Date: 04/29/12 02:14 am Title: deux
Your first time writing explicit het has been pretty successful:-) I never read TH het - well, as long Bill is a girl in it, I can deal, otherwise it feels like having teeth pulled out one by one - but Bill/Tom HET twin story was difficult to let pass:-)
I am so intrigued by your story and to see Bill and Tom sharing some sexy times on a living room couch alreday in the second chapter of it came as a little shocker to me, to be honest. I didn't expect it to happen so soon into the story. I guess it's not too soon for Bill and Tom since they have been that way around each other for some time already, but it felt a little too soon for this story, if you understand what I mean. So, that made my mind spin with all possibilities and I am trying to figure out where you are really taking it... ? There should be always a reason why to mention and incorporate certain things and details in the plot, right?... what is Lukas' role, why did you write this - "He knew he should pull out, even though she was on birth control, it was dumb to come inside his twin sister. He knew that, and the thought was in his head as he shot his load inside her anyway. It felt too fucking good. He was young and dumb and full of cum; that was his excuse" -? Was it just a magnificant tool you used to make it extra hot and spicy or was there more behind it? Are we heading towards unwanted, unexpected pregnancy here, is Lukas going to serve as a cover up for twins... you planted all these ideas into my head now-:))) By the tone of your writing which is pretty light, entertaining, funny and snarky I don't think we are stearing towards any major angst situation, but...
I can't wait to read the next chapter, that's for sure:-)))
Great story!
Oh, and I forgot to mention that Bill's and Tom's chemistry is sizzling hot here, they are so wrapped up in each other, it is so sweet, so charming.
Author's Response: thank you for your kind support :) I never read het, either, unless it's genderswap twincest. Nothing against other types of het, but I just enjoy the twins pairing (n_n)
I think I understand what you mean, about it being a shocker. Most fics tend to build up for many chapters before there are sex scenes. The plot here is different. It starts with them already in the midst of a very sexualized relationship, and it's about the progression of their relationship from this point. So, I do see why you felt it was early, but it was as intended. I could go on, but I think you'll see what I mean if you continue reading :)
I love that you're such a thoughtful reader, and enjoy hearing all your theories on what might happen. Thanks for reading/reviewing. I'm glad you're liking it so far. New chapter tonight :)
Date: 04/29/12 01:37 am Title: deux
LOVE MEOW
Author's Response: summer is here, my unikitty!! <3333
Date: 04/29/12 12:06 am Title: deux
Bill is really attractive as a girl, especially if she has boobs like the girl in the picture. It's so much dirtier as het, wtf. The slash twincest is like, normal. Whoa.
I love this Bill, I really do! I also like that you just named her Bill ad not Billi or Billa or something. Naming her Bill like the real Bill makes her more tangible and solid of a character, I think. It's hard to explain exactly... I'm looking forward to more, and hope that Bill doesn't get pregnant!
Author's Response: hahaha, totally. Bill would be the hottest girl ever imo ;~; Ikr, it's pretty filthy het (-_-)
I'm glad you love her :) I very much wanted her to be "Bill", not Billi or anything else. I wanted it to be just regular Bill with a different body. Thank you for reading/reviewing. new chapter tonight :)
Date: 04/28/12 10:56 pm Title: deux
Ahhh thank you for the update! I love it! Now we get to meet the mysterious Lukas, whose name Bill dangled to make Tom jealous. I love that he's the front for White Exclamation Point...NEMESIS and anti-Black Question Mark! Tom's certainty about their superiority is only exceeded by Bill's, I am sure. :3
Their possessiveness is just precious. It strikes a more twin-ly than couple-y note and that's perfect. Either way Caveman Tom is hot, I'll take it. Ahaha, or stand back and watch BIll take it. >_>
POCKET POOL DAHAHAHAHA That's what I totally love about your Bill, she IS so crass and does/says whatever she wants.
Tom is so bad with his feelings. But it's true! No one knows what it's like to be either of them. I know Lukas did, like, the honorable thing trying to approach Tom or whatever, but seriously...did he think Tom was going to give him his blessing, or something? That's a great moment, so twinny of them at the end there to just bump each other and the argument is over just like that. :3 Love them.
THE SEX IS JUST PERFECT, OKAY, THE WAY BILL IS PERFECT. I'm not going to embarrass you by going over it ~in detail~ but aww yeah. I will say I love getting Tom POV while they're, ahem, involved. :3 He's so gone for her, definitely dumb for Bill, it's sexy to imagine horny Tom with drunkly innocent Bill.
Bill tooooooootally has Tom by the balls. And, well, the whole band. Love it, I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next! Once again sorry for the embarrassingly long review. -_____-; I hope it shows you how much I adore Gerbill and her Dumb Tom.
Author's Response: hahaha, yes. I am shameless, as you know, and cannot resist something as dumb as naming Lukas's band White Exclamation Point. For Bill, it's not even a question who is the better band, of course! :3
More twinly than coupley is how I roll. And I'm totally convinced that Bill is more pervy/crass than Tom off camera. Or if that's not humanly possible, as pervy/crass at least.
thank you my pal ;~; posting new chapter tonight. then I watch Iron Man maybe :3333
Date: 04/28/12 10:49 pm Title: deux
thanks for the awesome smut. it was delicious. ;3 keep writing!!
Author's Response: you're very welcome :3 thanks for reading/reviewing!
Date: 04/24/12 09:59 pm Title: un
Oh, I'm loving this to bits.
I'm definitely looking forward to what's next.
Take care!
Author's Response: I'm glad to hear it :) Thank you for reading/reviewing!
