comment1: theres an ad for something called "corset story" right beneath the box im typeing this in so im now picturing bill in a corset... just thought you should know.

comment2: also, i love corsets even though i dont own one (yet)... and now im wondering wth is keeping up bills corset in my head, you know...with his lack of boobege and such... man im a weirdo-why do you even talk to me? lol

comment3:that painted a funny picture in my head- not as funny as corset wearing bill but still- poor adam.I would say it must hurt his masculinity but...well he doesn't have much.

comment4: natt plays chess too? nice.There was this big faze where the males of my family played all the time but sadly, i never learned.

comment5: wait- she sometimes takes the clothes off peoples backs? NICE. especially seeing how im sure boys shes striping want that the other way around haha

commnt6:"Adam, you're wearing flip-flops and they're not very appealing on you."hahahahahaha

comment7: “but he figured he was lucky to have a stable figure so much older than him for as long as he did’ hes VERY lucky. I don’t think iv EVER had as stable a figure as he has in tom.

Comment8; curious- what happens if he tells tom? Lets be completely crazy and pretend he wouldn’t (by which I mean tom wouldn’t) try to kidnap bill away and he just let it keep happening…would Jorge…kill him just for knowing? Might be a silly question, so sue me.

Comment9:” He always cried all the way back, whether Adam was with him or not, and threatened to punch him if he ever told anyone they mutually knew.” Wait, who cries? And who threatens too punch? This part confuses me a bit.

Comment10: why doesn’t he want it on facebook?…so the guys he’s forced to be with wont hurt tom or something, right?

Comment11: while im at it did he (adam) just walk right in to their private moment, snap a pic, announce he was going to put it where the whole world could see, then try to walk out? Good grief. And im reading this as I listion to ‘pretty boy’ by 2ne1 (sings high pitched while looking around nonchalant like- IIIIIIronyyyyy…

Comment12:’the gd word’? he says it like its such a bad thing.

Comment13: whats up with tom and taking down doors/ in your head does he just hate doors or something/ first he takes one off the hinges then he threats to burts through one. Good grief.

Comment14: take him ‘home’?!

Comment15: ‘"Bill, you are home, Baby," this made me wana laugh a bit for some strange reason

Comment16: "You think I want to live with you? You think I want to be dragged from my life? From wealth? Get fucking real, Tom.’ Ouch. harsh

Comment17: “Tom's eyes shifted to Adam, who looked absolutely furious.’ This made me laugh, I just cant picture a mad Adam as intimidating let alone take it serious. Even though he probably was scary looking to tom and bill

Comment18: “You're a history professor, Tom, and your book tour is never going to happen because you're a failure.’ OUCH. No ‘harsh’ just OUCH.

Comment19: “He was growing closer to being found out’ does he mean being found out by tom about his secret life?…yea, right?

Comment20: “Adam's head jerked up towards Bill and a surge of anger he had never felt before coursed through him as he stepped towards the teenager.” Im laughing again. God im a head case

Comment21: I find the whole bill telling bill off and that he ‘doesn’t deserve to look at his brother’

Comment22: “ter no contact for a month or two, he'll be on his knees begging to come back and quite lucky if he's allowed," yea this just made me really think of adam as a bitch. I know he is trying to help, and I know he has some right, but his whole ‘im going to talk down to you like some kind of sassy mother hen’ thing is only pushing bill further away. Not to mentain, it’s just annoting. Think about it, if he hadn’t been there sto snap that stupid picture bill would never have ran away crying and this wouldn’t be happening. He should learn to just back off and leave them alone once in a while

Comment23: I know, Bill, that you're growing up and I know what Gordon used to do to you, okay...?" oooooh god. No. NOT ‘ok. Im pretty sure when tom told him he didn’t mean for him to throw it back at bill. Especially at a time like this. Good god.

Comment24:” "What are you, my mother?” I was wondering when he was going to say it.

