Date: 04/29/12 07:29 pm Title: Doomed
The version of Summer Breeze is the one by. Seals and Crofts.
That's totally a douchey thing for management to do... they should still want him to have certain standards. It doesn't look good him coming back and taking any old thing, I would think it wouuld lower his value, which in turn lowers their cut.
I think I would like to see option 2, with Bushido. My second choice would be option 3 where they sulk at home. Option one just seems bad all around. Macking on friends just never works out well. For anyone.
Wonderful work! I am so sad Tom broke up with Bill via email. As Geo said, douche move. Keep up the wonderful work! I can't wait to see more! I hope inspiration returns! Good luck!
Author's Response:
Thanks for telling me which version there are three or four different bands and a bunch of random indivuals that did covers of it so I wanted to make sure I was listening to the right version. It happens all the time you have to rebuild a reputation before anyone big will hire you and by showing you are humble by taking smaller jobs then you are likely to build back to being a good model to hire and it show dependablity as well. Lots of people seem to like option 2 and that will probably be the one that wins. I hated myself for writing the whole email thing but I just want to get the drama rolling. I am glad you like it and I will try to get past writer's block. Thanks for the support and awesome review.
Date: 04/29/12 06:06 pm Title: Doomed
that hard one to pick ..i would pick 1 because i'm fan of Bill/Andreas i think those two are real life pairing ..and i love Torg but bill/bushido how can i refused that pairing its my favourite ..i'll be happy with 1 or 2 ^_^
Author's Response:
I can see Bill and Andi in real life too. I like Bill/Bushido too no idea why. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/29/12 04:28 pm Title: Doomed
Hmm... not sure how i would like to see this play out...i think I'd go with 2... but they should spend a sufficient amount of time being pitiful...
Author's Response:
I am glad at least someone wants to see 2 but we shall see I actually have an idea about how 2 could play out to be really good and really bad at the same time. I am not sure what you mean by being pitiful but I don't think I would write either of them like that. We'll see thanks for the review and the vote.
Date: 04/29/12 03:00 pm Title: Doomed
how about drunken late night fight, make up and phone sex, lol maybe bill can send tom a laptop with a webcam saying he could use it for "school" lol Love this story
Author's Response:
I thought about having an opinion about late night drunken calls but I really have no inspiration in that direction. Thanks for the suggestion though it made me laugh. I am very glad you like this story and I hope you will continue to enjoy despite the fact that, that's not what will happen unfortuantely.
Date: 04/29/12 02:44 pm Title: Doomed
Okay i'm going to go selfish and vote for option 3 lol. I can see the reason to get shitfaced drunk but I think it's too soon to b with n e one else....Although getting drunk and sex pretty much comes hand n hand lol. Ugh! See, this is why i'm going thru a writer's block...too many decisions! On that note, i'll b okay with whatever u decide lol.
Author's Response:
Well, I like the fact that you think they would be smart enough to stay in when they are both upset. I have this issue alot and I thought a great way to get out of writer's block and get the readers more involved was to add a voting opinion. I thought about opinion 3 being one of them getting drunk and making a call to the other and opinion 4 being what opinion three was but I don't have any ideas for the drunk call I am not sure if I will do what the voters say considering that once I started writing I found an opinion I like so we'll see. Thanks for the vote though.
Date: 04/27/12 09:39 pm Title: ...Life Starts
Very cute so far. I like it. Love the nosy friends, been there done that. =) I would suggest a beta, you have some spelling and punctuation errors. I hate when things like that get in the way of a good story. I look forward to more.
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it. I have a constant beta but things have been crazy for her and me lately so our commuciation hasn't been very good lately. Probably the next chapter will be beta'd though. I hate that and I really hate how lazy I have been about betaing lately. I will post soon. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/26/12 01:53 pm Title: ...Life Starts
Cinema Bizarre is AWESOME! As was this chapter. I liked it a lot more than the first. *nodnod* I can't wait to see what comes up! Keep up the lovely work!
Also, I didn't guess about Grease's inspiration, buuut ever since I read. The first chapter I have had the song Summer Breeze stuck in my head... *shifty look* that's kindda lame isn't it??