Date: 04/23/12 11:26 am Title: un
Absolutely marvelous, charming, intriguing and delicious start to a great story. Your writing is so bloody great. Go on, just go on.
I adore a bitch Bill already:-)
Author's Response: thank you so much for your kind words and support :) Glad you're enjoying it so far!
Date: 04/23/12 03:17 am Title: un
Good! Continue..
Author's Response: thank you for r/r :)
Date: 04/23/12 02:44 am Title: un
btw, this story has me soooo thinking of this pic: http://i111.photobucket.com/albums/n135/nicoley006/11-1040332447L.jpg
Author's Response: omg yes! such a stunning manip! I have a lot of little photos and things that inspired this fic. I'll post one with each chapter for some eye/ear candy :-)
Date: 04/23/12 02:36 am Title: un
love this!! keep writing!! I'll keep reviewing! :3
Author's Response: thank you!! I appreciate your support :)
Date: 04/23/12 01:23 am Title: un
More, more and oh yeah....more! I love Bills snarkiness :-)
Author's Response: thank you for reading/reviewing! much more snarkiness ahead ;)
Date: 04/22/12 06:29 pm Title: un
Oh my god! Lovely chapter.
I completely fell in love with this story.
I'm definitely going to keep reading this! So please don't neglect this story ~
Author's Response: Thank you for your support :) I'm glad you're enjoying it to so far. I definitely won't neglect it!
Date: 04/22/12 05:31 pm Title: un
oh dolly my dolly our dolly :)))))))))))
Author's Response: soon THF will be overrun with unicorns hehehehehe
Date: 04/22/12 03:19 pm Title: un
way to make me read het! jeez, Bill as a girl, well, somehow you're doing it right. lol. I like it, she's so...awesomely assured of herself. a little rude, too, haha.
Author's Response: I blame Bill for making me *write* het! I'm glad you think I'm doing girl!Bill right :) One thing Bill definitely has - whether as a boy or girl - is an abundance of self-assurance ;) and a bit of a snarky attitude~ lol. Thanks for reading/reviewing!
Date: 04/22/12 12:59 pm Title: un
LOOK AT THIS FREE BITCH OH MY GOD HERE COMES BILL FUCKING KAULITZ, and she is so goddamn flawless she's got my heart. Every single word of those first three paragraphs is pure truth.
Bill doesn't have time to be jealous, she just puts those cheerleaders in their place. I'm purely delighted by the lead-in to this! It's so adorable that she uses her period as an excuse for Tom to do EVERYTHING, and Tom lets her get away with it because he doesn't really want to know how it works anyhow.
The banter between Bill and the guys is just perfect. I can picture those guilty-faced guys trying not to look at Bill's UNDOUBTEDLY AMAZING RACK because Tom will punch them if he catches them looking.
You hit such a major kink with me with Bill in Tom's nightshirts and Tom in the pajama pants! It's so goddamn sexy, and no wonder their mom bitches, because it's such a couple thing but so sweetly twinny, I love it. And just like the boobs, how can Tom help but look at those legs?
Bill knows exactly what she's doing, getting all of Tom's attention for her. All I have to say is, how can the two of them help but be self-involved (with each other) when it is te goddamn truth and everyone IS ugly compared to them?
DELICIOUS SEXUAL TENSION, why must you be broken by a cockblocking mother? Crying. ;_; I love Bill saying "he's already seen everything!" though, such a Bill thing to say, such a Mom thing to have a counter-argument.
I love these twins, and I've soooo missed the way you write twins so I'm, like, TRIPLY excited about this story. Thank you so so so so so so much for posting! *_* I didn't know if we'd ever get to enjoy your Gerbill so Darcy's present is a gift to all of us. Can't wait for more!! And, uh, sorry for the incoherent review.
Author's Response: One time Bill Kaulitz met John Stamos on a plane... and he told her she was pretty.
ita, she's the freest bitch ever. Compared to her, Gaga's got a life sentence with no parole. Compared to her, Miley's been tamed.
Yas, I love imagining them in their shared pjs (n_n) All Tom's pj tops are belong to Bill. Simone should just give up and stop buying nightgowns that go to waste.
Thank you, my pal ;~; that's very sweet of you to be excited. I didn't know if I'd post Gerbill either... ilhsfm and was very :wrings hands: at the thought of being butthurt if no one read or liked it. Thanks for your support, and for helping me finally decide on a dumb summary. arghghgaghghagh why was that so hard, hahaha. More soon!
Date: 04/22/12 12:58 pm Title: un
That is such a good first chapter! I'm very intrigued to read more!! I looove the plot and I can't wait to see where you're gonna take this story :)
Author's Response: Thank you, my dear :) You're always so supportive. I appreciate you!
Date: 04/22/12 11:28 am Title: un
Ahhhhhhhhhh yeeeeeeeessssssssssssssssss I love this pairing. ;o; More soon yes? I am not above begging.
Author's Response: I love this pairing, too! Depending on how it's done, of course. More soon, yes! thanks for reading/reviewing :)
Date: 04/22/12 11:15 am Title: un
Completely obsessed over this careless Bill! i love the sassiness in her character and i adore how Tom gives in to every whim. Its almost like he's wrapped around Bill's finger ;)
Author's Response: Awesome! Tom is most definitely wrapped around her finger ;-) Thanks for the support!
Date: 04/22/12 09:01 am Title: un
Wow!
Author's Response: thanks :)
Date: 04/22/12 07:28 am Title: un
WOO, I love the start! Bitchy Bill FTW, haha :D Really promising! And I loved the fact that they share Tom's PJs, CUTEEE ^^,
Can't wait for more *excited*
Author's Response: haha, glad you're enjoying it so far :) Thanks for reading/reviewing!