Comment25:” "Bill, I'm warning you now, you take one more blow at your brother's career, at either of our professions and you will not make it home," maybe its cause I just got out of ninja training and watching my peers learn to throw each other but I find adams threats very laughable…im like,… bitchy in my head right now or something lol

Comment26: "This is as far as I go. Get out and if you change your mind, you know where we'll be. I love you, Bill.” Adam is one bipolar mother

Comment27: "No. He doesn't want to work with me anymore...doesn't want to have anything to do with the casino now. He was one of our best customers, Bill. You're in a lot of trouble.” Not that I want the girl to be in trouble instead but, why is bill in trouble for her interrupting? What was he supposed to do about it exactly?

Comment28: “Bill looked back at once when Gordon entered, Natalie at his side, sobbing hysterically as he made her sit in a nearby chair.” 0_o… its moments like this, you should feel guilty for toying with my mind-innocence’s (kidding, don’t)

Comment29: “As the strap was brought down his mind flashed to something else, a harder time than this. Maybe that's what would get him through it, concentrating on the fact that this wasn't as bad as the night he lost it all, himself, his innocence.’ This is another strong line. But poor bill…poor, poor, bill.

Comment30: “not to mention the fact both of them were beautiful, strangely appealing to look at.” How bad is that iv never seen this girl even though she’s on the site so much?

Comment31: "I'm sorry, Sweetie. I have to go to the casino room to set up some tables for tonight. I'll see you later, okay? Did she not realize that his ‘dad’ was coming and something bad was about to happen?

Comment32: Bill, we need to have a talk. Let's go to one of the suites so I can explain some things to you," oh god. This is just to suspicious sounding to be good.

Commenr33: "Bill, Bill calm down. I'm going to teach you, okay. I'm going to be gentle with you..." ahhhhhhh, I knew where this was going. I knew it, and didn’ believe it. Ahhhhhhhh (I hope your proud of yourself- im losing it over here!)

Comment34: "It's better that you learn from me than some stranger, don't you think?" Oooooooooor he could not learn at all and do it when he gets ready, ‘DON’T YA THINK’?!

Comment35:’ It was three months before Bill's sixteenth birthday, and the end of his childhood and adolescence forever.” No comment, just wanted to quote this.

Comment36:Gordon was infuriated at the fact that Bill hadn't cried and had pissed himself.' I kind of figured that would be his reaction. You know, that whole ' I need you to show signs of weakness o I feel strong' thing only works if the person on the receiving end acts weak in pain- sick as it is.

Comment37: speaking of, im kind of frustrated that Natalie is giving him the satisfaction of her tears. Its beyond understandable why she’s crying, but I still wishs she was a bit tougher and held on to it like bill

Comment38: “Gordon returned and walked over to the bed, a bottle of rubbing alcohol and a washcloth in his hand.”… the words ‘sick bastard’ just seem to cute for the situation

Comment39: Can you be brave for me Bill and let me do this?" that’s a bit of a silly question seeing how she was the one balling mere moments ago.

Comment40: “Natalie was only expected to sleep with clients here and there and experienced a slap or two sometimes from the man who'd so kindly taken her in, then turned her world into a living nightmare.’ She’s mostly just a singer at the casino then? Lucky…sorta.

Comment41:” "Natty, will you get my...heroin?" I was really hoping he would say something along the lines of a weapon; like “get me my gun’ –sigh-.

