Date: 01/18/12 06:24 pm Title: Sometimes it's better to keep your mouth shut.
once again another amazingly well written chapter! I wonder who carly and Josh are? Oh, and in the chapter before, is it in a dream when tom shoots him? xx
Author's Response:
Carly and Josh play a big part in the story later. :) And yes, lol, it was a dream. Thanks for reading! I'm glad you like it so far :)
Date: 01/17/12 05:33 pm Title: Sometimes it's better to keep your mouth shut.
I read your story the first time round and it was great then, and your rewrite is amazing. I'm really looking forward to your updates.
Date: 01/12/12 06:17 pm Title: Everything is fine.
I haven't read the original so I can/t make a judgement on whether it is better. But what i do is that what i just read now was absolutely amazing. You can really feel his pain, if ya know what I mean. i hope you update soon!! xxx
Date: 12/05/11 10:46 pm Title: Rockstars catch the flu, too
Hmm, for some reason this seems a little more casual and less prose-y than the last version... which I don't so much like. It's not bad, though. Everything else is golden.
Also, contributing to that non-seriousness are the chapter titles. They seem too light-hearted for the story, I think. (Except for the first one)
Lol, sorry, I just had to be honest.
Author's Response:
Lol, it's fine, love. Feel free to speak your mind. I won't get offended. I took a lot of the prose-y stuff out because it felt like it was basically saying the same things over and over again, and the story seemed to be moving too slowly for my personal taste.
rnAs for the titles, I was actually going for a sort of bitterly sarcastic tone. The problem, I guess, is that everyone interprets things differently, and I tend to forget that. Where's a good beta when you need one?
rnI truly appreciate your comments, and I'll have them in mind as I write the rest of the story. I hope you'll keep reading and giving me your thoughts.
Date: 12/03/11 07:55 pm Title: Twin-Language
gah
I was hoping for an update to this
oh well...good luck
looking forward to this...again
Date: 12/03/11 05:02 pm Title: Twin-Language
Lol, at first I was shocked and saddened to see this re-posted, since I really like/liked the original. But I guess it's alright if it's just tweaking. I liked the plot :)
Date: 12/03/11 05:01 pm Title: Twin-Language
Wait, you rewrote it AGAIN? Isn't this the third time now? ._. WILL I EVER GET TO READ THE END OF THIS? LOL XD