Date: 09/09/12 11:40 am Title: 23. Royal Harmony
I can only make one sound right now: Awwwwwwww !
Author's Response: I figured there's be a collective "awwwwww!" heard round the world ;)
Date: 09/09/12 07:59 am Title: 23. Royal Harmony
Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!!! This reminds me of the the night I got engaged.
My favourite line: "Ring. Kay's eyes. Ring. Kay's eyes." I totally bursted into a happy laughter.
You, my darling, are the most talended writer.
I like this story so much, it is my favourite on the whole site, at the moment. That is, until you write your new one.
Kay is absolutely brilliant in this, not just the fact that he came out the way he did, so unexpectedly, but he is going the whole mile ( I hope this is correct, I am not a native English speaker) to be with Bill.
I wanted to review all the chapters I missed reviewing, but I had to say this. I hope I will keep the promise I made to myself. You deserve it, a small reward for the great plesure and joy you bring me with your writing.
Author's Response: Fainted with joy from your high praise. When I came to, I thought it was a dream. Read the review again and fainted. This happened six more times. Still feeling woozy. Thank you so very much for the love! Writing is fun; short reviews are nice and it's good to know people are out there; longer reviews make it a little more exciting; reviews like this make it the best thing in the world. Thank you. Going into what you mention on the chapter - that must have been some proposal from your hubby! Glad I could bring you back to that night ;) I'm thrilled that you are enjoying Kay's character so much (yes, he is going the whole mile - your English is impeccable). Thank you again for letting me know how much you're enjoying this - I'm enjoying your reviews just as much!
Date: 09/09/12 04:05 am Title: 23. Royal Harmony
I can just see you sitting at your computer, typing away, cranking out this lovely little chapter, just *sitting* *typing* *thinking* *general mizu-being* and then just being like "Let's make shitpisscatfuck just wanna cry, orgasm, die, and just have ALL the emotions all at once." Well, even if that's not how it went down, you still succeeded. I have no words. Except that's a lie because I have like a thousand of them. First off all, Bill getting high with Tom was just hilarious. Them and their marshmallow sacrifices to the liquid god and their ketchup. I'm general opposed to drugs and have an "ew that's disgusting" attitude towards them, even when reading about drug use in fiction - it's judgy of me but it usually makes me think less of people/characters - but this was pure comedy and brilliance. I laughed my butt off and I think my roommate was growing concerned. Also - super random side note but I need to say this now before I continue my praises - I was in the little convenience store we have on campus here and they were selling sippy cups or something and the brand was Coati. I wanted to take a picture but my phone got stolen :(. Anyways, back to my actual review... Kay blowing Bill. I flipped out. It was like one of those things where I had never consciously realized that Kay had never blown Bill, but then when he pointed it out that this was his first time doing it was just like :3 and sexy all at the same time. I'm wondering if now that Kay and Bill are engaged that Bill's gonna have to tell Kay that he's in therapy because of his sexy-Tom issues? But I'm getting ahead of myself... Kay taking Bill out was wonderful, I loved him spying on him in the bathroom before he blew him too. Damn, I'm all over the place, I'm sorry, but I'm gushing. And then the proposal. Honestly can say I didn't actually see it coming. And I was surprised Bill said yes, actually. I'm hoping he didn't just say yes because it feels good to be so loved. We'll see. And then Kay's tests results!!! Yay! And Bill's reaction to everything. The whole "ring. kay's eyes. ring. kay's eyes" was perfect. Bill ditching Kay despite having spent the whole chapter talking about how he needed a thick cock up his ass just so that he could call Tom even after just having found out that his fiance could make love to him without a condom... Hilarious. But again, makes me wonder if/when Bill tells Kay that he's in therapy and shit (I'm just assuming Kay doesn't know... or else I missed something/am stupid/both) then Kay will actually get jealous of their perfectly twinny relationship? Who knows?Probably you. That was a dumb question. Also, I've been telling one of my friends that she should be reading this story for MONTHS - pretty much since you posted the first chapter - but she insisted she wasn't gonna start it until it's finished but I've finally managed to convince her of its amazingness and now she's indulged. I just have to have real life people friends with whom I can discuss your amazing talents.
