Date: 07/10/15 02:20 pm Title: Bare
Wowzers.
There were parts of this story where I wanted to crawl under the covers with Tom and tell him everything would be ok.
There were also parts of this story where I wanted to scream at them both, but knew my screams would fall on deaf ears.
Very well written.!
Date: 06/04/12 05:35 am Title: Bare
Very emotional and deep. Your narration is very raw, like you're right there with them, mind trailing the way theirs does. Also, the second person POV worked very well I think, and the fact that your dialogue is narrated rather than quoted is also a great element.
I'll admit however that when I first started reading, I almost stopped immediately. Your writing is quirky and a bit unusual, and for a whole I couldn't figure out if it's genius or if you just don't know English perfectly and this is a translation...? Either way, I think it actually really worked in the end. Beautiful in its own way. I'm glad I stuck around and read this. Nicely done! :)
Date: 06/03/12 01:12 pm Title: Bare
So intense. You really got the emotions across.
Date: 06/03/12 12:38 pm Title: Bare
I could really feel the emotions in this and picture it all going on in my head as if I was in the room right there watching it all happen. Very well written.
Date: 06/02/12 09:53 pm Title: Bare
I wonder if Tom was talking about Bill or the drugs? Good story. :)