Date: 03/14/12 04:07 pm Title: Chapter 1: The fog comes in on little cat feet
I kinda feel sorry for Tom now.. But Anis is so sweet! :) Bill is better off with him, not Tom. I'm loving this story! It's my fave on the site. :) I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Why thank you soooo much! I am actually thinking that it's beneficial for me that Leichenwasser and Mohanrocks have stopped updating their stories (damn them!!!) - we're all scrounging, so I certainly don't mind filling the gap! Working on next chapter...right now!
Date: 03/14/12 01:28 pm Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
I have to admit that I’m kinda surprised : I didn’t expect anis to take it so good,I mean c’mon he’s not even surprised…even if he loves bill he reacted too good to be true.
Or maybe it’s the calm before the storm!
I really hope that the twins are not tom’s babies,I want to believe that the condom broke and are bu’s … they were so happy and now this …
At first I felt sorry for tom but now I despise him,he’s such a bastard
Poor bill,not one but two…that’s awful ,and he just started the relationship with bu.things are moving too fast and I don’t want it to end.it’s so nice to come home from work and to find a new chapter,it’s my fave story from the site at this moment. (kisses)
Author's Response: I'm so flattered, thank you! I can totally see your point about Anis not being surprised, and being so good about it. But you saw the first thing he worried about? rnHe was afraid Bill was going to leave him! Poor guy. He and Bill are a good match because they both desperately want the same things: Love, stability, a life-long relationship. I tried to weave into the last story how lonely Anis was, how much he missed Andrej, and was starting to want another relationship. He just got super lucky and found someone at the right time. So, the big surprise for him would have been watching Bill pack up and leave him, which is a big fear for him. And it's moving fast, but sometimes that's how life is, and it STILL works out (occassionally...sometimes....once in a while)rnrnTom is a bastard. But he'd make prettier babies ;)rnrnWorking on next chapter, thanks for taking the time to review!
Date: 03/14/12 04:29 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
I'm guessing I annoyed you with my last comment. Ummm...It was never my intention but I see how it would, I get annoying after a while because I just sound like a broken record repeating myself constantly.
Author's Response: Annoy me? Never! Don't think that! I just know how much you want to see more of Tom in all this, so I really tried to explain why he's a strong part of the story, but at the same time, very sidelined. I hated to disappoint you, so I tried to express where the story is and where it's probably going. I know you want Tom here, and I feel bad that he's not! Keep your comments coming, I love your reviews, and they never annoy me - that's definitely not what you're trying to do, you're just telling me how the story makes you feel, and I love that! Don't fret! (*pets your head, feeds you a treat*) All better? Another chapt will probably be posted tomorrow night. You'd better review, and tell me whatever you want!
Date: 03/14/12 04:15 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
Another good chapter title.
I was sure that Anis would be the one to set things right. He knows not to let Bill get away. I think he will do anything to keep him.
But when he asked if Bill wants to leave him it melted my heart.
This chapter is so well written, it shows exactly what Bill is going through, in his mind, and his body follows.
As when he was in pain and shock from Toms cheating, his body and mind shut down almost completely in order to cope. He is so not prepared for life, for dissapointment...
What he lived before the beggining of this story was a fabricated life, one that he THOUGHT was best for him.
He is thrown in the real life, forced to reconsider absolutely everything, he changes house, loses his status, his husband, he fights a stalker, almost loses his only friend, finds love and gets back to school.
How many people have to deal with so much stress all at once?
So I say he is coping rather well.
And in the middle of this hurricane he finds out he is expecting not one, but two babies and he WANTS them, even if he must leave Anis.
Not once he thinks about ending the pregnancy or losing it.
Hes strong.
The only thing that still bothers me is that, as I said, Anis is the one that really made the choice for Bill. He is the stronger one, for the moment. Bill is lucky, he found real love and stability exactly when needed.
And I really shed tears when he was speaking with Aniss moms portrait...
