Date: 06/27/11 02:43 am Title: We promised
Great to see you signed up... may I ask which of them is the candidate???
Author's Response: I'm working on tweaking Fifteen right now. At first I wanted to do Earl Grey, but I thin that one can only be vam.
Date: 06/26/11 07:33 pm Title: We promised
That was such a poignant and beautiful story. What an awful thing to have to hide your love for someone. Wonderful one shot sweetie. :)
Date: 06/22/11 10:23 am Title: We promised
I really like the way you write, the styule and the way you build dream-like atmosphere in your fics. Especially the beginning was beautiful. Painful, but somehow so convincing that whatever comes, their love will hold. Meöancholic and beautiful fic and because of that, so sweet. :)
Date: 06/22/11 02:24 am Title: We promised
Big Bang is a THF multi-chaptered fan fiction challenge running from June 1 - September 1. There will be a massive posting of finished stories during that period, something to look forward to. More info on that can be found on HOME page of THF.
Author's Response: I singed up..... BUT, I'm gonna be lazy about it and rewrite on of my better vam fics for it.
Date: 06/21/11 04:51 pm Title: We promised
My first comment to your work in here, darling:-) Sorry for taking so long to comment but real life knocked the wind out of me and I was really, really down lately... but hey, a one-shot like this one makes it all instantly so much better.
I liked the opening of this story so much, the whole waking up and catching up with a harsh reality of real life that awaits them out there, fighting the tears, pretending that everything is fine when it's far from it... so sad, but so realistic somehow.
I personally had no trouble to distinguish between two POV of this story and I enjoyed the alternation very much.
I couldn't help but smile instantly I spotted the line "I want...., to kiss that smile off his face..." (VV would be proud:-)
Not to forget... I liked that you used first and third person in your writing. I have noticed it's not a very common thing in English but I happen to like it a lot.
I hope you signed up for the Big Bang...
green_and_blue /fleur_de_ylang
Author's Response: OK.... Time for me to be stupid. What' the Big Bang?
Date: 06/20/11 03:20 am Title: We promised
This was really good. It was a little hard to tell the point of view sometimes, but I could figure it out. I like the idea that they would be different people on vacation.. but it's so sad that they would have to return. This story really makes me feel sad. :( Just thinking about how heartbreaking it would be to be in a situation like this.
Anyhow, I really liked how it was written, nonetheless. Sad, but direct. Good job.
Author's Response: I meant to put in POV for whose it was, but totally forgot till your comment. I even got lost on whose POV it was while I was writing it, so I know it had to be confusing. I\'m glad you enjoyed it and that you figured it out.