Date: 05/29/12 03:10 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
I still am thinking about how Bu should get both twins.
Unless they will become so wrapped up in themselves so not to need anyone else.
But I really love how he (Bu) takes care of Bill and no matter what, he is HIS boy, HIS Queenie. I know the characters have a will of their own with you, but I still wish.
Other than that, there is only one thing I want to say that wanst said in the other reviews.
You know I mentioned before how cinamatographic some moment are.
Well, this chapter was like some European independent films. Im thinking Pedro Almodovar here. So dramatic, so filled with pain and love, everybody was hurting and the drama nearly sucked us all in. And in the end, all went quiet.
Very well done. I was soooo waiting for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Hello, Lynn Ivan, happy to hear from you! I would love Bu to have both, too. And for everyone to be happy about it. That would be delightful! I think he feels more for Bill than he thinks, and all this drama may bring that out, we'll see. Thank you for the beautiful comment about the chapter being cinematographic, that is a huge compliment, and very appreciated. Glad you're here, and as always, love your reviews!
Date: 05/29/12 02:28 am Title: 10. Queen of Hearts
Ohhh.. Poor Gus & Geo. The sex was pain. Bill and Tom together beautiful.I hope it will be later sexual relationship.
Date: 05/23/12 02:37 pm Title: 1. All Hail the Queen
Hey darling. Sorry, I haven't been around lately. I've been having difficulty getting back into the hang of reviewing after a period of stress getting everything ready for my daughter's confirmation :)
I love the progress of this story. I'm not sure whom I want with whom at this point because all the pairings seem equally likeable. I suppose the twincest is my least favourite this time around because only one twin is turned on by the idea. :)
It's wonderful that Tom is staying in LA because he had two reasons now: Bushido is the most amazing, thrilling event in his life right along with his re-established - or maybe even brand new never happened before - relationship with his twin is finally at a level where Tom has a chance to build something with his brother. It's glorious and down right a miracle.
What Tom experiences with Bu and Bu with Tom is so alluring and I love every single detail that they get out of it because it's beautiful and erotic and Tom really deserves this so bad. I want something equally earth shattering for Bill to experience but I take it he's got a long way to go before he's even close to comfortable getting another person to know him as well has Gordon does.
I look forward to more of this. I'm enjoying it so much :)
Sorry again for not being present.
*hugs*
Maria
Author's Response: Nice to see you, MD-E, and welcome back! Hope the confirmation went off without a hitch. I too am wondering who's going to end up with whom (well, I have some idea, really. Actually, a lot. I'm so excited! Wish I could be typing all day instead of at stupid work!). The Tom and Bill reunion was a wonderful and emotional part to write, let's hope they keep going down that path. And I love the Tom/Bushido dynamics, glad you're enjoying them too. Bill...well, we'll have to wait and see what happens.....Thanks for sticking around and for letting me know you're there!rnrnM
Date: 05/23/12 11:13 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
What a crazy chapter, story in general, but in the good sense! Ok so Bu is not in love with Bill
is only sex, right? Tom rocks his world now... I don't know why but I can totally imagine Bill doing the wax or waxing? Bu (correct me please how can I say that? the wax thing)
Author's Response: The axe? Like, ending things with Bu? No? Lol.....yeah, Bu kind of likes Tom. Choi kawai, desu ne?