Author's Response:
I am glad you like CB and this chaapter. I enjoyed writing this more then the first. I am glad you liked it. That's not lame it's interesting. I can't finid which band wrote it orginally so which version do you have stuck in your head. I want to check it out but YouTube's being lame. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/26/12 10:45 am Title: ...Life Starts
nice...i love phone calls that are sincere...and i know the feeling of having friends that are clueless about personal space...i'll be waiting patiently for the next chapter...
Author's Response:
I liked writing the phone calls and writing Andi. He is fun and goofy in all my stories though so... I have a few friends like that too so that's where I got the inspiration from. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/25/12 05:12 pm Title: ...Life Starts
Ohh, pimping out Cinema Bizarre *waggles eyebrows* approved. That Strify is yuuuuummy. ANYWAYS, Andi and Gs do EXACTLY what my friends do when Im on the phone. -.- Bill and Tom have my sympathy. xD Andandand Id never cheat on my guitar Dx Bad Tomi!
Author's Response:
I love that band like its crazy. I'm obsessive even more so then with TH which is saying something. Strify is amazing, the fantasies I have about that man are... well very naughty. I also like Kiro is so cute but completely sexy at the same time. More on point my friends do that too which is what I was thinking about as I wrote it. Bill and Tom are always so doomed in my stories. I always put them through so much so early. Yes, Tom still the bad boy playa cheating on his guitar but Bill is cute so I don't blame him.
Date: 04/25/12 02:09 pm Title: ...Life Starts
Love the chapter! Can't wait to read more :)
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/25/12 01:01 pm Title: ...Life Starts
Really Good , i love the nosy friend thing, made me chuckle I had friends like that back in the day , cant wait for more
Author's Response:
I still have friends like that which is where I get the inspiration from. I am glad you like it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/24/12 05:45 pm Title: Summer Ends...
I didn't even read the summery. Just saw that you wrote it, and it was BillXTom xD I hummed "Summer Lovin" from Grease the entire time I was reading this xD EPIC WIN. Now must go tell Leah this is up. Toodles *wave*
Author's Response:
I am glad inspire such loyalty. That is really great to hear you say that. I was inspired by Grease a little so Summer Lovin fits. Thanks see you tomorrow.
Date: 04/24/12 09:51 am Title: Summer Ends...
i like...it's nice to be liked for who you are rather than what someone can get out of you...
Author's Response:
Yeah but unfortunately many people like people for what they can get out of them rather then who they are. It's sad really. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/24/12 09:05 am Title: Summer Ends...
Nice chapter! I'm looking forward to more :)
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/24/12 08:11 am Title: Summer Ends...
Reminds me of Grease. I kept picturing summer lovin' in here. But it's distinctly different and I want to read more of it.
Author's Response:
I got some of the idea from a picture I saw. It's wasn't even of TH it was of Cinema Bizarre. I also listened to Grease while writing this chapter and kind f felt inspired by Sandy and Johnny so there will be a few similarities. I am glad you like it.
Date: 04/24/12 02:15 am Title: Summer Ends...
I like it.... Can't wait to read the next chapter....
Author's Response:
I am glad you like it. Chapter 2 should be up tomorrow.
Date: 04/24/12 12:58 am Title: Summer Ends...
Really good start!!
Author's Response:
Thank you. I a glad you like it. I like your penname.
Date: 04/24/12 12:38 am Title: Summer Ends...
mmm...to be honest it feels a little flat. It seems like it will be an interesting story, but you did a lot of telling in this opening chapter, rather than showing us. Don't get me wrong, I totally understand why. The previous stuff isn't really important enough to this story, but you can't just jump in or people will be lost and confused. So you try to gloss over some stuff. I notice I do the same thing.
Anyway...I look forward to seeing where this goes!
Author's Response:
Yeah I tried to make it showing without giving too much away. There are a few secrets that each young man is hiding from themselves and each other. It will get better but the first chapter is just a set up chapter. I am glad you are interested in the story.
Date: 04/24/12 12:09 am Title: Summer Ends...
really liking it so far :)
Author's Response:
Thank you I am glad you like it.
Date: 04/23/12 11:37 pm Title: Summer Ends...
excellent start waiting for more ever so patiently
Author's Response:
Thank you. I am glad you like it.