Date: 08/04/12 04:44 pm Title: Rehabilitation
They always say its never too late to change... here's to hoping... it's kinda sad that Rebecca died... and who knows? Maybe she would have changed... but they're happy now and life goes on...
Author's Response:
That's true it never is too late to change. It is kind of sad that Rebecca died and I think she probably would have chnaged if she had come out of that water alive. They're happy now and life goes on is a very apt description. One more chapter after this. Thanks for the lovely reviews.
Date: 08/04/12 04:26 pm Title: A Long Day
I was a little worried... but Rebecca proved herself... her last ( and probably only) selfless act before dying... is amazing what can push you when your kids are in danger...
Author's Response:
I was worried when writing this too so I can understand why reading it you would be nervous. Rebecca did definitely prove herself and I almost feel bad about killing her...almost. I have always found it amazing what mothers can do when their kids are in danger. I heard about this mom that lifted a car because her baby was stuck under it. I wanted to show a little bit of that in this chapter to show that she is still a mom despite everything.
Date: 08/04/12 03:49 pm Title: Rehabilitation
Nice Monster. Love the story
Author's Response:
It is a nice monster under most occasions especially when fed on regular occasion. Thanks. I am glad you liked it.
Date: 07/31/12 11:02 pm Title: The New Nanny
I'm definitely glad I reread it, and you weren't short with me at all. And even if you were, it would've been completely understandable, writing is womething you put your love and care into, and I'm sure it gets frustrating when people just don't get it.
Author's Response:
I am glad you reread it too. I always want my readers to understand the work but also to feel like they can come to me with any questions. I really beat myself up when I get short with a reader. Not everyone sees the world the way I do and when they make comments sometimes it gives me a different perspective to work from. It does sometimes but that's no reason to get short. I enjoy the good feedback and even the constructive feedback. It helps me become a better writer. Next chapter should be up later today.
Date: 07/28/12 07:49 pm Title: A Long Day
Like I said, I'm too cynical sometimes, plus when I read this I was a bit drugged because I had a surgery that week. After I reread it I saw it the way it was meant to be seen.
Author's Response:
I happen to be cynical sometimes too so don't feel too bad. Being drugged can definitely change the perspective of certain things. I am glad you went back and reread it to see if my counter argument was valid. I am also sorry if I ever get short I just tend to be defensive about my writing.
Date: 07/26/12 11:46 pm Title: A Long Day
Yay Hero Bill
Author's Response:
I really wanted Bill to be a hero in this chapter and really prove that he loves this family by putting his life at risk not only for the kids but also for Rebecca.
Date: 07/26/12 04:08 pm Title: A Long Day
No, she didn't gain back my respect at all. One good deed can't undo all of the bad ones. I'm glad the kids are okay, though. C:
Great chapter!
10/10
*****
Author's Response:
I am sorry she didn't gain back any respect. I was a little worried about how I would make that scene work. I am glad you liked it.
Date: 07/26/12 11:18 am Title: A Long Day
What kind of story is that ??
Author's Response:
I don't understand the question.
Date: 07/26/12 08:53 am Title: A Long Day
I despised Rebecca but I didn't want her to die! I knew she cared about the kids deep inside but wanted her out of their lives not in a way where she was physically harmed.
Yeay Billa can swim! And yeah for rescued kids!
Author's Response:
I felt like this was the necessary course of action. It is sad though. I knew she cared too and that makes up for a lot of what she did in the end. Despite everything she saved them at her own expense.
rnI wanted Bill to be the big hero in this scene. I am glad you like it and hope you keep reading.
Date: 07/26/12 01:22 am Title: A Long Day
Karma?!
Now I can't wait to see if she survived or not!
Thank you for the timely updates, its appreciated!
Author's Response:
Maybe or maybe not. I don't know if it was karma or the ultimate sacrifice. We will definitely see that in the next chapter. I've never liked those authors that take months to update so I try to do the opposite.
Date: 07/26/12 12:10 am Title: A Long Day
She died, she died, she died, she diiiiiiiiiieeed *dances around the room*
I mean, of course she won just a little bit of respect from me, when she grabbed the kids, but just a little bit.