Author's Response: That is so sweet of you! (admitting to tears when Bill talked to Ani's mom) ;) I just felt that any pregnant person needs their mom (needs their mom to be the right KIND of mom, too), and she was such a tiny, quiet, but definite presence in the household, it drew Bill straight to her. He'd said hello to her once before...rnrnInteresting that you pointed out how Bill reacts physically to things. Sometimes characters just write themselves, I'm kind of on autopilot. He is making it through this, and he would whether he had Anis or not (we all make it through rough times. They just really really suck). But because he has Anis, he'll make it through, happy. Loved. Not alone. It's a good thing ;)
Date: 03/14/12 03:37 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
It seems like Bill never has a break. He's always fighting some rational fear to be abandoned or to be left to his own misery because of outer circumstances that comes in and threatens the stability of what he has at the moment..
Anis handled the news of the twin pregnancy with such a loving heart as usual and I adore the all-consuming acceptance of Bill no matter what is thrown at him :) He's incredibly patient our Anis :)
I'm still very puzzled by Tom's behaviour through all this. I'm trying to find some kind of positive vibe from him. I can understand the whole wanting the Madonna and whore thing he has going. Bill was put on the pedestal, his trophy wife and Jasmine I suppose was the whore. What I don't understand is his incapability to understand that he can't have both and that he thinks Bill is 'stupid' enough to believe him. Somehow, I think Tom isn't capable of understanding the same thing so it must be conditioning. He isn't used to this and can't change his colours.
Anyway.
Bill's little housewife dreams are the cutest. The pictures he conjure of his little foursome family are just the sweetest and I really hope everything succeeds... in the end, because I know you have more stuff planned to prevent this from happening too fast lol..
Carry on, Margo :) It’s great stuff.
Author's Response: Thank you! Love the review, as always. I think a lot of people are having trouble understanding that Tom isn't going to have any sympathetic characterstics. He's the type of man who is extremely self-centered. He's going to cheat. He can make promises to Bill, he can actually love Bill, but if he sees a woman he wants, he's going to go after her. It's not so much the Madonna/whore idea - although he did love having Bill as a beautiful, interesting trophy wife - it's simply that he is not about to deny himself anything he wants in life. He is that type of guy. When you hear about a man being divorced by his fourth wife because she caught him cheating (even though he was cheating on his 3rd wife with HER), THAT'S the type of guy I'm talking about. Tom can love Bill, but he can't put the relationship above his own base desires. So you're right, he can't change his colours. rnrnI'm very happy that Bill likes the domestic side of life (I don't think I could have forced this out of his personality, had to come naturally). I think HE'S surprised by how much he likes it. Makes him feel secure.rnrnThanks for the thoughtful review, MDE!
Date: 03/14/12 01:27 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
Anis you are perfect!!!!!! :D You see Bill? dont worry about anis cause he love you jiji.. i love it... so pretty you write...Tom is a caradura sinverguenza cree q con comprarle algo lo arregla todo? he is crazy...bad...and what things happen next? ahhhhhhhhhhhhh emotion!!!!! and weddingBill go fast jaja but good :D
I LOVE THIS FIC!!!!!
Author's Response: Ah! Dios mio! Muchas Gracias! I think a wedding for them would be sooo pretty!
Date: 03/14/12 12:16 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
Some...things? Good things, or bad things? *crosses fingers* hopefully good.
T'was an awesome chapter! I'm so tickled that Ani appears to have taken it so well. I am a bit aprehensive about Bill and the whole not planning on telling Tom. Somehow I don't think that's going to turn out too well.
I just adore Ani telling Bill stories until they fall asleep, its so cute! And even better because they are stories about Anis' life!
Keep up the wonderful work! I'm so anxious to seee more!
Author's Response: I'm so anxious to write more! ;) I am waiting for a huge outcry against Bill deciding not to tell Tom (carrying a shield with me to block hurled tomatoes). rnI like getting into Ani's head a little more with the stories. He's such a stoic type, but also very willing to open up to the right person (Bill, um....Bill.... and um...Bill).