Author's Response: First off - I am so jealous of you having real life friends who share this addiction, I totally meant hobby, with you. (Little angry face). I have a friend who read my first three, but only because she loves me. I have a friend into yaoi, but not into reading non-Jap boy stories (which I understand, truly I do - Moonchild fanfics are what brought me here), and a friend who wanted to read out of curiosity about what I was reading, but stopped after 4 chapters of Shrouded in Fog and said it was "really good" but she hated reading on the computer. ................I am so lonely. ..................Oh, but I do have you, and your beautifully wordy reviews. It's uncanny how you knew what I was thinking while writing that last chapter! "Hmmm....making SPCF cry, orgasm, and die all at once....first ingredient - a silly marijuana scene with Bill and Tom wherein (I love the word wherein, don't you?) it makes the drug seem so harmless and fun. Second ingredient....Kay giving head (made me wanna cry just typing that)...third and absolute key ingredient.... a proposal! Ta da! (gets up off the couch and takes a bow). Analysis time! (game-show sounds in background. I love analysis). Bill saying yes? Well, isn't it a good enough reason that it's because Kay makes him feel good to be so loved? Better than because he wants his money or the ego boost of being married to a well-known rapper. Or being pregnant. Or thinking you're in love. Anyway....Kay worships Bill, Bill adores being worshipped - match made in heaven. Besides, Bill loves Kay (there, the answer you know you REALLY wanted to hear). As for telling him about his dirty little Tom secret? NEVER GONNA HAPPEN. Bill is narcissistic. One of the main imperitives for narcissists to be happy is that other people see them as the narcissist wants to be seen. A freaky little thing like that, and Kay would never see Bill the same. Bill would have none of that, nu uh, no way, no how. Probably would even hide being in therapy at all. Showing a weakness that big? Nu uh, no way, no how. That you didn't see the proposal coming...fantastic! I hope the scene worked for you, as fast as that happened. But Kay, he doesn't wanna wait. Who knows when prop 800 will get reversed again (theoretically)! On to the coati cup - man, that sucks that your phone got stolen. Just wanted to say it. Okay...your stance on drugs, admirable, and I'm thrilled you could overcome your general attitude of skeeviness for all things mind-altering to enjoy the party! Next chapter will have Bu and Tom, a little more Bu and Tom, and some Bu and Tom. I know Kay and Bill have yet to be shown having that condomless sex, but it's out there...........And for spreading the word of Mizu.....you have done well, SPCF. I shall let it be known that you are one of the favored ones......(and thank you, it is a big old heart warming feeling I've got going on). Let your friend know the next chapter will be up no later than Saturday and I'm not one of those who doesn't finish stories in a timely manner, so have no fear!
Date: 09/08/12 04:20 pm Title: 1. All Hail the Queen
Aww Kay proposed to Bill! I want more Bu and Tom, they're so cute! Update soon!
Author's Response: Update will hopefully be done next Fri. And Tom and Bu? Well, yeah!
Date: 09/08/12 07:59 am Title: 23. Royal Harmony
awe ... love it
Author's Response: thanks for letting me know!
Date: 09/07/12 11:37 pm Title: 23. Royal Harmony
Gah!! I knew it! Way to go Kay!!! I had this feeling in the pit of my stomach that a proposal was going to happen in this chapter! Yay!
I'm not too sure if Kay thinks Bill having a twin is a good thing o a bad thing, though. Ah, he'll get used to it better!
Maybe another certain twin will be proposed to as well *ehm hint hint*
I can't wait for more! And by that I mean more Bu and Tom hehe
Thanks for the lovely chapter, Hun!