Date: 05/23/12 06:55 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
I am so glad, that we now know what made Bill hate Tom. keep writing :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Working on it :D
Date: 05/22/12 08:45 pm Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
OMG WHAT A CHAPTER DOLL
Too many emotions, so much i can't clearly write but I loved it and can't wait for the update
Great great great job
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you, Callypyge. Glad you were happy with it :)
Date: 05/22/12 06:17 pm Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
Hi there. I read this chapter this morning but needed some time to digest it before reviewing given the subjects addressed. So now we know. I suspected something like this but the way you wrote it was amazingly sensitive. And I never expected that Bill had watched Tom being abused. I guess he was so young Bill never really realised what was going on, that what Stefano had done to him was bad, just that Tom was taking the attention away from him. But Tom was so amazing even back then, taking care of his twin by letting Stefano molest him instead. Jeez. I am so happy that the twins talked about it and got everything out in the open. I can see how they both would shut what happened out of their conscious minds, which happens with a lot of abuse victims. Tom just didn't allow the memory to surface, and Bill had it locked away so that it twisted his perception of reality. And also perverted the way he loved his twin and warped his relationships with other people. I'm sure everything won't just be peachy from now on, you can't mend something like that so quickly, but at least they understand where all the shit originates from and they can work on their relationship. Okay, so, apart from that incredible revelation, I loved Tom and Bu together, not just the sex but their whole vibe when they're sharing the joint. And I was so happy that Gordon didn't allow Bill to bamboozle him into rejecting Tom again. I wonder if the twins will feel able to tell their father what happened. Or even Bu. Okay, about a threesome...it would be hot as fuck, but what about Tom wanting a brotherly relationship with his twin? Not sure a threesome would work well with that. Although I guess they could both just work at making Bu feel good. I still think that it would make for a weird situation if they're going to try just being loving brothers. But if not a threesome then we have the question of who Bu will end up with. I mean the chemistry between him and Tom is electric, but he and Bill are sizzling together too. Maybe they could all live together, the twins sharing Bu but not actually fucking with him at the same time. Wonder if Bill could cope with that or would that old feeling of jealousy at not being the sole centre of attention rear its ugly head again? I'm really longing to find out how you bring this to a conclusion. Oh, and did I say great chapter? No? Well, great chapter!
Author's Response: Hi, Helen! So sorry to have neglected you for so long! After that thing I emailed about, I worked a lot of overtime, and have been getting ready for a vacation, just lots of dumb busy stuff, but I've been meaning to get back to this. Enough excuses.rnThanks for the lovely review, as always. You've got great perspective on the way each boy reacted to their childhood trauma (Bill ending up with a "twisted...perception of reality" - very aptly put!). You're very right, on top of him not reacting well at all to be ignored by his parents, the abuse he witnessed definitely "warped his relationships with other people." Tom somehow ended up mentally, if not emotionally, healthier, maybe because the abuse he endured was something he went through to save his brother. As for how things will be if/when the honeymoon is over, we'll see! rnI think a little polyamory is a good thing, but in this situation, may not work. I'm not sure who Bill would be more jealous of - Bu or Tom. And Tom, not so sure he'd be happy with it either. But, I never know what the characters are going to do, so there's always a chance.....Thanks for writing, sweetie. I'm going to try to get another chapt up today, but it may not happen (vacation preparations are soooo time consuming!).
Date: 05/22/12 07:06 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
Ahh, so sweet.................. Is it endin?
Ohh I cnt wait, I wanna c wat happens..........
Ohh mizu, u make my world go round
This was a busy chapter............ I feel fuzzy
Author's Response: I made you feel fuzzy! Wooo hoooo! Bonus!
Date: 05/22/12 05:34 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
Very very si! Oh my god i cant believe my eyes, what happened to Bill?? Im so happy for them and i hope it lasts... The picture Of Tom crying broke my heart its the worst T-T and im glad to see u alive i was getting worried! :D
Author's Response: I lived! And wrote! That was a long, long chapter, and so fun to write (a little on the sad side, though). I'm glad Bill is getting better, too! Thanks for writing!
Date: 05/22/12 04:16 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
Yes. And now comes Bu punishment. Tom and Bill together, "pampers" Bu, who was "hard" cut back.
Date: 05/22/12 01:07 am Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
“Um….okay, you two bond. I’ll be downstairs, waiting for my punishment” Bill, Tom, Bu is waiting the punishment (threesome, threesome XD )loved this chapter..
Author's Response: You know, everyone keeps saying that they want to see a threesome......rnrn
Date: 05/21/12 11:47 pm Title: 9. Crumbling Castle Walls
*applause* Si! Si es buenisimo!!! I loved this! I loved how Bill struggled with his fabricated reality and how Tom was ready to leave again. Then the Tomshido, then the actual twin bonding!!! They actually talked about it! Bill actually confronted reality! What an awful reality. It's a wonder Tom isn't messed up like Bill is/was.
