Date: 06/11/12 01:50 am Title: The New Nanny
I really like this and I'm glad you just jumped right into it. Some authors would have taken forever to get to this point. I like Bill :D He's awesome.
Author's Response:
I hate it when the story doesnt even really start until the fourth or fifth chapter so I try to make it short and sweet. I am glad you like Bill I try to make him fun.
Date: 06/10/12 12:14 pm Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
She sounds so disgusting...I kind of wanted to gag when she dropped her robe and was naked. Also, she's a bigger bitch than I thought. I hope she gets into a fatal car accident or gets an STD. x_x
10/10
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Author's Response:
I know that was an interesting scene to write. I wanted to show that Tom was still interested in her while showing that it was just for the ongoing physical relationship and not the emotional stuff. She is a horrible person and an awful mother. I promise her karma will catch up with her just not in the way anyone will ever guess. Glad to see you back and to see that I haven't weirded you out with my randomness.
Date: 06/10/12 11:58 am Title: Happiness and Sadness
I love the kids, I love Tanya, Rebecca needs to get punched in the face she's such a horrible bitch, I don't particularly like how distant they are but it is your story, I'd like to see more bill and tom, twincest
10/10
*****
Author's Response:
I am glad you love who I wanted people to love and hate Rebecca. I have no idea where I pulled her from but she's here now. I am not sure who you mean by they being distant. I am working on developing the relationship without going too fast or too slow.
Date: 06/10/12 08:31 am Title: The New Nanny
Its going to be a great story, I know it!
Author's Response:
Thanks I am glad you think so. I hope I can write a story that lives up to your expectations.
Date: 06/09/12 02:25 pm Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
i see why rebecca is the way she is...i love how he blew her off though...and they all need to think of the children...
Author's Response:
Rebecca quite possibly lost the best thing in her life when she let go of Tom and she barely realizes her mistake. I can also see that she wants Tom back and will be willing to do almost anything. I like how Tom managed to walk away from something he must have wanted. They really do need to focus on the kids. Thanks.
Date: 06/09/12 10:02 am Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
It just may be a man she will have to destroy lol...So Bills had a crush on Tom for awhile now? That's awesome xD Great chapter!
Author's Response:
I know right. I thought that would be a good add-on that Bill had, had a crush on Tom since high school. I am glad you liked it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/09/12 09:22 am Title: The New Nanny
Wow, I feel honored that you asked me to be your beta reader.
I would love to say yes, in regards to being your beta, but I honestly don't know if I would have the time. I also don't have a working computer at the moment =/
I will think some more about it and let you know, if that's okay? I will see if I would be able to have time to do it =]
Author's Response:
It's a hard job and like I said I understand if you can't. I am a very demanding person and eat up alot of time. I also will send two or three different versions and ask your opinion so takee your time. It is not an easy job I really should pay but I don't have any money. Just let me know when you decide. =)
Date: 06/09/12 09:02 am Title: The New Nanny
Welcome ^^
Author's Response:
=)
Date: 06/09/12 07:19 am Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
nice chapter!!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
an i wont more bill an tom together
some more!
Author's Response:
I am glad you liked it. I will update on Monday. Everyone wants more Bill and Tom together but I am trying to build a real relationship not just we fell in love today after only meeting lets jump in the sack. Real life doesn't work like that. I will definitely work on it.
Date: 06/09/12 05:48 am Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
Rebecca is not horrible she's young and lost nothing in her life had prepared her for what she is living now . people should stop to be so judgemental
Author's Response:
Tom was young and spoiled when he had the kids too but he stepped up and handled his responsibility like he was supposed. My cousin was young when she got pregnant and I thought that she would just act like a child and not do good things but her little man is almost two and she is a wonderful mother. She may be young but nothing excuses behavior like that when you have children to raise. She should have grown up and realized this is real and they need me. People are judgmental because I am fairly cruel in how I write her. She has no redeeming qualities...yet. I am glad you see the potentional but so far I don't even have faith that she'll able to redeem herself and she's my character.
Date: 06/08/12 09:59 pm Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
So, I really like the plot and the basic premise of this story so far. I also like the characters.
I'm going to be honest and give you some helpful criticism. I know when I write stories, I want to know if anything needs to be fixed or worked on. I don't know if you have a beta reader, but I would recommend one. The one thing that I am seeing the most, is the punctuation. Or the lack of punctuation. There have been many sentences that should have had a comma or even a period. I am a stickler for grammer and punctuation and when reading a fic, I can be a bit picky.
Like I said before, I am liking this story. I can see great potential here. I hope you don't take this review the wrong way because that is definitely not what I was intending to do. =]
Author's Response:
I am glad you like the story and the characters. Thanks for the criticism I am grateful. I do have a beta but between our email having problems, her working crazy hours, me getting done at odd hours and slow internet it is difficult to get the chapters beta'd. Maybe you would consent to being my beta. I would love to have someone that has time and the internet connection. You would have to check your email often and I tend to ramble when I email and I hit freak-outs. I also demand alot so you would have to be willing to put up with me but tell me if you're interested. I won't be upset or insulted if you say no. I am very glad you like my stories. That makes me very happy.
Date: 06/08/12 08:34 pm Title: ...And so the Tension Starts
-smirks- good thing bill is a guy then hehe ( in regards to the last line XD )
Author's Response:
I know right but of course Rebecca think Tom is straight so she thinks it's another woman. I think she would tear Bill up and continue thinking he was a girl. He is pretty enough but I like the fact that he is still very definitely a male. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/07/12 11:23 am Title: Happiness and Sadness
Im liking it so far, sad but still really good looking forward to more
Author's Response:
I am glad you like and hope you like the latest update.
Date: 06/06/12 10:53 am Title: Happiness and Sadness
this sounds like a really good story!
i cant wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it and I hope you will continue to enjoy it. I will post soon. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/06/12 10:40 am Title: Happiness and Sadness
Tanya sounds wonderful. Rebecca, I wish she'd drown. Bill and Tom are developing pretty nicely. And the kinds are great! Your doing a great job!
Author's Response:
I am glad all the characters seem to be going in the way I planned them. I am glad you like it and thanks for the review.
Date: 06/06/12 07:59 am Title: Happiness and Sadness
i like the kids...they're full of energy...tanya seemed a very loving and caring person...what's needed when raising kids...rebecca's a bitch and i don't like her at all...so you've done a fine job there...overall i like this story...i will continue to read as often as you post...
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it and it seems like the characters are shaping up as I planned them too. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/06/12 01:13 am Title: Happiness and Sadness
Omg cant wait for next update
Author's Response:
I am glad you liked it. The next update will be on Friday. I have the chapter finished and saved.
Date: 06/05/12 08:02 pm Title: Happiness and Sadness
i cant beleave the bitch forgot to bring the kids thats just so wrong
Author's Response:
Rebecca is definitely irresponsible and horrible and we're only on chapter 2. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/05/12 05:31 pm Title: Happiness and Sadness
Aww Tom thought Bill was cute xD I can't wail til u update.
Author's Response:
I thought that was a nice touch. I like surprising the boys with their reactions to each other.
Date: 06/01/12 01:08 am Title: The New Nanny
This sounds interesting :33 Im hoping to see more!
Author's Response:
More will be up soon. Thanks for the review. I am glad you think it's interesting