Date: 10/28/12 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 5
*hugs bill* but what if it doesn't all fall apart?
Author's Response: so sorry for the delay but the next part is up! Thanks for reading :)
Date: 10/22/12 05:30 pm Title: Chapter 4
It really is full of ups and downs and I sometimes want to smack the twins for not realizing that they are each other's only choise. Though I can't blame them either. It's not easy to try to come in terms with loving your own brother.
So eventually, wouldn't this be more realistic?
But perhaps they stop running now? I hope so!
Author's Response: Bahh, I know, I'm sorry for the ups and downs but I've never really done a long angsty fic, I'm either obviously REALLY inexperienced or, I'm just writing what I like, haa. Thank you as always!
Date: 10/21/12 09:37 am Title: Chapter 4
More! It's just getting to the good part x3 -Even thought this whole story is good-
It's so happy. Bill and Tom are getting along for once
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D I really hope you like what else I have of this fic!
Date: 10/21/12 03:35 am Title: Chapter 4
This chapter is by far my favourite, I'm not gonna even try saying something fancy or critical, I'll just leave it to the twin love here to do its job.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much (n_n) I hope you continue to enjoy!
Date: 10/20/12 01:51 am Title: Chapter 4
OH GOTT!!! but i think is just perfect!!!! and OMG i love it so much askldmad i just started today and needed to reach till this chapter cause the story is really amazing!!! cant wait for more!!!! *----* thank you so much!!!
Author's Response: Ohh, thank you so much! I'm so happy that you're enjoying this :D
Date: 10/20/12 12:11 am Title: Chapter 4
You know, I really fucking love you. You are awesome. And so is this story. ;) Even if that made me sound like a creeper, I mean, okay, I admit it. Jules has been drinking. But shh! Don't tell,k? But I just read this alllll the way through, and I mean, man, I have been ridin' the angst train, and you WRITE IT SO WELL! OMG. I LOVE YOU FOR THIS STORY, I mean. Okay. I'm gonna hit the "submit" button now.
Author's Response: oh my goodness, Jules! Thank you so much! :O I'm honestly so thrilled that you're enjoying this, and my writing, it means so so much to me! omg, whoa lady /loves on you
Date: 10/19/12 12:14 pm Title: Chapter 4
yay! they've kissed and made up! and kissed a little more!
Author's Response: Haha, kisses are always good :))
Date: 10/19/12 05:52 am Title: Chapter 3
Awww, that is so sweet. I guess it eventually had to come to this? THey couldn't stay away forever and pushging each other away completely was out of options anyway.
It made me a bit sad to see how long road they had to take, but I think it was a smart choise from the story telling POV and gave it more realistic tone. Who wouldn't struggle against love for your own brother?
I can't wait to see what next day brings along. :)
Author's Response: poor twins, so much heartache between those two. It's a long journey, this fic is. Thank you again! (n_n)
Date: 10/19/12 05:25 am Title: Chapter 2
Angst-fest rocks, don't worry! :)
And I just had to laugh at that I'm only 27"-comment. Priceless! Especially from this kind of old woman's POV like I am.
It is heartbreaking to see the twins approaching this dilemma from two different angles and being scared of themselves and each other - while only thing they really want is to be together.
I found the scenes where they slept after the movie and when they sat there talking in the bunk very sweet. Both the emotional anfd physical need to be together is so sweet and I love the reference to Japan.
Oh, I wish they'd let themselves free from their fears!
Author's Response: Haha, well as long as you think so then it's okay :D I'm so so happy you're enjoying this, thank you!
Date: 10/16/12 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 3
Please! Bitte! Write more, I need it
Author's Response: The next chapter is up! :)
Date: 10/14/12 03:52 pm Title: Chapter 3
First I was all ouch but then it turned into a cautious aww.
Author's Response: Aw, <3<3 thank you for reading!
