Date: 07/22/11 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
That girl is SO lucky!
I loved your story. You managed it to make it sound real, like I was sitting there, watching everything; feeling everything. Few authors can do that.
The way you portrayed Bill was PERFECT. The flirty moves, sexy and lustful eyes, I felt like the real Bill wrote that; like he was really doing that.
The idea of matching it with a song was brilliant, specially with a song from Adam Lambert.
Spelling and grammar were flawless and the words make perfect sense. Congratulations!! Hope we have more of that naughty Bill ;)
Author's Response: aaww thank you!!! I'll try to have more sexy, naughty Bill soon! Glad you liked it :) and thanks for the feedback
Date: 07/10/11 04:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hot damn! God picturing Bill dressed that way, moving like that, undressing---fried my brain...all coherent thought process is now gone...@_@ @_@ @_@ @_@
Author's Response: The aim was for the reader to picture Bill dancing for them. Anyways, glad you liked it!
Date: 07/10/11 09:38 am Title: Chapter 1
*opens window and fans self* wooo!! Bill doing a sexy strip tease *shudders* oh how I pray to god I would not faint if that were to happen. YUM!
Author's Response: Just imagine the girl in the couch being you... I certainly pictured it that way while writing it! Glad you enjoyed it!