Date: 04/02/23 12:46 am Title: The 1st Day
OMFG I felt SO BAD for Bill through this whole story. I was so pissed when he was punished because of others screwing with him against the rules. I cheered when he escaped - I figured he'd tell the police and shut the place down. Definitely didn't expect him to just move on and keep quiet, and double-didn't expect that Tom would have been put back into slave status and be nearly on the brink of death by the end. Crazy! My guilty pleasure though is Bill's first time being, well, forced, with Tom.
Date: 03/05/15 08:59 pm Title: An Old Face
Noooooooooooo why did he go back! He should have got the police! I want him to save Tom and himself so bad and even Jörg!
Date: 03/05/15 06:20 pm Title: Freedom...Or Not...
Hmmm.. i dont want to be a hater because i honestly do love this story, but i think you'd want me to be honest and say that again (honestly not hating) i feel a bit unsure about the pace in this chapter. I wish we had seen some of Bill's struggle to get out of the place and find his way somewhere, considering i mean he didnt even have any clothes or anything. And surely after all those months craving his family, he would have jumped on them and sobbed and everything. I know you explained Bill was often disappearing for months, but i just felt like after all he went through, he would have been desperate for his friends and family and it would have taken more time for him to grip the fact that he was really out of that place. And i'm gutted he didn't tell Andreas about it (yet). Hmm.. But like i said, i still really like this and it's your story not mine, that is just my critique i guess in retrospect.
And hehe i like the space cadet thing. It's so cute and something i can really imagine between them irl since they have that whole "see you in outer space" thing.
Date: 03/05/15 04:38 pm Title: Return
Hmmm to be honest i'm not sure how i feel about this. I know it's been a long time already, but still the bit between Tom and Bill seemed kind of sudden. And i'm confused as to where Tom lost authority over him because at the start he was barely allowed to talk. And when he escaped... God that was so fast, like he didn't even take a minute to think about it all. Especially after just being with Tom, i was surprised that he didn't even spare a thought about him. And i wish we had followed him and seen his escape, because i thought it was impossible to escape and figured there would be more barriers to face on the outside of the building.
Author's Response:
I feel like things like this happen more suddenly then we appreciate. Emotions change quickly especially when our brains and bodies are already overwhelmed. Then something small chnages and then it changes back. It can shift our emotions into perspective. It can make us stop fighting our emotions. Tom lost authority way back in thebeginning. He tried reclaiming it then but suceeded and then failed. I thought about that but thought we needed more info on Tom at the moment. Plus if they never go outside there would be no need for extra barriers.
Date: 03/05/15 02:16 pm Title: Part Two
Ahh, my heart aches for Bill- he doesn't belong in this fucked up world and i want him to get out so bad, even though it seems impossible! I still want him to keep up his hope, and for Tom too, even though Tom has given in to it all.
I still am a bit surprised how easily Bill and Tom are becoming closer after everything Tom put him through. I know it is the whole 'stockholm syndrome' thing so it makes sense i guess, but when Bill was saying how he wanted to escape and be friends with Tom in the outside world i realised how fucked up he's become, even though i kind of want it too. :( I just keep reminding myself that Tom was once a slave too and that is why it all makes sense, but uggh i just want a happy end so bad!
Author's Response:
My heart ached while writing this. I wanted to just set him free make this all a bad dream. Not able to do stuff just because I want to. Bill has become fucked up but who wouldn't in this type of situation. If we know the answer to that question we're the fucked up ones. (I wrote this so I already am well on the road to be fucked up now I shoudl go to a shrink and get diagonosed.) Tom was a slave and so he is doing what he can to survive.
Date: 03/04/15 09:27 pm Title: Tom's Slave
Dammit, again i am gutted that i got to this story so late. Because i would really love to know some story from the outside world again. To see how Andreas is coping, his parents, like what they think happened to him, if any evidence or anything had ever been found. If anyone outside knew about this weird place, and also like how he got there, because he must be so far from home. Maybe something will come up in the next chapter thoguh.
Also a thing i notice again and again (sorry, i'm a grammar nazi) is the use of the word 'drug' when you mean 'dragged', e.g: 'He dragged him out of the room.'
Author's Response:
I thought about that but I wanted to go somewhere else with the story. You already read by some of your later reviews. So there would have been nothing that the outside world would have noticed. I am bad about grammar but I also not really fond of going back and editing my stories so I probably won't fix it.
Date: 03/04/15 08:12 pm Title: Progress
Oh man, he is literally being turned into an adult. I don't know how he can still keep up any hope in this kind of world, or still show any love towards Tom? But for some strange reason, it all still makes sense and i can see him slowly falling in love with Tom, even though it is most likely just Stockholm Syndrmome. Such a scary story, but i can't stop reading!
Author's Response:
Yes he is. People are incredibly resilent. They can hope in the most desperate of situations. I love impossible love stories. It was hard to write so I know it is probably hard to read.
