Date: 12/08/08 07:50 am Title: Subjective Reality:
Good writing, you write age-apropriate: meaning you know how to write five year-olds.
Date: 12/06/08 11:01 am Title: Homeostasis:
Hmm, I'm a bit confused about the last paragraph. The fact that he threw away a letter with his brother's name on it indicated to me that he threw away a latter his brother had -sent- him, but then by the stuff you've put before in teh story, the only person that he could have responded to about whatever was next to the desk is his brother. So... they are together? Did he throw away junk mail for his brother?
Date: 12/05/08 10:15 pm Title: Jealousy:
I'm enjoying Dr. Engle a lot.
Date: 12/05/08 03:48 pm Title: Counter Transference:
I LOVE THIS. I read the entire thing in one sitting a few days ago, and I finally have the time to review. The way everything flows... This story has a real hold on me.
This is a truly amazing piece of fanfiction. :D
Date: 12/05/08 12:01 am Title: Subjective Reality:
*big smile* I loved this chapter sooo much. Kids are so mean and the kissing and saying butt head parts were adorable.
Date: 12/04/08 11:59 pm Title: Drive:
Oh, this was adorable. And yes, Bill screaming into the microphone definitely made me giggle. I was like 'that is PERFECT' ^_^ Yeah, this chapter definitely showed them as six-year-olds much better
Date: 12/04/08 11:48 pm Title: Punishment:
I like what you've got here, but I'm struggling to accept this as typical six-year-old behavior. I don't know, the scene right before the end felt too sexual for the end, and I think that takes away from the innocence of their relationship at that point. Also, I'm actually not sure how much of a problem it is for young children to kiss, even on the lips. Especially in Europe, where there's no concept of 'personal space' like in the US. This may just be me, but I remember having to kiss my classmates on the cheek during class birthday parties and such, so a kiss on the lips probably wouldn't be that shocking to European children. But anyway, that's just my own nitpicking. You've got a nice writing style and I look forward to the rest!
Date: 11/28/08 05:25 pm Title: Counter Transference:
This is really one of the best fics i have read so far :)
this chapter was beautiful, i enjoyed reading every word!!
i hope u will update soon :)
Bye Bye!
Date: 11/10/08 02:15 pm Title: Counter Transference:
I'm loveing the story so far, can't wait for the next update. I hope you can get everything gets sorted out :)
Date: 11/09/08 04:41 pm Title: Counter Transference:
well, I just finished your story ^^
it's good!
I hope you continue soon :)
xxx
Date: 11/08/08 07:46 pm Title: Subjective Reality:
this is the cutest thing ever
Date: 11/06/08 11:45 pm Title: Counter Transference:
gosh, your story is.. amazing. xD
can't wait for the next chapter.
if it ever comes! xD
Date: 11/04/08 05:48 pm Title: Counter Transference:
oh wow this is a really amazing story, the characters are so real. when are you going to update.
Date: 11/04/08 03:35 pm Title: Homeostasis:
the pic atthe end um... Bill looks like a demon child O.O xD
Date: 10/25/08 05:08 pm Title: Counter Transference:
WHERE IS THE NEXT CHAPTER?!?!
More please!
Date: 10/25/08 04:05 pm Title: Persuasion:
Thank you Darcy!
Date: 10/25/08 03:56 pm Title: Suffering:
OH NO. NO NO NO NO NO NO
Date: 10/25/08 07:57 am Title: Humiliation:
OHHHHHHHHHH NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 10/22/08 09:20 pm Title: Fundamental Attribution Error:
OH MY GOD. You win at life for this story.
Good song for the storm/makeup: "Across the Universe/Helter Skelter- Across the Universe"