Date: 06/13/12 12:10 am Title: Pieces?
This chapter was so intense! I loved it!
Date: 06/12/12 11:56 pm Title: Hospital?
My god, you have a wondeful way with words. This story keeps getting better and better as I keep reading on :)
Date: 06/12/12 11:41 pm Title: Remember?
Can't wait to read more!
Date: 06/12/12 11:29 pm Title: Who Am I?
Oh wow. This was really good. I liked how descriptive this chapter was :)
Date: 06/11/12 10:01 am Title: The Specialist?
Here is the sun! Awesome story, hope you'll be writing more soon - and post xp
Date: 06/10/12 06:50 pm Title: Running?
Poor Gordon :( Well, that was exciting and now the twins are on the run. Hope you and your beta will give us a new chapter soon. I want to know what happens with Gordon and Simone!
Date: 06/09/12 05:50 pm Title: Running?
Amazing, action-packed chapter. I could almost feel Tom cutting into Bill's thigh and how agonising it was for them both. John was truly amazing, sacrificing himself to save the boys. Poor Gordon, getting so badly beaten, thinking he was suffering to save his beloved wife as well as the boys and then David saying he's going to find and kill Simone. I just love how tough and protective Tom is of Bill, and I am so hoping they make it to Katie's because she seems so lovely. I really loved this chapter and can't wait for the next one.
Date: 06/08/12 03:33 pm Title: Who Am I?
Aww nein! Poor Billie boy, he must feel so confused and lonely :O I just want to hug him really tight and never let go, aw. this is an awesome story Nena, :)
Date: 06/08/12 01:52 am Title: Running?
I hope they make it to Katie!!!! I just want them safe!! Stupid David... Karma will have to take care of him.
Date: 06/07/12 08:22 pm Title: His Thoughts?
this was a great chapter..Im enjoying how this story is going...
come on need more need more!! (^_^)
Date: 06/07/12 08:16 pm Title: Running?
yay..new chapter...
this is getting really good!!
keep up the good work I cant wait to read more!!
Date: 06/07/12 08:13 pm Title: Who Am I?
this is a good begging for the storyline :)
Date: 06/07/12 07:34 pm Title: Guilt?
Sex scene. :3 Yay! Looking forward to more of them!
Date: 06/07/12 07:20 pm Title: Running?
Yay! New chapter awesome!
Date: 06/07/12 06:22 pm Title: Pieces?
This was a sad chapter :( But the plot's good! It's an interesting direction to take the story. Most people don't combine celebrities with sci-fi. Not too sure how to react to it, but it's definitely something new!
Date: 06/07/12 06:17 pm Title: Hospital?
So many flashbacks! They just keep throwing twists and loops in this plot :O It seems like everyone is being tormented as time wears on.
Date: 06/07/12 06:14 pm Title: Remember?
Cute scene between the twins! Poor Bill though :( His past seems really tough.
Date: 06/07/12 06:11 pm Title: Who Am I?
Good start to the story! You jumped right into the action and put wonderful detail into the scenes to make the reader feel like they could visualize Tom carrying the girl and actually feel his pain.
Date: 06/07/12 04:49 pm Title: The Specialist?
I love the idea of this! You've weaved together a wonderful plot with many twists and turns :) I especially love the flashbacks. It gives the reader just a glimpse of what the boy had to suffer through while keeping the reader eager to learn more. I do have a bit of constructive criticism though. I understand English is not your first
Language, but you tend to place adjectives in places where they're unnecessary. It disrupts the flow of the story. Other than that, it's pretty well written! :D Have your beta double check for spelling errors and missing periods, too. It'll help the story flow a little better. Loved this! Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Date: 06/03/12 10:56 am Title: The Specialist?
Nooooooo....gotta finish it!!
it was getting really good! (^_^)