Date: 03/04/15 06:26 pm Title: The 3rd Day
OhmyGod this is just incredible! Like i feel so uncomfortable and have my breath stuck in my throat, but that is the proof of good writing and you are pulling this story off so good, it feels so real!
Author's Response:
I know stories like those are hard to find and harder to get into. I am glad you decided to bear with me through the hard parts.
Date: 03/04/15 05:09 pm Title: The 2nd Day
Wow i'm still loving this! And i'm glad Bill's finally started mentioning about going home because at the start i was a bit confused as to why he wasn't fighting against it all to start with- them keeping him there. I guess he was all just so in shock with it all the first day. Anyway, i'm gutted that i didn't get to this story until it was finished, because i love that you ask for reader input. I do the same thing but no one really offers anything haha and i think it's great to get other peoples ideas, especially from the ones who are reading it. Anyway, excited to read on! :)
Author's Response:
I love reader input even if I don't use their ideas exactly. I hate using ideas directly. I have a bad tendency not to finish things so when the readers offer their input I use it to stay inspired and maybe take the story in a direction I never thought of before.
Date: 03/03/15 11:38 pm Title: The 1st Day
Ooooooohmygod DUDE! How have i never read this before? This was fucking brilliant! So much tension and like my eyes were so wide the whole time, and i am so fucking excited to see what else this fic has to offer! Weeee :D
Author's Response:
I am glad you enjoyed it. This fic is so far frm me now, I am glad it is still relevant.
Date: 02/16/14 02:40 am Title: End
I've read this story a few times now and it never gets old. I'm so pleased you wrote and posted this. Thank you
Date: 01/19/14 01:35 pm Title: End
A very beautiful story. Once I was in the story, I didn't want to stop reading. It's something different from what I usually read, but I liked it very much. You have written it very well!
Date: 10/09/13 03:37 pm Title: End
I just read this all the way thru. I love it!
Date: 04/01/13 09:08 am Title: The 1st Day
I know you were done with this story months ago, but I just came across it and I finished it in one day! It was so captivating, I actually felt like I was there. I actually got nervous at certain parts and no other story has been able to do that. I hope you will be writing more stories. You truly are talented! Keep up the great work:)
Date: 10/07/12 11:32 am Title: End
I read the whole story in about 24 hours. I lobed it, even though you have a serious problem with where to put a dot or a "," XD
Of course, my soul is too gentle to read the parts of Gustav's and Georg's abuse of Bill.
But I did love the story and your writing. I hope Ill read more stories you wrote!
Author's Response:
I didn't have a beta for most of this story. My grasping of commas and periods sucks. I hated English class. I focus on the words and let someone else worry about my punctuation. I am glad you like it and many people have a hard time reading those couple of chapters. I am glad you liked it. Most of my stories are lighter then this,
Date: 10/07/12 09:59 am Title: Freedom...Or Not...
I really can't understand how Bill can be so... normal after his abuse. how did he not take anything? how he isn't behiving a little different? how can he have sex with Andreas, after all his abuse that was just about sex? I really can't understand it.. especially how Bill isn't going to save Tom.
Author's Response:
Bill is bouncy like elastic and he was in there for a relatively short period of time. It is also called dissociating. I do it sometimes when bad things happen. It is emotionally distancing yourself from the painful truth to protect your heart and mind. part of dissociating is to go back to normal behavior like nothing is wrong and making extremely odd decisions like Bill's decision to sleep with Andi. Bill dissociated so far that he really believed that Tom was going to be fine.
Date: 10/07/12 09:36 am Title: Return
OH MY GOD YAY!
Author's Response:
I am happy you are enjoying it.
Date: 10/07/12 08:25 am Title: Tom's Slave
god... I'm so scared to keep reading! I don't want to read Bill getting hurt by Gustav! ugh... but I know I have to so I can see Tom taking care of him... mehhhhhh
Author's Response:
You are really going to hate the next chapter then. Bill and Gustav go at it in the worst possible way.
Date: 10/06/12 02:30 pm Title: The 2nd Day
I hate you. and I love you. and you're making me fucking cry! I'm not sure if I love the fact I entered to check out the story, or regret it. I can definitely say that I absolutely love your writing and how you put things, but this is such a hard story to read! please tell me, is it going to be better or worse??? I don't want to cry to sleep today! :(
Author's Response:
I am glad my story is involving your emotions. This story has those warnings for a reason. I said it wasn't going to be fluffy but horrible. I am glad you like my writing style. I still don't know that it's unique but it gets people's attention so... It is going to get better.
Date: 09/30/12 08:29 pm Title: Return
Why didn't Tom get out the window too instead of telling them!!!! It's so frustrating!!!
Author's Response:
He's been taught for years that breaking the rules equals death. He didn't see freedom as being the norm like Bill he saw it as scary and everything else. He turned away becuase he had been trained and broken to do that.