Date: 04/04/12 11:53 pm Title: Return
SWEET JAYSUS!!! That was SO UNEXPECTED that I nearly peed. I. LOVE. Where this is going and am deadly curious as to what will happen next. OBVIOUSLY I hope Bill makes it back with police and isn't just... stuck out in the woods with a broken ankle dying or about to get recaptured but... I suppose I'll just have to wait and find out aye? :P SO much love for this fic!
Author's Response:
I am glad I can still surprise people. I am glad you like this fiction so much. I think I have a few more curveballs though so hang on and wait it out. It seems everyone hopes Bill will be hero so we'll see. Thank you for the lovely reviews and wonderful support.
Date: 04/04/12 04:21 am Title: Serving the House Master
Poor Bill!! Gustav is such a perv lol I love it! Now I'm off to read the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I know Gustav is horrible. I enjoyed writing him though that's the messed up part. Have fun with the next chapter we see Bill being tortured even more.
Date: 04/04/12 03:51 am Title: Tom's Slave
All I can say is, OMG NOOO please don't let him hurt Billa baby! :( Poor Tom, I know he must feel so bad. *runs off to read next chappie*
Author's Response:
Glad to see new names. I hope you keep reading and reviewing. I know I put them both through so much turmoil.
Date: 04/03/12 08:19 am Title: Jorg
I like Jorg far more than predicted :D He could take over for Sarah while Georg has her under his thumb so Bill won't go batcrap nuts. :) Win.
Author's Response:
I have no idea how Jorg will figure into this story but I don't think we're quite done with him. As for Sarah well we'll see. I hope you keep reading and keep enjoying the story.
Date: 04/03/12 06:34 am Title: Part Two
I liked the first banner best. To be honest, I don't remember it very clearly, bit when I saw it I thought: This is it, this is Forced :D
Author's Response:
Thanks for the input. I hope you keep reading it.
Date: 04/02/12 11:35 pm Title: Jorg
Hmmmm, well this was interesting. It was nice seeing Bill doing something else, and interacting with others, in a not horrible way.
God, Georg is just getting ass-ier and ass-ier. Someone needs to do something about him.
Wonderful chapter! I am anxious to see the next update!
Author's Response:
Yes, I decided Bill needed someone to talk to and to realize that it wasn't all just sitting around dealing with sadistic routines. I have no idea where I am getting Georg from he's just a real piece of work in this story. I almost feel guilty. I am glad you like it. i will try to do my best with the updates.
Date: 04/02/12 10:11 pm Title: Jorg
I like it! Poor Sarah though :( I feel bad for her that Georg abuses her the way he does.
Author's Response:
I feel bad for her too. I am glad you like the chapter though. Thanks for the review.
Date: 04/02/12 08:45 pm Title: Jorg
:3 This was really cute! It was super cool to get another peron's back story/personality in the mix and to find that not everyone in the building is cruel and unfeeling. I feel HORRID for Sarah though... I kind of hope someone chops off Georg's penis. >_> *Giggles* Thank you again for the fast updates! I really needed this today and the light heartedness lifted my spirits!
Author's Response:
I felt the need to lighten Jorg up. In the beginning I planned on making him as cruel as Gustav but then I thougth Tom wouldn't trust him as much if he were that cruel. I felt the need to make Jorg someone we could believe that Tom could trust. I feel so bad for Sarah too but I felt the need to bring her back into the story. I am glad you like how quickly I update. I am glad I could brighten your day.
Date: 03/29/12 10:32 pm Title: Part Two
I do, I do indeed like their stories!
OK, so, I don't like this whole making Gustav bad thing. I just can't get the fluffy silent teddy bear image out of my head for it to be believable. I'm sorry. I have seriously tried so hard to get over it but...it isn't working. I'm still going to read the story, but I figured I would let you know for future referance, I think a lot of people would have the same issue.
I am so happy they seem to be connecting, but I do think that if it has been months, you might be able to speed the stockholm syndrome part up, if thats where you plan on going.
Keep up the fantastic work! I am really looking forward to more! *huggles*...oh! and Ithink I like this second banner better.
Author's Response:
I am glad you like their stories. I just had to find a place for him and it seemed a good spot. He is a bit mean but I like the breaking of the teddy bear stereotype. Bears can be mean too, some of the most vicous arguements I had when I was five were with my teddy bear. I was planning on doing that a little bit, I just didn't realize there was an actual term for it. I am glad you like so much and I hope you will continue reading. Thanks for your vote and the review.
Date: 03/29/12 08:23 pm Title: The 1st Day
Hehe you speak like me... do your characters sometimes decide what is going to happen for you without your concious consent? They do that to me regularly (I write for a different website now). :P PS.. you've definitely got two people pimping this for being featured... maybe more.
Author's Response:
Definitely I want the story to go another way but they're like nope we're going to throw in some more angst and then there's a morbid chapter where I expected a happy chapter. I am glad that people are trying to get this featured. That would mean the world to me. Thanks.
Date: 03/29/12 04:50 pm Title: Part Two
T__T I was already kind of sad when I started this chapter... and it made me cry so hard. It was really well written and emotional and I totally loved it. I needed that cry. Thank you. SO amazing and frankly, I can't decide on a banner... I know that's totally useless though.. sorry. *Blush* Their back stories were so sweet and seeing that hopeful bit of Tom was nice.. I almost hope Bill brings it back up in him.. but I'm conflicted because I don't want to see it crushed out a second time. Wow... *bites lip* Amazing. Thank you.
Author's Response:
Well, I am glad I helped you get a cry that you needed and I am sorry you were sad before this story. It's not totally useless, it is nice that you liked them and I have some votes already so I'll figure it out. I liked writing the back stories and I liked writing Tom with a little bit of hope and not so much cynicism. I almost hope Bill changes him too but you're right I would hate to see it crushed all over again. I am glad you like it so much. Thanks for the wonderful review.