Author's Response: comment1:I've actually seen Bill in something similar to a corset and he looked hot in it, as always.2:uhm, maybe the corset has straps..or...er, uhm something? I talk to you because you think outside the box, like wayyyyy outside the box like, waywaywaywayway outside the lines that would make up the box...yup, and I love you and am still thinking of an elaborate kidnapping plan, lol3:Haha, yea, I was trying to portray an image of he and Bill having a sorta joking relationship...4:Yes she does, my Natalie has many talents5:Well, just metaphorically speaking, she just puts them to shame in chess6:I'm glad you enjoyed this line, I found it pretty funny myself. 7:That really makes me want to kidnap you and give you some stability, but I'm not always the most stable person, but that's just mentally, I take really great care of those arounds me, yup, you are so kidnapped if you're not out by your birthday. 8:Well, Gordon, not Jorg, is using whatever he can to keep from having to deal with any authorites or lawyers, though he's got the money and the power for both. It's just that Bill knows Tom would try and do something about it, but Gordon doesn't want Tom to know period, doesn't want the happenings within the Playhouse to get out at all. I havent really thought about what would happen if Tom did nothing, maybe Gordon wouldn't kill him, but it would probably be just a bigger threat over Bill's head for him to bend to Gordon's will. 9:Tom cries all the way back when he has to take Bill back to Gordon's and he threatens to punch Adam if he ever utters it to anyone, which Adam would never do because he's Tom's best friend. 10:No, if you read on he just doesn't want to have it up because he doesn't want some of the pervs that he's forced to sleep with twisting something that innocent and pretty much the sacred moment he and Tom shared. Plus, people, especially young people who are being sexually abused have a lot of anger issues because they don't know how to deal with having to hold something in like that and thats why Bill reacted that way all the way around. 11:Adam was just trying to be funny and get a cute pic of the two, that's all. 12:In later chapters you'll find Adam was raised a devout Catholic, lol...talk about IIIIIRRRRRROOOONNNNYYYYY, I know, I know. 13:No, I didnt actually think about it, lol. He just loves his brother and didnt know if he was hurting himself in there or really what to think. 14:Yeah, I know, but Bill's trying to protect his brother with all that he says. 15:Why? Why must you laugh at my Adam character. I love my Adam character and he really does care about Bill, you'll see and you'll love him too. You will dammmmnnniiittt!!! 16:Yeah, but he didn't mean a word of it, I swear.17:He was it was like rawrrrr, ugh, choke, cough...meow....18:Bill has a way with words. 19:Yeah, about all the happenings in the Playhouse and what's been going on with him in general.20:Yes, you are, but I love you anyway. 21:I didn't understand this, explain in an email, please. 22:Yeah, but Tom's his best friend and he really doesnt know how to approach bill either. Adam gets better, I promise.23:He's trying to get to the bottom of everythign, you'll see that over the next few chapters that he's trying to get bill to open up. 24:Haha!! 25: Yeah, but he doesn't see the big picture with bill right now either. 26:I love you, have I said that lately? 27:You'll find out about the dangerous little game gordon plays with bill and natalie the more you read.28:I don't, lol. 29:Yeah, Bill goes through hell and the more you read the story, the more hell and loss of innocene there is to come. Okay, now I feel bad. Read at your own judgment, lol.30:I sent you the picture, she goes everywhere with him it seems in reality, too. They're pretty close. 31:Yeah, but would you really want to mess with a man like gordon? 32:Close your eyes!!!33:I said close your eeeyyyeeessss, woman!!!!! 34:Okay, have you read Gordon's character here? Not gunna happen. 35:thanx 36:yeah, gordon's a complete control freak, and things always have to go his way. 37:It's hard for her because as you;ll read later, Gordon has thrown them together on purpose, so for Natalie, it's like watching her child suffer. 38:hahahahaha!!! 39: I know, right? 40:Well, she is a singer, but she's also a prostitute and not by her own choice, she just has a bit more freedom than bill and is worth less to gordon. 41:Sorry to disappoint you, but I'm on my way to turning bill into a full blown addict. Not by his choice, but it does happen. But, don't worry, he'll become a much stronger person by the end of this thing. He already is pretty strong, considering all thats happening. Thank you again for your awesome review and please keep reading. Love you, girl and I'll hit cha up in an email!!!

oh noo ahora saki lo tiene màs para èl..... pobre Bill como nos gusta verlo sufrir no? jaja
la muerte de David uff he visto fotos de quemaduras con acido sulfurico ugh
super buen capi ..... y me intriga el personaje de Bushido.... y cuando Tom vea a Bill despues de todo lo q Bill presenciò e hizo y en el estado q està.... me muero de la curiosidad...

actuliza pronto!! :D saludos!!

