Date: 05/25/13 04:26 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (VI)
Nice last chapter :) I'm looking forward to the epiloque !
Author's Response: Thank you so much :) It's up now, after an obscenely long delay on my part.
Date: 05/25/13 12:06 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (VI)
Oh god scared me for a minute, him not remembering, and then being bullheaded about not letting her.
Very good chapter. Can't wait fr the eppie
Author's Response: Haha. I'm sorry I scared you. Thank you so much. I'll have it all up briefly.
Date: 05/22/13 02:18 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
Hey, Won't you post???? ._____.
Author's Response: I'll be posting within the next week. I've been having some personal issues that have prevented me from writing often. But, I'm making some headway now. There should be another chapter out before next Friday.
Date: 04/22/13 01:16 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
I sense that this one is wrapping up. I'm a little depressed about that! It was a huge relief to know the twins and their daughter escaped (with help - nice touch). I'm wondering if their relationship, in what I'm sure will be the epilogue, is going to show any change. Everyone's waiting for them to really BE together, even though you've kept them so carefully platonic, and that matches, so if that's your plan - well good for you! You kept a wonderfully fine line throughout the story with the boys being together, but not romantically involved. But after everything they've been through together (and is Bill pregnant again??!!), they'd have to be completely changed. How could they ever hope to be in regular relationships with anyone else? "Hi honey, what do you want for dinner?" "Um...to forget that, five years ago, I was kidnapped by aliens and forced to rape and impregnate my brother. With breadsticks." Mmm hmmm... Lovely job, thanks for keeping up with the story, and the sci fi touches were really good!
Author's Response: Their escape was a relief for me as well because, for a while I wasn't certain they would be escaping. The help wasn't something I expected either, but here came this alien asking for some time to tell his story and, I had to give him a chance... The idea of the twins being together really is weighing on my mind a little. I see the potential for either turnout and, right now the characters are being too undecisive and rightfully traumatized to guide the story to a decision one way or another. That potential for bitterness in them is making them confusing for me to work with; almost strangers compared to who I've been with for the last twenty-and-some-odd chapters. I guess I'll have to either work with them or wait them out... It was surprisingly easy keeping up with updates, despite the occasional late chapters. Thanks so much for that reassurance; I still have some doubts on my sci fi but, it's good to know it's holding up. :)
Date: 04/21/13 08:36 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
I'm glad you understand, and appreciate my honesty. And knowing this is your first attempt at sci-fi, it really isn't too bad. Sci-fi is so detail oriented that you don't even realize all the details involved. Until you go back and look at stuff and realize 'wait, something doesn't jive'
I feel bad for Cagh. But proud that he made such a hard decision. And thank you for explaining the cross breeding with Alanna thing.
This was a good chapter. I look forward to the next.
Author's Response: Exactly! The details missing that I had to scrounge a bit to compensate for were overwhelming. But, I'm glad I got something across, even if I only just scraped through the genre... I had been meaning to determine the exact reason for Alanna's little oddities. I'm glad, going back that Cagh was able to explain it because, I'll admit I didn't know until he came into the picture. Cagh did have to make a hard decision and, I think it's good that it's easy to feel bad for him. He seems to be evoking more sympathy than I even thought he would given he just killed his entire species, but Cagh has done a good job of being not at all what I expected of him. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and I really appreciate these constructive reviews.
Date: 04/21/13 12:47 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
Oh wow o.o I really don't have anything else to say about this, haha. It was very well written, and though I typically don't read science fiction, I'm glad I got caught up in this one. Poor, poor aliens, though :/
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you ventured into my story even if the genre's not your favorite. Yeah, the aliens (or at least Cagh) do work up some sympathy here; or, at least they tried to. I'm sort of glad they succeeded and, at the same time I still want to hate them myself.
Date: 04/21/13 09:51 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
For the first time, I don't have anything to say, but fantastic this chap!
Thanks Heaven's Bill, Tom and the babe are safe!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm sharing those same sentiments of relief as well. There were some drafts where that was a little more touch and go. But, ultimately this was the way the story decided to unfold.
Date: 04/21/13 07:33 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
Wow, cool chapter. So, the aliens are all dead, if i had understand it correctly?
