interesting Information
Love this! Love that both Andrej AND Tom are fathers of the babies. Love that Andrej officially has something that's his own. And Bill can just suck it up. I am not here for his attitude this chapter. He's such a brat sometimes!
Sad we're coming to the end. :( Do you think there'll be a sequel? Please say yes!!
Author's Response: I'm so happy! Yay! Not everyone is loving the babies, but like you said about Bill.... lol... You're right that he's a brat, and deserves all the spankings Bu gives him. I think the story will last several more chapters at least, depends on how things unfold. Will there be a sequel? There's actually a good possibility, but I want to write a couple different worlds for a bit. Thanks for the review!
Date: 11/23/13 02:08 am Title: Poppi's Boys
*eyeroll* only you would think of such things ;)
Author's Response: *nodnod*
Date: 11/21/13 01:31 pm Title: Poppi's Boys
Ohh, u poor thing, oh ya now I remember
U should be restin, we can survive a few weeks without........ I thinks
Ahh, shame. Get well soon, I'll bake u recovery moffins
Author's Response: Ahhhh, muffins - I can eat those without hands!
Date: 11/21/13 12:45 pm Title: Interesting Information
Poppy is absolutely amazing!!!!!
Date: 11/21/13 09:51 am Title: Interesting Information
A lil short, isn't it?
Author's Response: torn arm tendons, missy p! i shouldn't be typing at all!
Date: 11/21/13 02:05 am Title: Interesting Information
I am amazed by the way everybody is accepting the babies and above all, Bill!!!
Author's Response: I know - Poppi takes everything with great aplomb, doesn't he? And Bill, well, he's having a few issues with it, but on the whole, he accepts the babies. But I don't think he's going to like sharing Tom so much....
Date: 11/20/13 10:58 pm Title: Interesting Information
Why does this keep happening? I had the fleeting thought of Brooke having twins and one them being Tom's and the other being Andrej's, but it was so beyond the realm of probability that I totally dismissed the notion and I just knew that Mizu would never go down that rabbit hole, but alas I was wrong, so very wrong. I'm so over these babies now because the whole plot with them at this point is just a little too trite for me. The story from here on out will most likely be dominated by Tom/Andrej/babies OR the story is coming to an end and I don't know if I like either of those options. I'm definitely having an internal struggle because I really love this story as a whole, but I don't really have an interest in seeing Tom and Andrej raise babies together. Bill is still holding my interest pretty strong though; he's such an awesome character. I hope I haven't come across as too much of a "Debbie Downer" with this chapter, but you know me, I have to tell it like I feel it at the time. As always, I appreciate your writing and regular updates. :)
Author's Response: You had it all figured out long ago! And it's okay to be a Debbie Downer, I'm sorry if you're feeling a bit let down by the story. I'll do my best to make things interesting. I know I've been rushing through chapters, and with this story going on soooo long, I feel like it slips away from me here and there. Hopefully, even with the addition of the new kids, it stays cohesive and interesting. The story is about Bill and Tom, and that's not changing! As for winding down... I'm working on it, but it could still be a while, depending on what happens. I always appreciate your candid reviews! comments like yours actually help me maintain focus and see things I may not have noticed. So thank you! see you next chapter :)
Date: 11/20/13 09:14 pm Title: Poppi's Boys
I don't know what I'd write either. He and the others are hilarious. My cousin, who has missed the last few updates, remembered who she was.
Author's Response: I'm thrilled to hear you think they're funny! and that your cousin is reading, too, yay!
Date: 11/20/13 08:47 pm Title: Interesting Information
Great great great magnificent job
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you very much!
Date: 11/20/13 08:24 pm Title: Interesting Information
But...Bill is strange. If Bill wasn't strange I don't know what I'd do.
I totally forgot who Brook was until I really thought about it. I was like:DUH!
Author's Response: If Bill wasn't strange, i don't know what I'd write! And Brook was gone for a looong time, so it was understandable :)
Date: 11/12/13 09:27 pm Title: Big, Big Changes
WAIT, PRECOGNITIVE?!?!?!? WHAAAAAT.
The sprints are writing sprints - for fifteen minutes we put down everything we're doing (or try to, lol) and just write, write, write! It's not a method that works for everyone, but it helps me and those I sprint with to put down other tasks and sit and focus on writing. You're welcome to join us any time!
Ahaha, I appreciate your thought-reviews. But maybe if I get a real one it'll remind me to update, lol. I have proven very abysmal on that score!
Okay, I'm gonna go check out that story you recced...if I don't return, it's all your fault!
Author's Response: I can totally do 15 minutes! Then ibuprofrin. Then 15 minutes. Pain killers. But I'm on!