Date: 09/03/12 11:53 pm Title: Chapter 9
Aw come on now?! Its such a great story dont stop!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I don't intend to! Just...my computer got stolen, so yeah >.o It's been fun. Hopefully I'll have the next chapter soon, though!rn
Date: 08/28/12 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 9
The shrine of Tom in Bill's mind was interesting part and I like the way Tom tries to figure it out here. I'm not sure how big part theior relationship... love... will play in this eventually, but I think Tom will get his answrs eventually.
Those were very good questions Tom asked in the end and I can't wait to read the next session. :)
Author's Response: I'll try to rewrite it ASAP....my computer (and naturally the next chapter) was stolen, sadly. :(
Date: 08/27/12 01:42 am Title: Chapter 9
Really anxious for the next update!
Author's Response: Me too! Or I was, until my computer (and naturally the next chapter) got stolen :/ Hopefully I'll be able to rewrite it fairly quickly!
Date: 08/26/12 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 9
Ooooooh! So sweet! I loved the hand holding moment, and the. Hat and bandana part was hilarious! I am so glad Tom fell asleep before he could demand to go back in, I imagine that could've been very bad samehow. I am so excited to see more! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Hey, Tom has to take care of the little details like his wardrobe at all times! I remember when I was in the hospital and my mom brought me clothes. They made me go >.o
Date: 08/26/12 05:39 pm Title: Chapter 9
Hi! Sorry for not reviewing, but i have to let you know that I'm enjoying this VERY much, and I really like it! You did an amazing job with coming up with Bills inner space, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Love, Dia.
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch, Dia! I tried my best to make it surreal, fantastic and creepy ^^
Date: 08/26/12 02:10 am Title: Chapter 9
I enjoyed this a lot. You have to put up more. Thanks in advance if you do. :)
Author's Response: Of course I will! :) Thanks for the review!
Date: 08/19/12 12:00 pm Title: Chapter 8
This is so interesting :).
I love this jourbney into Bill's mind and the fact that you specifinally pointed out that real Bill wasn't all unicorns and rainbows. I imagine the park was artificially made there to bring Tom back? I wonder what'll happen next. :)
Author's Response: Of course it isn't rainbows and unicorns! This is Bill after all! As for the park...well, I was thinking that it was more of a solace for Bill, but obviously he's not there, so...idk where he is, haha. Probably being tortured or something ^^
Date: 08/19/12 11:47 am Title: Chapter 7
Exciting and deliviously twisted. Very well built dreamworld - or more like a subconcuousness. All these disgusting, destorted images; I think we all have them. Up to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I try really hard ^_^ It's like...how can I make this überly creepy and yet not groos everyone out too much? Thanks!
Date: 08/18/12 02:18 am Title: Chapter 8
That was great! I WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I want to write more ;)
Date: 08/18/12 12:17 am Title: Chapter 8
Hmmmm...interesting *strokes chin* veeerry interesting.
I'm curious, did Tom really wake up, or is it a trick of his and Bill's mind? Making him think he woke up? And if he's really awake, why did they pull him out when they did?
Hey, just so you know, to italisize things you need to use parenthesesnot brackets.
Wonderful chapter! I can't wait to see the next update! Keep up the fantastic work!
Author's Response: He actually did wake up, yes ^^ I think the sedative just wore off, haha. Don't worry, though, he'll be back in Bill's head in no time at all! :) Thanks for the review!
Date: 08/17/12 11:03 pm Title: Chapter 8
No, don't! get back there Tom! Oh gosh, I love the story, it's so different. It looks like Bill has a multiple personality disorder? Very fascinating!
Author's Response: I'm not sure what it is, exactly. It definitely started out that way! It's more like an undefined disorder that I totally made up lol Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 08/13/12 05:18 pm Title: Chapter 7
Oh wow! This is getting very suspenseful, I have to know what happens. I'm loving this, sweetie, keep up this wonderful work~
Author's Response: Thanks! ^_^
Date: 08/11/12 02:44 pm Title: Chapter 7
Taht was creepy. Still, it is very good. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks! I try ^_^
Date: 08/11/12 11:29 am Title: Chapter 7
Oh ew gross. I knew it was blood Minni was paiting with. But thanks for the extra bit of gore. This was a really fantastic chapter. I'm so glad Tom had someone, creepy as he may have been, to point him in the right direction. And to give him a warning. But I'm a bit worried about what Minni considered evil, cuz he was a creepy lil devil himself. Or maybe that was a trick...maybe Shiva is the trick to finding Bill, whether he's evil or not?...
