Date: 11/12/12 05:21 am Title: Chapter 10
Oh now I am so pissed. There better be a happy ending at the end of this for the boys.
Date: 11/12/12 05:11 am Title: Chapter 9
Awesome! I'm so glad Bill get to take this guy down!
Date: 11/12/12 04:32 am Title: Chapter 4
Thank god for Gordon. And now thank god Tom is investigating this guy. I do not want Bill raped again. Bill's next time having sex should be with Tom.
Date: 11/11/12 11:53 pm Title: Chapter 12
Son of a fucking biscuit! Famn stupid ass cops, and bastard therapists. I just- I can't even. Gah
My god, he's truly lost it hasn't he? Max has lost all grip of reality...
Fantastic work. I can't wait to see what's up next.
Author's Response: Amazing review, thank you so much. Yeah, Max has really gone crazy; the twins do seems to attract weirdos and incompetent cops too. Working on the next chapter and just hoping it writes as easily as this one did. Internet still being a bitch so hope it will be working when I'm ready to post. Big hugs, Helen x
Date: 11/11/12 11:31 pm Title: Chapter 12
Oh...my...GOD I love this chapter I cant believe he got away with it CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for the amazing review. Working on the next chapter but I've had another damned migraine so it might take a while, especially as my internet is still playing up. Love and hugs, Helen x
Date: 11/09/12 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 11
cant wait for more
please update ASAP
Author's Response: I'm so glad you were happy with BotTom chapter. And thank you for reviewing this one too. Next chapter is nearly done. Hoping to post this weekned but my internet is dodgy at the moment so can't always guarentee I'll be connected. Hugs to you for keeping on reading and reviewing. Love, Helen x
Date: 11/08/12 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 10
thank you so much for the BotTom and the dedication
(hugs)
Date: 11/08/12 09:27 am Title: Chapter 11
Oh no please don't let him take Bill... So many things happening, so many interesting twists. I am surely hanging on to the end because I need to know what happens.
Author's Response: I'm really happy you're staying with me. Thank you so much for reviewing, it means a lot that you do. I have another chapter best part written and hope to post it at the weekend. I'm thinking maybe another 2-3 chapters and then I'll be done. Thanks again, love Helen x
Date: 11/06/12 02:33 pm Title: Chapter 11
*hugs* You may have long waits, but the chapters are always worth it. Fantastic work.
Max is a stupid idiot. The twins have been fighting twincest rumors for years, if he doesn't have the pendrive with actual physical evidence himself, how does he plan on using the information that they are together against them effectively?
I hope the blackmail situation with Raymond worked out in their favor *crosses fingers* He could just as easily say screw the RFeid case and just go with the Twincest one. Though, why he listened to the drive has me worried. He should've had no reason to listen to it himself. Though i'm sure the contents would be released once any trial came about for Neumann... *ponders that situation*
I actualy love Bill's behavior. It seems very realistic to me.
Fantastic work! I look forward to the next update! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I'm so happy you reviewed. You're the only one who did for this chapter so I was beginning to wonder if anyone was still reading. Max IS an idiot; he needs his own therapist, I think. I guess Raymond listened to the drive because he already knew from monitoring Neumann's call what sort of thing was in those files, and also the pendrive could be evidence against Neumann since he stole it. You'll be happy to hear I spent nearly all day yesterday writing (Bad girl, neglecting everything else!)so the next chapter should be up a lot faster than this one. Also, things really kick off in the next one, and the story is getting towards the end now. Maybe 3 more chapters including the next one. Not quite sure yet. Thanks again for reading, reviewing and writing such lovely comments. Hugs, Helen x
Date: 10/22/12 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 10
The tension in the start of this chapter... I am very nervous for this whole thing. Is it a good idea, really? Still I feel for Bill, when everyone tries to talk him out of it. I understand his determination and desire to handle this on his own, to stand up for himself. I also appreciate that the twins are keeping the snuggling down in front of their mother. It would be terribly selfish of them not to, and Simone does her best and wants to protect them. I think they do the right thing.
First I was so happy to see BotTom and then my heart broke when Tom didn't understand the extent of abuse Max had put Bill through... FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK I feel for them both! Bloody hell it hurts to read. But I am so happy to see Tom going back to talking about the fucking/love making (hehe, I like both) immediately, and not taling about the awful Max.
the sex... oooohhh so hot. omg. and so full of love. the best kind, the very best kind there is...
And the next to last scene! You know how I HATE Max - this is not fair! oh,no, oh no. Such a suspenseful and exciting chapter. hugs to you!