Author's Response: My pleasure, TCG! Glad to know you're enjoying the story (and getting psychic vibes n stuff). As for Bill having a twin - Kay knows it will just be part of Bill, so he'll accept it. And Bu n Tom....well, you know....Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 09/06/12 05:13 am Title: 21. Queenie of the Damned
Got to apologise for taking a while reading and reviewing, I saw the email to say you'd updated and kept trying to read, but kept getting interrupted so I left it until I had a good while to sit and read it all through in one go. It was so worth the wait. Love how Bu takes care of Tom but gently nudges him to explore outside his comfort zone. Love the banter between Kay and Bu, always so damn funny the way Bu teases him in a friendly way. And planting ideas about marriage in Kay's head...bad, bad Bu. Absolutely adore the whole butt zit scene...and no, I am not owning up to doing the same to my dear husband who's had to put up with my obsession with all things pus-related for...well, far too many years!!!! But you got is so right! And the psychoanalytic shit between the twins...Tom was very brave to jump in with that and so understanding and compassionate really, considering he was the one who'd actually been abused, but realising that Bill had also been damaged by what he'd witnessed. So proud of Bill, too, for deleting every sign of the video. Just hoping that he can work through things and that having Kay away for so long won't tip him into doing something stupid sexually considering he's a 3-times a day man - at least. And I don't mean with Tom, just that he's been pretty casual about sex in the past (remembers Trevor/Troy and the 3-some with Andrej) and it can be difficult to change that mindset. It would break Kay's heart if Bill cheated on him, even if a casual hook-up meant nothing to Bill. Would break Bill's too I think if he lost Kay through his own stupidity, after all, apart from Tom, he's never loved anyone before. Okay, sorry, don't know where that speculation came from, you just get me so damned involved in this story I start seeing plotlines all over the place. Or maybe I'm making suggestions so you have to keep this going for a while yet...I love this story and seriously don't want it to end. Although I'm dying to find out what you've got plannned for the next one. And you are an angel for the plug for Gordon's Dilemma. I keep on sweating over writing it and only get a couple of reviews per chapter and seriously doubt whether its any good (you know I have this whole inferiority complex over my writing) but I know its all angsty and twincest and not everyone's cup of tea. Must say, there's way too much het on this site at the moment, though, so its the best that there are committed slash writers like you...oh, and me! Thanks, anyway, you even made GD sound exciting! Waiting on the edge of my seat as always for the next update. Hope you're well, my dear. Everything pretty okay here at the mo. Will try and email you soon just to catch up. Love and hugs, Helen x
Author's Response: I'm always so happy to get your reviews, Helen! (the ones I've been getting for this story have slowed way, way, waaayyy down for the last HALF of this story, too. Considering the drought of slash, I wonder where all our readers are??). Don't feel inferior for GD, it's really, really good! The intensity and despair are things I can only take in small doses, only because I soak up emotions like a ridiculous sponge. Had to stop reading ....shit, I can't remember the name of it, I think it was One Fine Day by knw but I can't find those in the searches, weird. Anyway, had to stop because it was really good but really sad and I realized there was major character death listed as a warning. And Thairice's Bad - it's actually a good thing that she doesn't post often because I can only take that story in tiny doses! THAT'S how good yours is ("I can't read it!" is a compliment! *laffin*). I remember reading KofK - I was in a bad mood for months! Reading GD, and how MESSED UP poor Bill is, just breaks my heart. And Simone, I love how you're making her psycho mom. I know she's got her reasons, but I want to stab her several times! ............guess your review turned into my review! Okay, focus....you know the scene with B&T psychoanalyzing Bill's issue, well, I owe that idea to you! You'd mentioned it in one of your reviews and of course, it was brilliantly logical. Of COURSE that would affect Bill in all kinds of weird ways - especially when he was already a troubled, neglected child. As for the zit thing, you and I are sympatico on that one. For Bill, aside from the fact that that monster needed a good punishing, it was something that real life, in love couples do. Popping that zit was a token of his love. Oh, and I love Bu and Kay together, they are a lot of fun. Hopefully I'll be able to get more of them in before the end (which is somewhere around the corner...I'm hoping....jeez, I've got other stories to write!! This one just seems to keep insisting on staying alive....) And how Bu is with Tom, yeah, he's not gonna baby him, which is really good for Tom. Bill and his sexual ... issues...well, he never struck me as one who cheats, really. The kitchen boy was after he'd had muscle relaxers and enough wine to get a t-rex drunk, then afterwards it was a joint adventure with Bu. And when he'd slept with Kay/Andrej (man, I think I'll re-read that chapter) it was after he knew that he and Bu were over. I think Bill would and could go to bed with Tom, though, but I don't know how well he'd handle the guilt factor afterwards. He'd probably get all mad at Kay and break up with him as though Kay had done something wrong. He'd be too ashamed to tell him anything. And since he does manage to keep himself from throwning himself at his twin, I think he'd probably just get really bitchy and play with his billdos a LOT. ...........this is going to take up an entire page on your list of your reviews....Anyway. I understand why there's het on this site, although there really shouldn't be if I had my druthers! Too many little girls who want to live out their fantasies of being with the twins. They just don't understand that slash fic is soooo much better than anything they'd ever be able to dream up of them being "the one fan" that Bill or Tom falls in love with. Yuck. I've noticed there's a bit of a dry spell, too...if you have any suggestions.....Alright, time to get to writing! thank you as always for such a wonderful review, I do love hearing from you!
