Date: 03/12/15 01:34 am Title: Never close our eyes.
Did you ever write the story of Bills funeral & Tom getting the news that Bill was his bro?
Author's Response: No, unfortunately. I kind of abandoned this story and this website, but part one never really left my mind. Honestly, I have been thinking about re-writing it all and adding in chapter three. I completely forgot I offered part three. I apologise.
Date: 06/04/12 06:46 pm Title: Never close our eyes.
I really liked it :) The theme, plot, Tom, it was perfect! There is just one thing. Sometimes when you wrote Tom's, and ocassionally Bill's, thoughts they turned out way too cheesy. And it's when you get a cheesy feeling that the emotion feels fake and forced, do you get what I mean? But it's not so bad that it ruins the story tough :) Just a few tips to make it better^^
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and I'll keep that in mind. I like cheesy sometimes. x3.
Date: 05/27/12 03:10 pm Title: Never close our eyes.
Oh, my God. I cannot stop crying. This was so beautiful and heartwrenching and real. The weird thing is that I almost did something similar to this in eighth grade. I was bullied and wanted so badly to show them how much they had hurt me. This story really hit home for me. Very well written, my friend.
Author's Response: Yeah, I put a lot of my pain and experience into this work. I had thoughts and played out scenarios much like this, pretty much why I wrote it the way I did, plus was inspired by Hero by Superchick. I'm glad you felt the emotion and power I tried to throw off to my readers, and hope chapter three will be just as great. I hope you got the help you need, and if you still feel that way, you can always talk to me, or call those hotlines above. Thanks so much for the review, this one really made me smile. <3.
Date: 05/27/12 08:35 am Title: Never close our eyes.
Thank you so much for the second part! I don't know why but the story felt incomplete without it :)
Author's Response: Haha, probably because you only got one side of the story. You're welcome for a second part. (: All these reviews are making me feel amazing, and I'm gonna work on a third part now! Thanks for reviewing. (:
Date: 05/27/12 12:48 am Title: Your whisper like ice.
What a tragedy:-(
Third part would be lovely. I would definitely read it.
Author's Response: Alrighty, I'll work on it. Can't guarantee when it will be up. D: Thanks for reviewing! <3.
Date: 05/26/12 07:59 pm Title: Never close our eyes.
DO IT! I'd read it!
Author's Response: I might. (:
Author's Response: I might. (:
Author's Response: I might. (:
Date: 05/26/12 05:26 pm Title: Never close our eyes.
Omg, I'm sorry if I offended you. I was just reading the reviews and saw you're transgender! I wrote "girl" even though If I'm not wrong you're male. Hope you can forgive me. :c my brother is also trans and I know it might be annoying when people call you the wrong gender.
Author's Response: I identify as male but, it's okay, mistakes happen. (: It is bothersome at times, though, I understand when people make mistakes. Thanks for apologizing, and thanks for a great review, haha. (: <3.
Author's Response: I identify as male but, it's okay, mistakes happen. (: It is bothersome at times, though, I understand when people make mistakes. Thanks for apologizing, and thanks for a great review, haha. (: <3.
Date: 05/26/12 04:43 pm Title: Never close our eyes.
It quite reminds me of this fic I wrote like 2 years ago... It's about how Bill was bullied and commuted suicide, but in mine, Tom is really nice! And mine is in Spanish.
Great work, girl! This is just another way to show the world how bullied people can feel everyday.
Date: 05/26/12 03:17 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
I have to be honest: this is most likely the only story on THF that almost made me cry.
I remember back in 7th grade, I had thoughts of suicide and the reasons for having them were unknown to me. It was probably due to loneliness. I have a social disorder and people discriminate against me because of it.
Just experiencing that in real life makes me understand how Bill feels along with all the LGBTQ youth who have commit suicide in the past few years. This world is just so full of hatred. It makes me sick.