I was so worried that Bill would die, but he was so brave for saving the kids, but i think he thinks of them as his own in a way.
Lovely chapter, can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Well, most people feel a little sympathy for her but at least you feel something so... *shrugs*
rnI am glad she earned a little respect from you and the other readers. She wasn't all bad all the time.
rnI was a little worried that Bill would get seriously hurt as I wrote this but I knew I wouldn't be able to kill him off. I like that Bill saved the kids too and he does think of fondly if not partially his own.
rnI will update on Friday if I can. Thanks for the review.
Date: 07/26/12 12:04 am Title: A Long Day
Ewww. Camping *shivers*
Well...that's one way to end a custody battle I suppose. Maybe I'm too cynical, but even in the end, I still think she was worried about losing her leverage over Tom, at least when she originally reached for theor hands, and after she could let them go and save herself or two men would've beat the shit out of her, or killed her, or maybe just called the cops for some charge. I'm sure there's some sort of charge that would cover that. But I really want to believe she cared at the end. She did, at least, sacrifice herself in the end when she saw Bill wasn't going to be able to make it.
Rebecca was stupid to try and take the kids when there was a warrant stating they would be picked up by a social worker tomorrow afternoon. And Tom would've been stupid to actually let her take them. They have no set custody order at this time, correct, seeing as the old one is being contested? I know in my state, if there is no order in place them whoever has posession, doesn't have to give them back up amd can do pretty much whatever they want including leaving the state. But I suppose that might not be an issue, seeing as technically they are wards of the state soooo...yeah, not so sure. But Tom definitely shouldn't have ket her take them, he should have called the police, told them his exwife was trying to kidnap the kids, and refrained her from leaving until police arrived. If anything they would've called social services and taken the kids that night, which would've been better than letting Rebecca just take them herself.
Wonderful update! I can't wait for Friday! And I am terribly sad there will only be one update next week :(
Author's Response:
I don't mind me and and my dad don't get to spend much time together so the camping is a good thing.
rnI don't think so I think she was really trying to save her kids. They were important to her even if she didn't show it much. I also thought the end sarfice was the best thing she could have done to win back our respect.
rnYeah but sometimes parents in a custody battle will try to win favor by doing something earlier or without being today. Tom was having a panic attack so he didn't react well. You are right they had no set custody. In my state if the custody holding parent leaves during a custody battle then they are charged with kidnapping and custodial interference.
rnNext week's lack of updates is why I am updating three times this week.
Date: 07/25/12 11:50 pm Title: A Long Day
wow, that was something new that i'd read and i like it :)
hopefully everything will end good - with or without Rebecca
Author's Response:
I wanted to add a twist and get a character back in our good graces and then unfortunately kill her. I hope so too.
Date: 07/24/12 07:50 pm Title: Interesting Conversations
I liked it all...i love this story...i get a big smile on my face when i see an update...
Author's Response:
I am glad you liked the update and you love the story. I try to update as often as possible but my muses tend to abandon me about mid-week.
Date: 07/24/12 07:05 pm Title: Interesting Conversations
Zac has some super kid logic going on there at the end. I love it.
Author's Response:
Yeah I thought that would be a cute addition to the story. I am glad you love it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 07/24/12 01:12 pm Title: Interesting Conversations
Holy jamoley, was she horrible, but I feel a bit better now that she has finally arrived, some of the suspense on her front has been eased. She was pretty much exactly what I expected, , yet somehow so much worse. I can't believe one of the first thing she said to Bill was if he was going to kill Tom for the insurance money, because 'they aren't made for relationships' and 'she would know if her own son was a fairy.' That was rude and completely inappropriate. She sure doesn't do a very good job of trying to make Bill at least have a glimpse of an illusion that she was there to make up with him. And yea, apparently she wouldn't know her son was gay or not. I definitely dorsee bad things with her. Either she's going to break in and steal shit (or arrange for the dealer or someone else to), or she's going to somehow hook up with Rebecca and cause some real damage.