Author's Response: Thank you for your incredible review. Yes, Bill is determined to deal with this himself because its his way of getting his life back, and also I think in a way he wants to prove to Tom that really he has no feelings except disgust for Max. Sorry about the cliffhanger...I don't give the twins a break, do I? Next chapter is underway, but I got so far and have hit a wall because I'm not 100% sure which way it's going to progress. I think I'll just have to keep writing and see what happens and then maybe rewrite if it doesn't work out. That seems to be my way of doing things lately, always starting about 3 different versions of a chapter before I'm happy with it. I'm not much of a planner, I'm afraid. Anyway, thanks again for reading and taking time to review. Big hugs, Helen X
Date: 10/15/12 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 10
Long...but wonderful. I totes didn't see Neumann being a bad guy. Though with a name like Neumann I don't know why I didn't seee it coming, lol, bad.Seinfeld reference. And yea, I don't buy for a second he happened to see it hiding on the floor under the couch then 'accidentally' forgot tohand it over to someone in the house. And if it were an accident he shouldn't/wouldn't have opened the dammn thing!!
Can't wait for more! Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you. Reviews like yours make all the toil worthwhile. Being from the UK I've heard of Seinfeld but never watched so now I'll have to check it out. I agree, Neumann's excuses don't cut it with me either. We'll just have to see how that all plays out in the next chapter...which, you'll be happy to hear, I've already started and so far, so good. I have 2 ways in mind that everything might go right now, depending on whether I'm in for the long haul and whether you, my readers, want this story to go on for some time yet or whether you want the end to come faster. If I decide to write the shorter version don't worry, I have a one-off and a sequel in mind so this won't be the end of the twins in this world that I've made. Anyway, thanks again for such a great review. Hugs for reading and taking time out to let me know what you think. Love, Helen x
Date: 10/15/12 12:20 am Title: Chapter 10
It was worth the wait! ;-)
Poor Bill takes everything on himself. I'm not sure this Max thing will turn out well for him, but even if there is a scandal, the cops can't prove the twins did anything illegal.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm really happy it was worth the wait. You'll be happy to hear I'm getting stuck in to the next chapter already so hopefully it wll be completed a lot faster. Not quite sure how things are going to turn out, but at the moment the scenes are writing themselves so I'm looking forward to the outcome as much as I hope you are. Thanks again for reviewing. Big hugs, Helen x
Date: 10/14/12 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 10
Hi, Helen! Lovely chapter, and thanks for mentioning me, I'm very flattered. Not much plagiarism going on - doesn't everyone think about their dirty bits when having sex? Still sweet of you to mention :) And the idea of Tom scrubbing himself clean inside and out - very hot. Great sex scene. Your writing has such a nice, natural flow to it; one second it's a sexy, emotional kiss, then someone's mind is wandering, then it's back to something sexy, then a worry pops up, then all thoughts stop at the right time and it's all about the goody. The way Tom's orgasm happened, bucking against a limp, heavy Bill, was just hot as hell. And then, Bill falling apart. Well...all I kept thinking was how he needs to compartmentalize that pain(sorry, I'll translate: compartmentalise. lol). I want Tom to hold out his hand, and describe to Bill to see a teeny little Bill in his palm, and that teeny one is Wounded Bill, all curled up and crying and dressed in black. And it's okay to have a hurt part, a damaged part of himself. But he'd been healthy until recent events, and there is still a huge part of him that can be Real Bill, Healthy Bill, if he can take Wounded Bill, pet him, indulge him, but learn to keep him in a pocket and not run all over Healthy Bill. So he can have his break downs, but set aside the part that's full of shame and self-hatred, and realize that's only a tiny part of him. Anyway...Thought the chapter was going to be a nice, healing one. All love and good sex and some happiness. But no. Max is getting the recording. And so many people have heard it by now, and there are probably dozens of copies, that it's got to go public at some point. So you've got me all stressed out again. Stressed, I tell you. And poor Wounded Bill is only going to get worse, and grow bigger than palm size, and completely take over, and I'll cry. And I'll have a tiny wounded Mizu to carry around. :( Lovely writing, you really make it intense!
