Date: 02/14/13 06:26 am Title: Part III: Year 2
Wow, a realy long chapter :) Like it, haha :)
A sweet chapter, too. I like the sight of their privacy and puplic life. Alanna is realy sweet and nice. Now, she is two years old, right?
I'm just wondering, if the twins are in love or not ( or if they will be in the future )
I like the chapter and I'm glad, that you like tha banner. I had photoshop, but now, I have only GIMP anymore.( is that anymore there, right? Sorry, sometimes I dont know how to write, that it makes sense XD ) So I had need something for practice. :)
So, I look forward for the next chapter :)
Author's Response: I'm sorry it's taken so long to get back to you. I'm glad you liked the chapter. I tried pretty hard with the Simone character. The twins aren't any more in love than they are in real life. I don't really know much about photo editing but, whatever you used the result is spectacular. :)
Date: 02/05/13 10:55 am Title: Part III: Year 1
please update this soon
Author's Response: I'll be updating in two week installments just because this story is taking so much effort to complete. There's an update coming later this week, though, and I will be more prompt about replying to reviews as well :)
Date: 02/02/13 04:25 am Title: Part III: Year 1
I don't like the aliens, haha. I'm happy, that Alanna still on the side of her fathers. hope thats good ( because of the alien words ... )
The tweens are cute together, hope it's still special between them :)
Good chapter, looking for more! ;)
Author's Response: The aliens do come off as quite threatening. It's easy to not like them ;) I think the twins will always have a special connection and, I'll try to make sure that comes across. Thanks and, I'll be putting out more very soon so, watch for it. :)
Date: 02/02/13 01:13 am Title: Part III: Year 1
that was super. and little Alanna is probably so cute so no wonder why they are so in love with her :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much... Well, the twins were cute babies so, their little girl must be as well. :)
Date: 01/23/13 01:53 pm Title: Part II: Month 8
Oh, what a fantastic Chapter! I like it realy much. Most the birth - haha. You had it written realy realistic. Thump up!
And its sweet ... Awww
Author's Response: Thanks so much for such high praise. I tried to keep it realistic so, I'm glad I succeeded in that. (:
Date: 01/23/13 10:41 am Title: Part II: Month 8
Very well done! Congrats! It was a beautiful mix of graphic truth as well as minor censorship so as not to take the wonder of birth out of the story. Without the birth scene this story would have been missing a critical element of the story. It was well done and flowed beautifully. Congrats. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. It was a real struggle to write so, I'm glad it was so well-received. (:
Date: 01/23/13 10:13 am Title: Part II: Month 8
I'm reading your fic for some time now, and it's AMAZING!!! :D:D:D
I couldn't help, I had to comment this time. This chap is uncredible, the birth part was really good nothing exagerated...
I loves the fact that Tom helped Bill @.@
Is Alanna really fine? she was born with 8 mounths!!!
Author's Response: Tom is nothing if not a great older brother. And, yeah, Alanna's fine. Even babies conceived under completely human conditions can survive at 8 months' gestation :)
Date: 01/23/13 12:07 am Title: Part II: Month 8
that was amazing :) i'm so happy they finally have their daughter :) i can't even imagine how Tom had to be calm to do what he did. damn, i can't wait to read more about their little family :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm excited to write more about them :)
Date: 01/16/13 11:13 am Title: Part II: Month 7 (II)
Sweet chapter. hope the baby will be okay :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I know the twins will be hoping the same. :)
Date: 01/15/13 12:20 am Title: Part II: Month 7 (II)
This is fantastic! Very different story. Disturbing, sweet, strange. I find myself worried for Bill - an alien fetus growing in him, and no one seems too bothered by that (I understand that they all believe it's Tom's, but there's no way there's no alien DNA in there! I sense tentacles in their future!), and that he's not under a doctor's care. Yes, I realize that they feel they can't tell anyone, but their uber rich, they could surely find someone. Maybe a doctor in Sri Lanka could be paid enough to be quiet. One aspect that's really done well is how you're keeping the twins' relationship brotherly, and the sex between them is simply Tom caring for Bill's physical health. You haven't even hinted at Tom being aroused, teasing your audience by keeping their sex nearly platonic. And you're doing it so smoothly, too - they cuddle, and kiss, and and feel comfortable doing all of that, and yet it's still just them taking care of Bill. this is a really fun story, glad to see that you post regularly and seem to really care about it (the mention of re-writes, which I understand wanting to do because it's how I feel about a couple of my own stories, but so far haven't really seen the need for here!). Hope to see another chapter sooon!