Date: 10/14/12 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love this story. I'm getting so into it. I'm happy they're talking. I did wonder whether Tom had used Bill's room on purpose hoping Bill would walk in on him. I'm glad it was for another reason, that banging the girl in Bill's bed made him feel closer to his twin. Their feelings are certainly messed up. Seems they both want more from their relationship but each thinks its sick to feel that way. I'm hoping they manage to overcome their doubts so they can be together as more than brothers. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! They're both indeed stuck in a lot of angsty feelings. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of my story :))) I really, really appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/14/12 05:48 am Title: Chapter 3
Ooh two chapters for one, I liked what you did in the end of the second one, the whole closeness but Tom still longing for something better and the future thing totally tugged my heart strings, gah.
And this 3rd one, admittedly I liked Tom's reaction, well, not liked it, but it was realistic. I think I maybe would've liked it more with a comic relief, you know, when things get so intense that you need to give the audience a break for the intensity to stay strong. Or then stop and dwell on the intensity, start from the ground level and take it higher, like make it into something greater. Hope you know what I mean. :)
And another thing that I thought of was that maybe the tension between the twins doesn't have to be such a rollercoaster, like one second the can't stand to look at each other and another they are more relaxed than ever, maybe it could be toned down a bit, and more... Ever present. Like Tom's side there it could be a bit more longing, I swear you'll be breaking hearts then.
This is just a step away from being exceptional fic :) work on it and I'm sure you'll get there!
Anywhoo, you still have tons of talent, the storyline is great but maybe needs to be cleared a bit so it won't tumble on itself, the writing technique is captivating, and your text does you lots of favours :) the intensity and tension, a reader can't just pass or ignore it!
Author's Response: Baah, I don't think I'll ever be able to write an exceptional fic, I'm so sorry .-. But thank you for all your comments! I really appreciate everything you said! I'm sorry the rollercoaster isn't your thing (and I hope I don't sound too defensive in saying this) but it's really what I wanted this story to be. I normally write such fluffy twinlove stories, I kind of like the up and down emotional catastrophe direction this one has taken :)
Date: 10/14/12 04:11 am Title: Chapter 3
Tom taking the girl back to Bill's room - bad. Twins finally talking/cuddling - good.
Author's Response: Silly twins. Thanks for reading!
Date: 10/14/12 01:41 am Title: Chapter 3
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: next chapter is up! Thanks for reading :D
Date: 10/13/12 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 3
what did he whispeeeerrrr?????
Author's Response: oh, just sweet Tom things :)
Date: 10/13/12 04:53 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm loving this and can't wait for more. I'm getting excited for more things to happen.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story :))
Date: 10/11/12 03:59 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh my heart breaks :/ Communication, twins! That's the key! It's so sad how they want the same thing and drift apart when the answer is being closer. Ah I really hope this has a happy ending, otherwise I'm expecting you to sponsor me a pile of tissues. The writing is gorgeous, I literally think I forgot to breathe at some points because the emotions just overwhelmed me.
Author's Response: They're workin' on it ;) Oh my goodness, you make me blush! Thank you so so much for such a wonderful review!
Date: 10/11/12 07:08 am Title: Chapter 1
What an intense start... one feels so bad for Tom, and for Bill, and for the people around them. Even if David seems pretty heartless. The hint at twin love makes my belly flutter as always. You're so good at writing!
Author's Response: Ooh you, you're the sweetest :) Thank you so much, bb!
Date: 10/11/12 02:31 am Title: Chapter 2
Oh my godddddddd.... I love the angst in this fic!! I love it because is very realistic!.. I mean ..we are talking about something wrong here!..at least that's how I feel... and the way the two of them act.. like feeling awful about it.. and trying to just forget it .. is very realistic like I said.. The other thing I like is how you describe the feelings.. I think I feel how they feel when I'm reading.. this is very well written!!
Good Job! I'm looking forward for the next chapter!!!
XOXO
Author's Response: Oo, I'm glad you like the angst! Thank you so so much :)