Date: 06/05/12 03:42 pm Title: Chapter 4
Super long chapter :o! God poor Tom, he lives the life of hell, I swear XD I love how Bill wasn't in this chapter at all, yet he was all over the fucking place xDD God, I know I said this before but I'm dying to see how their relationship is going to play out, I mean wow xDD
btw what does pomme de sang mean? I think you mentioned it before but I can't remember.
Author's Response: Do you think too long? I just ended it where it was convenient. I didn't think about whether it would be uncomfortably long for you readers. That's a really interesting comment, that you like that even though Bill isn't in the action of the chapter, he's mentioned a lot and kept in your mind. And now that I think about it, that's an important aspect and I'm glad you feel that way about it. I know you're dying to see more Bill/Tom interaction and history. I deprive you on purpose, poor child (hehe). Pomme de sang is a borrowed term from the Anita Blake book series. It translates literally from French as "Apple of Blood." It is essentially a (usually) voluntarily-maintained blood donor, who is close by and can easily and frequently be accessed for food.
Date: 06/05/12 12:41 am Title: Chapter 3
I love the world building you've done! I'm super excited to see what you have planned for Tom. C:
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you are getting the sense that I'm constructing a "world" as you say.
Date: 06/04/12 12:26 am Title: Chapter 3
Tom is in over his head...he just doesn't know it yet! I'm enjoying all of the intrigue in this and hoping there will be some sexual tension at some point. ;)
Author's Response: Glad you like intrigue. And yes, some sexual tension coming soon, though if you'll notice: this fic is not rated nc-17, and it's for a reason.
Date: 06/03/12 11:57 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oho, so Tom is Bill's human servant, very much unwilling! And Bill doesn't know how to handle him...and yet he respected his distance for a time at least. How very interesting. Looking forward to more - and, ooh, there's another chapter waiting for me!
Author's Response: Yep, yep, and yep. More will be explained about all that later. The metaphysics I give in later chapters are beyond vague, simply because Tom is to remain only semi-clear about it himself throughout this story.
Date: 06/03/12 05:31 am Title: Chapter 3
Wow, this was a looong chappie! :) I'm loving every bit of it.
I agree with k483 that it somewhat reminds me of X-men, with the politics and the prejudice.
Wow, such contained and tense drama when Andrej was taken away. I felt like I was watching a movie or play.
I'd be shitting bricks if a resident torturer escorted me home O_O And *stayed* with me a while.
I was confused at first, with those two; I didn't think were-people could transform into anything other than wolves.
That night I ignored the directions on the Tylenol bottle and took five at once. > Geez, that's practically an overdose O.o (I don't know how much Tylenol an actual overdose is)
PS: From chapter 2, ah, now I see the meaning of the fic title.
Author's Response: I like that readers are saying this fic reminds them of something as cool as x-men. I'll take it. And of course the cooolest thing to hear from readers is that the story is like a movie (wow!) so thanks for that. I agree with you about Kelly, I designed her to be even creepier, due to how pretty and normal she is on the outside. There are different types of weres in this universe, wolf and leopard being the two most common. Thanks for telling me you were confused though, I might go tweak something to explain that a little better. And I can tell you from experience: five tylenol won't kill you. Especially Tom.
Date: 06/02/12 01:34 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh no, the fic does not bore me at all. In fact, it is one of the more promising fics I am tracking amongst the current onslaught of utterly boring mary-sue-jane hetfics. I have nothing against well-written hetfics, but the recent trash polluting the site is ridiculous.
Back to the actual review (do I get paid for it and can I choose the mode of payment?): This fic intrigues me and the dialogues flows very well. We finally get a glimpse of Tom's role in the entire proceeding. A glimpse and not much more; how important is he to the cause? Would his ability honestly make any difference? I say that because if I were one of the bigger badder vampires, I would plant a vampire spy amongst the community to get a feel of things. If a hostile takeover is required, it would be done swiftly with the biggest guns and no one would be any wiser. Sending a delegate reeks of a business dealing of sorts. Where does Tom fit in all this?
In any case, the game is already afoot with Bill's close associates being taken down. Do I smell third party involvement?
Assuming Bill has the bigger picture in mind and is aware of these and more, this whole doom-gloom threat is but a cover and it is highly likely that he has yet another agenda up his Machivellian sleeves regarding dear Tomi. Something wholly personal involving his heart. Something to be revealed in later chapters.
Author's Response: I'll say that Tom is a tool, in an arsenal of tools, for Bill to use. As far as Bill or anyone else knows, he may turn out to be only slightly helpful, or he could glean something off the enemy that ends up being their saving grace. Bill is making a strategic move by keeping him close incase the latter pans out to be true. Now the vampires in Europe are not using big guns, but rather sending people over to check things out, because they don't want to do anything drastic if they don't have to. In this universe, vampires are wary of doing anything that garners human attention, and bad press. In a very en-masse way, they are fearful of the power humans could have over them simply due to numbers. Either you are a very astute reader, or I'm a very cliched writer, because while Bill does intend to make use of Tom if he can, there has to be another reason why such a powerful vampire would give a crap about one piddly human right? You are on to me.
Date: 06/02/12 11:35 am Title: Chapter 3
Another great chapter! This is starting to remind me of X-men in the way the supernatural world is involved with politics, I'm liking it a lot so far
Author's Response: Ooh, I actually never considered how it is sort of like X-men in that way. I like your comparison!