Author's Response: I am very flattered that such a talented author reviewed this novice's story. :D I understand what you mean about them finding a doctor and the lack of doubt or concern. Those are things I will be fixing in my latest edits, though it's nice to see that the story can hold up well despite these lapses in logic... Thank you so much. I'm glad the twins' relationship is done coherently since I'm not really a twincest believer and I've always loved reading other stories where their intimacy is pushed without turning into something it's not. This review was so positive and still constructive so, thank you so much for leaving it. This really brightened my day to a huge degree. You will certainly be seeing an update soon. :)
Date: 01/14/13 02:11 pm Title: Part II: Month 7 (II)
nice :) Georg is back to the family haha
and of course Tom is taking really good care of Bill and the baby :)
Author's Response: Of course; neither Georg nor Tom would have it any other way. :)
Date: 12/22/12 02:11 pm Title: Part II: Month 6
Nice chapter! :) I don't like it, when gustav is intimitate with bill, but i hope, the twins will it too! I hope you understand ._. i'm from germany, my english is not the best ._. But i like your story, so i hope i can read more, soon :)
Author's Response: I had no problem understanding your English; no need to feel self-conscious. I'm fond of Bill-stav as a pairing but, don't worry, the twins will have their moment ;) I'm glad you like the story so far and, there will definitely be more coming up.
Date: 12/16/12 08:11 am Title: Part II: Month 6
Ahh, you can't just leave it at that........... I need more
Author's Response: I promise there will be more. This story's completed; I wouldn't possibly leave it idle on my flash drive.
Date: 12/15/12 08:08 pm Title: Part II: Month 6
OH MY GOODNESS.......SMEXYYY
Author's Response: I'm delighted you think so. I'm not great at slash but, these characters really worked with me. XD
Date: 12/15/12 07:53 pm Title: Part II: Month 6
Wait, I just realized that Gustav said 'one of us', meaning that he's totally fine if Tom and Bill want to...do sexual things together? I mean, they already made a baby together, but that wasn't exactly [i]choice[/i]...or are Tom and Bill together already? I need to go back and re-read, haha!
Author's Response: I edited a little bit so there would be less confusion and, some of this will also be explained in the chapters to come. But, if it prompts you to read the story again, be my guest ;)
Date: 12/15/12 06:30 pm Title: Part II: Month 6
Aww....good ole Gustav, always there for a helping hand! I'm a little surprised that Gustav actually did it himself or never questioned his sexuality or feelings towards Bill afterwards. He's just an AWESOME friend.
Author's Response: I certainly like to think so. :) Although, those are definitely some things to think about should I revisit this story for edits at a later date. If I had the chance to layer Gustav's character a little better without throwing off the story's rhythm, I would have had a better explanation for that :/
Date: 12/09/12 10:55 pm Title: Part II: Month 4
I'm glad Georg was there to witness the mean squid alien jerk. It lent vital credibility to Tom and Bill's story. Poor guys! I hope Bill's pregnancy goes well. I wonder if the mean squid alien jerks will come back and check in on Bill's pregnancy.
Author's Response: I suppose you'll have to wait and see about future encounters. Georg's role was pretty vital and I'm glad it's easily recognized. I really must thank you. It was a delightful surprise to see the review count on my review spike so suddenly and, for you to have put the effort in to review every single chapter was well above and beyond. I thought it only right to respond to each of your reviews. Thank you so much for the feedback; I really appreciate it.
Date: 12/09/12 10:50 pm Title: Part II: Month 3
I wonder if pregnancy tests would work with a man because don't those tests work with hormones? I'll suspend my disbelief and continue reading. Not that what you wrote is bad....it just makes me wonder.
And yep, Bill's pregnant. Talk about suspending disbelief. I wonder how Bill will give birth? Will it be Tom's for sure? Or more of the mean squid aliens' experiments in Bill?
Normally I don't like to read Mpreg! But with this story I don't mind it since it's like alien mpreg. Idk.
Author's Response: I would think that Bill's hormones would change also with pregnancy but, I suppose you raise a philosophical point which I'll have to bring to every mpreg I encounter from now on... I'll try to make the mpreg enjoyable to read. I've also encountered some unpleasant ones. I'm keeping this away from the realm of campy, "zomg, billz preggorz" sorts of fictions. Those frustrate me. I'd certainly never subject someone to it.
Date: 12/09/12 10:42 pm Title: Part II: Month 2
Poor twinnies. I don't think human doctors could help. The twins' argument was good! Very believable tension. As much as I know this story isn't real, the emotion you write in the characters feels very real.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for that. Having them argue was difficult for me to write so, I'm glad it was convincing.
Date: 12/09/12 10:37 pm Title: Part II: Month 1
Bill's pregnant, isn't he! Poor guys, trying to heal and stuff.
Author's Response: Healing can be difficult, especially for these two under the sadistic hand of my writing skills ;)