Author's Response: Yea, I think you're going really like Bushido's character in this. I'm glad you're still with me on this story and I hope the coming chapters live up. Thanx again for the awesome reviews and I hope you continue to read through my updates!!

q fuerte... creo q jamàs podrè sacarme de mi cabeza las imàgenes q tengo sobre lo q leì wow..... :D la pesadilla de Tom fue terrible,, q bueno tener un amigo como Adam a tu lado para apoyarte y ayudarte a encontrar el problema y arregarlo ... eso me gusta... y Gordon por favor despues de esto ya deja descansar al pobre chico aunq sea u ratito sino mejor de una vez porq lo q paso con saki fue màs allà de traumatizante.... creo q hasta ahora no me di cuenta q en realidad esto pasa no? osea algunas personas disfrutan hacerlo y a otras les gusta q se lo hagan y vaya claro a mi me gusta leer estas cosas ... plop! jajaja

y te cuento algo, al empezar a leer este fic tu nickname se me hacìa familiar(jiji despistada no? sorry je) pero no me di cuenta hasta q leì tu respuesta a mi review q yo tambièn leo tu otro fic del cual tambien estoy locamente enganchada y espero q no lo dejes.... ambas historias son muy buenas y muy bien contadas... Me gustan muchìsimo asi q pleaseeeeeeeeeee sigue actualizando muy pronto :D saludos
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Author's Response: Thank you for the detailed review! I love it when my readers tell me their likes and dislikes in a story I'm working on. I know, the nightmare was terrible wasn't it? Sorry if the details with Saki and Bill were a little much, but this whole story just begs me to write it and keep writing it, but things will get much better for Bill later. Yup, I'm the same person that wrote With All He's Taken, and that one's not done yet, just taking a break in my mind. I'll update as soon as I get a good, long chance to write. Thanx again for your review, Love! Really keeps me going!

This chapter was horrible...in the best possible way.

The dream scene with Tom and marionette Bill was amazingly well written, such an inspired scene. And I love, love, love Adam. I mean, I don't even really know much about him in real life but he's a great character in this. I love how he made fun of being gay to joke with Tom and try to ease his worry a little. I'm so glad Tom and Bill have him on their side.

But the awful sadistic things Saki did to poor Bill. I mean the bit before that with Georg was kinda hot with Saki getting off on them fucking and then forcing Bill to suck him (I know I'm a sick bunny to get turned on by something like that) but afterwards Saki just wanted to hurt Bill as much as possible and use his poor abused body. I'm just glad Bill eventually blacked out. I'm actually surprised Saki gave Bill more heroin, I've thought he'd want Bill to suffer even more without the drug.

And Natalie having to remove that thing from his arse, God, the agony and how bad must she have felt being the cause of hurting him even more. At least Gordon felt a bit of shame at what had happened even though he'll just use Bill again as soon as he's healed, but I guess even Gordon has standards and Saki went way beyond his comfort zone. I'm so glad Natalie spat at him, not enough but something. And he thinks that allowing Bill to perform is some kind of compensation for what he's had done to him? I hope that man really suffers for his sins and maybe Bill could be there to tape the whole thing when Gordon and hopefully Saki get their just desserts...he could borrow Saki's video camera. Damn, girl, you got me imagining all kinds of scenarios now, I am so into this story. And its amazing the way you keep on writing when I know so much shit is going on with you right now. You are incredible.

