Date: 12/26/12 04:30 pm Title: You're every line, you're every word
love this too!!!i love all your stories
Author's Response: pahaha nao precisas de comentar em ingles, tendo em conta que sou eu que estou a ler... tipo comenta em portugues rapariga! e obrigada :D
Date: 09/03/12 09:47 pm Title: You're every line, you're every word
Well, it's not BAD, and the grammar and stuff's good, but... well, I can't see Tom just blurting out that for him, the song is about Bill. I mean, figuring out that you're in love with your twin can't be an easy thing, what with all of society's hang-ups about it, and I think Tom would have agonized over it before telling Bill anything, for the same reason that Bill never said anything: He was scared of Tom's reaction, and didn't want to loose him. Still, pretty good fic ^-^
Author's Response: Thanks for your review and for your criticism. I'll do better next time!
Date: 06/12/12 09:53 pm Title: You're every line, you're every word
Wow, that was so freaking sweet. A little too much even, take it easy with the sugar scoop. Lol. Tom rehashing the lyrics may have been too much. Also, I recommend you have a beta reader check over your grammar.
That being said, I really did like this. Your characters are funny. I love that realization dawns on Tom so simply, while they're driving, and Bill is like "Duhhh!! You moron." Hahahaha. Good job. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm trying to work on my grammar, because I'm not english, as you can see. Would you like to be my beta reader? Or do you know anyone who would like it?
Date: 06/11/12 08:56 am Title: You're every line, you're every word
I don't like it. It's strange and I don't feel anything but irritating.
And how they could be togetter befor when Tom realized it just after listen this song? Where is the logic?
Author's Response: Well Tom loved Bill before he listened to the song, he just didn't know. The song just "woke up" Tom's feelings. If Bill had told him sooner, maybe his feeling would have been awake sooner as well, and they could have gotten together like lovers years ago
Date: 06/11/12 04:47 am Title: You're every line, you're every word
this was a good story!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoy it. Thank you!