Reviews For Death Hour
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Reviewer: Tokio Jax Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/11 10:17 pm Title: Chapter 2

Ok...this chapter confused me. People aren't buried a month later unless it's a murder investigation. Was that first paragraph a news story, your description of activities since the death, or the eulogy at the funeral? And why'd you repeat it as the last paragraph? Was that the priest talking or a news story now?
All in all it was a good chapter just a bit confusing as to who was narrating.

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you for the reviews, and yeah I know that this chapter was confusing. My best friend Matilda that died in August 2008 was buried one month after her death, so it is possible sometimes. But as I said in the chapter notes, this wasn't my best chapter and it was a bit messed up, but I hope that it will get better afterwards. After all, it's my first time I write a English story :)

Reviewer: Tokio Jax Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/11 10:08 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh that was so sad! I actually teared up at how much despair he was in.

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