And Bill, Alanna and Tom are free *---* Hope they will arrive good on the earth. If Bill is realy pregnant again? We will see :D And maybe there will be more then brotherhood between tom and bill? a little love for another ... i hope
Author's Response: Yes, you understood correctly. The aliens are dead and our heroes are free. I'm hopeful for them to do well back on Earth as well... And, I know you've been clamoring for twincest but, these characters have been fighting it since the beginning. I'm not sure if it will happen and I hope you won't be too upset with me or the story if it doesn't come to pass. I'm glad you've enjoyed it enough to stick with me for so long and I have to thank you for that. :)
Date: 04/21/13 01:12 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (V)
ahhhhhhhhhhh que bueno q los ayudo a escapar... pero ahora como estaran de regreso en la tierra? poors.. :( pero q bueno q estan libres :) great capi please update soon =D
Author's Response: Muchas gracias and, I will definitely be updating soon. (Sorry that my Spanish skills are mostly in understanding and not speaking). Yeah, being back on Earth will still be a challenge for them but, my boys are resilient ;)
Date: 04/13/13 03:29 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (IV)
Holy smokes this is an odd story. I'm not sure I like it...but I have to finish it...does that make any sense at all? Sorry if it doesn't. I'm a little worried about the bit about Alanna speaking the alien language.
I'm also a little confused about why they wouldn't keep her alive and 'harvest' her smarter than they appear to. If nothing else i'd think they would want to interbreed with her.
Keep up the interesting work. I look forward to seeing how this plays out.
Author's Response: It makes sense. I can understand being intrigued by a story if not liking it. I think I respect you admitting that than lying outright and saying you did nothing but enjoy it. I agree with your critique on the aliens. Science fiction has never been my strong suit, this being my first real attempt at writing it and I'm finding some pitfalls in the common sense of my aliens that I can't properly supplement this close to the end. I think it'll always be a glaring flaw but, I'm still proud of what I managed to put together with little expertise. I appreciate your criticism and hopefully you'll retain your resolve to stick out the rest of the story with me. :)
Date: 04/13/13 01:17 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (IV)
me encanta!!! update soon please!!!!!!!!!!! :)
Author's Response: Muchas gracias! :D I will certainly update soon :)
Date: 04/13/13 12:50 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (IV)
OMG ._.
and now??? I'm anxious to read the next chap >_<
They have to get rid of theses aleins, it's sad what's happening with them! =/
Author's Response: I don't mean to make you anxious. Just don't want to rush, y'know? What they're going through is sad but, the next installment is coming soon.
Date: 04/13/13 10:52 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (IV)
omg, i hope they will be alright
Author's Response: I'm hoping so as well ;) thanks for the review
Date: 04/13/13 03:04 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (IV)
Hope they can escape :I
Author's Response: I know, they hope so as well. Don't worry, next chapter more will happen.
Date: 04/07/13 11:38 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (III)
YAY! They're together again! I'm not sure why the aliens did it differently this time--it worked so well last time! I'm thinking that they modified Bill to maybe be able to carry multiple babies at once, though? That would make sense, right?
Author's Response: I can't say as of yet why it was done differently. That's an interesting theory of the aliens' modifications. I don't know about that myself just yet. But, I'll make sure that everything is addressed in the coming chapters. :)
Date: 04/05/13 11:04 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (III)
omg is the best and most fantastic fic ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD please update soon :)
Author's Response: That's incredibly kind of you to say. I'm flattered… I'll certainly update soon, either Thursday or Friday :)
Date: 04/05/13 02:16 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (III)
Poor Billa and Tomi =/
Someone should kill all this aliens ¬¬'
Author's Response: Ha I'm getting a few responses along those lines. I can understand the aliens not being well-liked. I find myself angry at them from time to time.
Date: 04/05/13 08:58 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (III)
omg, i'm out of words. this is so horrible , i hope it will end soon for them and they'll be happy after that
Author's Response: I didn't mean to leave you speechless haha. It is pretty horrible for them; I had a bit of difficulty writing it. But, these Aliens are more merciless than I first thought.
Date: 04/05/13 02:20 am Title: Part III: Year 5 (III)
Poor guys :( fucking aliens -.-
Author's Response: I know. I feel the same way. ;(
Date: 03/30/13 10:12 pm Title: Part III: Year 5 (II)
Is it bad that I was hoping the detectives would be Moulder and Scully? Ahaha :) Great story so far, but I'm not sure how they're going to get out of this!
Author's Response: Haha. I don't think my detectives are quite as entertaining... Thanks so much. They'll be going through a little more before I possibly let them off the hook ;)