Not bad for the first chapter. Not bad at all. My only comment is that you should fix teh spacing. Everything is all mashed together like that. It's ahrd to read.

Author's Response: Haha thanks! :D And I know the spacing is messy but, Fanfic is something new to me and its kinda weird so I'll try to fix it but, not sure if it'll be any better!rnThanks for the review fellow AlienrnrnLots of love-rnMissKilljoy7 <3