This was splendid! I'm not doing much more than spazz, but let me assure you the buildup was great! And I loved the random funny lines you still include despite the seriousness of the chapter! Like how bottled coke is better than in the can.
Something I've also noticed is that every chapter you update with is full of content and happenings. I love it when stuff happens each chapter. Sounds silly, but sometimes there exists dreadful things like filler chapters in fanfic, so.
Is there a possibility of a Bu twins threesome in the future? xD
Author's Response: Gracias, mucho mucho gracias! I loved writing this chapter, got so excited with what the characters were doing. Tom didn't put up much of a fight with Bu, did he?? And the bottled coke thing - completely Tom. I didn't really think about it, but that's what he put in the fridge. rnrnI do worry a little that I tend toward a lot of inner monologues and character dialogues, hoping it doesn't imbalance my stories. I have to remember: Action! But I try to put down what I see in my head, not just the words the characters say. So, thank you for letting me know the content is bueno! rnrnBu and twins? Maybe....I was thinking a threesome would be fun ;) rnrnThanks for sharing this with me!
Date: 05/20/12 01:22 pm Title: 8. The Royal Bash
Yes. I have definitely made up my mind. After a lot of thinking, I want Bu to be with both twins. It would be good for all of them. I know you have to change your pairings, but you did it before (yes I noticed) and it would be good for all of us.
Dont you agree?
Maybe if you dont want it, you should suggest it to Bu. Hes independent anyway. He will know what to do and Im sure everybody will just be happy to follow...
***smiles dreamily***
Author's Response: *Goes with you into that daydream* aaaahhh, it's a beautiful thing, isn't it? .... but wait, what is Bill screaming about? He's pissed that Tom is spending more time with Bu than he is? Uh oh. Problem with 3 ways, someone always gets left out. Maybe they should add Kay One to the mix.
Date: 05/19/12 06:40 pm Title: 8. The Royal Bash
So, I must be the only one who is not laughing after I finished this chapter. I admit that some moments were pretty hilarious and some other were super sweet and hot (like Bu's olphactory and optical appraisal of Tom outside in the garden - Ivory shit, LOL) but the rest was quite ... depressing and sad?... upsetting maybe? Like real life I guess.
Though Tom was a massive turn on in this chapter, out-of-his-head-drunk Bill not that much so, I am afraid:-/ You are turning me seriously schizofrenic girl. I don't know how to feel any longer. In the beginning of this story I found Bill hilarious, then he started to annoy the hell out of me and I felt genuinely sorry for Tom for having such a wanker for a brother, but now I just feel so crazily sorry for Bill. What can I say? I don't dare to guess what you have in stores for him in the future, but right now I definitely perceive him as a tragic character of this story. His drunken revelation about his and Tom's childhood was easily the saddest moment of this story so far. I suspect he and Tom had been molested by their "step-fathers" and while Tom has been dealing through forgetting and suppressing, Bill's messed up head made the whole sick experience to be a let down from Tom because he took away the guy who "liked" Bill first from him (?) . Geez. Could it get any more f***d up? What exactly had been happening in the pool house?
Bill is an enigma to me, a tragic enigma at that. What next? Are they gonna take him home where he is going to misbehave like a fool again, making Tom uncomfortable, Bushido taking him to bed, Bill passing out and Tom with Bu getting at it together? (after a short soul searching "should I or should I not, of course?"). I have had hopes for some Bu & Tom sexy times together, Bill finding out, waking up from his "Sleeping beauty" slumber of pretense, but I am not sure anymore. Damn.
Tom's bravado at the party was sorta cool but since guns and machismo doesn't make me week in my knees (I just want to get into their heads and pants:-), I wasn't probably as impressed as Bu and Bill were:-)
A challenging chapter for me to read. Funny, huh? I could have never imagined that I would possibly start to side with the little narcissistic shit. Go figure:-/
Sorry for killing all fun and turning this incoherent review into a major angst fest.
