this was a really good story!!
i hope you will do a sequel to this

I love this story to bits!!! You're an amazing writer.
Tom, Bill, Gustav, Georg, the plot, the story,the everything!!! *0*
Your vampiric themed story is wonderfully settled out and I had the greatest of time reading it. It's definitely going to my face. :)

Author's Response: Thank yoouuu!! To have someone find one of my stories after this time puts a smile on my face. I am so glad you enjoyed it, it means a lot as I loved writing this story. Thanks for sharing the love! :)

you are an amazing writer, i loved you story and can;t wait find your other works(if you have them, i'm not sure). you made a rainy day entertaining, for that i thank you

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind thoughts, and I apologise for the late reply, work has been a bit crazy pre-Christmas...I just happened to see this in my mailbox. I have a couple of new very short ficlets, and another longer story that has been taking far too long to get out at the moment, but I will. I'm glad that you enjoyed my story as much as I had enjoyed writing it. <3

Really good story..eventhough I'm not a big fan of vampire fics, I really like this one

Author's Response: Well, I'm glad you took a chance on it and liked it. Thank you for saying so!!

And here I is!

There isn't much to add that I haven't already said. This was a wonderful story; well written and thought out. The lack of over-description left the reader to imagine for themselves a great deal of setting and plot, with a stable structure to build on. I'd be willing to bet that a lot of us pictured the building they live in, the anteroom, Gustav's "treatment" room and Tom's club very similarly. I think this is the best form of writing actually...when the author doesn't assume his readership to be stupid or devoid of imagination. It's what I like to call Hemingway Syndrome. Not that I can't appreciate Hemingway's style, but being the intoxicated misanthrope he was...he had a tendency to go waaaay overboard on description. I don't need four pages to convey to me the experience of eating a peach. I just don't. Though you will never hear me complain if you'd like to spend four pages describing Bill eating...well, never you mind. :)

There were actually very few things I could pick out here to critique, and that's almost never the case. I'm that person that can find anything to bitch about. Especially in writing, because I do it for a living. But this was startlingly well-done and moves you into a category amongst company the likes of Fyredancer, cynical_terror, HaiZOE, Remy, and...well, me :D. Good party to be at, if you ask me.

I won't be asking for a sequel, and I hope you don't write one. This one is perfect just as it is, and anything further would only be jumping the shark. I think you left it off just right. And the final line of the final chapter, "Little fucker bit me..." was art in its way; in that you never actually hit us with the revelation that Tom was being turned. You spun the music around it and let us get it on our own. That's what makes your brand of writing unique and I love it. LOVE it.

I will be adding you to my Fave Authors list so I can get the notification of anything you post, and I do hope you continue to post. I'll read anything you write and review it promptly. Likewise...if you need any help or any anything, please don't hesitate to email me personally. I'm liking where you're going. :p

And Oh, Canada! True North strong and free! Whereabouts? That's where I migrated from, and seriously consider migrating back to continuously. I'm in a place that doesn't believe in snow or rain, but does, apparently, believe in one million degree summer temperatures. I don't leave my house between March and October. Not at all. Not even to check the mail, lol.

Author's Response: You know...I had to walk out of the room and ended up cooking to channel the energy from being completely overwhelmed by everything you've offered up with your thoughts and in all of your reviews. rn

rnBeing an extremely visual person, I get lost in writing descriptions of places or the way a person might stand in relation to another person or place. And when I mean lost I mean that I go off on a tangent of daydreaming the scene eg. Bill holding his cigarette looking out the window as he speaks to Gustav; and I will do it until I can see it clearly, which I imagine is how most of us write anyway...! I really ought to stop dithering and read Hemingway but I've heard of his verbosity which is probably what's been putting me off doing it. I do love Patrick White though, oh my God, his writing is sublime perfection. And for some reason whenever I do this: http://iwl.me/b/d760c1b4 I get James Joyce. rn

rnA one shot of Bill eating...is that what you'd like for your prize? Do you want this? I'd do it too. rn

rnPutting me in the category of such esteemed company? I was really floored by this. Don't forget, I've read your writing which is fantastic. And I've read stuff from the other authors you mentioned...nope, never would have thought it. I had only hoped to get better with each write and rise to that level. Once again, you do me an honour. <333rn

rnI'm actually relieved that you didn't ask for a sequel. One was never intended and I'd have felt bad at having to turn you down. ;) Ah, that final line was a giggle to write, especially after the tension. Leave it to Georg to provide that bit of levity!rn

rnI still can't believe I'm getting all this goodness on the basis of one story. But I'm going to bask in it anyway!!! So much love. I truly appreciate it, and just so YOU know, I've got some more reviewing to do of my own on a few more of your stories too. And we'll talk, we will. ;)rn

rnVancouverite, born and bred. But those that know me say I'm at all like a Canadian and I've almost always felt more connected to Europe than anywhere else. I do miss seeing the mountains AND the sea though. Oh, and all the different foods you can get. Cheap sushi! I'm almost homesick. Whereabouts are you? For some reason I thought NY...but what you describe sounds like LA or Arizona. rn<33333

I haven't forgotten you. I finished late last night and went straight to bed. (Had to be up responsibly early this morning, which for me, is like...10.) So...I'll be recomposing my review when I get home this afternoon.

