Date: 06/11/11 06:24 pm Title: The Thunderstorm.
This was so sweet. Especially I enjoyed the "silent" affection between the twins, something very simple, but overpowering.
I do like thunderstorms. We had few really big ones last summer and I stayed up on our terrace, just watchinmg and listening. The power was so huge in them, I felt so tiny, but mayber just because of that it was perfect.
I think you did greart for the first English fic. As not a native speaker either, I know how bitchy some things can be when writing on foreign language, but I think you should keep writing in English. :)
Date: 06/08/11 03:03 am Title: The Thunderstorm.
English isn't your mother tongue?
I beg to differ!
I'm English and I can't even write that well... *cries in a corner*
And yes, prepositions are a bitch.
Great story! It was sort of whimsical and nostalgic. Nicely paced and great discriptions. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! It makes me so happy. Take care! :D
Date: 06/07/11 07:23 pm Title: The Thunderstorm.
English isn't your first languge?! Well I must say that I am very impressed. If you hadn't have said then I would never have known.
This was a really nice little story; there was a certain pensive and calm feel about it which really reflected Bill's feelings about the storm.
I must say that I do enjoy a good thunderstorm. What I prefer though is when it's raining and you can hear it when you're laying in bed trying to sleep. It's just so calming. :)
Author's Response: Oh, that's so nice of you to say, thank you! rnrnrnI'm glad you liked to story, and I have to agree with you; the sound of rain is truly marvelous. I like to listen to Ludovico Einaudi (he's great, if you like piano) and having rainymood.com playing in the background. It's not the real deal, but almost! Take care! :D
Date: 06/07/11 11:04 am Title: The Thunderstorm.
D'aww! this was just too cute, I love thunderstorms and I see it exactly the way you discribed it!
people usualaly think I'm crazy when I explain the tension before a storm to them, or the nice feeling when it's over. Gread to know I'm not the only one that sees it that way, most people just get scared.
But bill didn't! Yays, somehow, this makes me even happier *sheepish grin* that, and the fact that he still preferred tomi over the storm *coes at Bill*
I can't exactly picture how old he is here, since you were both talking about bed-times and post-sex glow (two things I personally didn't use in the same age-category)
But either way, this was pretty good, especially for a first timer! The grammar was okay, not perfect, but not too distracting and kudos on the originality of this!
keep on writing!
~Dawn
Author's Response: Dawn, I-really-want-to-thank-you-because-you-make-me-all-fluffy-on-the-inside-and-I-appreciate-that! This review make me all... Happy. Yeah, happy is the word. And I'm glad that I'm not the only one who's mildly obsessed with thunderstorms, haha!rnrnAnd like... Thankyou, thankyou, thankyou, thankyou! I will keep in mind everything you said, and I'll continue to write. Because people like /you/ make me wanna create. That, in itself, is something absolutely wonderful. Stay golden, darling! -insert a heart and a hug-
Date: 06/07/11 09:22 am Title: The Thunderstorm.
This was such a lovely fic! I honestly couldn't tell at all that English isn't your first language, nor that this was your first English story. You really created a sort of calm and mysterious vibe in this, and it was very engrossing. Loved it!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you, it really makes me happy to hear that! English has always been one of my biggest insecurities in school, people like you truly boost my confidence. Stay golden! - gives a big hug -
Date: 06/07/11 03:12 am Title: The Thunderstorm.
yay i love thunderstorms and i really liked the story :)
Author's Response: This pleases me, I'm so glad you liked it! And thunderstorms are truly wonderful. rnHave a nice day :D