Date: 05/31/12 10:51 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 4
I just love how the twins can feel each other, over distance, no matter where the other is hiding. It’s such a perfect way of showing how interconnected they are, even if they aren’t as close in other ways as they should be. They are truly meant to be together.
Oooo and the sex talk between the twins! Bill is so jealous, but I wondered at first if he even realized why he’s feeling that way. Then I totally loved the way you had it be Bill who realized first that he wanted Tom and would do whatever he can to keep Tom for himself. It’s usually Tom who is portrayed as the possessive, outgoing one, so I really love that you had Bill being the one who’s more aware and quicker on the uptake. Plus, him fighting from the shadows for Tom was really cute.
I LOVE LOVE LOVE the way you write action and fighting scenes! You are so good at making it vivid, I can picture it just like a movie.
I still can’t figure out exactly what Samy is thinking or planning. But yes, I believe a clue-by-four to Tom’s thick head might be needed here.
Author's Response: They can, when they let themselves feel it!
We're getting up to some prime UST with that sex talk! Yet they're both still so clueless. Bill seems a lot more self-reflective to me, so I feel like he'd realize that sooner. Our Tom is a bit more dense. ;)
Eee, thank you! That's the greatest compliment, I definitely want it to come across as vivid, like you're seeing it in your head.
Samy is the wild card here! Maybe he will wield that clue-by-four.
Date: 05/31/12 10:36 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 3
It feels like the twins are growing more and more apart because they are constantly misunderstanding each other. It’s awful because the constant tension is wearing down each of them, but with their father looming over them, they can’t truly be themselves. Ah, I feel so badly for them, poor boys.
I really love how you’ve kept their personalities so strong, with Bill taking confidence in his appearance and his clothes almost as a costume. And Tom with the music. Then that underlying other kind of tension between the two of them. I love how you have that growing slowly but surely. And I’m sorry but the part with Tom stuffing his face with custard tart and then Bill smelling it on him – that was just too cute.
I love all the little details and hints about Nephilim heritage you worked in with Samy’s appearance. I really love how Bill tries to be all sneaky to get info from David, right up until David drops that bomb. Ooo, this is going to be good!
Date: 05/31/12 06:20 am Title: Their Distinctive Origins: Chapter 1
Sorry for your personal challenges. This is something I totally understand. It is the reason for my need to escape into the Tayniverse so often. If you would like to vent email me at puddin.andpie@yahoo.ca.
Date: 05/30/12 10:05 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 5
Things are heating up! Please post soon. I am riveted.
Author's Response: Sorry for the delay! I have to make some edits to the next chapter, and I've had some personal difficulties this month. Thanks for your patience!
Date: 05/29/12 11:51 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 3
I am very anxious about what will happen next. The twins cannot let Samy come between them.
Date: 05/29/12 12:26 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 2
It's obvious that they need to get it on with each other. I hope it will happen eventually. Then their magic will be powerful enough to overthrow Jorg.
Date: 05/28/12 02:42 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 1
I think that this is a poisonous environment for them. Bill and Tom should escape from Jorg's place. They need to communicate better with each other and combine their strengths and skills to protect themselves from Jorg.
Date: 05/24/12 11:22 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 5
YAY!
Author's Response: Hee! :D
Date: 05/24/12 09:34 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 5
I think he knows...
Author's Response: You may be right...
Date: 05/23/12 06:37 pm Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 5
Very interesting. The politics and loyalties are so complicated. I can't wait for more, as always. =)
Author's Response: I'm happy you find it interesting, thank you! :D I do my best to make it pretty involved. Thanks and I hope you enjoy the next chapter!
Date: 05/23/12 01:28 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 5
What more is there to do than survive? Conquer? So is Bill going to start planning on how to overpower Jorg, so that Bill and Tom don't have to kill each other??? :D That thought makes me excited and nervous -- excited that it can bring the twins together and they can fight as one, and nervous because it won't be easy.
My gut instinct is telling me Samy is on their side, or at least neutral. At any rate, he's trying to figure them out and may realize things about the twins before even they themselves realize. For example, the "mine" and other mate instincts.... Maybe Samy's seen something like that in all his travels, and will soon come to suspect the twins are more to each other.
What a neat story! One time I was at a rug loomers and the lady laid a strand of fabric in the loom and wove more strands in and out of the strings. That's like you! With every word is another color and texture of fabric being laid down and woven in, all coming together to make a multicolored rug or blanket. You're a storyweaver.
Author's Response: Con-QUER! Con-QUER! Clearly Bill's way is the best! Of course we'll see if the twins figure out they need to work together, not pull the yoke in different directions!
Samy is pretty perceptive. ;) And he does come across as chaotic neutral, huh?
Thank you! Ahhh stop it, that's too much praise and you're making me blush! I really appreciate your lovely review, thank you. ♥
Date: 05/23/12 01:11 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 4
Yay, Bill realized that it's all about himself and Tom! But Tom doesn't realize that yet, and Samy's presence interferes with it! But I'm not worried, since I feel like what Bill wants, Bill gets... and Bill doesn't want anyone but himself to be at Tom's side.
Author's Response: Bill had a realization and he's going to ANGST about it! For sure! But yes, Bill is imperiously deft at getting his way...he just needs to work for it!
Date: 05/23/12 01:03 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 3
I think Samy will drive them apart since Tom and Bill will argue about Samy's role in their lives.... but then Samy will awaken teh sexi hexi feels in the twins and then they'll hump like rabbits all over each other.
Author's Response: It's a difficult situation for each of them! Hehe. Interesting guess, let's see where it takes them~
Date: 05/23/12 12:50 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 2
Poor fighting twins.... And now they've both felt the sting of jealousy when seeing someone else in the other's arms.
Samy's role will be interesting. I don't know what to expect.
Date: 05/23/12 12:40 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 1
I think that since you mentioned the mate thing that Bill and Tom are soon-to-be mates. Their bodies know it, their energy knows it.... they just don't know it yet.
It was cool how when Bill was presented the opportunity to kill his magic master, he didn't....while Tom killed Marcus. Yet, Tom is the one afraid of Bill.
Date: 05/23/12 12:23 am Title: Their Distinctive Origins: Chapter 4
It's so sad they have to deal with everyone pitting them against each other and the doubt and fear that results in!
I like reading about the magic and sword fighting. You write it so that I can picture it vividly, like a movie or an anime.
Date: 05/22/12 04:31 pm Title: Their Distinctive Origins: Chapter 3
Holla!
This is awful! They still trust each other but it's so difficult when the whole house is trying to pit them against each other! I love how each twin's strength complements the other. They really are whole as one. :)
Date: 05/22/12 04:13 pm Title: Their Distinctive Origins: Chapter 2
Young twins are so cute~ It's neat to read how supernatural they are too!
Date: 05/22/12 03:57 pm Title: Their Distinctive Origins: Chapter 1
This is really capturing! Why haven't I read this till now??? Why didn't you smack me or something -- it's amazing!
Seeing Jorg and the stark difference of the demon culture from the human culture is really neat! Seeing Simone respond in what I thought was normal is apparently unacceptable to Jorg and his culture.
I feel like Jorg's plan will either succeed and the twins will destroy the world completely and the whole universe while they're at it, or that his plan will fail and the world will still be destroyed! XD Even at the "terrible twos," the twins are enough to have the entire House of Kaulitz under their wee thumbs.
Date: 05/22/12 11:38 am Title: Their Irregular Maturation: Chapter 5
*gobsmacked* Just... wow... Heavy chapter. Fantasti work! I am on the edge of my seat.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad it was intense! Hope you enjoy the next one~