Author's Response: Yeah, I've had a bad week, month...Can you tell? I know, poor Bill, right? I actually felt bad posting this, almost. No, no the scene with Georg was kinda hot, but then, oh my God, my head started spinning when I wrote that. I just wanted to show the severity of what Bill actually endured.rnrnYeah, the marionette dream. I have no idea where it came from, but it begged to be written. I love Adam, too. In my story and in real life. I actually love his music and hearing him talk gives me chills. rnrnNo, Natalie spitting on him wasn't enough, but it's all she had and she used it. I wanted to make the end of this better and I may have to rewrite and repost it, more detailed. I wanted to put the capture of Jost in here, but, I think I'll save it for the next chapter.rnrnSaki and Gordon will get there's in the end, but I'm thinking about a sequal and have some ideas on how to keep them living on until then, I don't know, don't wanna reveal too much here. I'll email you, though. Anyhow, I'm getting off of here for now. Glad you enjoyed and thanx soooo much for the wonderful and very detailed review. I'll try to send you another long email in a little while. Love you!

Incredible stuff as usual. I am so jealous of the way you make your characters so believable...you give them such personality whether good or bad. On which theme I cannot believe you've made Gustav an evil psychotic baddie. I love the tenderness between Adam and Tom, ho Adam cares so much for his friend and includes Tom's baby brother in that love too. Oh, and Natalie is amazing, offering herself to Gordon to prevent Bill from being injected with the heroin and from having to prostitute himself. And Gordon is such an evil abusive fucker and Saki is a sick fuck too. You write such great bad guys. You have a truly twisted mind, girl. Should I be worried being friends with you!!! LOL!!! David Jost is an idiot in this thinking he can get away fucking over Saki and Gordon, especially when he knows Gordon's rep for dealing with errant employees and he must have seen some of Gordon's punishments. What on Earth makes him think he could get away with it? I am so into this story I'm on edge wating for the next chapter. I know a lot of shit is happening with you right now, but I'm dying to know what's next. Please keep writing.

Author's Response: Thank you, as always. Your reviews help to keep me going, even in times of darkness, and right now, as you know, life is pretty grim. I love my Adam character so much, he's stern, yet caring and funny all at the same time. Yeah, you'll get more of how twisted and smart Gustav really is later on throughout the story. I am far from finished with his character. Saki really is sick, and in the next chapter you'll see just how sick and twisted he really is and you'll be introduced to another new character. David's not very smart and I had a lot of trouble with that part just because I wanted to make it believable without making it too overdone and a major thing in the story. I really just needed it to get to Saki's character and introduce another new one a bit later. The chapters are so long because I just get so lost in the writing. Don't worry, though, my brain is a bit twisted, okay, okay, a lot twisted, but it stays on paper, I swear, LOL. Oh, and Natalie would do absolutely anything she has to do to protect Bill, even as gone as he already is. Again, thank you soooo much for the amazing review, and I'll be working on the next chapter well into the night, I'm sure!

algo terriblemente peor de lo q ya le esta pasando le va a suceder a Bill.. please no demores tanto en subir el sgte capi.. estoy super enganchada con esta historia :D escribes muy bien :)me encanta

Author's Response: Hi! I was wonderin' when you were gonna start readin' this one. So glad you're enjoying this one and thank you so much for the lovely reviews again and again!!!!

That was such an emotional chapter, especially when Bill cried out for Tom. You are insanely evil! But in a good way(: Anyway, I'm really sorry for not answering your email before. I've been so busy! It seems like everything in life has been non-stop and I havent gotten a break. Even now. But, I was really excited to escape reality for a moment to sit and read this chapter. It was fantastic! Keep it up;)

Author's Response: Thank you, I think...but it's not me being insanely evil, I swear and eventually, things are gonna get better, and I mean wonderful for Bill. It's just going to take some time. It took me a while to get this down and once again, thank you for reading and reviewing. Don't sweat the email, I know how life can get! You've been awesome!!!