And what you did was give away insider secrets. People are supposed to think vampires have weaknesses.

Author's Response: Oh. *That*. Well, yes, I had considered it at the time...but they do have weaknesses, they can be injured, they can suffer eternally which would be enough to make one wish for death but the idea was supposed to be that the more common traits were *myths*. And in my defense my muse made me do it, or maybe it was the devil.

Absolutely no one got the Black Question Mark reference, did they? That's too bad. It's good to know I'm not the bad fan I thought I was. So what do I win? Lol!

Okay. I'm going to go ahead and say that I'm not a fan of vampire stories. I started reading this only because I told you back on the forums that I would. I'm glad I did, because this is magic. I understand totally why you love it, and there's something about an author that isn't afraid to pat themselves on the back before the reader has a chance to read that turns me on immediately.

It isn't just the story that's good. The opening that was good. or the characterizations that are good. It's the writing that's good. Your sentence structure is clean, almost utilitarian. Your dialogue is subdued and believable. The undercurrent of sexual tension is already well-established but not overboard, and thank you from the bottom of blackened little heart for your exemplary use of pronouns. I usually close a story right away if I see even a hint of "the raven-haired teen", "the dreadlocked boy", or the worst... "he looked into the other's eyes..." Ugh.

I won't review every single chapter because I tend to leave detailed reviews and that would get annoying. But I'm reading this from start to finish tonight and will dropping reviews here and there when something stands out as particularly spectacular for me.

Let me just say for now, that I am pleasantly surprised and would encourage you, if you are so inclined, to keep writing for THF. This is good. And I'm picky. Make that bitchy. Yes, bitchy. I rarely say anything rude, but I am honest, so you know when I say something nice, I mean it. Cool?

Now, where's the sex? Lol!

Author's Response: Surprisingly no one's mentioned it. There were actually a few other TH references I didn't mention like Gunter's name, but hey ho, guess no one was in the mood for playing. For the win, would you like: a) one shot based on something from this story - something you would've liked to have seen but didn't, or b) a one shot (at least) bill/tom, you name the genre(s) and the warnings - except for rape, torture, pedo or het. Yeah, I know...het. Random! Lol!rn
rnAnd I think that answers your question of my continuing to write for THF. I've just started on a one-shot BDSM...rn
rnYou (and Leichenwasser) have done me an honour by saying you hate vampire stories, yet still came to read and show love for it. I am excited and humbled by this. And THANK YOU for keeping your word on saying that you would read it, I value that. Ey, I did wonder if I'd be shooting myself in the foot by declaring love for it, but the story had given me a much needed focus during a difficult time so I decided I wasn't going to lie about it... rn
rnI love that you pointed out what you liked about the writing. Most people will review the story and very little of how it was written. I deliberately left out the descriptive pronouns and the cute nicknames. I didn't want the characters (or the story) to be burdened by what seems to be the obligatory declarations of "I love you" and I'm heartened by the fact that you noticed this.rn
rnAnd I am more than pleasantly surprised to receive your praises. Picky, bitchy, whatever; it's honest and that's exactly what I want, as long as it's constructive and I can learn from it...so. yeah, I'm really cool with it! rnrnSex? Ask Bill. HE'S the one withholding, Tom's totally ready for it. Lol! Chapter 13 *cough*rn

Awwwwww I loooove this story! It really was a great one. But now I wonder where Tom was going to take Bill XDD

Author's Response: And THANK YOU for all your notes along the way, it was sooo nice to see when I went into my email account!! Thank you for the fic love, really pleased! <3 rnm/rnAs for Tom, I'd like to think that he was taking Bill to do or see something new, something Bill wouldn't have done for himself, you know? ;)

Awww finally! I'm glad they find made love, now less sexual tension will occur...sad face XDDD

Author's Response: *Grin* I know, but all that sexual tension had to go somewhere, right?! There will always be some of that good tension between them. ;)

Awwwwww poor Bill ;-;