Date: 03/23/08 12:38 pm Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
I'm wondering what the twins will do if they are 17 of 18 if they are already doing stuff like this when they are just 11 ! :O ^^
Hope you'll update soon ;-)
Author's Response: They will be very dirty boys by the time they are 18 I guess.
Date: 03/23/08 12:08 pm Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
i was worried about that! I was like, surely they would put clothes on! good thing she didn't go in for a closer look!
Date: 03/23/08 12:04 pm Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
but we like dirty. :]
Date: 03/23/08 11:55 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
It was indeed a dirty chapter, but a good one though ^^
Can't wait for more, this is great! :D
Date: 03/23/08 10:16 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
god god...four days girl..I have been away for four days and you managed to do all of this *motions to last couple of chapters*
this was a really good thing to come home to indeed ;) you make their 'growing up time' so sweet and adorable and yes, very very dirty (but we all love you for that)
oh my the doctor and the twin and and ... no words
so I'm supposed to survive untill the next chapter how ???
(by the way I thought I killed Jörg that son of a bitch...well guess I'll just have to hunt him down then)
Date: 03/23/08 10:02 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
yay for updates.
can't wait for more =]]
Date: 03/23/08 09:37 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
haha... that was a dirty chapter... but it was also a good chapter haha...
more soon please!
Date: 03/23/08 09:31 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
ok, it was dirty.. but I loved it! I think I've said that before for the other chapters but this one was perfect!!!
Date: 03/23/08 08:46 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
O hay.
They dodged a major bullet. My heart dropped into my stomach, I thought Simone had caught them again. I really really need the twins to be vigiliant, but they're only freaking eleven and won't be able to think about that stuff all the time. I'm dreading their discovery again. I know it's coming and I'm biting my nails because it's going to be devastating.
Great job.
Date: 03/23/08 06:46 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
I LOVE DIRTY CHAPTERS! YAY FOR YOU!!! xD
Date: 03/23/08 05:52 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
aww i love your chapter's their very good. are you gonna make chapters all the way when their like 18???
Author's Response: That is the plan. I'll probably take 1 to 3 chapters to cover each year of the twins' lives and work my way up to age 18.
Date: 03/23/08 04:53 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
mmm
and the end was all DUN DUN DA
Date: 03/23/08 04:48 am Title: Cognitive Dissonance:
godddd. love it. naked sweaty twins mmm.
aw the doctor, too. :( poor guy, but at least they are all Kindred.
wonderful writing. ♥
Date: 03/23/08 01:57 am Title: Introspection:
I love this story more, and more everytime I read a new chapter! This is awesome! I love where this is going, and I think you should keep going with it!!
Date: 03/22/08 07:48 pm Title: Introspection:
yay..I love this doctor! he's the best! =D
Date: 03/22/08 02:41 pm Title: Introspection:
;D I love Engle.
Date: 03/22/08 01:36 pm Title: Introspection:
yeeeeeeeees, I loooooove it!! I was sooo wishing the doctor wouldn't tell anyone at the moment he found out about the twins!!! I definitely wanna read more of this!
Date: 03/21/08 10:14 pm Title: Introspection:
awwwww. so cute. i love the part when Bill hugged his brother and kept saying sorry over and over again. MAJOR AWW ALERT. XD
so fucking perfect. i love it.
Date: 03/21/08 08:23 pm Title: Introspection:
Oh god, this story is getting more exiting for every chapter that comes up.. I can't wait for the next chapter, 'cause this is killing me! You write it so unbelievably good, and it just catches me. Great work! :D
Date: 03/21/08 04:32 pm Title: Introspection:
Oh, my. This is a really high-quality fan fiction. I love the way you portrayed the innocent way children's minds work, even when regarding sexual issues. I'm really looking forward to the development of the twins' relationship! However, the narration in the beginning seemed a bit forced. You explained the way the toddler!twins' minds work too much, to the point it seemed like you were spoon-feeding the readers the dynamics of the twins' relationship and the twins' thought process. I guess because it was a challenge to really get into a 4-years-old children's head, but I would like to see less telling and more showing. However, the narration seems much natural and flowing later in the chapters. Besides that, though, this is the best tokio twincest fiction I've read so far!
Author's Response: Wow! An honest review with actually constructive criticism. That is so refreshing. Thank you. It did take me a while to get into the flow of things and it is a challenge to figure out how much I need to tell the readers and how much I can expect them to figure out on their own. As I go along, I am expecting that my readers can figure out more on their own. I also understand my audience a bit better now. Thank you so much for the compliments and the constructive criticism. I'll keep those things in mind in future chapters.