comment1; -chokes- ADAM?! I was sitting here thinking it was Bill and it's ADAM?! How THE HELL did he get in this?! geez

comment2:'BEST FRIEND'?! Im gona lose my voice over here

comment3:"Must you do one-hundred and ten miles an hour? You'll see him soon enough," the fuck? he can never get him soon enough

comment4:"No, not soon enough. Never soon enough. The quicker I can get there, the quicker I can have him home." Exactly

comment5:'"Tom, he is home. What is it with you and your dillusions?" again' the fuck?' i don't like adam. already. He's too over the top for me in real life and he seems just as much of a whiny bitch now.

comment6:"Adam saluted, indignantly and nodded, "Yes, Dr. Phil, will do! No picking on the Poor Little Rich Kid...got it." As a said: whiny bitch

comment7:"Yeah, studied late. Not doing too well in math. How've you been?" yea 'studied' like a high school starting quarterback 'studies' with the head cheerleader...thats a bad joke for right now huh?

comment8:""No, it doesn't, but he's getting older, Tom. I know you wanna see him as that sweet, innocent kid you practically spent half your life helping raise, but teenagers change with the situations their in, and like you said, Bill's been through so much." -sigh- i really wish adam would just shut up. really.

comment9:'As Tom's best friend, Adam figured it may be a touch of jealousy, teenage angst building on the fact that they had been roommates now for going on five years. ' only if they have been roommates for FIVE years then thats clearly not the reason bills been upset for the pat ONE cause he was fine with the first FOUR years...where are his math skills?

comment10:"At first Adam fretted over this, thinking maybe it had something to do with Bill's ever questionable sexuality, that in some small he was irritated over the fact that Adam knew who he was and was confident in the fact; something that Bill couldn't just come to terms with inside himself." I can see why bill sometimes snaps at adam. If I was in his situation and someone was trying to imply that things like this were the reason for me new way of acting id all but throw a hissy fit.

comment11:This might sound 'very Jamaican' but: I.LOVE.MANGO'S...!

comment12: why doesn't tom live alone? or in a house for that matter? Im not just asking cause i don't like Adam im just curious cause with his buying a whole frickin piano he seemed kinda rich. Why don't him and Adam at least live in a full out house?

comment13:"They had been college friends about mid-way through their second term, and Adam secretly had a crush on the history student. Tom had stuck up for the flamboyant, overly confident and openly gay sophomore on several occasions, never put off by his open nature and ever intrigued by their conversations. ' oooooooh so THATS why they live together...kinda seems like Adam would be more jealous of bill, than bill would be of adam. You know, with his old crush and such.

comment14:awww toms little thing about them sleeping together-uh...rocking bill to sleep as a baby is cute.

comment16:"No. She just needs to take her medicine. Will you help me give it to her, Tom?" oh god...this is bout to get ugly- like falling over the casket and screaming up to the heavens at the funeral type ugly.

co0mment17:this may be a silly question and or insensitive but: why are they rushing to a dead body/ not like its going anywhere- not to mention they're gona give poor bill a head case.

comment18:"He'd agreed to let Bill stay with him until a couple of days after when she passed." Was he supposed to get bill after that time? cause clearly he didnt.

comment19:"Not long now, Bill and you're home free. Less than a year now." year right. Funny thing is someone used to tell me the same thing... i don't blame bill for not believing it.

