especially door banging, and twins banging each other banging. This made me bust out laughing. That would get annoying, because Bill is probably very vocal and loud.

This was a very sweet read! It would be hard to have a relationship and be so famous, even for the more obscure members like the Gs. It was really cute when Gustav was trying to guess who Georg loved.

As for some constructive criticism, I would suggest that you stay consistent with the point of view. For most of the story, you spotlight Gustav -- but for the moment Georg changes out of his wet clothes, you favor Georg... but then it's back to Gustav. Maybe instead you could write something about Gustav waiting for Georg to come out of the bathroom, thinking about how much he cares for him. Not only would that flow better, it would give us better background for how Gustav feels for Georg.

Author's Response: im glad you liked it :D and yes i agree with you there, reading what you wrote i completely understand that and i didnt think about it at the time but thinking about it now it makes so much more sence :D