Date: 08/16/12 08:13 am Title: I'm going to die, that's for sure
This is very cute. I wonder what will happen with the guys individually. That will keep in touch.
Date: 08/08/12 10:48 pm Title: Just do it!
I really like where this story is going and could be really good but you definitely need to get a beta or at least proof read your work. there are a lot of grammatical errors and the parts need to flow together better. they seemed a little jumpy and confusing.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, yes I know my english sucks u.u and I don't know where to find a beta reader. In spanish the story sounds better xD but thanks for give it the chance :D
Date: 08/08/12 09:03 pm Title: Just do it!
good story idea but you need a beta reader lots of grammer verb tense and spelling mistakes, it will make it easier to read but the idea is awesome looking forward to more
Author's Response: thanks for the review, I know I need to find one of those. I click in the please but it seems there's something wrong with it because it doesn't even open T.T
Date: 08/08/12 08:36 pm Title: Just do it!
Okay, so I'm going to be honest here. I found when I first started out posting fics on here, it was helpful to get reviews that pointed out what I could work on. I don't want you to take any of this the wrong way at all =]
I think this fic has great potential but I recommend you get a beta (if you don't have one already, that is). I am pretty picky when it comes to grammar and punctuation and I know I'm not the only one. There are many paragraphs that run on and could use proper punctuation, such as periods.
Like I said, this fic has GREAT potential, I just think with a beta reader it would be better.
Author's Response: thanks for the review, I'm trying to put more effort with the story and trying put translated better thanks for taking the time and read it! :D