Author's Response: First of all let me say, I love you! Thank you so much for this, as it really made my shitty day, and, second of all, you're going to learn to love Adam, really you, maybe not by the third chapter, which is the next one up, but soon enough, you'll realise why Adam is the way he is.rnrncomment1:Because I put him in it, didn't cha read the character lists on the summary page, silly?rncomment2:Then stop screaming and read the gawtdamned story, WOMAN NOW!rncomment3:You like this whole Tom as a big brother thing, don't cha? I do too, I really love his relationship to Bill.rncomment4:Yup, see Bill only gets to go to Tom's once a month since his mother past on, and Tom's pretty excited.rncomment5:Hey sister, watch watcha say about Adam! I love me some Adam Lambert, and his personality, he is a bit over the top, but oh well, you have a right to your opinion. There's a reason he's like that, though, he doesn't like to see Tom hurt every time they part. And he really does love Bill, I promise.rncomment6:Oh, now it's just a little humor, don't get your knickers in a bunch, my dear,you'll learn to like Adam, and if you don't I will find you and force you to!rncomment7:LMFAO. Oh God, I should not be laughing at that, but I can't stop! YOU YOU YOU YOU! Woman, that was fucked, but still funny!rncomment8:But, it's true, and I'm sorry but teenagers are kinda hormonal,lol. That's not a stab at you, I'm still hormonal as hell, so don't take offense.rncomment9:Yeah, but as much as he wants to live with Tom, can't you see a little animosity towards the fact that Adam gets to be there? But, Adam and Tom are just trying to figure things out with Bill right now.rncomment10:Again, calm down woman, he's only trying to figure it out. Don't make me sedate you! j/l I love your reviews and point of views as always.rncomment11:I don't but I like the smell! rncomment12:You'll find out in the next chapter I think. Tom's always struggled with finances because he helped support Bill and their mom when Jorg first left. He saves for things like the piano and such and he and Adam decided to continue to live together to save money, plus the places they work and their comfortable living together, they really are best friends.rncomment13:Well, Tom's not gay and Adam feels he's more of a brother now. No, keep reading in the next chapter, you'll realise how Adam feels about Bill and then if you still hate Adam, I'm working on chapter four and that explains even more, he's a very crucial character in this.rncomment14:Yeah, well Tom's 11 years older than Bill, so naturally he helped out when his mother needed him too and formed more of a fatherly love for his little brother as they grew older.rncomment15:you skipped FIFTEEN!!!! AGHHHHHHH!!!!!rncomment16:No, it just gets kinda Bill going into major shock and hurt/comfort kinda ugly and sad.rncomment17:IDK???? Because they need to get dead bodies out as soon as possible, but when my grandad died in our house they didn't rush, IDK.rncomment18:No, he didn't get to keep Bill, Gordon was just letting Tom have him for a little while because the prick is so selfish and horrible he didn't wanna put up with Bill's grief, Idk, I didn't write that in, just sayin'. And Adam and Tom thought it would be better if Bill when through the grief process at their appartment instead of at that house.rncomment19:I wish I could kidnap you. I would totally do it!

I feel for Tom more than Bill. Sad I know but what Bill said was hurtful more so than a harsh beating. Crazy!

Author's Response: True, but he's doin' to protect Tom. Thank you so much for the review!! Ur awesome!

WARNING: I do comments in stead of 'reviews'. They tend to be rather long so if they bother you let me know and ill stop.

comment1: woooooooooo new story! lol

comment2:"skimpy briefs made with some firm, shiney material," funny, id dint know boxers could be made from 'firm' material...sounds uncomfortable. you know, like on his shaboinger?..poor baby.i cant believe i saying that once sentence in.

comment3:", soft and lacking in breathing room" this made. me laugh. i know, i know, i shouldn't be, but i am.

comment4:"e would be wearing zip-up boots, easy for removal, unlike the rest of his outfit." and still laughing.... god, what a SICK little girl I am!

comment5:His hair was long and fell in black layers just above his shoulders. " you know how on the side theres the tingy that says ' find us on fb'? well one of the profile pics has bill with his blonde...gold...yellow...WHATEVER color hair so yea...still laughing over here.

comment6:"Bill looked like a sexed-up porcelain doll. In a moment, he would feel just as lifeless." i like this line. Its really prettily worded...and git got me to finally stop laugh which is good seeing how this all is very much not funny.

comment7:"which held his make-up, scarves, accessories and...sterile needles" needles?....like, for blood tests? since he, sleeps around and such?

comment8: ooooh THOSE kinds of needles. And i thought he meant for a non bad thing like a blood test cause he want to be safe...my innocence is showing.