Author's Response: Blushing like mad here. What an amazing review. Thank you so much. I really sweated blood over this chapter. Like I said, it took me 3 tries to get it right and even then I wasn't sure about it. I'd actually written something like 20 pages of the other 2 versions and something just didn't gel so it all got scrapped. I finally got my act together this past week and finished off the chapter in 2-3 days. I always intended to have a Max sequence in this chapter as a forerunner of the twins' ordeal tomorrow. But I didn't even know exactly what had happened to the pendrive or that Max would probably get his hands on it until I started writing his part. Note 'probably' I'm still working out the details of the next chapter although I got stuck in this morning and have written about 5 pages in a couple of hours until DD1 decided to visit and interrupted the flow. I love your imagery of teeny wounded Bill and Real, Healthy Bill. Maybe if he gets a good counsellor in the future Bill might be able to seperate the two. I have 2 options with this now and I'm not sure which to go with. One way and the story will probably drag on a whole lot longer with a lot more angst. The other way and I'm hoping to wrap it up in a few chapters. I do have yet another sequel planned, and a one-off with the twins getting their tattoos, so even if I shorten this one (which was initially only going to be about 3 chapters long) there will be more of this world to come. Oh, have you seen the latest pics of Tom holding hands with Ria while out shopping? I shouldn't look at things like that, stupidly it upsets me because I have these people as characters in my story and they're mine and they really shouldn't have lives of their own doing things I haven't writtent the script for. Okay, looney lady needs locking up! Just shows how weird it is writing about real life people. Mind you, I have an explanation for it if I ever get to a point in the furture where I'm writing this time frame. Sorry, I'll shut up now. Thanks again for reviewing. You know how amazingly talented I think you are so it's incredible to receive your compliments. BTW have you started work on your new story yet? NO? Why not? Can't wait to read whatever you write next. Love and hugs, Helen x
Date: 10/04/12 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 7
Oh, what cliffs you leave me on, Helen. Such a fabulous chapter and I can't wait until I get a chance to read more. I miss this so much. I can't wait to see what happens if Bill and Tom do tell Simone. I also want to know what Lisa Munroe is digging up on this sick therapist, but it'll have to wait until another time, I'm afraid. I'd love to hear from you. Email me!! Love you, love this, buh-bye!!
Date: 09/22/12 02:55 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh, Goddddd!!!! I have to stop here because I need to get home. Jesus!!! Poor Gordon, lol. I can't imagine how he must feel having to be the one to bring the whole thing up to Tom. I love his character so much because of how utterly supportive he is with everyone. I feel sorry for Simone because of what happened to her and her paranoia over her sons. My heart broke when Gordon told Tom about what happened to Simone. First Tom has to deal with all that's going on with Bill, and now he knows his mom was molested by her brother. This thing just gets more and more intense and sad. I love this so much. I have to stop here because I have things to do, but I swear next time, you know I'll read and review this. Lots of love, girl and keep up the fabulous writing!!!
Date: 09/22/12 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 5
I absolutely love this chapter. You're being so vague about Max, but I have these little feelings that I know what's up. You've given a lot of insight to why Simone is the way she is, so I can't blame her for being a little bitchy. I still love Tom's utter patience and I'm anticipating mostly the "talk" between Tom and Gordon. I know this may be short compared to my other reviews, but I want to get at least one more chapter in as I'm on borrowed time right now. Loved this, as always, keep up the great work!!!!
Date: 09/16/12 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 9
I am thankful that Bill has realized how bad Max is and is going to face up to him. As much as I would like Tom to take care of the filthy pervert, Bill needs to do it for himself and Tom doesn't need more blood on his hands. I am glad that Bill has supporters now. *nods*
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review; I really appreciate readers taking the time to write me a few lines. Yeah, I think Bill really needs to take care of Max himself, to give him back the control that abusers steal from their victims. I've not totally ruled out Tom getting involved in the showdown though. Not sure the elder twin will really be content to watch the show from the sidelines. Next chapter start with a goodly portion of twin sexy time. Anyone for BotTom? Thanks again. Hugs, Helen x
Date: 09/14/12 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 9
Argh! Stress levels up! Blood pressure up! I can't stand it! First, it's really good, Helen. Excellently written, of course. And the tension is screwing me to the wall. Poor Bill - how a once self-confident person has to fight against extreme self-hatred, it's crushing. And Tom - he's a supportive, loving dickhead! Why on earth would he ask Bill if he liked what happened with Max?! What a jerk! I love how flawed your characters are. Simone is damaged, angry, bitterly controlling. The twins can be surprisingly cruel to one another, despite how much they love one another. It's the kind of thing that can eat away at the base of a relationship. And they already have enough stress fractures in that base as it is. Adding accusations and nasty, biting comments are the sorts of things that cause distrust and deep pain. And now you're adding another vicious plot - the pendrive, someone's going to discover the pendriver! Clumsy, careless Tom! And so the tension keeps going up and up and up. I now have that same headache Bill has. Because I know there will be no relief anytime soon. The meeting with Max is unlikely to go smoothly. Someone has the pendrive and more people will know. Bill just wants to die. The pain, the pain!!! You do it so well!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you. Amazing review. Sorry I gave you a headache...actually I had one by the time I'd finished writing that chapter but more because I'd revised the damn thing maybe 3-4 times and I'd stayed up late for several nights trying to get it finished. I'd almost forgotten the pendrive in all the other drama - as have the twins. But I do have plans for it. Hopefully the next chapter will be a little lighter...at least the beginning with twin time will be. Might end on a heavier note. Not sure yet. Thanks again for the incredible review; I just left you one too.
Date: 09/13/12 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
*reads review in the light of day*...*facepalm* was die fick? Well I'm glad you enjoyed it. Good luck with your assigment!