Date: 12/31/08 10:33 pm Title: Counter Transference:
Aughh! I just finished this whole story. This is amazing. i loved it. You are brilliant and an amazing writer. You gotta update when you can! I'm sure it'll be well worth the wait.
Date: 12/31/08 03:09 am Title: Illusion:
They didn't stop grumbling until they heard the door to their mother's studio close and they knew they were alone. The door closed behind them. Bags from the day's shopping trip were dropped on the floor and in an instant they were in each other’s arms, stumbling backwards until they tumbled onto Tom's bed. - *flutter claps* and *giggles* ha ha ha little scamps!!!
Kiss me all better,” he demanded playfully. – he he he
The adults were content with the knowledge that their plan was successful, the twins were content with the knowledge that their plan was successful, and all parties involved were blind to the fact that they could not have been more wrong. – ha ha ha
Tomi is cheating on Billla!!! Oh my!
“But you kissed her. Why do you hate her?” Bill mumbled against Tom's lips, obviously confused.
“Because you're going to kiss her,” Tom answered *giggles*
Date: 12/31/08 02:43 am Title: Separation Anxiety:
The door wasn't even closed behind him before Bill was running to Tom. – awh!!!
Tears spilled and ran down Tom's cheeks in a torrent and he stared into the eyes that mirrored his own. “I didn't mean to hurt you,” he said in a small choked voice. – oh poor Tomi!!!
“As soon as Mom goes to bed you can come back to my room. We'll keep it a secret. We have to pretend, Bill. We have to make them think we don't need each other. We have to make them think we don't love each other like we do,” Tom concluded after thinking their situation over.
“Just pretend?” Bill asked nervously.
“Just pretend,” Tom assured him. - *smiles*
Simone and Gordon never heard the soft tiptoeing footsteps of Bill creeping into his brother's bed. - *grins* Naughty boys!
Date: 12/31/08 02:26 am Title: Id:
Lol he thinks they’re being “touched” by an adult ha ha ha
Oh now Tomi’s all freak out that he might be abusing his brother. Ha ha *cracks up*
Squirmy little Billa *grins* gets me all hot under the collar
Beneath the bushes were her precious innocent boys, stripped down to their underwear, and covered in dirt. Bill's eyes were closed, and Tom's hand was clamped tightly over the younger twins' mouth to silence him. Tom was on top of Bill, grinding against him, and quite obviously the aggressor in the situation. – oh my no wonder she blamed poor tom for everything
oh poor broken boys.
Date: 12/31/08 02:03 am Title: Coercive Power:
What Doctor Engle didn't understand was that Tom wasn't angry that his father had left. He was angry that he had not left sooner. Tom was angry at himself for not keeping his promise. – interesting!
When they played their secret games in the dark it was different noises that Tom tried to silence; noises he didn't even know the name for. – mmmhhh nice
Jorg stood in front of the fort, listening to the odd sounds coming from within. He could not wrap his mind around what he was hearing. It sounded like... No, his boys were only seven. He was imagining things. He was absolutely sure he was just imagining things, right up until he heard the words “Oh Tomi” being moaned softly by his youngest son. – O.O *bites nails*
It would be another year before Simone would see what Jorg saw. – dun-dun-daaaaaa
Yes thank you Darcy for being a beta and supporting a favorite writer of mine!!!
Date: 12/31/08 01:20 am Title: Drive:
Yeah a new school away from that BITCH!
This was why he was considered one of the best child psychiatrists in the city. He adapted his methods to fit each child, often making things up as he went along. – very clever doctor!!!
No hitting Bill in this story!!! It’s not an InNu story so NO! I say NO!
Just when the world was starting to seem okay again something else would change, leaving the twins constantly feeling as if they were on unsteady ground. The only security in their lives was their mother, and each other, and right now they were both fairly sure that their mother was as angry at them as their father was. – oh poor little boys
“Will you kiss me all better?” - *flutter claps* yes *nods* kiss him all better!
Date: 12/31/08 01:00 am Title: Punishment:
Yeah *nods head* Miss Hahn is a FUCKING BITCH! Whore dirty, fucking whore! OMG! *slaps her for being such a snobby bitch*
“I'm sorry Tom, did you and Bill get your clothes mixed up this morning because I'm pretty sure that shirt you’re wearing says ‘Bill’ on it,” Miss Hahn interrupted with a sarcastic tone that was not at all appropriate for a kindergarten teacher. The children in the class giggled and Tom glared furiously at the teacher. – yeah see? BITCH!