comment9:"?"I love it when you're pathetic' uh, you make a 17 year old boy call you 'daddy; if you ask me YOUR the one whos pathetic. He's just smart enough to know know what will keep him from getting hurt by you.pathetic,"

comment10:the whole innocence part reminded me of something. Ill have to show you what of later though.

comment11:"Gordon went back down to the floor where his casino burned with the desires of sin." i was going to say i like this line cause its really powerful and descriptive, but honestly that whole part was the exact same thing. This chapter/story seems to be written that way honestly.

comment12"It ain't housekeepin' motherfucker!" Natalie boomed," i like her. she's funny as hell. this was really just too funny.

comment13; he's... BLEEDING?! So, it snot ok to leave marks, but its ok to make him bleed?... some kinda protection.

comment14:"I'd get a spanking," the fifteen-year old croaked. FIFTHTEEN?1 I WAS THINKING HE WAS LIKE SIX! UGH thats so beyond creepy. not to mention gross.

comment15: awwww a pianio. I knew that was what it was going to be. My dream is to have a piano in my house only, a glass one so i can see all the gears move as i play.

comment16: why doesn't tom like the step dad? cause the spankings and such right? seems like a dumb question i know i just thought that since he (step dad) but up a front tom might not know how bad he is.

comment17:""Seventeen!" Bill sobbed " did he skip forward from 13 on purpose or was there just a lapse in time that im missing...?

comment18: not to be insensitive but why didn't their mother just award tom custody of bill? if she doesn't like the way the step dad treats him, and knows tom would take him, she could have signed him over and known that bill would be better taken care of and still see her often enough.

comment19:""You know he won't, Tom. Don't say they, you know it's not Mom."...nevermind.

comment20: i can noly imagine what being 'broken in' must be... *shudders*

comment21: I think you should be get a banner. Dont ask me why, but stories with banners tend to get more readers/reviews. I guess cause they stand out more when your looking through the 'recent stories'. Who knows, just a suggestion. I hope to get a banner when I post too.

Author's Response: comment1: Wooooo, new story is right and the fucking email I sent you earlier about what a particular person did to me, made me so sick, I almost dropped writing fanfic, but feel lucky I love my readers and will continue. comment2:Well they can, I am sending you a picture, not regular boxers, think sex shop briefs Ms. Innocent! I feel I am totally corrupting you! comment3:No, laugh, go ahead, I know it sounded retartded, blame my bad descriptions...comment4:Yes you are and before I'm done with you, u will be all the sicker, wahahaha! comment5:hahahaha, check out his recent look, honey, my jaw is still dropping comment6:Nope and it gets less funny, keep reading comment7:He doesnt sleep around, he doesnt have a choice, theres a difference...and no silly, not for blood test, I love your innocence, it makes me giggle, something I am not accustomed to doing very much comment8:Again, I love it, oh that makes me feel wrong that you are reading this shit comment9:Yes, and it's from my twisted little brain, so there ya go comment10:k, go to email comment11:Thank you,I think it's more well-written than my other one, I do go back and fix things in this, but it's not getting a great turn out, oh well, not for everyone comment12:She's tough and she loves bill in a very motherly way, don't mess with him! comment13:As long as nobody outside the club finds out,I'll explain more about it later, though comment14:I apologize in advance,it will get worse before it gets better comment15:yup, yup...comment16:Yeah, he knows, it'll all get explained later, though comment17:A lapse in time, no he didn't skip, gordon was still going when he was talking to him, go back and reread, I may have to fix it and describe it better comment18:You'll find out more about that later comment19:There's more to that though, trust me, it's all in my head comment20:Sorry for that, I'll have to maybe put additional warnings up for that comment21:I have an awesome banner girl who would probably love to do it for you...I'll suggest her when the time comes and the one that's on there is just beautiful, so yeah, it's up and I love it!!! Thanx for the amazing reviews and any questions you have just email me. These are really uplifting, thank you...I hope I'm not to vague in my writing...