Date: 09/05/12 01:38 am Title: 21. Queenie of the Damned
Tom on top + butt zits + talking through Bill's feelings + Lucky Charms = Best chapter ever. :D
Author's Response: Loved this review! (I worry a little that all the talky-talky is off-putting, thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it)
Date: 09/05/12 01:28 am Title: 20. Palatial Regalia
Bill's love for Kay is so sweet and hot to read! Kay's got everything right. And after all, every kiss begins with Kay. ^_^ It was nice seeing Tom reunite with Bu too. SO MUCH LOVE. Rather like the love I have for this story.
I adored the beginning breakfast scene! I read it twice. So charming! I love the twins' dynamic. Tom's a really great guy. :)
Author's Response: OMG that was funny! You literally made me lol! I hate those commercials. So glad you're liking Bill/Kay. And b-fast is the most important part of the day (gonna have me some French toast here shortly....man, I love French toast). Thank you so much for all your reviews (as a writer here you know how it feels to get them, too, yay). Working on the next chapt, I'm thinking you'll enjoy the start
Date: 09/05/12 01:16 am Title: 19. The Queen's Secret
Am I a sick and awful person for loving the Bill/Tom issues that are still going on? Even though it's obvious how much it distresses the twins? *pouts* I just really like it, how messed up it is and how dramatic and emotional it makes everything.
Author's Response: Sick and twisted is the whole reason we're all on this site! Couldn't have feelings like that go away overnight, anyway. The parts of our brain that encompass our sex drive are very complex and often dark. It's wonderful to know you find this part interesting, Melluransa ;)
Date: 09/05/12 12:42 am Title: 18. Regrets of the Fair Queen
Your chapters are so wonderfully jam-packed with content that it makes me want to sing your praises forever. :D So much goes on! You're spoiling me with such long, wonderful, hilarious, and enthralling chapters.
Author's Response: Thank you, Melluransa! I worry sometimes it's a little TOO much. Geez they've been getting long! (not like Mirror Images, though - each chapter is a book! which is a very very good thing). I'm so thrilled to know you're still enjoying this, cuz I am too!
Date: 09/03/12 02:36 pm Title: 21. Queenie of the Damned
Ew that was really gross. I'll be damned if I'd ever pop someone else's pimple. They can suffer.
9/10
****
Author's Response: Aw, don't mess with Bill's fun! He liked it. It was all, like, boyfriendy n stuff. Gross or not. It's a couples thing.
Date: 09/03/12 12:20 pm Title: 21. Queenie of the Damned
You're always so perfect. Too perfect. Stop doing that! No wait... I take it back! Carry on with your perfection. I enjoy it too much. I think this was one of my favorite chapters ever. It had everything: Bu/Tom, Kay/Bill, a little bit of twin time... everything was perfect. I hope Bu finds time to go see Wicked and see along if he can. And I'm so glad Tom got to experience riding Bu. Definitely wouldn't mind a repeat performance ;) And butt zits. Ooooh butt zits. Your characters are so amazing because they can take the most disgusting things ever that most people would never even talk about, and still make them loving, caring, tender, and - dare is say it? - sexy moments.
