Date: 11/30/11 06:36 am Title: Chapter One
I love it loads! but tom does seem like some peado stalker at the begining **grins** its a cute story thanks and please update sooon!:)
Date: 11/30/11 02:54 am Title: Chapter One
This is a really good start. Very intreguing. Can't wait to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I will try not to make you wait too long, of course; I hope to post my next chapter fairly soon.
Date: 11/30/11 02:08 am Title: Chapter One
Interesting start. Your characterization of Tom was really good. I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm really glad that Tom's character is coming across, and I will try to have more to post as soon as I can.
Date: 11/30/11 01:12 am Title: Chapter One
love it! mehr bitte!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I will try and post more as soon as I can.
Date: 11/29/11 11:36 pm Title: Chapter One
I did like it! Tom creeps me out, though. You did a good job illustrating his obsession through your writing.
Author's Response: Yes, Tom is supposed to be more than a little strange at this point. I'm glad that he's coming across like that, and I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
Date: 11/29/11 10:09 pm Title: Chapter One
This is just absolutely breathtaking! I love how deep and complex you've made the characters in this, and the sort of dream-like quality of the whole thing. I love it!!!
Author's Response: Well, thank you very much. I'm really glad you're enjoying it so far. I try to make characters with as many dimensions as I can, and so I'm really happy they're coming across like that.
Date: 11/29/11 09:25 pm Title: Chapter One
Pls. do update, you got a simple plot but it delivers your story amazingly, I like the "butterfly funeral" here it's sweet enough thou.....can't wait for your next chappy, well then goodluck for now I hope to read more interesting event here ok.....see yah till then.....;D
Author's Response: I will try to update as soon as I can. I also really like my butterfly's funeral, I felt it was just about the right kind of situation for the two of them to really start to get to know each other better.
Date: 11/29/11 09:09 pm Title: Chapter One
This is interesting :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
Date: 11/29/11 09:07 pm Title: Chapter One
i love the way you write this, so simple and beautiful. it's a very good start, if i say so myself.
Author's Response: Thank you very much; I try to write simply so as not to muddle the actual story, if that makes sense, and I'm glad it's coming across.
Date: 11/29/11 09:01 pm Title: Chapter One
I already can't wait for the next chapter! Love it :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I will try and post the next chapter when I can.
Date: 11/29/11 08:08 pm Title: Chapter One
this sounds like a good story!!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I will try and post the next chapter when I can.
Date: 11/29/11 07:47 pm Title: Chapter One
YOUR story is amazing. Seriously. I'm so hooked now; no lie. I'd like it so very much if you updated soon. Please? Tom's obsession with Bill is so interesting and the way he doesn't seem to freak out when he's around Bill, and how he acts, how he manages to capture Bill's attention in all the right ways is just... so good! I loved it.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm so glad you like it so far! I'll try to update as soon as I can.
Date: 11/29/11 07:22 pm Title: Chapter One
Its good so far but i think you want to use quotation marks instead of apostraphes if your goal was to make the characters talk..so yeah that was confusing, unless it was meant to be that way :/ But anyways, i wish you luck on future posts :)
Author's Response: Ah, my apologies on the apostrophe thing; I live in the UK, where people refuse to accept work for publication if it's got speech in quotation marks. I'll amend that by the next update. Thank you for leaving a review :)