Fantastic work! I am so excited to see moree! Keep up the wonderfullness.
Author's Response: Very welcome! Minni is a creepy thing, isn't he? Supposedly he's the cute and playful side of Bill, too >__> What does that tell you about the rest of them? Thanks for the review!
Date: 08/10/12 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 6
This was really fascinating chapter! I see you've spend lot of time and energy and your own imagination to create this? Very good job, because it was exactly as surreal and visual as I imagine it could be in someone's mind. "Tom-room" was scary, interesting and somehow also an expecting thing.
Really curious to see where this is going!
Author's Response: Me too! I'll definitely have to write more this weekend! :) Thanks for the review!
Things are about to get a lot more scary, way more interesting, and probably more unexpected (hopefully!). I actually freaked myself out writing it one night o.o; Note to self: Do NOT listen to the Psycho film score while writing Psychosis in the middle of the night, alone in a dark room. BAD IDEA!
Date: 08/04/12 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 6
You need to write some more. This is a great!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm working on it now, haha.
Date: 08/04/12 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 6
A-freaking-mazing! *nabs a cookie* hmm *muses* snickerdoodle *nods approvingly*
Omg I loved it! Totaly mind twisting freaaamscape, though. I do think you could've gored up the diamond part up a tiny bit more. But, hey, maybe you didn't wabt to do that.
Following his insticts worked the first time now didn't it? His insticts told him to kick the wall when he did and then he found that, that patch atleast, was thick crumbly paper. *nodnod*
Wooow...Tom shrine in Bill's mind... I suppose that wouldn't be so unusual, them being twins and all, and always saying they're eachothers soul mate, except for the whole naked picture part.
Wonderful chapter! I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: I'm not a huge gore person, to be honest XD Supposedly there's going to be more gore in the future, but we'll see. Most DEFINITELY will be violence!
Orrrr maybe Bill's just obsessing about his twin a little much XD I think that freaked Tom out a little bit, to be honest.
Date: 08/04/12 05:15 pm Title: Chapter 6
Very nice, very rich with imagery and what an interesting ending. I am not sure why you would need dialogue in this part? Great continuation of the story, I find.
Author's Response: I know some people get bored without dialogue to break up the story xD I mean, even Alice talked to herself all the time in Alice in Wonderland :)
Date: 08/01/12 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 5
Woah! Now that was indeed one sort of experimental treatment. Scary shit, may I say? But you're right; it could be only Tom to do this for Bill. Interesting, very interesting.
Btw, if you have never seen a movie called The Cell, you should check it out. It's a very visual movie of breaching in someone's comatosed dream. Scary, but beautiful.
Author's Response: I KNOW, RIGHT?! And actually...The Cell inspired this, as well as Oomph's Labyrinth music video and Gaga's Pokerface music video. So you can see how old this thing is XD Thanks for the review!
Date: 07/31/12 11:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
It would makes sense that whoever is funding the study pays, but from what I understand that's not always the case. Sometimes it depends on how experimental it is. Like if they are actually in Trials, or have already paassed FDA inspection, because a lot of insurance companies don't care that it is approved, they will lable things experimental when they are new and 'not properly field tested'
I'm sure you will remember what the reason was wheneveer you stop trying to remember. That's how I am anyway. Or when it comes to the point in the story you need to know again.
Author's Response: Interesting! :o I'm thinking that this particular one is the latter, since David wouldn't let one of his boys go through with something THAT experimental. And I remembered XD It's so he doesn't wake up immediately and freak out trying to figure out where he is/sit up and start tearing off electrodes or something like that. It's to slowly bring him out of it. ^^ KNEW there was a reason.