Date: 10/29/12 08:47 pm Title: Movie and a few Texts
OOh, lemon icecream!!!
Now where's my damn cookies?!?!
Author's Response: Heres yo cookies (::) (::) <-- double chocolate chip by the way
Date: 10/29/12 08:44 pm Title: Dinner
Georg eats like a pig!! Lol.
Author's Response: I know! lol
Date: 09/15/12 02:24 pm Title: Twenty One Questions
I am so glad Bill found his mum. It seems that everything will be alright now.
Sorry I havenīt review before. I have followed this story from the start.
Author's Response: :D!!!! Yaay! This is the first review I've had since 'Acid Dreams'rnI'm glad you're enjoying my story :)
Date: 08/03/12 02:44 am Title: Acid Dreams and Dancing
Ooo I wonder who the sexy stranger was
Author's Response: Look CAREFULLY is all I can say.
Date: 07/15/12 09:27 am Title: Motorcycle Lessons and Dreams about Elephants
Lol, 'second best hair in the world' was my favorite line. Oh, and the elephant bit. (:
Author's Response: I was hoping someone would say that, Bill is so vain that its funny. Who doesn't love elephants?!
Date: 07/14/12 01:20 pm Title: Day four on the road
OMG is there any Bill/Andreas coming?or, at least u could write more about Andreas.i love Andi!!:3
Author's Response: Don't worry my dear kitten! Andy will play a very important roll in a few chapters away from now. I can't say much. But I'm hoping something its going to be as BIG as I think it is... Muhaha >:)
Date: 07/14/12 01:09 pm Title: Motorcycle Lessons and Dreams about Elephants
It was good.
I certainly expect GeoBi next chapter!
10/10
*****
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I can't tell you much, but I have BIG plans coming up in the next few chapters >:)
Date: 07/13/12 10:19 pm Title: Motorcycle Lessons and Dreams about Elephants
I love ur story!I really do.but be a bit more frequent in updating,okay?:)
Author's Response: Aw! thank you very much :)rnI hate not updating frequently! I don't mean to blame my beta, but the editing process can take awhile :/
Date: 07/13/12 09:22 am Title: Motorcycle Lessons and Dreams about Elephants
Bill's silly lol.
Author's Response: Yes. Yes he is :)
Date: 06/27/12 01:44 am Title: To the carnival!
Oh my, cliffhanger! And I see you finally got your banner up, nice. (:
Author's Response: I know! I hate to do it, but I had to >:) eh, I'm having problems with it, It chopps my words up so when you read the description, you have to go backwards to read the first word :/
Date: 06/26/12 03:29 pm Title: To the carnival!
Such a sweet n happy chapter. Except for the end, of course. I'm hoping Tom isn't there and Bill should really tell Georg what's going on. At least so that Geo can help keep him safe.
Author's Response: Aw thank you! I know, I left off with a cliffhanger. I'll update ASAP :)
Date: 06/18/12 07:06 pm Title: Movie and a few Texts
That's great xD Their mini-makeout session was pretty sexy hehe. I love Bill & Andi's conversation lol. So funny :)
Author's Response: Aw thanks! don't worry, theres more steamy makeouts coming ;)rnOh yeah! heres you're cookie! (::)
Date: 06/15/12 02:07 am Title: Movie and a few Texts
Hahaha, Andi's funny (:
Author's Response: Heres you're cookie (::) ... Attempt anyway :P
Date: 06/06/12 06:06 pm Title: Day four on the road
Yeah, I make banners. Do you have your banner uploaded to photobucket our something like that?
Author's Response: I sure do! I'll send you a link? could you please oh please oh please upload it for meeee? :)
Date: 06/06/12 01:10 pm Title: The Dirty Faced Man
What problems are you having with your banner exactly?
Author's Response: I posted it but its not showing up. Are you a banner artist?rn
Date: 06/06/12 02:49 am Title: Dinner
Lol. Bill's too cute :) Can't wait to read more!
Date: 05/29/12 05:46 am Title: Day four on the road
He should be.... BOTH. I suck at explaining ESPECIALLY over the internet. Some description is necessary or else it seems more like a recipe, if you know what I mean. Bill should act bubbly but not so bubbly that he gives the impression of some giggly 12 year old fawning over his/her crush.
Thanks for taking in my review, glad to help 8D
Date: 05/28/12 02:34 am Title: Day four on the road
Like by that I mean the way they talk just seems unnatural to me. GAH, I can't explain this properly. By lagging I mean it should have a bit more description. I know fiction is like do whatever the balls you want but the way the people talk just seem a bit robotic.
Author's Response: Lol, my beta recommended not to use a whole lot of description (bores the crap out of people) They just met, so do you think Bill is going to act all bubbly or be professional? rnBut yes, I'll keep you're recommendation in mind, I appreciate what people really think, gives me ways to improve so I don't make the same mistakes all over again :P
Date: 05/27/12 07:47 pm Title: A phone call is made
Hello ;) It's okay so far BUT the thing that pisses me off more than anything else in any story is that EVERYTHING. THING. IS. MOVING. TOO. FAST. I've only read two pages and you've already introduced Georg into the plot. I'm no story writing genius but I can tell that this isn't realistic at all. And I think there should be more "lagging" (if you will) and description.
And I think that the way the characters talk isn't very realistic either, it needs to sound a bit more natural if you know what I mean. ;)
Author's Response: To be technical, when I wrote this on WORD I had already written five pages, not two, before I introduced Georg.rn So what I'm getting by lagging, you mean you wish you could have read poor Bill getting the crap beaten out of him before he decided to leave?rnIsn't that the whole point of fiction? things don't have to BE realistic. rnDon't worry, you'll find their natural flow of talking later ;)
Date: 05/27/12 07:04 pm Title: The Dirty Faced Man
Yay! Georg (: