Date: 04/12/12 03:49 pm Title: It Could be Worse
Wooah... O.O
Wasn't that interesting! xD
Date: 04/11/12 11:18 am Title: My Star Part II
Oh, this was a brilliant flashback chapter so we learn all about Bill's past. So sad. I wonder what happened to Nathin, whether he still alive and whether he and Bill will ever find each other again. They were so sweet together. Looking forward to your next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was hoping you all would like it. Keep reading and enjoy!
Date: 04/11/12 10:47 am Title: My Star Part II
Awwwww :( poor Bill, this chapter was really great , perfectly written :3
Date: 04/11/12 09:26 am Title: My Star Part II
I fuckin' love this, can't wait to read more, I'll give you a longer review next time I promise I have to flee now! But I want an update ASAP!
Author's Response: Why thank you!
Date: 04/11/12 07:07 am Title: My Star Part II
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 04/09/12 12:40 am Title: My Star Part I
This is great! I hope you keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks! I should be done with the next chapter soon!
Date: 03/29/12 10:52 am Title: My Star Part I
Oh. Poor Bill. So sad.
Date: 03/29/12 05:32 am Title: My Star Part I
nice chapter!
i fell so bad for bill
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 03/29/12 05:21 am Title: My Star Part I
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i feel so sorry for Bill omg... poor thing, please update soon :)
Date: 03/29/12 12:01 am Title: My Star Part I
Ohh Billy *huggles*
Thank you for this peek into Bills past. Definitely helps clear up why he is the way he is with Tom. Tom may be a rough abusive asshat, but at least there is only one of him.
Can't wait to see more of what that sneak preview fortells. Keep up the good work!
Date: 03/22/12 05:19 pm Title: Something to Eat
I adore this story line. Right up my alley. Thanks for the update.
Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you can enjoy the rest as it begins to unfold:)
Date: 03/22/12 11:25 am Title: Something to Eat
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 03/22/12 02:58 am Title: It Could be Worse
btw, don't mind the ooc, you did mention tom's background and I realized he was VERY unstable, it makes sense, he wouldn't just be nice to some random girl unless he had some other plans for her, and the rape didn't seem rush to me...what I mean is I wouldn't expected a guy with tom's story (his own mother forgot about he existed for christ sake!)to be all nice just for nothing.
Now if you want us to pay attention to details, It seemed to me bill knew tom's name before he mentioned it in chap 2 right before he wakes up from his black out, another detail I think tom said bill wasn't tight when he entered him during the first rape, maybe bill was raped before? or maybe bill's a prostitute as well...doesn't matter 'cause the story is just taking off and we can't expect it give the whole plot away in just 3 chaps. Don't mind other ppl you're doing great, if this is your first fic I congrats you 'cause the plot it's harsh, you could have just gone to the safe zone and write some sappy shit, but you took the risk and picked a non-con with slavery and many more...I prefer this kind of plot as well. love this
Author's Response: Thank you. Your words mean a lot, it's what keeps me going on writing more. I'm glad some people like you actually caught on to the fact Tom was unstable. You can't give everything out in the beginning! Give it time to spread out and fall together! rnPlus I think I might do some background stories, and go into some detail to show why the character are the way they are. rnOnce again, thank you.
Date: 03/22/12 02:35 am Title: Something to Eat
I loved it, it's really original, I want an update asap...at the begining of this chap I thought tom was fuckin' bill, then I thought he was being paid for the sex, I never imagine he PAID for sex as well, that makes me think tom's a sex addict, you didn't mention anything but bill had to blown him just after he had gotten laid with that woman, poor bill actually had to taste her. I'd love to know about bill's story and keep switching from tom's head to bill's head just like you're doing now, I love to know what both characters are thinking. GREAT JOB!!;)
Date: 03/22/12 01:56 am Title: Something to Eat
poor bill :( .... I love the story anyway :3
Date: 03/22/12 12:52 am Title: Something to Eat
*looks around in befuddlement*...how on earth did I iss an update?? hmm...
So far Tom is just making me all 'Was die fick??' I think we need to get some sort of back story, or explanation as to why Tom is the way he is, or the story will just fall flat on its ass.
NIce to chapters, I like the smut, but I hope we get into the meat of the story soon, Girl cannot survive on smut slone, but must have a well balanced meal of smut, backstory, and plot.
Can't wait to see more! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: In the first chapter I believe I give you a 'taste' of Tom's background. I know I haven't for Bill yet, but don't worry it's coming soon.rnThank you for the review.
Date: 03/14/12 06:06 pm Title: No Leaving
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 03/13/12 10:33 am Title: It Could be Worse
what happened to Bill? was he raped by the other men?
Author's Response: Yes he was.
Date: 03/13/12 10:32 am Title: No Leaving
ooh boy, I love this story, I am intrigued by Bill, he refusing and accepting at the same time.
Author's Response: Thanks!