Date: 08/12/12 08:38 pm Title: Day 3 part 2
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 08/07/12 10:23 am Title: Day 3
It continues to be interesting and the main characters Gordon, Tom, and Bill are coming across slowly but steadily. It's a skill to be able to make people come across with actions and not descriptions. I think you have it. Maybe you are less interested in the "side" characters? They come across less clearly to me. A bolt went through my body when Bill found Tom handsome. I love it that Tom didn't acknowledge Bill at all, and I wonder if he did... I hope so. Looking forward to the next part. This might be a silly request but I would love to read your descriptions of smells. *blushes*
Date: 08/07/12 10:09 am Title: Day 2
Why, this isn't boring at all. It's highly interesting to me at least. I find the descriptions of the horses great, life in the stables, in the country. The peek at Bill was small but gave a hint. To me if anything, I found the part a little short. :) I would have loved some more of each scene. You're great at describing the "scenes" as well: the room/space or what to say.
Date: 08/07/12 10:01 am Title: Day 1
I have been eying this curiously but didn't find time to read before. Love it. Love the descriptions of the horses. The human is sort of visible in the flock and he's drawn in a very promising way.
Date: 08/07/12 03:06 am Title: Day 3
this sounds like a really good story!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 08/05/12 07:37 pm Title: Day 3
I like the story :3 My family used to own horses when I was little! Aw, memories *happy sigh*
Date: 08/05/12 06:52 pm Title: Day 3
I am intrigued by your setting. And curious about Tom and Bill's past. Should be an interesting read!
Date: 08/05/12 06:49 pm Title: Day 3
Bill thinks Tom's seeexy, he wants to kiiiiss him, he wants to looove him ^_^.
I wonder why Maverick was acting like that around Buckshot, great name by the way, was it just normal powerplay stuff, or something more. Also, why doesn't Tom keep Maverick at his own place if its his horse and he has open stalls?
Great chapter. I look forward to more!
Date: 08/05/12 04:03 pm Title: Day 3
Hey, I really like your story! I'm really going to follow it, it has potention to become a great story!
.... That sounded weird xD
Date: 07/29/12 10:09 am Title: Day 2
YAAAY! Bill! Bill, in equestrian gear...or hell, Bill in cowboy gear...*drools*
Okay, so. One thing. You said there were seven members of the senior class that were going on the trip at the end of the clas period Bill was in. But only four kids showed up, which is also the number he told Tom, other than himself.
Other than that it was a lovely chapter. I'm a bit curious why superstar Bill would go to such a rustic school, but I'm sure all will be revealed with time. I can't wait to see more! Keep up the wonderful work!
Date: 07/19/12 10:34 pm Title: Day 1
Woow. I really REALLY enjoyed this opening chapter! Its so different from everything I've read here before! I am really curious about how Bill wonds up here. I can't wait tto see the next chapter, and how the storyy unfolds! Keep up the fantastic work!
Oh, but might I suggest, you put a littl desc,ription of the horses in, for those of us who aren't familiar with many terms? Personally I pretty much top out at knowing whaty a Palamino is, and the a gelding is a neutered male.
Author's Response: Thanks I'm excited to see how this story is received. Thanks for that last note I've grown up with horses so I forgot about that. I'll definitely try to add more description for you. :)rnrnThanks for reviewing!
Date: 07/18/12 04:34 am Title: Day 1
This is a good start. Be sure to keep going. The horse is one of the favorite animals, so eagerly looking forward to the next section. There was a small error. The riporer call Tom - Mr. Kaulitz, Tom says the phone .. Tom Trumper.
Author's Response: I love horses too! I have the next chapter written so I should probably post it. Thanks for pointing that mistake out to me and for reviewing in the first place!