Date: 03/13/12 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 1: The fog comes in on little cat feet
God the moment Anis asked Bill if he would leave him made me cry ,like seriously i don`t know how you did it but made Bushido look like a innocent little girl hahahaha
Love this story:)
Author's Response: Thank you! rnPoor Anis wants Bill so much, wants that future with him. Yeah, he would have cried if Bill had left him. Like a little girl with a five o'clock shadow.
Date: 03/13/12 06:40 pm Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
OHMIGODOHMIGODOHMIGOOOOOOOOD *dies from the excitement*
Author's Response: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! Don't die! (*performs cpr*) Come back to me kiss the stars!!! Why god why!!! There are going to be so many new chapters coming up! Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!
Date: 03/13/12 05:12 pm Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
me encantó este capítulo, lleno de muchas emociones, lo mejor? la reacción de Anis, realmente es un amor :)
Creo que Bill necesita de una madre..
Author's Response: Hola, e muchas gracias! Yes, a pretty emotional chapter. And Anis really does love Bill. He's wanted him for a long time, so he's going to be careful not to mess this up! I agree, Bill does need a mami, but I think he basically feels like an orphan with parents. Pobre Bill!
Date: 03/13/12 04:20 pm Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
I cannot read as I have tears in my eyes because you made Bill go talk with Aniss mother portrait. Really. Brilliant. My poor Bill. I go back reading now.
Author's Response: Wonderful, wonderful review! Crying a little now myself :*) happy tears.
Date: 03/13/12 12:27 pm Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
I would really like to see Tom's pov it would be nice, to get insight on him. By not putting his pov even when it says he is part of the main pairing totally puts him in a place where we can easily hate him. I would really like to see more from Tom's pov. I feel like he has been cheated of having any say of why he feels like he does and why he does what he does. There is more to Tom than just being a cheater...please? It would be a could twist. Pretty please with a cherry on top! Anyways thanks for the update! =)
Author's Response: Tom is an intrinsic part of the story, which is why he's a main character. I don't think learning his pov about his cheating would make him sympathetic - he'd either make excuses (my dad always cheated on my mom, on taxes, on card games, so I figured what the hell, I'll do it too?) or deny that he's got some serious issues (I only stick with women, for the most part, so it's not REALLY like cheating). I mean, what can the guy say to make it better? He was a lousy husband. I know it feels to you like he's being left out, but the other story was all about Bill and Anis, too. This isn't really Tom's story to tell. I'll be giving him a say, but not until about the last chapter, to sort of round things up. Sorry, Judith! I'm thinking you maybe want to feel more connected to the Tom in this story, but it's not about him. Besides, if I put in his pov, you may really not like it - he'd probably be ignoring calls from Jasmine, pretending she isn't pregnant with his child. Maybe he was screwing some other chick right before he called Bill and begged him to come back to him. He's kind of damaged goods. Thanks for reviewing, as always!
Date: 03/13/12 11:25 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
Oh dear Lord
I gotta say I almost, yeah almost die waiting to read the follow up.
I knew the babies would be no issues for Anis
But. Tom is still hanging on so the problems are gonna be here for sure
Because if he finds out about the twins he is gonna be such an awful person and will sneak, tease, threats , anything to get Bill back... oh oh oh
Author's Response: We'll have to see what kind of problems might be in store for Bill. As long as Anis is with him, though, I'm sure it will all work out :D
Date: 03/13/12 09:12 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
okaay... I am ready. Bill. Bu. bigger boobs. sexy pregnant stomach.
well, maybe it's a lil bit unfair for Tom because the twins were also his, but he had jasmine's baby so forget it.
I am glad that the baby thing didn't bother Bill and Bu's relationship, we all know Anis is a good man. hail!
Author's Response: Wonder how Anis is going to feel about Bill's changing body. Tom would have gotten all horny over it (he gets horny over everything, though), but Anis, maybe not so much. I think Anis is pretty happy about the baby thing, even if it is moving fast. But we'll get more of his pov next!
Date: 03/13/12 09:00 am Title: Fog is a cage without a key
You know. I like it. Tom's babies!! yay it's a good news and a bad news at the same time.
p.s: I know I was late but I was too affected to not leaving a review!
Date: 03/13/12 08:07 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
Ooh. They're keeping the twins. And I can't wait to see Bill and Bu'd wedding, but only after Bill and Tom's divorce is official of course!
Author's Response: Bill's just all ready to jump into the future, isn't he? Good thing Anis seems to be on the same track.... ;)
Date: 03/13/12 06:16 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
I can't fault this chapter. It was amazing. Anis is so...so...just so. I love him to bits. Bill's freakout was incredibly well written, all the doubts and fears, but through it all he never once thought of abortion, so I guess he'd have given up Anis in favour of his twins. How's that for committment to his babies? I can't believe Tom, offering presents to get Bill back as if things would make up for the shit he'd pulled, and thinking Bill was that shallow he'd come running back for a sparkly trinket. I wonder if Bill will seriously be able to keep news of the babies from reaching Tom's ears. He's gonna have to pretend he and Anis decided to have kids, and he'll have to lie about how far along he is and make out the twins were born early if the issue ever comes up, or Tom will be able to calculate dates. And if Tom suspects could he demand a DNA test? Can't wait to read Anis's take on this. Adored his story about his father; Bill was right then when he talked to Mrs Ferchichi's picture - she would have understood. I can't believe how well you weave all the little details into the whole. Lovely, lovely chapter.
Author's Response: Hi Helen! Lovely review, as always. Thank you, I'm so glad Bill's panic attack was realistic. Poor Bill. He wouldn't even consider an abortion, though - just not part of the equation for him (I'm pro-keep-your-damned-laws-off-my-body myself, though, so it has nothing to do with political points of view). Tom - he's willing to try just about anything. We'll have to see about the rest! I thought Bill needed to talk to a mother figure, poor guy. I haven't delved too much into his emotions about his family. It's like they don't exist for him. Thank you for mentioning the details and I'm so happy you loved this one, it didn't seem as smooth when I was writing it a few sentences at a time :)
Date: 03/13/12 06:16 am Title: Trying to Sculpture Fog
It's 3am, and all I can get out is: eeeeee! :)
Author's Response: And I can say: Yaaaayyyy!!!
Date: 03/12/12 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 1: The fog comes in on little cat feet
Yay!!!!!!!!!!!! ohh it was ma 20th on sunday so this is sorta ma prezy from u
Author's Response: Well happy happy 20th, Missy P! Working on 3, should be up tomorrow ;)
Date: 03/12/12 08:19 am Title: Fog is a cage without a key
Very good chapter titles, I liked them both.
I was really shocked by the twin pregnancy. This will be quite a challenge first for Bill and then for his and Anis's love.
But I think Anis is mature now and will deal with this as it should. I do really like him in this story and I think HE will make the right choice. After all, he is so in love with Bill...
As I see it, this story is mainly about how Bill is growing up and becoming his true self. Its, of course, very painful for him but it was about time.
This is the first time reading a story on this site when I dont wish for a certain thing to happen. Its all so real to me, like real life, they all have good and bad things to love them for...
Its more like I dont DARE to wish for something, so I dont ruin the equilibrium of things. Im sure you know how its gonna evolve and probably there are some hints, but I dont want to see them now. Ill just go wherever you lead.
I hope I made sense.
Author's Response: Hi L.I.! You made perfect sense. This was a lovely review. You're right that Bill is maturing, finding a better path for himself than his insecurities had started him on before. I'm so glad this story comes across that real to you, that is a wonderful, wonderful thing to hear. And that you noted Anis is "mature now" - you remember his cautionary tale of bad ways to react to someone you love! He knows he behaved badly with Andrej (you know I really actually liked the idea of them together...maybe another story). And Anis learned from his mistakes, he knows that he wants someone to love and plans on holding tight to that. Thank you for taking the journey with me!