Author's Response: Ni hao SPCF! I do hope things are going well for you on the silk road. Okay, niceties out of the way, on to your review! Another perfect chapter? Yay, me! Thank you, thank you (bows graciously a few times). I was in such a rush to get it done because I'd skipped a week while playing up in the mountains (boring mountains, nothing like Qionglai mountains of Tibet. Oh, also, I was reading Tinie's Roll of the Dice. Jesus, I am almost ashamed to receive praise from anyone after reading that! How boring am I in comparison to that! Okay, anyway once again....I like getting a dash of everyone in, and hoped that between rushing and throwing in a bit of everyone that it didn't seem a bit rough around the edges. If it gets the SPCF seal of approval, then I am delighted. I'm sure Bu will manage to get to see his musical (I swear that man is a chorus girl at heart). And Tom on top - when I first thought of it, I realized he'd probably be a little shy, the cutie pie. And Bill and the Amazing Butt Zit! He was so happy to be doing things he thinks "real couples" do! Little weirdo. (well....can't say he isn't right, though). That it came across so sweetly (and a little sexy, I'm so glad you dared), well...Yay! Bonus! Love hearing from you and hope to see some more posts from you in the near future!
Date: 08/22/12 10:17 am Title: 20. Palatial Regalia
Still enjoying the party, need more tom and anis
Author's Response: Thanks for letting me know, it's appreciated. And you KNOW more T&A is coming up! *snicker*
Date: 08/21/12 10:36 pm Title: 1. All Hail the Queen
HAHHHAHAAH OH MY GOD BILLDOS. I died several times.
Author's Response: Several times? Welcome back! :)rn
Date: 08/21/12 10:41 am Title: 20. Palatial Regalia
CONGRATULATIONS ON BEING FEATURED! As soon as I got to my hotel today and I flipping a shit, asking all of the hotel workers how I could use the internet (which was hard because they don't speak English or even traditional Mandarin Chinese here - I'm in Tibet) but I eventually worked it out all because my body and soul and mind and entire being was screaming at me that I had to have my weekly dose of Delusions of Narcissus. I'm so glad you chose to focus more on Kay/Queenie this chapter! It was a lovely change of pace, but this means you have to give me more Bu/Tom next week! As always, this was sheer perfection and I loved everything about it.
Author's Response: Hello, spcf! How flattering is it that you're in friggin Tibet, yet jonesing to read this story? Blushing, really, I am. That is one loooonnng flight! The 12 hours to Tokyo from L.A. really starts to drag after about an hour and a half. Can't imagine adding another what, twelve to fifteen with layovers? Then, being in such a foreign place, I understand needing a bit of normalcy. I'm so excited for you to be there! And thank you so much for the congrats. Being featured is amazing! I'm glad you're liking the Bill/Kay parts (I've gotten a couple of grumps about them, but I loved how Raiju did Kay and Bill in King of Kingz, so the pairing was in the back of my mind). And we'll definitely see more Tom/Bu! Hope you have the time of your life in China!
Date: 08/21/12 04:44 am Title: 1. All Hail the Queen
Forgot to say congrats on being featured. You really, really deserve it for such and amazing story with such incredible writing talent.
