Date: 06/07/12 10:51 am Title: Fliped
What. Is. Going. To. Happen!?!?! *___*
Date: 05/25/12 01:35 am Title: Fliped
Great story!! I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Date: 05/21/12 02:16 pm Title: Fliped
i adore this! yaay! yaay! mooooooorrrree!
Date: 05/20/12 01:22 am Title: Fliped
I like how you went with this, especially adding an antagonist! Good job baby brother!
Date: 05/19/12 10:38 pm Title: Fliped
I like it!!!! I can't wait to read more but Bill is going to have to eat at some point and how is Tom going to deal with that? I don't think Bill can live just on human food if he can eat it at all. Bill is so cute though. I love him but poor Tom... so much to deal with. I hope he can take care of Bill. Andreas is after him and now i'm scared.
Date: 04/22/12 05:59 pm Title: Im Real
This is just soooooooo good! :D Can't wait for more ^^ OMG, I loove a protective Tom ^.-
Date: 04/21/12 05:45 am Title: Im Real
Oh my. I love this story more and more :)
Date: 04/20/12 03:31 am Title: Im Real
Omg!
I like!
Please continue!
Date: 04/17/12 08:03 pm Title: Im Real
Sweet ending...I liked the dramatic with the intense reality. Keep it up Nena you have talent... and work on that confidence. The next time someone asks you if you are a good writer...just say yes don't say I don't know and tell them that others have said they like your work...
Own who you are and the talents you possess!!!!
Date: 04/17/12 07:32 pm Title: Midnight Blackout
You know Nena, this all sounds like an interesting plot for a movie. Now depending what genre you would prefer it to be in would determine if it needed necessary tweaking or not...I still say it would make an interesting movie...
Author's Response:
AW thank you... and ya about the lunch dinner thing i chagned it thank you for pointing that out
Date: 04/17/12 05:20 pm Title: Heaven
Well Nena, I'm still reading :-) so that must mean you have my attention! Again great description and attention to detail. Of course the G's secret love relationship took me by surprise and a little un nerved but hey its your creation so I'm going with it! I shant judge so... on to the next chapter!
Date: 04/17/12 04:47 pm Title: Dolls
Ok dear sweet Nena...This is Shannon btw. So far so good, as a writer you have real potential! Keep working at it, as expected being as English is not your mother tongue there were some miswording and sentence structure. One thing I shall point out is something I tend to forget to in the thrill of the creation of a story is to remember the little things. Such as early on you mentioned Tom and Simone were going to have dinner...which lead me to believe it was night time. Then instead they were having lunch and the night image changed dramatically to day. Some references such as the mentioning that the girls whom auditioned literally sucking need not be mentioned I think. Yes we all know Tom and his sexual appitite but unless it was previously mentioned as a writers tip always assume your reader knows nothing about your characters until you have informed them what is needed to know. I hope I'm making sence....over all so far so good. I like your descriptiveness, you know how to really bring a scene to life!
Date: 04/17/12 03:17 pm Title: Dolls
Very interesting, cannot wait to read more!
Date: 04/15/12 12:25 pm Title: Im Real
oh I love this story also now Bill came in too, and he is adorable , I love when Bill is so cute and childish :3 can't wait to read more ^^ keep up the great job!
Date: 04/15/12 08:01 am Title: Im Real
Awh, poor baby. How'd you break your arm (or was it wrist oh well)?
And ya know i LOVES this chapter! WHat happened that made your background white btw?
Next chapter please????? Dying to read it here.....
Date: 04/15/12 07:58 am Title: Midnight Blackout
OEEEH, long chapter! Me gusta!
And it has G&G smut,
and doll-loving-cops. (how did you even come up with that?)
Oh, and tommie being a baby(a very very SEXY baby)......
kay, i'm just gonna read the next chapter....
Date: 04/15/12 07:56 am Title: Heaven
GUSTI AND GEORG, they're sooo cute. And enter billa. YAY, love love love love love it. Enough love?
OOOEEEEH, Skittles. *runs off to get skittles*
Date: 04/15/12 07:55 am Title: Dolls
HAHAHAH, I'm thinking this story's gonna be hilarious..... Let me guess, you boys scared of dolls? No, other ways you'd faint everytime you saw your own banner. Oh, and you know I love the writing!
Date: 04/15/12 04:49 am Title: Im Real
I really enjoyed reading this, It's cute how Tom got protective of Bill! I can't wait to read more! :)
Date: 04/13/12 05:31 am Title: Im Real
nice chapter!
i cant wait for the next chapter!!