Date: 03/29/12 12:59 pm Title: Part Two
i really really like it and i'm happy that B&T have better contact with each other and i hope it would be even better :)
Author's Response:
I liked writing that section too. I am happy that they are connecting better. I hope I will be able to satisfy your desires. Thanks for the review.
Date: 03/29/12 12:08 pm Title: Part Two
:( Poor Bill and Poor Tom :( I am curious though to see if they escape and how they'll function in the outside world. Really getting good and seriously love the new banner!
Author's Response:
I know it is all so sad and horrible but you know me and my corny endings so I hope I can come up with something good for this one. Either way I don't know where this is going yet. I normally have an end in mind that changes as the story progresses but this one doesn't have an end in mind yet so I will be riding long with you folks. Thanks for the review and the vote.
Date: 03/29/12 08:22 am Title: Part Two
Almost late for school because I stopped to read this... can't bring myself to care :D I religiously check for this. Those masters (aside from Tom) are reeeeeallly Bipolar. -.-
Author's Response:
Well don't be too late that could be bad. I am glad that you like my story so much though that is really great. Yeah I thought that myself but that is a way to shake things up.
Date: 03/29/12 04:55 am Title: Part Two
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
Date: 03/29/12 02:52 am Title: Part Two
:( You make me sad, again :( I feel sorry for both of them. But it's true. I think ppl who live in the place like this for too long will lose the sense of real world. Like in jail, for some one who has a long statement, I don't think they can easily get used to with the society. However, I really want they can get out of here..
For the banner, I think this one is DEFINITELY more appropriate than the 2 old ones :x :x
Author's Response:
I am sorry I made you sad but I thought it would be a tender sweet moment between the two of them and we just don't have enough of those. I think that is true as well, I wouldn't go so far as to say never get used to society agian but it would definitely take months if not years of therapy. I don't know if they will get out or not yet so just hang on for the ride. The vote for the banner has been taken into account. Thanks for the lovely review.
Date: 03/29/12 02:36 am Title: Part Two
In a way I don't want to say anything about the story, because sometimes authors listen to us readers too much, and while trying to please us they ruin the story & plot.
So all I'm going so say is, your story is great, its really really good. The description, the characterization, the plot, the feeling that's evoked. And what's even more great in my opinion is, that I think I as a reader can see.the progress you're making. Chapters getting longer, the general fluency of the text.. there's only couple of things I'd maybe want you to add. And please don't listen to me, this is only opinion, or at best an advice. Try using maybe some highbrow words, you text would get to a whole new level that way. Aaaand, hate to say this, I feel so low. But more Tom/Bill interaction or like more focus on it. Try dwelling a bit more deeply in their feelings and sort of make every moment linger just a bit longer.
During the years I've been here there has been couple of similar type a stories, but this one is easily going towards the 1st place in this genre/category. Just don't ruin the end :D that's where the others have messed up.
Aaaand, without further ado, definitely the first banner :)
P.s. I really love & appreciate how often you update your story, atm its actually the only reason why I bother logging in so often here. You must use so much of your own time to this, know that its greatly valued :) shows dedication and that you have respect for your readers :)
Author's Response:
I take all suggestions into account but I do what I can and leave out ideas that could potentially ruint the story. I just wanted to feel out the story and the place but since we have touched on all of that I think the feelings and back stories will develop a little more now. I do like your suggestion about using better word choice, not to sound smug or concieted but I do have a rather large vocabulary (no joke I was reading at a college level in 6th grade.) I don't want to insult the intelligence of my readers because I am sure you all could handle bigger and better words but I find that I enjoy stories and books that I don't have to stop every five words to figure out what the sentence in itself means. Also everyday words sound better and more natural. I don't want this story to sound all stiff and boring. I am glad you like my story enough to put in first place, even if just in your mind, you have no idea what that means to me. I'm not sire how you mean ruin the end. I would like you to clarify that point. Thanks for your vote on the banner and I hope you review. I will try to continue updating often but sometimes life gets in the way and sometimes this story is just too dark to work on. Please continue sharing and I will try to add some of my more abscure vocab to this story without ruining the mood.
Date: 03/29/12 01:24 am Title: Part Two
Loved this chapter. I just feel so bad for Bill, though. Gustav was utterly sick here. Job well done aaaannnnd, I like this banner the best!!
Author's Response:
I enjoy writing and reading this stuff which is so wrong but I feel bad for the characters. I just had to make Gustav the absolute bad guy here and I have no idea why. I am glad you like it and your vote has been taken into account, thank you for sharing.
Date: 03/28/12 01:06 pm Title: Serving the House Master
You make us soo happy! And well done on the research! I love when a person does that to add reality to a fiction! Seriously *Hands you whatever award you seek* Amazingly well done. :3
Author's Response:
I am glad I make you happy. I did the research because I felt I needed to add stuff that was really real. I felt it would add another layer of believably to the story. If you want to give me an award I would love you should get this piece featured. That would mean the world to me. Thanks for the glowing review.
Date: 03/27/12 09:16 pm Title: The 1st Day
RE: My previous comment
Sorry if that caused any confusion. I just talk like that all the time. I knew there would be violence but I didn't realise it would be that violent. It didn't really bother me - I was just like WOAHHHHHHH!
Author's Response:
Thanks for clarifying. I try to make sure I get all of the warnings right so I don't offend anyone so I was just a little I don't know mad at myself for not warning adquetely enough. Then I also get mad at people who read things they know they won't like and then comment on it. It seems kind of silly. I am glad you liked it and I am glad you came back after I was snippy.