Date: 06/02/12 01:11 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm still loveing this story. You have really good detail and I like how the characters are developing. I can really get a sence on who they are and how they would react to situations. Tom is a bit of a pessamist and I can say that I would not like him if i met him as he is in this. Bill is still delightfully evil and every bit the leader. I love Bill in this. He's amazing :)
Author's Response: You know, I don't think I'd like this Tom either, lol. Thanks for just being honest about that. I mean really, what super attractive qualities does he have? He's a total bummer/complainer, hehe. And I think I would be fascinated/slightly scared if I met this Bill. Thanks for the review!
Date: 06/01/12 09:05 pm Title: Chapter 3
Tom is awesome for complying yet still fighting. Damn, I'm so confused right now because I'm reading a sci-fi book like this, with gifted supernatural people living with normals and being discriminated against. The stories are merging a little in my head... but I like Tom as a protagonist better than the protagonist in the other story. Tom is a really cool character, and I understand him and sympathize with him!
Author's Response: That's awesome that you find Tom a sympathetic and relatable protagonist. Thanks!
Date: 06/01/12 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 3
Yay, update :) Will read in a bit since I'm in the middle of something, but just want to give you the heads up that most of the chapter has been italicized ;)
Author's Response: Thanks. I haaate that I let that happen. fixed now though.
Date: 06/01/12 04:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
Why half of the chapter is in italics? It was kinda hard to read
You mentioned that you were in a car crash... are you ok?
Author's Response: Total mistake. I fixed the italics issue now. Sorry. And that's so sweet you asked, but yeah I'm pretty much recovered now. I can walk again finally, weee!
Date: 06/01/12 04:45 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'm really liking this story and im curious to see how bill and tom's relationship plays out, since at the moment, Tom hates him xD
one thing, you goofed up with the coding for italics, so most of the chapter is in it. :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Yeah, Bill and Tom's relationship will change in this fic, ...maybe evn progress, in certain ways. But it's difficult, given their history (yet to be revealed) and Tom's shit personality. Thanks for warning me about the iics. I freaked out when I saw how horrible it was, but it's fixed now :)
Date: 05/30/12 09:46 am Title: Chapter 2
Oh, Tom. The easiest way to get along with Bill is just to give him what he wants, and then everything will be so much more pleasurable! ;D Wishing you luck, Tom~ And looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Author's Response: Exactly. See, you've got the genre of angsty Bill/Tom dramalove all figured out, lol. But of course it will not turn out so simply. Thanks for the review, I love hearing from my fave authors!
Date: 05/30/12 05:26 am Title: Chapter 2
Yay, you're posting again and I've got to say this fic is soo good so far. I'm liking the dynamic between Bill and Tom and I want to know more about their history. At first the first person narrative threw me off but as I kept reading and got more and more into it I didnt even notice it. Your writing is just that amazing :)
Author's Response: Oh squee I'm glad you like it so much. I really take it as a huge compliment that you can read first person (something that's not you're favorite) and still fully enjoy the story. That means a lot. Don't worry, Bill and Tom's past connections will be revealed over time.
Date: 05/29/12 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
I never have something to say... but vampire Bill sounds sexy as hell D:
Author's Response: Well you sent me a review, so you must have more to say than the other 95% of people who read this fic. I think Bill is very sexy too. In a powerful, slightly dangerous way ;)
Date: 05/29/12 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 2
"But a lot of people still took issue with the fact that their neighbor might technically be able to eat them."
Loved this sentence xD And I love this story *-*
Author's Response: Haha, thanks. I was quite tickled when I wrote it. Glad you're enjoying it so far!
Date: 05/29/12 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm enjoying this so far. Sci-fi/fantasy is my favorite genre and this is wonderfully written. It's always unnerving to read a first person narrative but I think this works because it's captivating enough that my mind doesn't wander.
Author's Response: Thanks, it's my favorite genre too. I don't like writing first person, but I find it can be easier if I've really developed a deep understanding of the main charachter, and can easily hear their voice in my head as I write.
Date: 05/29/12 04:10 am Title: Chapter 2
Bill sounds like a spoilt lonely brat, used to getting things done his way. Nothing too OOC about that. Tom, on the other hand, sounds positively girly.
I really like the build-up of tension and suspense, not so much the pacing. I hope something actually happens in the next chapter.
Or you could post a chapter everyday. It keeps readers from clawing at screens :D
Author's Response: Bill is powerful in this fic, and that would definately lead to him being bossy, lol. I'm sorry you find Tom girly, that was not my intention at all. Tom is a very negative, cynical character in this fic. So he's angry and upset at circumstances a lot. He's not an emotional brick, as men are often unfairly characturized. Maybe that's why he seems girly to you? As for the pacing, this fic is definatly slower on that front. The plot unfolds on a day-to-day basis, focusing on character development and conversation before action. I hope this doesn't bore you.
Date: 05/29/12 01:08 am Title: Chapter 2
Bill is so creepy and powerful! How ironic he lives in a church. And he disrupted Tom's normal life completely, without even blinking probably. ...Poor Tom. He's resisting as much as he can. I wonder if Bill wants to use him for his touchy-feely powers.
I love the narrative style you have! It's very hard-hitting and it flows. I also like the first person writing perspective! It's done well -- usually, I can't stand reading anything but third person.
Author's Response: Bill is definately less than sweet in this fic, but that's part of his allure. You're right about why Bill is interested in Tom. First person is hard for me to do, but I found that it got easier the more I developed Tom's voice in my head.
Date: 05/28/12 11:28 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ah Bill, so delightfuly evil and yet beautiful as always. Still curoius as to what is going to happen but I do love this so far. Well done :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I love Bill's character in this too.