“ 'Cause Mommy will hear and maybe we wont get breakfast,” Bill admitted – oh poor baby bill
kisses made things better. – yes they do!!!
“I wanna taste you more. Then I don't think about how hungry my tummy is,” Bill suggested. - *eye roll* yes kissing makes things better everything! *grins*
Naughty, Naughty boys!!!
“Of course. Whatever it takes to help my boys. I just want them to be happy,” Simone said as she dabbed at her weepy eyes again. – Simone’s a good Mommy
Date: 12/31/08 12:05 am Title: Subjective Reality:
Miss Hahn threw up her hands in resignation. It was hopeless, particularly when the twins' parents refused to admit there was anything wrong with the way their spoiled and isolated boys behaved. In her eyes, they were spoiled little brats who didn't want to play with the other children because they thought themselves better than everyone else. She didn't understand them. – Miss Haha is a capitol BITCH!
“I don't like school,” Tom complained – Me either!
This was the biggest crisis they'd seen since the great chocolate milk drought of '93. – ha ha ha ha *cracks up some more*
“Boys! Get in the class right now or I'm sending another note home with your mother,” the insensitive teacher barked. The tearful twins reluctantly returned to the classroom, and for once they were not holding hands. – Miss Hahn is a fucking whore she broke them!
Yes stupid buttheads!!!!
Date: 12/29/08 12:40 pm Title: Counter Transference:
Whew!
I just finished that last chapter after reading the whole thing in like, 5 days.
I have to say, i LOVE this! I know what moving is like, so take all the time you need!
Date: 12/23/08 05:15 am Title: Counter Transference:
Please continue, this is one of my favorite stories, its amazing :]
Date: 12/14/08 07:40 pm Title: Counter Transference:
AHHH WAHT!?!?!?!
GHEY!
Here I was, happily reading this all day only taking breaks to have sushi with the boyfriend...
And then... THEN... THIS! THIS IS OUTRAGEOUS! You don't understand... When I get home from school tomorrow I MUST have another chapter of this to read.
But, I suppose I should give you something for keeping my attention this long. I can't even keep my attention this long!!!
This is what Bill's face would look like if he read your story.
Author's Response:
I'm sorry for the delay. Since the last chapter of Analyzed, I've moved twice and started a job that consumes most of my free time.
The last chapter of Analyzed is written. It needs a bit of polish and a more solid ending. It won't take long to finish. Unfortunately, I work retail now and Christmas time is the worst time to be working retail. There's a good chance that I won't have time or energy to put those finishing touches on Analyzed until after Christmas.
Date: 12/12/08 01:22 am Title: Counter Transference:
Ahh! More chapters! Hurry!
Date: 12/10/08 03:07 am Title: Counter Transference:
It took me a week to find time to read this whole story, but it was worth it! This was so so so good. And I'm happy that I read it. *smile*
Date: 12/09/08 06:42 pm Title: Counter Transference:
well, it's def one of the best ff I've ever read. The only one that I equally admire is Body Language by Firelucy.
Your perspective of the twins' relationship and your writing skills are fabulous! I love the emotions and the detailed description and of course the hot stuff ;)
I was a bit upset when I read last chapters but now I see your point.I mean a happy ending, rite? :)
I love you, you're the best. Can't wait to the new chapters. Good luck with yr writing and stuff. Fingers crossed, lots of hugs :*
Date: 12/08/08 08:55 pm Title: Jealousy:
I think you must have a background in psychology. I'm a psych major in college and you just seem to have a very good knowledge base.
Date: 12/08/08 04:21 pm Title: Coercive Power:
I really like this story. You write so well, and know how to write the twins at each age. You're really good at narrating from a child's perspective. I've read fics before that were ridiculous because the author had five year olds talking like twelve year olds.
Date: 12/08/08 07:50 am Title: Subjective Reality:
Good writing, you write age-apropriate: meaning you know how to write five year-olds.
Date: 12/06/08 11:01 am Title: Homeostasis:
Hmm, I'm a bit confused about the last paragraph. The fact that he threw away a letter with his brother's name on it indicated to me that he threw away a latter his brother had -sent- him, but then by the stuff you've put before in teh story, the only person that he could have responded to about whatever was next to the desk is his brother. So... they are together? Did he throw away junk mail for his brother?
Date: 12/05/08 10:15 pm Title: Jealousy:
I'm enjoying Dr. Engle a lot.
Date: 12/05/08 03:48 pm Title: Counter Transference:
I LOVE THIS. I read the entire thing in one sitting a few days ago, and I finally have the time to review. The way everything flows... This story has a real hold on me.
This is a truly amazing piece of fanfiction. :D