I loved the first bit of the chapter, when Bill and Tom were waking up, and getting up and about. Its adorable that they borrow eachother's shirts. And it was nice finding out that they trade who is on top. A lot of stories its one or the other, and very few have them taking turns. Or so it seems to me. And that Tom can seem to only find one 'fault' with Bill, leaving his art supplies lying around sometimes. It gave me the warm fuzzies.
I was laughing so hard when I saw the twins' conversation. 'Billa cant't have a mommy because he has Daddy.' And even if he did it couldn't be her because he'd have a wonderful mommy who 'baked cookies' and stuff. Oh gawd was it amazing. Perfectly 6yr old sensible. I just worry that Isabella's doubt in Issac's logic will wind up getting her into trouble somehow, maybe trying to find her or talk to her, or something.
I seriously think Tom needs to find some way to get some proof of his suspicions, maybe hire a PI to track Rebecca or something, and get that judge thrown off their case.
I'm a tiny bit disappointed that we didn't see the reconsilliation between Tom and Bill, but its okay I suppose.
I'm a bit worried about Izzy's little boyfriend now. And I find the teacher's response very rude. 'Its none of your business' is not very nice to a 6yr old. She could've just said he wasn't feeling well and couldnkt come in. Even if that wasn't exactly true (which seeing as that's not what she said I doubt that's the issue) its more child appropriate an answer. But either way, I'm a bit worried for him.
Fantastic chapter! I can't wait for the next update, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Yeah she was but she was interesting to write. I wanted to make her different from Rebecca but also on the same page of destroying Bill and Tom. Yeah that murder thing was a bit much but someone people actually think like that. Some people really aren't made for relationships but I don't think Bill falls into that category. She was very rude and cruel. I don't think she cares if Bill sees through her it's mostly just a game for her. She will definitely be one of our bad guys. I am not sure what she will do yet but those suggestions will definitely be added to the pile.rnrnThe first bit was fun to write you know everything starts out nice and slow. They cuddle and chat a bit. Then we find that they really have moved into each others lives with the sharing of clothes. That was a mention of Bill might be on top but hasn't done it yet. I always write to where they switch out whose on top because I don't believe top means that person is the dominate personality. I wanted to show that while Tom is a little messy Bill isn't except in regard to his art supplies. It was fun.rnrnI wanted to add a little view of what the twins would think of everything going on. I didn't know my mom's boyfriend had parents until I was 7 or 8. I thought he was just Jack and Jack couldn't have parents because he had my mommy. Jacks mom was completely opposite of what I expected if he did have a mommy. I wanted to show how six year olds really think about non-family members relatives. We shall see what happens with Isabella. rnrnThat's not Tom's way he's not a stalker and he's not that invested in wanting to know the truth. He knows he's a good dad and he knows that Bill poses no threat to the kids so any judge that thinks that would be wrong and with all the checks and balances of the court system it isn't likely to happen. rnrnI didn't know what to write so I sort of glossed over it. Sorry. rnrnKevin would have been in the way during this scene. I just wanted to show after everything the teachers learned nothing and continued to bully the kids as well. Kevin will be in the next chapter. I didn't mean to worry anyone. rnrnI am glad you like it next update should be tomorrow or Friday. I like how long your reviews are.
Date: 07/24/12 11:38 am Title: Interesting Conversations
the twin's conversation at the end was cute. Janet is every bit like I imagined her to be.
Author's Response:
I thought it would be nice to see what the twins thought about what was going on. Janet is interesting to write.
Date: 07/24/12 10:55 am Title: Interesting Conversations
Good work on Janet's character. She is vicious and mean in a very repulsive way but still has the sugar sweet streak that is needed in every true evil bitch! Thanks
Author's Response:
I am glad you liked her. I have lots of mean characters and I have no idea where they come from. Yeah I thought she would need to be sweet in some ways and cruel in other ways.
Date: 07/24/12 09:13 am Title: Interesting Conversations
So I'm assuming the talk went well :) great chapter as always
Author's Response:
You would be right about the talk going well. Thanks for the review I am glad you like the story.
Date: 07/24/12 08:23 am Title: Interesting Conversations
i like it :) twins as Bill and Tom are so cute together; and their talking :)
i can't wait for next part :)
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it. I try to keep the couples and the twins cute without being smothering. I will update soon.