Thanks for sharing this story. :-)
Author's Response: Yeah, I've fought that battle numerous times. It isn't a fun road to go down but, we get stronger and learn from it. I have a social disorder, as well. I get a lot of hate for being transgender, so it's hard. Not saying my life is worse then anyone else's, just sharing something. I hope you got help for your thoughts, and don't feel that way anymore. Thank you for such a kind review, and you're welcome for me sharing the story. (:
Date: 05/26/12 02:58 pm Title: Never close our eyes.
Omg this was so sad I would love another chapter
Author's Response: I hope you read the first one. ^_^. I might throw in a funeral chapter. I planned on making this only one chapter but, my muse and others got the best of me, haha. Thanks for the review.<3.
Date: 05/13/12 07:43 am Title: Your whisper like ice.
Such a sad story. Really good writing though. I felt the biggest sadness when Bill was kissing his little sister good bye in the morning. That was truly heartbreaking. I wish he would have found courage to go on just for the sake of her because what kind of future is awaiting her with a mother like that? Oh boy, my heart was breaking for both Bill and his sister.
Interesting question arises what would have possibly happened to Tom if he found out that Bill was his twin brother (if they were twins in this story at all). He is surely traumatized for the rest of his life by Bill's deed already now but after getting to know that he drove his own brother to suicide - I can't even imagine scope of personal torment and hell he would have go through. Just a thought really, it would be truly interesting to read Tom's POV:-)
Nice story, thank you.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a wonderful review. Yeah, I think you are the only one who picked up on the emotional pull of him telling his sister goodbye before he took his life. I wanted to put in something that would make him want to stop and not take his life but, the harassment would be too great that he felt he needed to end it. He did feel very bad about leaving her behind, and some people might have picked up on that he was being selfish to leave her with their mum like that. Suicide isn't a selfish act, I've been down that road and understand both perspectives of it.rnrnrnI am going to get around to writing Tom's POV someday, this was kind of a spur of the moment deal, kinda just a muse release, you know? A lot of people want to know what is going through Tom's mind, and it will be written someday. Life is just hectic for me right now but, I promise it will get done.rnrnYou're welcome. (:
Date: 05/09/12 08:19 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
WOOOOWWWW!!!!! So freaking amazing that I am speechless, especially at the end!!!!
Author's Response: Hehe, thank you so much.<3.
Date: 05/09/12 06:36 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
I have a ache in my chest :(
It was really touching and sad and I also think you should do Tom' s POV, even if he is evil im sure he's devastated.
Thx for the story, it was really good :)
Author's Response: Not exactly sure how I would portray Tom. xD He didn't know Bill was his brother, so maybe he'll find out somehow, and we'll go from there~rnrn
rnrnThanks for the good review! ^_^.
Date: 05/09/12 03:21 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
O_O Nooo Bill! ;_; that was really good and that was so sad!
Author's Response: I didn't intend on making it a Tokio Hotel story but, that is what came of it, I guess. xD Haha. I have hit two of the three marks I wanted to, it seems. A good story, sad, and making people more aware of LGBTQ suicides.
Date: 05/09/12 02:16 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
Wow, that was shocking, yet amazing at the same time... Would love to read the story from Tom's point of view *hint hint*
Author's Response: Thanks. ^_^ It feels great to know that people are liking my work. I might write one in his POV, if I work up the muse, haha.
Date: 05/09/12 02:48 am Title: Your whisper like ice.
0_0, that is reaaly sad! But I like it though, but I thinnk you should tell us Tom's reaction when Bill shoots himself, to make more... umm dramatic. But still this is great :)
Author's Response: I'm thinking on making a second chapter to follow up on what just happened in this one, so I'll add that in. ^__^ Thanks for the tip and the great review. xD <3.
Date: 05/08/12 11:28 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
That was disturbing but very effective in getting your point across. Well done.
Author's Response: My mind can be kind of twisted at times. x3. Thanks, though, haha.
Date: 05/08/12 09:56 pm Title: Your whisper like ice.
This was amazing. I can't stop crying now. I really loved it(: you did an amazing job.
Author's Response: Haha awh. :C Thanks for the review and comment. I hope no one does this or feels the need to take their life again, it's hard for a lot of people.