Author's Response: Hi G&B! I'm thrilled to death about your angsting. A lot of the funny Bill behavior is really disturbing, isn't it? We're getting closer to some revelations, but I don't think they'll completely explain Bill's narcissistic personality. I think he was that way out of the gate. In the previous review, you mentioned worrying about Bill being a bit flat. His personality is coming out in bits, so let me know what you think!
Date: 05/19/12 09:34 am Title: 7. Prince among Thieves
This chapter was really marvelous, I liked how you split it into separate segments of all these major men characters rambling and pondering their lives.
Bill is getting somehow more and more strange, almost bordering on crack-ish already. Please, please don't turn him into a caricature of himself (pleading eyes).
Bu is pretty much sold for Tom and I don't blame him one bit. Tom is a major magnet here but I am not sure if even in him there're not hiding some nasty bits and pieces. He is almost too good to be true, to be honest; and yes I know some people are naturally good and some are just "less-than-prime" but still, this Tom is way too perfect.
I am also thinking, is there any way he might be getting into Bu so much because he happens to be his bro's boyfriend? Not trying to diminish Bu's natural appeal and sexiness but power of subconsciousness can be mighty somehow. Taking what "has been" Bill's, although struggling with guilt would totally make sense after all these years of Bill "robbing" him of his own life. I am intrigued.
That last bit was quite self-explanatory. They both are head over heels for Tom:-) And so for different reasons:-)
Great chapter.
Author's Response: Hello, G&B, wonderful review! Very thought-provoking and will definitely keep me on my toes, especially where Bill's character is concerned. As for Tom, he's just one of those sweet guys. Not perfect - he is, after all, making out with his brother's boyfriend! No excuses for that. Tom tends to feel guilty at the idea of hurting Bill. But the subconscious....it can be hard to know what some REAL motivating factors are. Tom may just show some dark bits later on, they just haven't come out yet. Thanks yet again for one of your great reviews (and all the rest of your help!)....M
Date: 05/18/12 07:40 pm Title: 8. The Royal Bash
Tom learned of the surprising facts about their childhood. He still needs to get drunk Bill several times, and you know everything. :-D When Queenie drunk he is talkative, so it will work for Tom. Tom is pretty sharp when it comes to his twin security. I still can not resolve how this story will continue, but I'll wait, I see an. :-D J. :o)
Author's Response: Hi, Janule! rnI don't know if Tom wants to remember their childhood! And I'm looking forward to finding out what happens, too. Thanks for writing :D
Date: 05/17/12 01:59 pm Title: 8. The Royal Bash
Well, Bill, Tom and Bu all like/love/want eachother and I am thinking very, very bad things right now. I will put my thoughts aside and just go with the happy flow.
Author's Response: Aw, man.....maybe I should do a one shot....
Date: 05/16/12 11:22 am Title: 8. The Royal Bash
Very happy, my nets actin up n I can only read this story cos I favorited it so it sends me an email everytime there's an update bt other than that I have no way of readin fics............... I can't even tweet its so sad
Thanks 4 da hurry up, now post da next chapter before I die
I litterally have to try to kill my phone to read ur updates, bt they keep me sain so.................
Thanks mizu!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ur da best!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 05/16/12 11:22 am Title: 8. The Royal Bash
Very happy, my nets actin up n I can only read this story cos I favorited it so it sends me an email everytime there's an update bt other than that I have no way of readin fics............... I can't even tweet its so sad
Thanks 4 da hurry up, now post da next chapter before I die
I litterally have to try to kill my phone to read ur updates, bt they keep me sain so.................
Thanks mizu!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ur da best!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 05/16/12 10:51 am Title: 8. The Royal Bash
Very happy, my nets actin up n I can only read this story cos I favorited it so it sends me an email everytime there's an update bt other than that I have no way of readin fics............... I can't even tweet its so sad
Thanks 4 da hurry up, now post da next chapter before I die
I litterally have to try to kill my phone to read ur updates, bt they keep me sain so.................
Thanks mizu!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ur da best!!!!!!!!!!