Date: 08/21/12 04:42 am Title: 20. Palatial Regalia
How do you keep doing it? Yet another incredible chapter. Loved the way Tom cajoled Bill until he lightened his mood. He must really love his twin. I feel so sorry for Bill. It's awful that he thinks he's a pervert for having those thoughts. He can't really help his feelings, it's hard to prevent your thoughts wandering and now he's with Tom so much more he's constantly got his sexy twin around him. It's good that Tom understands him and isn't completely disgusted but wants to help Bill work through his issues. It may be that being around Tom so much will deal with the issue anyway, in that Bill will eventually just slip into a solely brotherly relationship and find his inappropriate thoughts crop up less and less often. Also, now he's in love with someone else...Oh, Wow, that part was so great! Kay is such a sweet, sweet man. So OTT romantic. It was so good the way you had Bill slowly, but surely accepting his new emotions. I'm glad he finally got around to saying it, I could just feel Kay dying to hear the words but not wanting to push Bill. As for Tom, it's so good that he's gradually uncovering his talents. He's been feeling so down on himself that he has nothing to contribute but he and Bill spark ideas off each other and then he's got hs own thing with the mixing. Gordon's pride in him is lovely, even if some of it is linked to Tom's new notoriety and the prestige he can bring to his business. You can see where Bill gets some of his little ways from. But Gordon seemed really impressed by Tom's intelligence, and it was great that he was prepared to make concessions to accomodate Tom's studies. I think its best if Tom keeps quiet about the video being on Bill's phone, both the fact that he would think Bu capable of sending it to Bill or that Bill deliberately sent it to himself. Its not like Bill is going to say anything about it, so Bu's unlikely to find out any other way. Unless Bill feels so guilty he decides to confess. But can't see that happening. Okay, I think that's all for now. Except...just a thought...maybe its time the twins ganged up and arranged something super-romantic for their boyfriends. I'd be interested in what you could come up with. On the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Hello Helen! Thank you so much!!! I couldn't believe this was featured - I was expecting Thairice's Bad, definitely. As for my humble ramblings here...Yes, poor Bill is having a hard time dealing with his little problem. But he and Tom are going to be doing more talking (next chapter, we'll see what they have to say!), and being in love with Kay might just distract him long enough for all of that to just soak back to the depths of his subconscious instead of being out in the bright light of day. And OTT romance - I can't seem to stay away from it! It's a good thing Tom is finding a little bit of himself in his new careers, he really does tend to be insecure. Gordon's selfish side coming out a little - no wonder it wasn't too hard for him to ignore the kids when they were younger! But he's trying to be a better father. That doesn't mean he can't think in business terms at the same time, huh? I don't think Tom's going to tell Bu about the video ordeal. But I do worry about Bill and if he gets drunk around Bu, you know? As for more dates, and Tom and Bill being the instigators...well, we'll have to see! Thanks as always for your lovely, wonderful review, Helen. I'm slowly reading yours, but I'm out of town and haven't had a chance to do a review yet. Plus, I'm reading it slowwwwwly because I'll be cranky when I get to the end of chapter six and there's no more!! But, no begging you to hurry, you take your time and be happy with it!
Date: 08/20/12 08:29 pm Title: 20. Palatial Regalia
Congratulations on the feature, hun!! You definitely deserved it! =D
I think I say this every time I review, but I can't help it....I LOVE THIS FIC SO MUCH!!! Gah!! It's one of the fics that I track that I get so very excited about when I see a new update! It's wonderful!
This was such a sweet chapter. I loved that Kay and Bu surprised the Twins. I had a feeling it was going to be one or both at the door and you didn't disappoint!
YAY! Bill loves Kay! I'm so glad he told him as well. I wish I had a man that treated me like Kay treats Bill or how Bu treats Tom. I wish I had a man, period LOL
I love this fic more and more, with every chapter that you write. Thank YOU for writing this wonderful story and sharing it with us all.
Author's Response: Hi, TCG! What a beautifully sweet review! I was so surprised to be featured - it's so amazing. I'm so happy you're enjoying the story and that you let me know. It's been going on for a long time now (20 very long chapters!) and I worry readers are getting bored or the story feels stale (not to me, I'm still having so much fun, and so much more so when I know you're out there sharing it with me). Isn't Kay a doll! I'm thinking he's going to be very good for Bill. This has been a blast. Thank you so much again for your review!
Date: 08/20/12 11:21 am Title: 20. Palatial Regalia
Your writing style is brilliant and gorgeous and brilliant and intriguing, and did I say brilliant?
(: A very original story, congrats (:
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so very much! I'm thrilled that you're enjoying it. Beinger featured is amazing! Thank you!